Issue7【六人作文小组】第2周第2次作业

空即是色UID: 2496914

Issue 7: The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
提纲：1、录像技术的确为我们提供了大量的优质的资料。更在客观真实
      2、但是他无法取代文字记录。文字往往代表作者更深层次的思考和理解。是影相的升华。
      3、结合二者

The process of cognizing their living world by humans is consisted of observation, recognition and comprehension. With the developing technology we look into the world from eyes originally to using photograph or camera that is more advanced, while, in the part of understanding, the working condition is still as similar as before—our brain, to the basic of speculation act.

Indeed camera that leads us to a more authentic and objective condition is really true. When we are talking about one thing, a piece of photo or a section of video will be the best evidence to support the speaker’s point, especially to one who is inexperienced himself. In the court, it is frequently that the prosecutor provides a video that recorded by monitor in the scene of the incident and treated as the vital evidence to testify the dock’s crime. Camera is just like an excellent memoirist that comes through the elimination of time and space, brings we back to the past and re-experiences. It seems as a more direct data to show the truth. Furthermore, as a modern instrument, camera could offer for a great number of documents that makes our work more effective and efficient. There is no need to spend too much time on thinking how to record exactly without any bias, how to recommend the data and how to make the records tend to feasible.

However, when we accomplish data collection process, in the next step, written will replace the key role of camera. To consider is to research, only can we see through the appearance to the essence deeply, we could finally reach to the inside. Definitely, written that involves in people’s thinking, calculation and ideas expresses analysis based on the former video documents. The idea in our mind is abstract so that it cannot convey the rational thinking in camera but in words. Consider, for example, Newton discovered gravity force according to observe dropping apples, meanwhile, if he were not ponder this event and finally summarized it in words, the Newton mechanics law would never emerge, leaving on the “accident” level forever. In addition, there still exist a lot of people who cannot afford for cameras; to them a cost of a camera could pay for one half-year’s living. We still have to face to such problems as hunger, poor and drop school, thus, it seems impossible for most to change paper to camera and obviously in some decades written will be current just the same.

Actually we have already recognized both of the merits in these two record methods. Every time when we watch teleplay and movies, we might not find that we are enjoying in a good combination that links video to words. First, the writer creates a scenario and the director depicts the thrilling situation to us in great detail, like a transforming game between camera and written. Take an example of <Harry Potter>, I think people who have read the novel and also seen the movies hold the same idea with me: each one of them is irreplaceable. Novel offers us free image and movie offers us visual enjoyment.

We should use these two methods without abandoning any one; they can be built upon one another and co-existence in chorus. If we are clearly aware of this situation, camera and written will result in a wonderful modern life.

sneakerliuUID: 2481691

The process of cognizing their living world by humans is consisted of observation, recognition and comprehension. With the developing technology we look into the world from eyes originally to using photograph or camera that is more advanced, while, in the part of understanding, the working condition is still as similar as before—our brain, to the basic of speculation act.

Indeed camera that leads us to a more authentic and objective condition is really true(去掉). When we are talking about one thing/one specific issue, a piece of photo or a section of video will be the best evidence to support the speaker’s point, especially to one who is inexperienced himself. Additionaly,In the court, it is frequently that the prosecutor provides a video that recorded by monitor in the scene of the incident and treated as the vital evidence to testify the dock’s crime. Camera is just like an excellent memoirist that comes through the elimination of time and space, brings we back to the past and re-experiences. It seems as a more direct data to show the truth. Furthermore, as a modern instrument, camera could offer for a great number of documents that makes our work more effective and efficient. There is no need to spend too much time on thinking how to record exactly without any bias, how to recommend the data and how to make the records tend to feasible.

However, when we/after accomplishing data collection process, in the next step, written will replace the key role of camera. To consider is to research, only can we(if we) see through the appearance to the essence deeply, we could(could) finally reach to the inside and understand the essence of phenomena. Definitely, written that involves in people’s thinking, calculation and ideas expresses analysis based on the former video documents. The idea in our mind is abstract so that it cannot convey the rational thinking in camera but in words. Consider, for example, Newton discovered gravity force according to observe dropping apples, meanwhile, if he were not ponder this event and finally summarized it in words, the Newton mechanics law would never emerge, leaving on the “accident” level forever. In this regard, writting is somewhat a creative method for human beings to invent and critize freely instead of record the objective evidenve.(总结了下牛顿，但是我觉得这和form of documentation 有点跑) In addition, there still exist a lot of people who cannot afford for cameras; to them a cost of a camera could pay for one half-year’s living. We still have to face to such problems as hunger, poor and drop school, thus, it seems impossible for most to change paper to camera and obviously in some decades written will be current just the same.

Actually we have already recognized both of the merits in these two record methods. Every time when we watch teleplay and movies, we might not find that we are enjoying in a good combination that links video to words. First, the writer creates a scenario and the director depicts the thrilling situation to us in great detail, like a transforming game between camera and written. Take an example of , I think people who have read the novel and also seen the movies hold the same idea with me: each one of them is irreplaceable. Novel offers us free image and movie offers us visual enjoyment.

We should use these two methods without abandoning any one; they can be built upon one another and co-existence in chorus. If we are clearly aware of this situation, camera and written will result in a wonderful modern life.
camera和paper给是主观客观，主动被动的问题，另外我觉得有点小跑，题目说的是documentation的问题，在documentary上我们依然需要主观的思想，依然需要主动的思考与接受，这样写比较好

thony-shenUID: 2516637

Theprocess of cognizing their living world by humans is consisted of observation,recognition and comprehension. With the developing technology we look into theworld from eyes originally to using photograph or camera that is more advanced,while, in the part of understanding, the working condition is still as similaras before—our brain, to the basic of speculation act. Indeed camera that leads us to a moreauthentic and objective condition is really(可以选择一个就好) true. Whenwe are talking about one thing, a piece of photo or a section of video will bethe best evidence to support the speaker’s point, especially to one who isinexperienced himself (The moment when weare talking about one thing, a piece of photo or a section of video is the bestevidence to support the speaker’s point, especially to one who is inexperienced).In the court, it is frequently that the prosecutor provides a video thatrecorded by monitor in the scene of the incident and treated as the vitalevidence to testify the dock’s crime. Camera is just like an excellentmemoirist that comes through the elimination of time and space, brings we backto the past and re-experiences. It seems as a more direct data to show thetruth. Furthermore, as a modern instrument, camera could offer for(删掉) agreat number of documents(conveniences) that makes(make) our work more effective and efficient.There is no need to spend too much time on thinking how to record exactlywithout any bias, how to recommend the data and how to make the records tend tofeasible. However, when we accomplish data collection process, in the next step,written will replace the key role of camera. To consider is to research, onlycan we see through the appearance to the essence deeply, we could finally reachto the inside. Definitely, written that involves in people’s thinking,calculation and ideas expresses analysis based on the former video documents.The idea in our mind is abstract so that it cannot convey the rational thinkingin camera but in words. Consider, for example, Newton discovered gravity forceaccording to observe dropping apples, meanwhile, if he were not ponder thisevent and finally summarized it in words, the Newton mechanics law would neveremerge, leaving on the “accident” level forever. In addition, there still exista lot of people who cannot afford for cameras; to them a(the) cost of a camera could pay for onehalf-year’s living (keep one living half-year). We still have to face tosuch problems as hunger, poor and drop (drop out of)school, thus, it seems impossible for most to change paper to camera andobviously in some decades written will be current just the same. Actually we have already recognized both of the merits in these two recordmethods. Every time when we watch teleplay and movies, we might not find thatwe are enjoying in a good combination that links video to words. First, thewriter creates a scenario and the director depicts the thrilling situation tous in great detail, like a transforming game between camera and written. Takean example of <Harry Potter>, I think(believe)people who have read the novel and also seen the movies(加will) hold the same idea with me: each one of them isirreplaceable. Novel offers us free image and movie offers us visual enjoyment.We should use these two methods without abandoning any one; they can bebuilt upon one another and co-existence in chorus. If we are clearly aware ofthis situation, camera and written will result in a wonderful modern life.

思路比较清晰,但最好文章里还是要比较一下究竟那个更好,或者说明两者都很必要,但在你的文章里没有比较或necessary等影子.

半妖UID: 2328063

Issue 7: The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
提纲：1、录像技术的确为我们提供了大量的优质的资料。更在客观真实
      2、但是他无法取代文字记录。文字往往代表作者更深层次的思考和理解。是影相的升华。
      3、结合二者

The process of cognizing their living world by humans is consisted of observation, recognition and comprehension. With the developing technology we look into the world from eyes originally to using photograph or camera that is more advanced, while, in the part of understanding, the working condition is still as similar as before—our brain, to the basic of speculation act.

Indeed camera that leads us to a more authentic and objective condition is really true. When we are talking about one thing, a piece of photo or a section of video will be the best evidence to support the speaker’s point, especially to one who is inexperienced himself. In the court, it is frequently that the prosecutor provides a video that recorded by monitor in the scene of the incident and treated as the vital evidence to testify the dock’s crime. Camera is just like an excellent memoirist that comes through the elimination of time and space, brings we back to the past and re-experiences. It seems as a more direct data to show the truth. Furthermore, as a modern instrument, camera could offer for a great number of documents that makes our work more effective and efficient. There is no need to spend too much time on thinking how to record exactly without any bias, how to recommend the data and how to make the records tend to feasible.

However, when we accomplish data collection process, in the next step, written will replace the key role of camera. To consider is to research, only can we see through the appearance to the essence deeply, we could finally reach to the inside. 基本语法错误，无连接词，却把几个单句并列。Definitely, written that involves in people’s thinking, calculation and ideas expresses analysis based on the former video documents. The idea in our mind is abstract so that it cannot convey the rational thinking in camera but in words. Consider, for example, Newton discovered gravity force according to observe dropping apples, meanwhile, if he were not ponder this event and finally summarized it in words, the Newton mechanics law would never emerge, leaving on the “accident” level forever.可以进行合理假设来支持自己的论点，但是请尽量将其的支持力度最大化。改成这样会不会好点：Consider that Newton had not finally summarized his discovery of gravity force. Then Neton mechanism law woudl never emerge. In addition, there still exist a lot of people who cannot afford for cameras; to them a cost of a camera could pay for one half-year’s living. We still have to face to such problems as hunger, poor and drop school, thus, it seems impossible for most to change paper to camera and obviously in some decades written will be current just the same.

Actually we have already recognized both of the merits in these two record methods. Every time when we watch teleplay and movies, we might not find that we are enjoying in a good combination that links video to words. First, the writer creates a scenario and the director depicts the thrilling situation to us in great detail, like a transforming game between camera and written. Take an example of <Harry Potter>, I think people who have read the novel and also seen the movies hold the same idea with me: each one of them is irreplaceable. Novel offers us free image and movie offers us visual enjoyment. 似乎哈利波特的例子不是很贴切。怎样的记录方式是文字和视觉相结合的呢？有插图的书？？呵呵~~个人意见，纯属瞎说。但是确实觉得这个例子不够学术、不够贴切。最后最好再加个总结句。

We should use these two methods without abandoning any one; they can be built upon one another and co-existence in chorus. If we are clearly aware of this situation, camera and written will result in a wonderful modern life.