[最初的梦想]Issue130~社会化和教育,求拍,有拍必回

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偶只有在半夜的时候才有空去看文章:mad:    TIME 啊><~


打算写的,最近在打范文练手跟积累词句,因为已经远离英语很久了...
次要还有键盘的UW之间那个字母键坏了,在AWP上写不了文章~:L ...
要先修电脑.....

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Issue130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

To clear the inner relationship between the better society and the degree of socialized that today’s children being is to answer a series of questions about socialized education.

In virtue of the technology development and modern socialized education system, it is undoubted that the children living in today is most socialized than any generations in human being’s history. When our educators are wandering between whether or not to stick our socialized education system and are confused about the effect of every education revolution, our society is yet facing an unprecedented impact brought by our high-socialized children. As a large amount of talented teenagers is gushing to this big stage, our society, to show their energy and new ideas of promoting a better society, a decline in moral among our children and even juvenile delinquencies also hit the adult world. However, does the destiny of society indeed is due to the degree of socialized today’s children being? Have we already had education method which is good enough to raise a promising high-socialized generation? And most importantly, where is our society led to ultimately by these high-socialized children?(从这开始才正式进入对题目的讨论)

Just click the IE icon and login into your Facebook, and then your social network is clear at a glance. The success of the Facebook recently tells us such a truth: to some extent, each person in this society concern about their socialization which is about their status in this society and reflects their life. So do our children! Socialization, an important character a child must equip with, determines the ability of a child to communicate with their peers and the rest of this world. It is a bridge connecting our children with this society. Thereby we must realize that today any individual cannot survive in a separated environment. And it is fate for each child to step into this society no matter whether he or she is willing to do so.（前面是socialization对children的重要性） Seung-Hui Cho, a VirginiaTech student for an opposite instance, killed thirty-two people and wounded many others before committing suicide in April 2007. He was described as a person who is dissocialized as well as selective mutism. Lacking the connection with the society and fundamental appreciates from his peers; Cho gradually developed an abnormal mentality and was filled with hatred of the wealth and the society which led him to the road to perdition. Cho’s case is just an individual tragedy.（举了个反例） However, if today’s children are all without socialization, we can predict that tomorrow’s society will become one lacking communication and cooperation, which will finally play a terminator of human’s civilization.（这段论证的不错）

Despite the huge tragedy brought by Cho as well as other juvenile delinquencies, which often depress our educators; the reality of today’s education is not as bad as the speaker asserts. Nowadays when we refer to “a better society”, an abstraction which may not have yet an exact definition, we often relate it with an imagination of a world which is more comprehensive, more democratic and more respectful to all its citizens and their cultures. In fact, look back to the past decades; our society is walking towards a better future and our socialized education plays a positive effect on this course. Benefiting from the advancement of our communication technology, our children have already been used to utilizing their mobile phones and internet with ease to talk with their connections, friends and even the strangers on-line. And the traditionally significant role of family education on children’s growth has obviously ebbed. Meanwhile the modern school education which advocates training students’ abilities of self-expression, leadership and teamwork is working more and more significantly on children’s growing. And our open society is also providing unheard-of opportunities with our children to make their words and rights influencing. Michael Sessions, the youngest mayor in the history of United States, is a good example from our currently high-socialized education. Even though there are many arguments about his election in his only eighteen years old, his success encourages his peers with the same aspiration to catch up their dream and proves that the age will never be a problem.（这段说明现在的high-socialized education还是很成功的）

Never forget the experience from our history that we, human beings, will always keep going on in spite of those critical periods we have ever suffered. As the excellent backbone of today’s society has ever been doubted by their fathers, it is predictable that our children will ultimately shoulder their responsibilities to build a better society.

感觉除了开头引入话题太长了，其余部分都不错
看了下你的提纲，个人觉得p2主要很是在讨论socialization对children的重要性，反例貌似也挺服务这一点的，然后你从反例得出children的socialization对社会还是挺重要的。。还不错~

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你说是p3~? 反例？