昨天做了CollegeBoard的第一套SAT Practice Test

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最糟糕的部分看来是写作，如果把下面的Essay 给4分的话，SAT Writing Section只能得到640分.

/ L8 Z/ Q" u( s; C/ b! WTo change is to risk something, making us feel insecure, not to change is a bigger risk, though we seldom feel that way. There is no choice but to change. People, however, cannot be motivated to change from the outside. All of our motivation comes from within.
% r: x9 r+ M' oAdapted from Ward Sybouts,  Planning in School Administration: A Handbook.
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Assignment: What motivates people to change? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
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Change is an inevitable part of our lives. People and their environment undergo effects of change everywhere, from simple changes in lifestyle to devastating shifts in the environment. Any change will require special energies to realize, to motivate the individual for undertaking actions.
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8 @" |3 n$ N0 {* @/ o7 @8 t0 s4 nMany people like to remain status especially in the same circumstances and environment. People change in times of need, the same idea as we people always work to satisfy our basic needs. Change definitely require sufficient amount of motivation to push individuals to go for the change. Only when the person sees the likely benefits that the change will bring, or the person is just passionate for the new stuff, the change is then likely to occur. For example, people will not change their jobs unless they are either passionate about the new job or see a higher salary for the job.
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Thus, making changes happen is part of decision making, which occur in and is necessary for everyday life. For the simple fact that people only change for a cause, so to change is not a simple decision. For example waking up every morning for school is a routine. But to make an uneasy decision to skip school for that day, to make such a change is a choice, a lousy decision.
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People may make both positive and negative changes, according to the environment or certain motivations. Our environment surely plays an important part in motivating us to change. A lousy school with a vicious environment motivates us to transfer school. An underpaid job propels people to change their occupation. People change to adapt, to survive in the environment. When the environment comes crushing down upon us o command a change, only the laziest will remain in status quo and suffer.

Changes occur mostly upon motivations, which people face all the time. I would say that the environment plays the most important role for motivating people to undergo change, as there are constant shifts in our environment, just like the always revolving Earth.

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第一眼看上去的话，篇幅不够，目测估计 350左右吧。据很多人的说法，篇幅对得分是有影响的。
第二眼看上去的话，有点托福，好像有模板的感觉吧。有时间在来看吧，对不住楼主了最近超忙。

[ 本帖最后由 冰棒汽水ECHO 于 2008-11-9 22:52 编辑 ]

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谢谢点评。
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简单的看了一下
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# o1 z! D3 d' ~3 T  j; o2 E% D3 L) P1.字数少了，建议你把OG的两面作文纸复印多份来写作用，写到一张半较好
5 a  \; N3 w6 I3 g+ B2.例子不具体，要用细节来证明你的观点，二不是堆积一些概括性的例子
3.文章有点走题，有些地方跟中心偏离的较大
4.第一段没有明确表明观点，TOPIC是WHAT MOTIVATE PEOPLE TO CHANGE，你就应该很明了的回答：环境。太含蓄了反而让人很难找到中心
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非常感谢您的意见！
+ _1 d1 ~( N9 ^" V, T- `感觉在短时间里组织好合适的例子还是有困难。可能需要多留心准备些例子了。