issue45 [7\8\9\10]第二次作业

小猪sisiUID: 2453484

48"The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and
trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose
identities have long been forgotten."

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Looking back into the history of the human, we could found that every improvement were made beyond the people's blood and sweat. Without these people, human being would still be in the primitive society. So groups of people devoted themselves to the development of the country or even the world, who we should never forget. Although the study of the history places a lot of attention on individuals, it never focus too much because we acquire the achievement done by groups of people just through the study of these excellent individuals and it courages people to keep the society moving through setting these individual examples.

First of all, an old adage in China says: two men will be better than one. It is clearly that a
group of people will accomplish what one man can not do. And it is true in the history that all
of these great works and society improvements were done by groups of people. Just take pyramid
for example, although we have not known how ancient Egyptian built these amazing pyramids, we do know that all these great buildings were done by groups of people but not any individual. Another instance is the Declaration of Independence, without groups of people attribute to the independent war, there would not have a united and independent country, called the untied
State today ,event if there are 100 Washington. Therefore, we have no doubt on the achievement done by groups of people in the history.

However, we need to admit that due to the difficult of recording every person who contribute to the significant events and trends in history, and it is unrealistic to identify every soldier death under shield, but that does not mean we forget about them. In China, everyday people from all over the country go to Tomb of Unknown Soldier to monumentalize these heroes and their devotion to the peace of the country. And every present in the United State will visit old soldiers who fight for the peace in World War Two. All of these evidence shows that people in the modern time never forget these people who made the history, although we do not know their exact identities.

On the other hand, that the study of history emphasizes on the individuals does not equal to the miss of the importance of groups of people, and on the contrary, we memorize these people by studying the famous few in their contemporaries. It is not possible for Washington alone to accomplish the Declaration of Independence, but through the study of Washington, we realize that people in that time were anxious to be free and equal, and anyone of them would like to scarify for the independence of their country. Besides, Lu Xun, the great litterateur, fought with his pen with millions of Chinese people to against the enemy and through the study of him and his works, we acquire how eager were Chinese people want to have a contact and peaceful country and how much they scarified for the peace of China. Therefore, we should blame historians for paying too much attention on individuals.

The study of these famous few gives us chance to set examples for people to inspire them to stand out when they are treated unfair and push the wheel of the society moving on. There are millions of great mathematics professors, but as we set Stephen William Hawking as our young's adorer, young people began to be interested in science and in the vote of the most famous person in UK, more young people voted for Hawking than for Beckham, which shows the favor of young in learning and gives us hope to have more wonderful society in future. Therefore, the effort on the study of history of the famous few courages people to fight, to create and to improve.

To sum up, it is the gospel that history can not be written by the few, and we never forget or will
forget our processors and what they had done. Everyone contributing to the history should be respected and remembered, and pay attention to these famous few will aid us to achieve more in the future.

写得多点了，太费时了

warboyUID: 2444492

Looking back into the history of the human, we could found that every historical improvement were made（constituted of，别用made了） beyond the people's blood and sweat. Without these people, human being would still be in the primitive society. So groups of people devoted themselves to the development of the country or even the world, whom we should never forget. Although the study of the history places a lot of attention on individuals, it never focus too much because we acquire the achievement done by groups of people just through the study of these excellent individuals and it courages people to keep the society moving through setting these individual examples. First of all, an old adage in China says: two men will be better than one. It is clearly that agroup of people will accomplish what one man can not do. And it is true in the history that allof these great works and society improvements were done by groups of people. Just take pyramid for example, although we have not known how ancient Egyptian built these amazing pyramids（building，还用pyramids显得有点啰嗦）, we do know that all these great buildings were done by groups of people but not by any individual. Another instance is the Declaration of Independence, without groups of people attribute to the independent war（你刚才在讲独立宣言，怎么又跳到独立战争了）, there would not have a united and independent country, called the untied State today ,event if there are 100 Washington（写的有点莫名其妙！）. Therefore, we have no doubt on the achievement（换个词contribution）done by groups of people in the history.However, we need to admit that due to the difficult of recording every person who contributes to the significant events and trends in history, and it is unrealistic to identify every soldier death under shield（不错!）, but that does not mean we forget about them. In China, everyday people from all over the country go to Tomb of Unknown Soldier to monumentalize these heroes and their devotion to the peace of the country. And every present in the UnitedState will visit old soldiers who fight for the peace in World War Two. All of these evidence shows that people in the modern time never forget these people(people忘people，换个词he or she)who made(create) the history, although we do not know their exact identities.On the other hand, that the study of history emphasizes on the individuals does not equal to the miss of the importance of groups of people, and on the contrary, we memorize these people by studying the famous few in their contemporaries. It is not possible for Washington alone to accomplish the Declaration of Independence, but through the study of Washington, we realize that people in that time were anxious to be free and equal, and anyone of them would like to scarify for the independence of their country. Besides, Lu Xun, the great litterateur, fought with his pen with millions of Chinese people((感觉你加个accomplished with 好一点！)against the enemy（这太笼统了吧） and through（by）the study of him and his works, we acquire how eager were （有问题再斟酌一下）Chinese people want to have a contact and peaceful country and how much they scarified for the peace of China. Therefore, we should blame historians for paying too much attention on individuals.（你这有点太极端转折了吧！）The study of these famous few gives us chance to set examples for people to inspire them to stand out when they are treated unfair and push the wheel（推进车轮，直接压过去？^_^）of the society moving on. There are millions of great mathematics professors, but as we set Stephen William Hawking(这有可比性吗？这哥们首先不是数学家啊！) as our young's adorer, young people began to be interested in science and in the vote of the most famous person in UK, more young people voted for Hawking than for Beckham, （你想说什么？感觉你一会说给名人投票，一会说给霍金投票。跳度哟点大吧！）which shows the favor of young in learning（给科学学家投票意味着我们爱学习?）and gives us hope to have more wonderful society in future(何出此言？). Therefore, the effort on the study of history of the famous few courages people to fight, to create and to improve. （这又要从何说起啊？）To sum up, it is the gospel that history can not be written by the few, and we never forget or will forget our processors and what they had done. Everyone contributing to the history should be respected and remembered, and pay attention to these famous few will aid us to achieve more in the future.

总体上还行，但你的第五段让人看得不知所云。也不晓得你到你想支持或反对作者。第四段的极端转折让人看得有点莫名其妙！

[ 本帖最后由 warboy 于 2008-7-23 23:43 编辑 ]