ISSUE51 [FF小组]第一次作业---by polly681119

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The speaker asserts that education will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of individual’s. While I concede education specifically designed for individual can be helpful, but the speaker mistakes education for training. Education not only provides special knowledge but also fundamental skills for future career.

There’s no accurate criteria to evaluate the efficiency of education. Most of the time, we think education as stuffing the pupils with miscellaneous facts and materials . Finally, their behaviors in the exams tell us their study efficiency. However, true education is not necessarily of this form, just as Socrates once said two thousand years ago, genuine education is not inserting the stuffing of information into a person, but rather eliciting knowledge from him. Thus, the efficiency of education lies in not how much students receive from teachers but how they find the spark of truth that God has put into their hearts.

On the other hand, over-specified education is not sufficient to a student in future career. AS we all know, adaptability and multiply learning are the cornerstones of success in today’s complex and rapidly changing society. The person who is steeped in one academic discipline but knows nothing about anything else will no longer meet today’s demands. Unlike training, which is intended primarily for the service of society, education is primarily for the improvement of the individual, it serves society by providing numerous of elites of understanding , of perception and wisdom. Therefore, students nowadays should receive an education integrating both specific curriculum and some Liberal Arts classes.
  
We can’t deny the fact that specifically designed classes in order to cater individual needs and to enhance interests helps training a leavening of men of knowledgeable. By changing the teaching methods and contentment according to students’ experience, the students can quickly become actively involved in the learning process. While, without enough teachers and equipments, textbooks, the thought is just a dream, especially thinking that students’ interests differ from each other on a wild range. But schools can offer some specifically designed programs to students which will not only cater their needs but also leave enough space for them to enrich their lives.

To sum up, I support of the thought to design specifically curriculum to meet students’ needs. However, in the primary of children’s study, certain compulsory classes are absolutely necessarily. In order to meet students’ special needs, schools could consider open some programs specializing certain curriculum.

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The speaker asserts that education will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of individual’s【of已经是宾格了，后边的's还有必要吗？:confused: 】. While I concede education specifically designed for individual can be helpful, but the speaker mistakes education for training. Education not only provides special knowledge but also fundamental skills for future career.
教育不仅是提供special knowledge，而且提供fundamental skills，那么，special knowledge和fundamental skill之间的区别是什么？为什么说special knowledge就不能for future career？

There’s no accurate criteria to evaluate the efficiency of education. Most of the time, we think education as stuffing the pupils with miscellaneous facts and materials . Finally, their behaviors in the exams tell us their study efficiency. However, true education is not necessarily of this form, just as Socrates once said two thousand years ago, genuine education is not inserting the stuffing of information into a person, but rather eliciting knowledge from him. Thus, the efficiency of education lies in not how much students receive from teachers but how they find the spark of truth that God has put into their hearts.
中式英语有点多了，呵呵，可以改进下。感觉这段你的论证有点牵强，虽然引出苏格拉底的一个例子作文辅助，但是这个例子最后说明了什么？教育应该挖掘人的内在的好的东西出来？恐怕有些问题吧？一个人，如果他不知道“knowledge”这个单词是什么意思，恐怕再怎么挖掘他，他也不懂吧？
我感觉，你可以从学习方法说去论证，譬如好的教育效果不是靠的知识的灌输，而是靠的有效的引导，这样似乎更好一些？

On the other hand, over-specified education is not sufficient to a student in future career. AS we all know, adaptability and multiply learning are the cornerstones of success in today’s complex and rapidly changing society. The person who is steeped in one academic discipline but knows nothing about anything else will no longer meet today’s demands. Unlike training, which is intended primarily for the service of society, education is primarily for the improvement of the individual, it serves society by providing numerous of elites of understanding , of perception and wisdom. Therefore, students nowadays should receive an education integrating both specific curriculum and some Liberal Arts classes.
对于statement中所提到的意思，我的理解是：他是想说明现在的教育没有针对个人的特点和需求。楼主这里似乎理解的有点错了吧？你是不是理解成教育应该“专业化”？所以我看你似乎用了很多的篇幅来说教育不是培训之类的。 莫非我的理解有误？ 可以再讨论一下。
  
We can’t deny the fact that specifically designed classes in order to cater individual needs and to enhance interests helps training a leavening of men of knowledgeable. By changing the teaching methods and contentment according to students’ experience, the students can quickly become actively involved in the learning process. While, without enough teachers and equipments, textbooks, the thought is just a dream, especially thinking that students’ interests differ from each other on a wild range. But schools can offer some specifically designed programs to students which will not only cater their needs but also leave enough space for them to enrich their lives.
这一段你和我想的一样，那就是针对每一个学生的教育方式不现实，所以没有办法实现。

To sum up, I support of the thought to design specifically curriculum to meet students’ needs. However, in the primary of children’s study, certain compulsory classes are absolutely necessarily. In order to meet students’ special needs, schools could consider open some programs specializing certain curriculum.
论证的收尾稍显仓促，提出的解决方案说服力不够。时间的问题？

总的来说，对于这个问题你还是提出了很多自己的见解。但是，这些看法能否有效的支持你的论点，有待商榷。议论文的关键在于你所要攻击，或者你所要支持的那个“Point”上，感觉你这篇文章，就是缺少这么一个核心论点，所以全文略显凌乱，想到什么就说什么，例证也不够充分。
以上是我的个人意见，仅供你参考！
也欢迎你来修改我的习作，期待你的批评和建议！ :handshake
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The speaker asserts that education will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of individual[’s]. While I concede education specifically designed for individual can be helpful, but the speaker mistakes education for training[needs and interests和training貌似不是一个概念吧]. Education not only provides special knowledge but also fundamental skills[这块不是很理解] for future career.

There’s no accurate criteria to evaluate the efficiency of education. Most of the time, we think education as stuffing the pupils with miscellaneous facts and materials . Finally, their behaviors in the exams tell us their study efficiency[这句话看起来有点别扭]. However, true education is not necessarily of this form, just as Socrates once said two thousand years ago, genuine education is not inserting the stuffing of information into a person, but rather eliciting knowledge from him. Thus, the efficiency of education lies in not how much students receive from teachers but how they find the spark of truth that God has put into their hearts.[这段是在定义什么是“effective education”么？感觉不是很充分，我觉得应该先给个个人的定义，然后再围绕着自己的定义展开]

On the other hand, over-specified education[题目没有说过度专业化教育的问题吧？] is not sufficient to a student in future career. AS we all know, adaptability and multiply learning are the cornerstones of success in today’s complex and rapidly changing society. The person who is steeped in one academic discipline but knows nothing about anything else will no longer meet today’s demands. Unlike training, which is intended primarily for the service of society, education is primarily for the improvement of the individual, it serves society by providing numerous of elites of understanding , of perception and wisdom. Therefore, students nowadays should receive an education integrating both specific curriculum and some Liberal Arts classes.[我觉得这段有点跑题了，个人理解题目是说教育应该鼓励学生去找到自己的真实需求和兴趣，而不是说专业化或过度专业化教育对未来职业生涯的影响。应该可以把角度稍微转变一下，变成“不该过度强调鼓励学生的需求和兴趣”，然后再说全面发展是不是会更好]
  
We can’t deny the fact that specifically designed classes in order to cater individual needs and to enhance interests helps training a leavening of men of knowledgeable[这半句有点不懂]. By changing the teaching methods and contentment according to students’ experience, the students can quickly become actively involved in the learning process. While, without enough teachers and equipments, textbooks, the thought is just a dream, especially thinking that students’ interests differ from each other on a wild range. But schools can offer some specifically designed programs to students which will not only cater their needs but also leave enough space for them to enrich their lives.[这段是说题目所说的情况是理想状况而实现起来难度很大吧，但是感觉很孤立于文章，和前面没有什么逻辑联系]

To sum up, I support of the thought to design specifically curriculum to meet students’ needs. However, in the primary of children’s study, certain compulsory classes are absolutely necessarily. In order to meet students’ special needs, schools could consider open some programs specializing certain curriculum.[感觉开头和结尾没有呼应起来]

个人感觉理论没有立起来，有点抓住什么说什么的感觉，但是把几个分论点放在一起看有融合不起来，有点乱。
以上是个人对这篇issue的一些见解，多讨论下

这是我的习作，期待回拍
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