【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】☆Jelly月♂12月20日作文

d596086UID: 2522476

12.20日作业Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, the influent of advanced technology, such as Internet, personal computer, proves to be profound. And there has been a very controversial debate as to whether or not new technique will replace the traditional printed books as the main source of information for students to use in twenty years. I say, no matter how technology is improved, the traditional books would never be replaced because of its several unsubstantiated advantages.

People in favor of the modern technologies always provide the following evidence. Firstly, in history, we can see that every new technology brings about great changes to people life, from steam engine to electric machine. So as the computer technology, which offers people more methods than printed books to get knowledge? Secondly, modern technology like computers is another great invention that can store a huge amount of date, which common books can hardly compare with. And at the same time, people are able to process the date more rapidly and accurately than we can ever imagine. If this trend keep growing, two decades later, probably no one, especial the students, is willing to use the printed books.

Conversely, as for the merits of traditional information source, the printed books have its indelible predominance. In the first place, the history of human civilization is a written history. It has never been changed in past thousands years, and definitely won't be transferred no matter in twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years. Secondly, it is more comfortable than watching screen that people are free to choose any posture and place that make them comfortable while reading the printed books. Besides, the computer screen will emit radial which is a hazard to people's eyes, especially to the young students who need to study for up to eight hours a day. Unlike the screen, the books are harmless to our body, which should be encouraged for students to use. Finally, traditional information sources like books are relatively stable and reliable to preserve the information well. If the educational dates in teachers' or students' computers are destroyed, or the school's electric power is broken, the normal education can not be continued. Fortunately, this thing can not happened in printed books.

Although the modern technologies have many advantages which printed books could hardly compare with, I still insist that, in the future, students will also use the traditional books as main source of information for studying knowledge
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[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-20 20:17 编辑 ]

alwaysleafUID: 2519089

Nowadays, the influent (influence?) of advanced technology, such as Internet, personal computer, proves to be profound. And there has been a very controversial debate as to whether or not new technique (technologies?) will replace the traditional printed books as the main source of information for students to use in (the next) twenty years. I say, no matter how technology is (has?) improved, the traditional books would never be replaced because of its several unsubstantiated advantages.

  People in favor of the modern technologies always provide the following evidence. Firstly, in history, we can see that every new technology brings about great changes to people's life, from steam engine to electric machine. So as the computer technology, which offers people more methods than printed books to get knowledge? (why “?”) Secondly, modern technology like computers is another great invention that can store a huge amount of date (data), which common books can hardly compare (compete) with. And at the same time, people are able to process the date (data) more rapidly and accurately than (what) we can ever imagine. If this trend keep growing, two decades later, probably no one, especial the students, is willing to use the printed books.

Conversely, as for the merits of traditional information source, the printed books have its indelible predominance. In the first place, the history of human civilization is a written history. It has never been changed in (the) past thousands (of) years, and definitely won't be transferred no matter (?) in (the next) twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years. Secondly, it is more comfortable to choose postures and places while reading printed books than watching the screen. Besides, the computer screen will emit radial which is a hazard to people's eyes, especially to the young students who need to study for up to eight hours a day. Unlike the screen, the books are harmless to our body, which should be encouraged for students to use. Finally, traditional information sources like books are relatively stable and reliable to preserve the information well. If the educational dates (data) in teachers' or students' computers are destroyed, or the school's electric power is broken, the normal (regular) education can not be continued. Fortunately, this thing can not happened in (to) printed books.

Although the modern technologies have many advantages which (that) printed books could hardly compare with, I still insist that, in the future, students will also use the traditional books as main source of information for studying knowledge.

[ 本帖最后由 alwaysleaf 于 2008-12-21 12:29 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

influence
unsubstantiated advantages未经证实的？？？
can not happen to printed books

请教一下，tuolf 作文用辩证，平衡的写法是不是不容易的高分啊

ningstoryUID: 2548108

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.留
Nowadays, the influent  (influences)  of advanced technology, such as Internet, personal computer, proves to be profound. And there has been a very controversial debate as to whether or not new technique will replace the traditional printed books as the main source of information for students to use (建议删除to use，与前面意思重复) in twenty years. I say, no matter how technology is improved, the traditional books would never be replaced because of its several unsubstantiated advantages.
People in favor of the modern technologies always provide the following evidence. Firstly, in history, we can see that every new technology brings about great changes to people life, from steam engine to electric machine. So as the computer technology, which offers people more methods than printed books to get knowledge? Secondly, modern technology like computers is another great invention that can store a huge amount of date, which common books can hardly compare with. And at the same time, people are able to process the date more rapidly and accurately than we can ever imagine. If this trend keep growing, two decades later, probably no one, especial the students, is willing to use the printed books.
Conversely, as for the merits of traditional information source, the printed books have its indelible predominance（s）. In the first place, the history of human civilization is a written history. It has never been changed in past thousands （of）years, and definitely won't be transferred no matter in twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years（你的意思是千年之后还会printed books，我认为此观点过于绝对，可以删除，或者弱化）. Secondly, it is more comfortable than watching screen that people are free to choose any posture and place that make them comfortable while reading the printed books. Besides, the computer screen will emit radial which is a hazard to people's eyes, especially to the young students who need to study for up to eight hours a day. Unlike the screen, the books are harmless to our body, which should be encouraged for students to use. Finally, traditional information sources like books are relatively stable and reliable to preserve the information well. If the educational dates in teachers' or students' computers are destroyed, or the school's electric power is broken, the normal education can not be continued. Fortunately, this thing can not happened in printed books.
Although the modern technologies have many advantages which printed books could hardly compare with, I still insist that, in the future, students will also use the traditional books as main source of information for studying knowledge.

楼主总体上写的不错，语句比较流畅，观点明确，例子恰当。但是， 我觉得文章的结构不是很恰当，应该把非电子书的优点放在后面就好了。先写printed books的好处，指明用其必要性，然后进行让步，承认电子书的优点，但是仍然不能取代printed books。 我想这样更好吧。 呵呵
一家之言，抛砖引玉。 l O$G6~Z\3j0f4N

d596086UID: 2522476

不啊，2段的BODY问题写2方观点的时候，就是应该把需要舍弃的观点放在前面写

无音萧UID: 2518358

Nowadays, the influent of advanced technology, such as Internet, personal computer, proves to be profound. And there has been a very controversial debate as to whether or not new technique will replace the traditional printed books as the main source of information for students to use in twenty years. I say, no matter how technology is improved, the traditional books would never be replaced because of its several unsubstantiated （未经证实的？）advantages.

People in favor of the modern technologies always provide the following evidence. Firstly, in history, we can see that every new technology brings about great changes to people life, from steam engine to electric machine. So as the computer technology， which offers people more methods than printed books to get knowledge?（是不是想说computer technology也一样？句式是不是用错了？So does 吧！）Secondly, modern technology like computers is another great invention that can store a huge amount of date, which common books can hardly compare with. And at the same time, people are able to process the date more rapidly and accurately than we can ever imagine. If this trend keep growing（going 好些吧？）, two decades later, probably no one, especial the students, is willing to use the printed books.

Conversely, as for the merits of traditional information source, the printed books have its indelible predominance. In the first place, the history of human civilization is a written history. It has never been changed in past thousands years, and definitely won't be transferred no matter in twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years.（论证不充分，再说两句支撑一下你的观点吧。不然不能令人信服，谁说20年后就不能用电脑来记载历史啊） Secondly, it is more comfortable than watching screen that people are free to choose any posture and place that make them comfortable while reading the printed books. (这句有点混乱，看绿色标注的it is …that 很像是强调句，但读不通。把that people are free to变成 in that people are free to 吧，就是因果关系了)Besides, the computer screen will emit radial（radiation）which is a hazard to people's eyes, especially to the young students who need to study for up to eight hours a day. Unlike the screen, the books are harmless to our body, which should be encouraged for students to use. Finally, traditional information sources like books are relatively stable and reliable to preserve the information well. If the educational dates in teachers' or students' computers are destroyed, or the school's electric power is broken, the normal education can not be continued.(读起来有点别扭，是不是有很强的中式味道，楼主可以尝试修改一下) Fortunately, this thing can not happened in printed books.
（总觉得这一段的论证有点松散，可能和句子的运用有关）

Although the modern technologies have many advantages which printed books could hardly compare with, I still insist that, in the future, students will also use the traditional books as main source of information for studying knowledge.

总的来说，结构还是不错的，通过让步来让论证更充分。但是我觉得第二段篇幅有点长了，反倒会有点详略不当的感觉，或许可以在第二段的结尾处加个转折句，加强论证强度。

[ 本帖最后由 无音萧 于 2008-12-21 23:51 编辑 ]

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

同学，20号的作文你还没帮我拍呵。