April小组第三周作业Argument52

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把题看错了，以为是issue52，写的感觉不好，伤了你眼，很抱歉！
Argument52  第2篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：30分2秒     483 words
从2008年2月31日16时43分到2008年2月31日17时30分
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The following appeared in a memo to the human resources manager at Baobob Inc., a large architectural firm.
'Several well-known, retired architects were interviewed in Architecture Today about changes in the field. Only one had earned a college degree in architecture. All others had come into the field at an early age by serving apprenticeships that required them to work under the direct supervision of an experienced architect. Several of the colleges that we recruit from report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career. Therefore, because finding talented architecture graduates is becoming more difficult, Baobob Inc. should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college.'
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One reading this memo might at first glance be convinced that  Baobob Inc.should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college.Well presented but not well reasoned,however,the speciou conclusion suffers from suspicious assumptions and supporting scant credible evidence.
To begin with,the arguer provide no assurance about the assumption that high school students are more talented in archetecture than college school student.As we know one who gains a higher scholer degree would know more about the theory,which will benefit he or she in application,vice the virsa.On the other hand,there is no any piece evidence to support the conclusion that the students who express an interest in architecture would not eally engage in this field since what say is one thing,what do is another thing.For that matter,if the speaker can take these and other possiblities into account ,the recommendation to Baobob Inc. would have some merit.
Even if the author can substantiate the forgoing assumptions,I remain unconvinced by the supporting evidence that only one had earned a college degree in architecture  while all others  not.Since  those well-known architects can not reflects the quality of today's instruction.The arguer makes a mistake to generize that all the situation will represent that at present since rare thing would stay at the same level withing the time span.Another explanation about the less college architect in the interview would be that more well-know architects graduated from college are too busy to take the interview.On the other hand,the speaker fails to take the average level of the architects who had earned a college degree and those who had come into the field at an early age.Since it is very likely that the average level of the architects who has earned a college degree is better that that of the ones who had come into the field at an early age.Without ruling out all these and other alternative proabilities,I have every reason to suspect the assumption that the high school students are superior to the college school students.
Thirdly,the report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career is open to adoubt.Until the arguer can provide evidence about how the report conduct and whether it can representative the whole architecture students,the report may have some merits.
Finally, the assumption that talented architecture graduates becoming more difficult is due to the students going to college is unwarranted.Difficult in finding talented students may be the effect of lacking effective critic standards or lacking a good teacher.
All in all,the recommentdation is grioudless since the evidence citedc in this analysis lends no striong support to waht the speaker stands.To make it more convincing,the speaker would have to prove that the high school students are superior to college school students. Moreover I would suspend my judgment about the credibility of the statement until the arguer can provide me more evidence about high school students gain more success averagely than college school students.Otherwise the arguer is begging the question throughout the argument.

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Onereading this memo might at first glance be convinced that  Baobob Inc. should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college. Well presented but not well reasoned, however, the speciou(specious) conclusion suffers from suspicious assumptions and supporting(supporting 做名词？查不到这种用法好象，建议去掉。 conclusion 做主语， 可省) scant（s） credible evidence.To begin with, the arguer provide no assurance about the assumption that high school students are more talented in architecture than college school students.（作者有这样的假定么？作者说要从高中毕业生中培养，原因在于他说找大学毕业生困难。 没有谁比谁优秀的说法吧。可以讨论哈。） As we know one who gains a higher scholar degree would know more about the theory, which will benefit he or she in application, vice the virsa(什么意思？). On the other hand, there is no any piece evidence to support the conclusion that the students who express an interest in architecture would not（用否定逻辑不对哈。） really engage in this field since what say is one thing, what do is another thing.（这样说是否好一点since talking is one thing, doing is another.）For that matter, if the speaker can take these and other possibilities into account ,the recommendation to Baobob Inc. would have some merit(s).Even if the author can substantiate the forgoing(不明白：)) assumptions,I remain unconvinced by the supporting evidence that only one had earned a college degree in architecture  while all others  not. Since  those well-known architects can not reflects the quality of today's instruction. The arguer makes a mistake to generize（generalize） that all the situation will represent that at present since rare thing would stay at the same level within the time span.(这句话要讨论下，感觉不太对，且说得有点过) Another explanation about the less college architect in the interview would be that more well-know architects graduated from college are too busy to take the interview. On the other hand（on the one hand 呢？这两个好象要一起用吧）, the speaker fails（failed） to take the average level of the architects who had earned a college degree and those who had come into the field at an early age. Since it is very likely that the average level of the architects who has earned a college degree is better that(than) that of the ones who had come into the field at an early age. (文中没有谁比谁优秀的说法吧)Without ruling out all these and other alternative proabilities（possibilities）, I have every reason to suspect the assumption that the high school students are superior to the college school students.Thirdly, the report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career is open to adoubt（doubt）. Until the arguer can provide evidence about how the report conduct and whether it can representative the whole architecture students, the report may have some merits.Finally, the assumption that talented architecture graduates becoming more difficult is due to the students going to college is unwarranted. Difficult in finding talented students may be the effect of lacking effective critic standards or lacking a good teacher.(可以加上其他可行的方法表示学徒计划不唯一)
All in all, the recommendation is groundless since the evidence cited in this analysis lends no strong support to what the speaker stands. To make it more convincing, the speaker would have to prove that the high school students are superior to college school students. Moreover I would suspend my judgment about the credibility of the statement until the arguer can provide me more evidence about high school students gain more success averagely than college school students. Otherwise the arguer is begging the question throughout the argument.

呵呵，拼写错误不少哦。 最好用WORD检查了再发上来哈
总体还不错，继续加油