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The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed boos any more.

Electronic books have been becoming more and more popular in recent years because it could be easily transported and preserved; what's more, an increasing number of libraries in universities take pride in its rich electronic resources. All of these seemingly indicate the coming of the Electronic Age, and printed books will become out-dated for students several decades later. As far as I am concerned, printed books could not go out of students' lives in twenty years, because it is impossible to convert all printed books into electronic books; in addition, printed books would not be as harmful to the students' eyes as the electronic books.

First, it seems to be an impossible task to substitute electronic books for printed books on campus in twenty years, and it is also meaningless to undertake such a painstaking work. Apparently, students have to accumulate knowledge from books in a variety of areas besides the textbooks; therefore, in order to make books and literatures, which are needed on campus, available and accessible to students, the electronic version of millions of books and magazines have to be published, not to mention the classic books published hundreds of years ago . From the data of the Chinese Press Association, more than twenty thousands books were published in 2007 in China. Thus, it would cost a great amount of money and time to complete this huge project, which could not be feasible in this high-paced and efficiency-oriented world.

Moreover, electronic books would bring about disastrous consequences to students' health. We usually read electronic books on computers, cell phones and televisions. No doubt spending too much time in front of the screen would drain the eyes and bring harm to the skin because of chronic radiation. According to the survey we conducted in our university last year, more than thirty percent of the students are near-sighted and seventy five percent of them spent at least five hours in front of the computer every day. It goes without saying that the popularity of electronic books will make the situation further deteriorated. Obviously, considering some possible detrimental impacts of widespread electronic books on campus would bring about on students’ health, the proposal of a totally replacement of printed books for electronic books could not be approved by the department of education.

To conclude, though the electronic book have lots of advantages over the printed book, it could not totally replace the printed book when taking into account the tremendous amount of work involving the converting from printed books to electronic books and the healthful features of printed books like zero radiation and less harm to the student's eyes.

[ 本帖最后由 superzhubo 于 2008-11-18 10:16 编辑 ]

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Electronic books have been becoming become more and more popular in recent years because it they could be easily transported and preserved; what's more, an increasing number of libraries in universities take pride in its their rich electronic resources. All of these seemingly indicate the coming of the Electronic Age, and printed books will become out-dated for students several decades later. However, As far as I am concerned, printed books could (the question is not focused on 'could' but rather on 'would') not go out of students' lives in twenty years, because it is impossible to convert all printed books into electronic books (I don't see why this is a reason for students to not abandon printed books. They are not necessarily required to read all books in print so you don't NEED to convert all printed books into ebooks.) ; in addition, printed books would not be as harmful to the students' eyesight as the electronic books. (Even if students no longer use printed books, it doesn't necessarily mean they'd use electronic books. They might not use books at all - knowledge will and can be delivered through softwares, online lectures, or even chips in the brain. It's up to your imagination and reasoning. Limiting yourself to electronic books, when the question doesn't specify so, could be an easy hint that your thinking has obvious shortcomings.)

First, it seems to be an impossible task to substitute electronic books for printed books on campus in twenty years, and it is also meaningless to undertake such a painstaking work. Apparently, students have to accumulate knowledge from books in a variety of areas besides the textbooks; therefore, in order to make books and literatures, which are needed on campus, available and accessible to students, the electronic version of millions of books and magazines have to be published, not to mention the classic books published hundreds of years ago.  From the data of released by the Chinese Press Association, more than twenty thousands books were published in 2007 in China. Thus, it would cost a great amount of money and time to complete this huge project, which could not be feasible in this highfast-paced and efficiency-oriented world. (It's probably faster than you might think. Visit wikipedia if you doubt the speed of growth of electronic knowledge sharing. Project Gutenburg alone already hosts over 100k of 'classic' titles online - free and in multiple languages. Most libraries now, including many US universities' libraries, have their collections online as well. Most newspapers, journals and magazines have electronic versions too - in fact, PC World, arguably the world's most-read computer magazine, just annouced that it'll become completely electronic and stop publishing printed magazines from 2009 onwards. Many textbooks are revised every 4-5 years, many classics are re-released in new versions every 2-3 years. As individual publishers already begin to take the responsibility of producing accompanying electronic copies whenever they publish new versions of books, it's actually pretty feasible. The real reason why people are not doing this 'huge project' now, is copyright.)

Moreover, electronic books would bring about disastrous consequences to students' health. We usually read electronic books on computers, cell phones and televisions. No doubt that spending too much time in front of the screen would drain the eyes and bring harm to the skin, because of chronic radiation. According to the survey we conducted in our university last year, more than thirty percent of the students are nearshort-sighted and seventy five percent of them (Who? All students you surveyed or just those who are short-sighted?) spend at least five hours in front of the computer every day. It goes without saying that the popularity of electronic books will make the situation further deteriorated further. Obviously, considering some the possible detrimental impacts of widespread electronic books on campus would bring about on students’ health, the proposal of a totally replacement of printed books for electronic books could not be approved by the department of education (We are not arguing whether it's proper to replace printed books with ebooks on campus. We are asked to argue whether it would happen. If you think it's not going to happen because it's not proper, then you have to say it explicitly.).

(On a side note, if you haven't heard of e-ink and electronic book readers, you really should do some research on the topic. For example, Amazon has Kindle, a handheld ebook reader, and delivers ebooks, newspapers and magazines regularly to users at a small fee. I have to say that the Americans are very advanced in this aspect. Sony sells its famous Sony Reader in the US, Canada, UK, but not in Asia. Generally speaking, the trend of e-reading is yet to catch up in Asia, primarily due to, again, copyright concerns.)

To conclude, though the electronic books have lots of advantages over the printed books, it they could not totally replace the printed books, when taking into account of the tremendous amount of work involving the in converting from printed books to electronic books, and the healthful-friendly features of printed books like zero radiation and less harm to the student's' eyes.

总结:

这篇的问题不是作文能力，而是对题目的背景所知甚少 - 在国内甚至整个亚洲对书籍和教育的网络电子化没有什么感觉是相当正常的，但是在美国的情况是电子化阅读和教学甚有尘嚣日上之势，所以才会有这种问题的出现。一个原因是亚洲人的日常阅读习惯还有上网的习惯的确不像西方人，另外一个原因就是毫无版权保护可言所以没什么厂商有兴趣提供付费电子化阅读和教育参考的服务。

如果单单就作文本身来说的话，论点论证都还是可以的，虽然话题面很窄，但应付考试来说没什么特别大的问题。不过要成为一篇有足够深度和广度的文章，还需要平时进行多方面的积累。

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