issue207 【7\8\910】第二十次了哈！最难的一篇了！

1001storyUID: 2516918

TOPIC: ISSUE207 - "Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are."
WORDS: 505  

Whether rituals and ceremonies define a culture of a society and help people to own a group identity? In order to response this issue, we need to analysis the function and status of rituals and ceremonies of a country from a dialectic perspective. Before the real connotation of them reached, we could not put out a hasty determination of this complex issue.

I concede that rituals and ceremonies do help people to cultural identity considering the ancient origin and purposes of them. Rituals and ceremonies are a series of actions, often thought to be having symbolic value and usually prescribed by the religion and the tradition of a community. When there are special intervals, occasions or discretions of individuals or communities, different countries depending on their own tradition may perform distinct rituals and ceremonies. Rituals and ceremonies have been defined as a part of culture for tens of thousands of years, and express, fix and reinforce the shared values and beliefs of a society, creating a firm sense of group identify of people. Thousands and hundreds persons in India come to Varanasi, considered as the entrance of the Paradise, to perform an old ritual that they bath in the river to wash the guilty in their whole lives. This traditional ritual has already become an eminent sign of Indian culture. Traditional rituals and ceremonies transcend the surface of an ancient rite of people begging for some blessing, becoming forces to enhance the sense of belonging to a certain community.

However, the varied purposes of rituals and ceremonies other than cultural identify include not only the various worships in religions and atonements of people but also another manner to help next generation to inherit social culture. With the development of society, rituals and ceremonies have evolved into diverse forms for different purposes such as presidential inaugurations, marriage ceremonies, school "rush" traditions and so on. Because these meaningless but widespread rituals and ceremonies can be easily found in almost all over the world, the symbolic function of rituals and ceremonies is seriously weakened. Who can exclude the distinctive gestures and language popular among Africa-American as illustrations of their symbolic culture.

More other manners can define a culture of a society as well. People living in Tibet demonstrate the distinctiveness of their culture by the nomadic lifestyle and the special dressing. The delicate and delicious Japanese courses, using the most fresh vegetable and fish without being cooked, express one aspect of the Japanese culture adoring the nature. Deity has been regarded as an important way to understand the culture of one nation.

From the analysis made above, I strongly commit to the notion that rituals and ceremonies serve the society as one of significant sustaining powers of our culture but they could not solely persist this huge and difficult task of cultural heritage. Without rituals and ceremonies of a society, the culture can never be a perpetuate heritage of human beings. Without other manners sustaining the cultural identity, the contemporary culture could not be such an intact one.

感觉写的很肤浅啊！！

zhuzhuorUID: 2452739

Whether rituals and ceremonies define a culture of a society and help people to own a group identity? In order to response this issue, we need to analysis the function and status of rituals and ceremonies of a country(不一定是国家吧, 民族, 宗教都有自己的典礼和仪式) from a dialectic perspective. Before the real connotation of them reached, we could not put out a hasty determination of this complex issue.

I concede that rituals and ceremonies do help people to cultural identity considering the ancient origin and purposes of them. Rituals and ceremonies are a series of actions, often thought to be having symbolic value and usually prescribed by the religion and the tradition of a community. When there are special intervals, occasions or discretions of individuals or communities, different countries depending on their own tradition may perform distinct rituals and ceremonies. Rituals and ceremonies have been defined as a part of culture for tens of thousands of years, and express, fix and reinforce the shared values and beliefs of a society, creating a firm sense of group identify of people.(这句好随意...) Thousands and hundreds persons in India come to Varanasi, considered as the entrance of the Paradise, to perform an old ritual that they bath in the river to wash the guilty in their whole lives. This traditional ritual has already become an eminent sign of Indian culture. Traditional rituals and ceremonies transcend the surface of an ancient rite of people begging for some blessing, becoming forces to enhance the sense of belonging to a certain community.

However, the varied purposes of rituals and ceremonies other than cultural identify include not only the various worships in religions and atonements of people but also another manner to help next generation to inherit social culture. With the development of society, rituals and ceremonies have evolved into diverse forms for different purposes such as presidential inaugurations, marriage ceremonies, school "rush" traditions and so on. Because these meaningless but widespread rituals and ceremonies can be easily found in almost all over the world, the symbolic function of rituals and ceremonies is seriously weakened. Who can exclude the distinctive gestures and language popular among Africa-American as illustrations of their symbolic culture.

More other manners can define a culture of a society as well. People living in Tibet demonstrate the distinctiveness of their culture by the nomadic lifestyle and the special dressing. The delicate and delicious Japanese courses, using the most fresh vegetable and fish without being cooked, express one aspect of the Japanese culture adoring the nature. Deity has been regarded as an important way to understand the culture of one nation.

From the analysis made above, I strongly commit to the notion that rituals and ceremonies serve the society as one of significant sustaining powers of our culture but they could not solely persist this huge and difficult task of cultural heritage. Without rituals and ceremonies of a society, the culture can never be a perpetuate heritage of human beings. Without other manners sustaining the cultural identity, the contemporary culture could not be such an intact one.

哦, 貌似我在语言上改不了你的...
不过文风变化比较大啊...不会真的想像sample1那样写吧

论点和结构上, 感觉稍稍有点不切题
可以说有其它的东东让人们知道who they are, 使得sense不diminish
但是题目的第一部分只是help define, 说其它的东东也可以define culture则不能反驳论点
个人意见, 写完这评论我也有点乱了...

小猪sisiUID: 2453484

Whether rituals and ceremonies define a culture of a society and help people to own a group identity? In order to response this issue, we need to analysis the function and status of rituals and ceremonies of a country from a dialectic perspective. Before the real connotation of them reached, we could not put out a hasty determination of this complex issue.

I concede that rituals and ceremonies do help people to cultural identity(这是名词，怎么会跟在to 的后面？) considering the ancient origin and purposes of them. Rituals and ceremonies are a series of actions, often thought to be having symbolic value and usually prescribed by the religion and the tradition of a community. When there are special intervals, occasions or discretions of individuals or communities, different countries depending on their own tradition may perform distinct rituals and ceremonies. Rituals and ceremonies have been defined as a part of culture for tens of thousands of years, and express, fix and reinforce the shared values and beliefs of a society, creating a firm sense of group identify of people. Thousands and hundreds persons in India come to Varanasi, considered as the entrance of the Paradise, to perform an old ritual that they bath in the river to wash the guilty in their whole lives. This traditional ritual has already become an eminent sign of Indian culture. Traditional rituals and ceremonies transcend the surface of an ancient rite of people begging for some blessing, becoming forces to enhance the sense of belonging to a certain community. （这段没有讲出为什么帮助人们indentify，感觉在一味的重复说就是帮人们indentify）

However, the varied purposes of rituals and ceremonies other than cultural identify include not only the various worships in religions and atonements of people but also another manner to help next generation to inherit social culture. (开头观点明确)[With the development of society, rituals and ceremonies have evolved into diverse forms for different purposes such as presidential inaugurations, marriage ceremonies, school "rush" traditions and so on. Because these meaningless but widespread rituals and ceremonies can be easily found in almost all over the world, the symbolic function of rituals and ceremonies is seriously weakened. Who can exclude the distinctive gestures and language popular among Africa-American as illustrations of their symbolic culture.]（论证脱节，跟论据有点对不上）

More other manners can define a culture of a society as well. People living in Tibet demonstrate the distinctiveness of their culture by the nomadic lifestyle and the special dressing. The delicate and delicious Japanese courses, using the most fresh vegetable and fish without being cooked, express one aspect of the Japanese culture adoring the nature. Deity has been regarded as an important way to understand the culture of one nation. （例子对了但是感觉该论述的时候，你又少了论述了）

From the analysis made above, I strongly commit to the notion that rituals and ceremonies serve the society as one of significant sustaining powers of our culture but they could not solely persist this huge and difficult task of cultural heritage. Without rituals and ceremonies of a society, the culture can never be a perpetuate heritage of human beings. Without other manners sustaining the cultural identity, the contemporary culture could not be such an intact one.（总结得很好，很明确）

总的来说，整体的逻辑明晰但是中间的论据例子支持较欠缺

1001storyUID: 2516918

:) :handshake
就快考了，才看到你的修改