comeon作文小组——weenbopper11月27日作业

weenbopperUID: 2423595

Agree or disagree: The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone

As the bible saying goes: "If you share joy with one another, the joy will be doubled". According this, we can also safely say that the relaxation will be multiple if we share with someone. My reasons are listed as follow.


First and foremost, from interaction you can learn something from others. Watching movies, which is a major relaxing way, can shed some light on my point. By being told the backgrounds, profile of the actors and the initial idea of the director, you can better understand the content, conveyed information and the ideas of the movie and thus obtain considerably joy and relaxation. Moreover, the knowledge that learned from others can also facilitate us to accomplish higher achievements in work, and radically ease the work-related stress.


Subsequently, the comfortable atmosphere, which engendered by communication between friends and family members, can tremendously reduce our stress. In this fast-paced and pressing society, almost everyone have to go through a rigorous schedule, even children can not exempt from this rush. There are deadlines to meet, bills to pay, meetings to attend, papers to submit, etc. Because of this never-ending race, most people pay too much attention on their work or study, and thus are becoming less sensitive to relationship between friends and relatives. However, watching movies or having a get-together with friends can undermine this risk. During the interaction with the others, new friendship could be bridged, while the old one could be strengthened, both of which could, in turn, relieve the pressure and crisis in interpersonal relationship.

Admittedly, spending some time alone also provides us relaxation. It means greater freedom, privacy and peace, which can make you take fresh air from this breathless world. However, when comparing it with the merits of getting together with others, it will lose superiority.

In a nutshell, spending time with others, which can convey us extra information and relieve the intense relationship among friends and family members, can also make us be relaxed.

jimibtUID: 2560923

As the bible saying goes: "If you share joy with one another, the joy will be doubled". According this, we can also safely say that the relaxation will be multiple if we share with someone. My reasons are listed as follow.

First and foremost, from interaction you can learn something from others. （中心句太简单了。。。）Watching movies, which is a major relaxing way, can shed some light on my point. By being told the backgrounds, profile of the actors and the initial idea of the director, you can better understand the content, conveyed information and the ideas of the movie and thus obtain considerably joy and relaxation. （觉得这个例子阐述中心句不清楚，friend or someone 呢？interaction呢又或者仅仅是being told）Moreover, the knowledge that learned from others can also facilitate us to accomplish higher achievements in work, and radically ease the work-related stress.(无例子或者detail支撑

Subsequently, the comfortable atmosphere, which engendered by communication between friends and family members, can tremendously reduce our stress. In this fast-paced and pressing society, almost everyone have to go through a rigorous schedule, even children can not exempt from this rush. There are deadlines to meet, bills to pay, meetings to attend, papers to submit, etc. Because of this never-ending race, most people pay too much attention on their work or study, and thus are becoming less sensitive to relationship between friends and relatives.(这一段到这没见到与中心句有什么关系，觉得前面的schedule最好放到首段) However, watching movies or having a get-together with friends can undermine this risk. During the interaction with the others, new friendship could be bridged, while the old one could be strengthened, both of which could, in turn, relieve the pressure and crisis in interpersonal relationship.（觉得跟中心句差不多意思，有detail和例子么）

Admittedly, spending some time alone also provides us relaxation（relaxation反复在用，能换词吗）. It means greater freedom, privacy and peace, which can make you take fresh air from this breathless world. However, when comparing it with the merits of getting together with others, it will lose superiority.

In a nutshell, spending time with others, which can convey us extra information and relieve the intense relationship among friends and family members, can also make us be relaxed.

总得来说，用词不错，可惜的是如前所述，例子少，观点支撑不够，论证无力。。。。