写的第一篇作文，大家互相帮助帮我改一下啊！！！谢谢谢谢大家拉

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Some people think schools should only teach students academic knowledge. Others think they should also teach students to judge what is right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In present-day society, education is playing increasingly crucial role in our lives, which makes a variety of new teaching notions are becoming prevalent. But in the meantime, whether schools should teach students to distinguish what is correct and incorrect, instead of only teaching academic knowledge, has sparked spirited debate. Some individuals assert schools should teach students theoretical knowledge, while many others claim that teaching to assess right and wrong is also essential. Speaking for myself, I am favor of the latter view.

It is generally believed that deciding what is right and wrong is an indispensable part of our lives. To begin with, when students are confronted with the complicated society, it is a pivotal key to distinguish between correct and incorrect. Specifically, provided that youngsters have this ability, they would not be easily misled by the variety of bad attractiveness. Moreover, the academic knowledge is not enough to make adolescents cope with numerous hardships; therefore, teachers should teach them how to sort out something is right or not and solve the dilemma correctly. Last but not least, nowadays it is common that students get high academic mark but lack of the capacity of shielding themselves, including of discriminating between right and wrong, which makes them become no self-confidence. In other words, these youths would create undue pressure themselves, even some mental problems, because they feel they are just a passive receptacles of academic ideas.

Admittedly, it is vitally that schools teach students academic knowledge. The reason for this is knowledge is the basic of everything, to illustrate, it is the threshold of the good job, the root of practice and so on. More precisely, take scientists for example, only should they master abundant and recent professional knowledge, they can invent new objects, thereby contributing to human being. However, in contemporary society, the ability of distinguishing between right and wrong is convinced have more value than theoretical knowledge.

To sum up, despite that academic skill plays a significant key in teaching, I still confirm only depending on specialist knowledge that schools have taught is unreasonable, yet is not enough for the development of adolescents’ mental and physical. Overall, I believe that students would profit from the teaching methodology   that cooperating academic knowledge and the skill of differentiating between true and false.

[ 本帖最后由 婧子918 于 2008-6-26 20:42 编辑 ]

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up~~~

67169619UID: 2320695

up too;d:

婧子918UID: 2315794

谢谢楼上的同胞哦 呵呵:handshake

67169619UID: 2320695

今晚找个时间帮忙该该:loveliness:

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Some people think schools should only teach students academic knowledge. Others think they should also teach students to judge what is right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.In present-day society, education is playing(an?) increasingly crucial role in our lives, which makes a variety of new teaching notions(that or “,”) are becoming prevalent. But in the meantime, whether schools should teach students to distinguish what is correct and incorrect（这个用法很强悍，，，）, instead of only teaching academic knowledge, has sparked spirited debate. Some individuals assert schools should teach students theoretical knowledge, while many others claim that teaching to assess right and wrong is also essential. Speaking for myself(没有见过这种表达，请lz解释一下), I am favor of the latter view.It is generally believed that deciding what is right and wrong is an indispensable part of our lives. To begin with, when students are confronted with the complicated society, it is a pivotal key to distinguish between correct and incorrect. Specifically, provided that youngsters have this ability, they would not be easily misled by the variety of bad attractiveness. Moreover, the academic knowledge is not enough to make adolescents cope with numerous hardships; therefore, teachers should teach them how to sort out something is right or not and solve the dilemma correctly. Last but not least, nowadays it is common that students get high academic mark but lack of the capacity of shielding themselves,（句子长短有致，不错） including of discriminating between right and wrong, which makes them become no self-confidence. In other words, these youths would create undue pressure themselves, even some mental problems, because they feel they are just a passive receptacles of academic ideas.（这段很流畅，不过这次连词都是老外熟悉到再不能熟悉的了，建议换换）Admittedly, it is vitally that schools teach students academic knowledge. The reason for this is knowledge is the basic of everything, to illustrate,（句式不单调，赞一个） it is the threshold of the good job, the root of practice and so on. More precisely, take scientists for example, only should they master abundant and recent professional knowledge, they can invent new objects, thereby contributing to human being. However, in contemporary society, the ability of distinguishing between right and wrong is convinced have more value than theoretical knowledge. To sum up, despite that academic skill plays a significant key in teaching, I still confirm only depending on specialist knowledge that schools have taught is unreasonable, yet is not enough for the development of adolescents’ mental and physical. Overall, I believe that students would profit from the teaching methodology   that cooperating academic knowledge and the skill of differentiating between true and false.
Lz用词方面有很多闪光点，行文逻辑较强，意思连贯，一看就知道写作功底扎实。题目说：Discuss both views，我感觉lz这方面做得不够好。其他，我觉得就没有必要纠缠在几个小地方了。如果能把时间卡在40分钟内写出这样的文章。

个人意见，仅供参考。因为好久不看英文了，没有什么感觉的。

[ 本帖最后由 H-Kevin 于 2008-6-28 10:41 编辑 ]

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晕，我的编辑很烂
弄成这样 了:funk:

H-KevinUID: 2182070

帮你大概修改了一下格式 :)

婧子918UID: 2315794

谢谢谢谢哈 给了我很大的信心呢 呵呵:loveliness:

婧子918UID: 2315794

Speaking for myself。 从作文书上学的拉

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？？？？斑竹也给点意见啊

[ 本帖最后由 婧子918 于 2008-6-30 16:59 编辑 ]