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  Almost all the technology's development depends on the contribution of history. The speaker asserts that history provides us little guidance for living in the present seems logical. But we need to consider it comprehensively. 最好开头提出观点

  People cannot that deny we develop from the experiences leaving by previous generation. History contributes a long story, wars translate peace to us, arts deliver soul to mental and the experiences teach us never forget history. Two World Wars make a plenty of victims lost their parents, brothers or sisters, friends and probably their belief to live. So modern people or government is more careful in waging wars. So today, we can see 太口语 , there are fewer wars in the world than before. Once wars broken out, there will certainly result people's  homelessness , according to the history, at this time arts always play an irreplaceable value role好些 in activating and inspiring victims. From this point of view, history leaves us a significant guidance that people ought to create a peaceful society rather than wars.

On the other hand, history pervades several of aspects of human life, like technology, economics and environment. History encourages the development of technology to more advanced, more convenient and more intelligence, which in turn become another
history that encourage people.不懂  Also economics should be promoted in a certain limitation. Especially we cannot simply develop economics by costing environment that can be difficult recovered but easily destroyed just like the ozone layer over
Antarctic. economy这句怎么感觉跟主题无关

Besides, history helps people makes they’re planning 太口语 . Mostly we know nothing about future, so we infer it through history experiences. Also when we are in difficulty history experience always can help us get through it. History experience play a direction of our daily life of modern people from which we benefit a lot. But 单独用不好 用however nevertheless nonetheless , we must accept that with the development of the modern society some of the experiences do useless to us. After all, worlds are changing, everything is changing. We
shouldn't evalute two things in a different back grouds.

In the final analysis, though some of the historical perspectives have loss its traditional values of the past, looking back for an understanding of the past can also provide modern people with an important guidance for living in the present world.

感觉lz整篇文章的论述很无力 题目强调的是 new and complex 导致的 回顾过去对现在无意义  所以我感觉是应该探讨 现在new and complex 的原因何在 进而讨论是否有意义  这仅是我个人的观点 希望能对楼主有所帮助  建议楼主好好改改这篇文章 多充实些例子
另外 咱们在写作初期应尽量用些复杂句（版主们建议的）