Issue49【0906G ANap Hand 作文互改小组】第四次作业 bygoingeast 请狂拍，死而后快

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Topic：虽然想象作品不如叙事作品来得精确，但比他们来得深刻，也正是因为经过加工才显得比叙事有更持久的意义。

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叙事作品以客观的笔法记录事实，

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想象作品中重点刻画社会，其使用的艺术手段比如联想和渲染，使得刻画得更生动，使人们更易于接受。例如一些，希腊神话，科幻小说，剧情虚构的电影

Precision is not reality - Henri Mattisse

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想象作品有更多的自由来表达情感，往往比叙事作品更直接更深刻的揭露现实，况且给人提供了思考的空间。百年孤独，雾都孤儿

There are more valid facts and details in works of art than there are in history books. - Charlie Chaplin

所以说想象作品给人提供了思考的空间，揭示了事物根深层次意义，利于人们接受记忆，所以具有比叙事具有更深远的意义。

We often say that art comes from life, but is higher than life. I tender to agree that imaginative works really own a more lasting significance than factual accounts even though they are less objective and accurate than factual accounts. And it is because of using more profound thoughts and more grandiose scenes that the imaginative works show more significance.

Factual accounts, such as newsreel, history and photography, use an objective way to exhibit what things exactly are without reprocessing by the author. They merely describe the real characters of the realm of factuality. Take the history of the World War 2 for example, we can only realize the specific history, not in full picture, through the articles, the photos, the newspaper.

Just the contrary, however, more emotional factors are involved in the invention of imaginative works. Imaginative works focus on depicting or outlining the features of the world around us. Recreating an idea, mood, atmosphere and background, as by artistic means, include association, hyperbole, and so on. These abundant delineative approaches make the description more bright and vivid than factual accounts. Accordingly, the old and unacquainted story or history become more easygoing to people. Still the World War 2, the novel "Band of Brothers”,for instance, is more interesting and moving than the insipid history display, the readers identify with the roles of the novel, just like they play with them, sympathize with them, the readers can deeply realize how important peace is. Moreover, as Henri Mattisse ,a famous artist, said" precision is not reality",just like the Ancient Greek Mythology, which reveals some defects of human being. And science fictions, which adumbrate and encourage the development of science. So, only imagine work can provide such lasting impressions.

Furthermore, imagination works feel freer to explain thoughts and feelings. Therefore, the factual accounts do not compare with imagination works, not only from depth of idea, but from extent of insight. Besides, even if it's true that an imagination work was nothing more than pure fantasy, with no history context, it still can leave more space for people to think than a factual account. I remember Charlie Chaplin said that "There are more valid facts and details in works of art than there are in history books.” Consider our great novel "One Hundred Years of Solitude”, did Gabriel Garcia Marquez's fictional portrayal of life of every generation of Buendia provide a more “meaningful picture of human experience"than a history book? If so, will this work hold more “lasting significant" than bare factual account? The answer is clear. Therein lies the reason for their lasting significance.

In sum, without prior factual accounts fictional works lose much their foundation. Yet only through the exercise of imagination can we convey human experience in its entire dimension, and thereby fully understand and appreciate life in other times and places. And it is human experience, and not bare facts and figure, that endure in our minds and souls

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We often say that art comes from life, but is higher than life. I tender to agree that imaginative works really own a more lasting significance than factual accounts even though they are less objective and accurate than factual accounts. And it is because of using more profound thoughts and more grandiose(这个词不好,带贬义了,用exaggerated) scenes that the imaginative works show more significance.

Factual accounts(其实是factual examples, 题目中的意思是imaginative works 比 doing factual accounts更...), such as newsreel, history and photography, use an objective way to(把这个换成in an objective eye或者though objective glasses更地道,你这样说太中文化了) exhibit what things exactly are without reprocessing by the author. They merely describe the real characters of the realm of factuality(这种表述也不对劲). Take the history of the World War 2 for example, we can only realize the specific history, not in full picture, (缺but) through the articles, the photos, the newspaper.

Just the contrary, however, more emotional factors are involved in the invention of(重复了imaginative的意思) imaginative works. Imaginative works focus on depicting or outlining the features of the world around us. Recreating an idea, mood, atmosphere and background, as by artistic means, include association, hyperbole, and so on. These abundant delineative approaches make the description more bright and vivid than factual accounts. Accordingly, the old and unacquainted story or history become more easygoing to people. Still the World War 2, the novel "Band of Brothers”,for instance, is more interesting and moving than the insipid history display, the readers identify with the roles of the novel, just like they play with them, sympathize with them, the readers can deeply realize how important peace is. Moreover, as Henri Mattisse ,a famous artist, said" precision is not reality",just like the Ancient Greek Mythology, which reveals some defects of human being. And science fictions, which adumbrate(promote/accelerate) and encourage the development of science. So, only imagine work can provide such lasting impressions.

Furthermore, imagination works feel freer to explain thoughts and feelings. Therefore, the factual accounts do not compare with imagination works, not only from depth of idea, but from extent of insight. Besides, even if it's true that an imagination work was nothing more than pure fantasy, with no history context, it still can leave more space for people to think than a factual account. I remember Charlie Chaplin said that "There are more valid facts and details in works of art than there are in history books.”(这句话太可惜了,一点应有的作用都没有起到.1是放在文章中间,2是居然用I remember这种绝对不能在议论性文章当中出现的结构. 改: were their superiorities defined as Charlie Chaplin(倒装句式强调优越性和权威性), art works demonstrate "more valid facts and details" than the history books.然后放到段落开头去) Consider our great novel "One Hundred Years of Solitude”, did Gabriel Garcia Marquez's fictional portrayal of life of every generation of Buendia provide a more “meaningful picture of human experience"than a history book? If so, will this work hold more “lasting significant" than bare factual account? The answer is clear. Therein lies the reason for their lasting significance.

In sum, without prior factual accounts fictional works lose much their foundation. Yet only through the exercise of imagination can we convey human experience in its entire dimension(这个词用得烂!用extent), and thereby fully understand and appreciate life in other times and places. And it is human experience, and not bare facts and figure, that endure in our minds and souls

结构还是比较清晰的,但是句式过于单调,用词也有一些问题.
时间还比较早,以目前的情况看,多多积累一点词句,尤其是客观性的动词(通常以物做主语, 比如ensue:Trouble will ensue if wind of this scandal gets out)!,总不能上了考场就开始sth have... / sth make + adj 吧.