issue48【7\8\9\10】 7.22(第2次作业)

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    Does the study of history place too much emphasis on individuals? Were the most significant events and trends in history made not by the famous new but by the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten? As far as I am concerned, the history's study should places emphasis on  famous  new notwithstanding the individuals and groups of people who create the history altogether.
     Look no further than local museums, where many groups of people are recorded and perpetuated, have adequately indicated that how important the groups of people are to the history. All the recording of them –pictures, words, illuminations - , have, in the course of recorded time, given us such deep impression that without the groups of people, whose name we mostly fails to remember, the complex and mysterious human history absolutely cannot be easily constructed like this. Also, history and philosophy tells us that the history is fostered through the every generation by generation. Without them, we never experience every society reform and progress, which is full of ordeal. Despite their identities which have long been forgotten, history never forget these groups of people since it's them who have write the real history.
  Not only does the groups of people create the history ,but also the famous few of hero even largely impact and determine the significant history event and process ,thereby creating or rewriting the new page of history .Without George Washington, it is impossible that for America win the most important independent war against colonist only through the great deal of America people. Without Winston Churchill ,how could the British people insist on  combating against Germany until the last triumph in second World War ?Considering the technology and science, without  Walter Bratan ,who invents the silicon transistor following the industry of semiconductor, we human kind probably still live in mere society of machine now. The great deal of stories all tell us that it's the famous hero that we appreciate and the unfailing groups of people, perhaps we can not identify, that are creating the history of human.

     Even though the groups of people, who we should not forget and disregard ,create the history ,the study of history should place more emphasis on the hero .One the one hand ,their courage, appetite and tenacity inspire us to the similar accomplishments or ,at least face own fears. We have seen that A great deal of books and memoirs available ,which include their stories of life, have excited and inspired every generation throughout their life and will keep on in the future. Also, their foibles take us avoid to repeat the similar mistakes-the anarchy in history, whose political states stems from  the suppression of freedom of individuals, ultimately falls by their responsibility. Put another way, study of these famous few help us understand and history the history, where these hero contribute: The life of Washington is the history of America independent war, evil life of Hitler is the history of second world war--full of blood and tears.

     In conclusion, history remember these groups of people and hero forever, who equally create the history. Without them, we human kind is no way to develop in such a way .Study of history, however, should give more emphasis on the famous few ,who largely determines and rewrite the history. Moreover, With the study, we can experience the equal success and help us avoid equal mistakes.



[ 本帖最后由 tsay 于 2008-7-24 23:14 编辑 ]

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     Does the study of history place too much emphasis on individuals ?(在标点符号后面空格，前面不空，下同)Were the most significant events and trends in history made not by the famous new but by the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten ?As far as I am concerned,the history's study should places emphasis on  famous  new notwithstanding the individuals and groups of people who create the history altogether(有歧义).

     Look no(下次先放word里面查错,你这是对改你作文的同学的不尊重) further than local museums ,where many groups of people are recorded and perpetuated ,have adequately indicated that how important the groups of people are to the history .All the recording of them –pictures ,words ,illuminations - ,have ,in the course of recorded time ,given us such deep impression that without the groups of people ,whose name we mostly fails to remember, the complex and mysterious human history absolutely cannot be easily constructed like this .Also ,history and philosophy tells us that the history is fostered through the every generation by generation .Without them ,we never experience every society reform and progress ,which is full of ordeal .Despite their identities which have long been forgotten ,history never forget these groups of people since it's them who have write the real history.
  Not only does the groups of people create the history ,but also the famous few(名人不是人吗?逻辑错误) of hero even largely impact and determine the significant history event and process ,thereby creating or rewriting the new page of history .Without George Washington, it is impossible that for America win(应该用过去时?) the most important independent war against colonist only through the great deal of America people. Without Winston Churchill ,how could the British people insist on  combating against Germany until the last triumph in second World War ?Considering the technology and science, without  Walter Bratan ,who invents the silicon transistor following the industry of semiconductor ,we human kind probably still live in mere society of machine now .The great deal of stories all tell us that it's the famous hero that we appreciate and the unfailing groups of people, perhaps we can not identify ,that are creating the history of human.

     Even though the groups of people ,who we should not forget and disregard ,create the history ,the study of history should place more emphasis on the hero(heroes) .One the one hand(on the other hand) ,their courage , appetite and tenacity inspire us to the similar accomplishments or ,at least face own fears .We have seen that A great deal of books and memoirs available ,which include their stories of life, have excited and inspired every generation throughout their life and will keep on in the future .Also ,their foibles take us avoid to repeat the similar mistakes-the anarchy in history ,whose political states stems from  the suppression of freedom of individuals ,ultimately falls by their responsibility .Put another way ,study of these famous few help us understand and history the history ,where these hero contribute :The life of Washington is the history of America independent war ,evil life of Hitler is the history of second world war--full of blood and tears.

     In conclusion, history remember these groups of people and hero forever ,who equally create the history .Without them ,we human kind is no way to develop in such a way .Study of history ,however ,should give more emphasis on the famous few ,who largely determines and rewrite(汗) the history .Moreover ,With the study ,we can experience the equal success and help us avoid equal mistakes.

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[ 本帖最后由 zhuzhuor 于 2008-7-25 08:38 编辑 ]