HERETIC作文小组 南极熊12 04日作业

南极熊UID: 2578592

agree or disagree: observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature

The problem observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature is much debated that different people have various perspectives. From my point of view, I do not agree that study animals can help to understand human nature. Although the evolvement of human are related to the animals, we can not understand human nature from all animals.

A threshold argument for my propensity is that observe insects can not help people to comprehend human nature. We can only know about the questions such as how insects evolve and what habits they have from doing research about insects. For examples, when scientists investigate the life about the butterflies, they only understand how many parts the butterflies are made and how they develop from caterpillars to butterflies. Therefore human nature is irrelevant from this point and no problems about human can be solved.

Another reason is that it is helpless for us to understand human nature by observing the fish. Only questions about fish can be learn by us from this research such as how they swim and which parts of their bodies are used in the swimming, how many kinds of fish in the ocean or how long they can survive. If scientists want to understand human nature from fish, the results will be absurd. In order to demonstrate this point, the persuasive example is that scientist study white whales for the consequences whether they are the most gigantic animal on earth or not. Nothing about human nature is associated with white whales observing and researching.

Furthermore, although we can study primates to understand human nature, this is only a small aspect in the whole animal kingdom. Thus, we can only say that study from primates can help us to understand human nature, such as money, ample and gorilla. Human is developed from this kind of animals and only observing this aspect have the real value to human.

To sum up, all the examples can prove that study animals except primates can not help us to understand human nature. Therefore, from what we have discussed, I disagree that it is helpful for us to study animals to understand human nature.

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[ 本帖最后由 南极熊 于 2008-12-4 21:08 编辑 ]

梦想在望2008UID: 2546295

The problem (that)observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature is much debated that(后面那句话和上面的句子分开。) different people have various perspectives. From my point of view, I do not agree that study animals can help to understand human nature. Although the evolvement(evolution) of human are related to the animals, we can not understand human nature from all animals.A threshold argument for my propensity is that observe(observing) insects can not help people to comprehend human nature. We can only know about the questions such as how insects evolve and what habits they have from doing research about insects. For examples, when scientists investigate the life about the butterflies, they only understand how many parts the butterflies are made(少个介词 the butterflies are made 什么？) and how they develop from caterpillars to butterflies. Therefore human nature is irrelevant from this point and no problems about human can be solved.（末句的语言结构有点问题。应该在这里再次简要陈述本段的论点。）

Another reason is that it is helpless for us to understand human nature by observing the fish. Only questions about fish can be learn by us from this（指代不明。哪个研究？） research such as how they swim and which parts of their bodies are used in the swimming, how many kinds of fish in the ocean or how long they can survive. If scientists want to understand human nature from fish, the results will be absurd. In order to demonstrate this point, the persuasive example is that scientist study white whales for the consequences whether they are the most gigantic animal on earth or not. Nothing about human nature is associated with white whales observing and researching.（说得太绝对了！而且个人感觉例子也不具有说服力。）
Furthermore, although we can study primates to understand human nature, this is only a small aspect in the whole animal kingdom. Thus, we can only say that study from primates can help us to understand human nature, such as money, ample and gorilla. Human is developed from this kind of animals and only observing this aspect have the real value to human.To sum up, all the examples can prove that study animals except primates can not help us to understand human nature. Therefore, from what we have discussed, I disagree that it is helpful for us to study animals to understand human nature.

niuniu_dragonUID: 2134273

HERETIC作文小组 南极熊12 04日作业——龙是说我吗？hoho 囧~~~就叫我Tracy ，Tracy Austen
agree or disagree: observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature|


The problem observing or studying animals can help us to understand human nature is much debated that different people have various perspectives. （这句 是开头的 很关键 这么写不够明智 1是原封不动的重复题目 2是仅仅说明了一个事实）From my point of view, I do not agree that study animals can help to understand human nature. Although the evolvement of human are related to the animals, we can not understand human nature from all animals.（试着把自己的观点放在醒目的位置 现在这样没有问题 但是总觉得前面没有充分的展开 其实可以说一下你对这个问题是怎么理解的 然后摆明观点 现在的写法 太直接 不过Tracy也在想 其实直接是福啊…这个留给大家讨论吧）

A threshold argument for my propensity is that observe insects can not help people to comprehend human nature. （怎么变成insects了？不要自己缩小讨论范围 或者不要忽然缩小）We can only know about the questions such as how insects evolve and what habits they have from doing research about insects. For examples（……这里是怎么回事）, when scientists investigate the life about the butterflies, they（换 when investigating the life about the butterfly, the scientists） only understand how many parts the butterflies are made (be made of  或者 be made from 我记得我高中的时候天天就折腾这2词 熊 你现在正在折腾吧…) and how they develop from caterpillars to butterflies. Therefore（哪里有therefore的关系啊 应该转折 因为你想说的是 只能了解bf而不能了解hb） human nature is irrelevant from this point and no problems about human can be solved.



Another reason is that it is helpless for us to understand human nature by observing the fish.（看到这里我忽然明白了 你是想说 insect 和fish等一切Animal对人类都没有帮助 囧……） （the）Only questions about fish can be learn（learned） by us from this research such as how they swim and which parts of their bodies are used in the swimming, how many kinds of fish in the ocean or how long they can survive. If scientists want to understand human nature from fish, the results will be absurd. In order to demonstrate this point, the persuasive example is that scientist study white whales for the consequences whether they are the most gigantic animal on earth or not. Nothing about human nature is associated with white whales observing and researching.



Furthermore, although we can study primates to understand human nature, this is only a small aspect in the whole animal kingdom. Thus, we can only say that study from primates can help us to understand human nature, such as money, ample and gorilla. Human is developed from this kind of animals and only observing this aspect have the real value to human.


To sum up, all the examples can prove that study animals except primates can not help us to understand human nature. Therefore, from what we have discussed, I disagree that it is helpful for us to study animals to understand human nature.

（恩 从大的问题说起 这个题目熊理解的不好 局限在片面了 3个分论点具了3种类型的动物 但是明显感觉说服力不够 让人难以信服 就说昆虫 bf 那个什么蚕宝宝也是这种类型的 不是对人类作用很大吗 所以这样去给出自己的论点再论述的方法不明智 应该从大方向去讨论）
（细节 再次指出 be learned 这样的小错误要杜绝 ）
（最后 我感觉 可能是因为熊还是高中生 有些问题考虑的可能还不够深刻 或者说 考虑到那个层次了 却表达不出来 这样我建议你多读一些文章 注意细节的同时去把握他们的论述方法）

南极熊UID: 2578592

:handshake 感谢感谢 学习学习。。。太感谢了