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ningning86UID: 2518206

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标题：issue17 留链接回拍

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LizzytblUID: 2600929

多谢hunter101020的建议，这篇文章写的时候是很混乱。昨天仔细和同学讨论了下，今天重新写了一遍，贴在下楼，占位改你的第二篇吧~

103 The study of history have value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives. According to this issue ,it seems to be reasonable that whether history is valuable or not depends on the extent it is relevant to daily lives. In my point of view ,I partly agree with this assertion .Actually , history provide lots of benefits which are not only confined within daily lives but many other aspect(s) of the modern society .   1Fist(First) and foremost ,in many cases, history can provide people’s daily lives with examples directly and can also inspire us by learning about the famous figures in history. For history is the roadmap of mankind which recorded (records) not only people’s behaviors (这个词是日常行为吧，改成activities会好点) but also their thoughts and feelings .By reading about the biography of Beethoven ,people can know about how tough and great it was when Beethoven fighting (fight) with illness and destiny and (can) get inspiration of how(of how去掉) to face the difficult time during one’ life. By learning about Martin Luther King, we can find out how an individual contribute(s) his own life into the fight for building an equal society .Those famous few often plays(paly) an(a) crucial role in inspiring the common people and (in) encouraging them to fight for their own life(lives). 2.However ,sometimes history serve our daily lives from a broad view which are indirectly related to our daily(为了突出历史在其他方面的作用，这个开头应该完全摆脱和daily life的关联，哪怕不是直接的关联，因为间接关联也算啊~扯上关系就会没有说服力，会让人confused，可以直接说是 not limited to daily life，而且不要说历史serve our daily life，否则又扯上关系了，最后这句话可以改成 However, history realize its value from a broad view which is not limited to our daily lives). history bring(give) our society lessons and warnings which prevent (preventing) the society from repeating mistakes(,) and consequently (it can) improve the whole society . During the Qing dynasty(,) China was extremely self blocked and never communicated to other countries which has already step (have already stepped) into industrial revolution(.) This fault leads to an weak and corrupt(ed 或者rotten) government and country. During the new times of China ,Chinese government (is) quite aware of the history mistakes and actively communicate with other countries from many aspects :economy technology culture education and so on (,逗号隔开，连起来写的没见到过~) And these behaviors bring China many advanced techniques and theories which  lead to (a) large achievement in building  the whole country ,(and) improving the quality of national power. From this we can see that it is the history which bring the effective(impressive) lessons to Chinese government. Without this(without which) ,China would still be in the state of weak and self blocked .So from this aspects(aspect) ,study(history) contains more value than (for) individual’s inspiration. 3.In addition ,our ethics and moral standard are gradually formed during the long time of history which provide us with self identification. The social traditions and values are largely shared by social members which determine our judgment(judgements) and choices potentially(unconsicously) . These merits though have not relevant to our daily lives are very essential for every people(既然对每个人很重要，那很容易让人感觉与daily life相关，因为第一段论述就是写history针对个人的作用，如果要突出tradition对人的作用又避免给人和daily life相关，这句话要改一下组织形式。比如：These merits are not embodied in every day life, yet they are deeply rooted in people's mind and essential to their mental world). Spring festival is the most important festival in China .Every year on that day family members will get together to have dinner watch TV and enjoy the happiness with family members (这句话很罗嗦，可以改成Every year on that day, family members will have dinner, watch TV, and enjoy the happiness together) .Although the development of telecommunication has facilitated the conversation between people a lot ,this tradition has never changed (最好再强调一下即使通信发达人们仍不借助通信方式过节，这里断开加句号. People don't celebrate the festival through telecommunicating with each other) simply because the feeling and needs of self identification formed by history (扯得有点远，其实这个例子和自我认知关系不大，它体现的是人们的情感需要和历史对文化传统的重要性，不如把后面这句的拉上来，还能避免重复，对了，这段开头的自我认知也可以改改) .People (they) needs to enjoy the feeling of peace and love and the historical day ----- Spring festival just cater for their mental needs . In sum ,study history has not only facilitated our daily lives but also provided inspiration and promotion with our society from a broad perspective (总结不全面，对tradition的作用也应突出写出来). When it comes to judge the value of history ,we should evaluate from various aspects (,) only in this the result (study) can be comprehensive and the value of history can be make (made of) good use. 作者角度选得很好，结构很完整，分析也够充分，不足的就是：1，语言上，可以简练一点，并且避免比较多的简单句；2，把举的反例和要反对的观点划清界限，不要有拉扯，否则容易让人疑惑混淆 总结的时候也尽量完整吧~语言上的修改受限于自己的水平，作者自己再推敲下用词等吧~~

LizzytblUID: 2600929

TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 542          TIME: 1.5h          DATE: 2009-3-28 14:38:01
The speaker bring about a debate between the artist and the critic to whom the lasting value of something to society should be attributed. Obviously, the "something" here implies master pieces of works of art which are still benefiting the society rather than wiped out by the society. In my opinion, I am inclined to agree that the artist is playing a more important role than the critic.

To begin with, we will have to examine the value of great works of art first following which we talk about their "lasting value" to society. Admittedly, art stems from life and finally returns to it. Each piece of great work is finished with congregations of  the author's life experience and is expressed in way that can give individuals different feelings about it. People can get varied senses of pleasure or inspiring power or even retrospection of their own lives from the works and only in this way is the value of the works completely realized.

Why is the value of the works still last and what makes them not being forgotten by society?  The answer remains in enduring public appreciation of them. Unlike popular entertainment which only gives tempory relax and monotonous feeling to people, art is condensed with reflections of the society which is experience by their author and it is expressed to give people infinite feelings about  the world. People in different periods may get different angles to judge it while people with different background may get various imagination from it. It is the works' inborn beauty that attract people to appreciate them and to absorb certain nutritions from them on and on. Take the Beethoven's symphony for example, the lasting value of the music lies in people's non-stop feeling of its beauty which can endow people of different days pleasure.

Then what are the roles of the artist and the critic in the fulfillment of the works' value? Can their value last without the artist? Or what is case without the critic? Apparently we have to reply that the works of great art will not come into the world without the artist, let alone the lasting value of them; instead, such works can still benefit the society without the critic as long as they are created with the beauty by the artist which can satisfy people's aesthetic tastes, because people themselves all have the ability to interpret the works, though in various ways. Take Jane Eyre--the favorate novel of mine--for example, I can get the wonderful depiction of love from it which is accroding to my own comprehension, and people of the past or of the future can also get their own understanding of it, which inevitablely will give them pleasure without the critic's interpretion. The process of the works benefiting their readers is actually the process the artist passing their insight to the readers, during which the critic is just aiding the artist to better the readers' perceiving.

In sum, I am at large approval of the speaker's assertion that during the long river of history, it is the artist who keep producing spiritual food to provide the society things of lasting value which can be directly absorbed by the public, and the critic is merely the aiding facility.

hunter101020UID: 2591908

回136楼
谢谢 你说的很有道理 的确2 3 两端末尾有点画蛇添足 moreover。。。。 on the other hand ...... 之后我应该好好考虑 与段中心 不是很搭配

hunter101020UID: 2591908

138# Lizzytbl
改得真细致。。。。。。
我自己都没这个耐心 很有道理  谢拉！！】
我今天刚好也写144 你等等 我写完也发上来

hunter101020UID: 2591908

139# Lizzytbl
144

The speaker bring about a debate between the artist and the critic to whom the lasting value of something to society should be attributed. Obviously, the "something" here implies master pieces of works of art which are still benefiting the society rather than wiped out by the society. In my opinion, I am inclined to （不要这个incline 坚定些可能更好）agree that the artist is playing a more important role than the critic.

To begin with, we will have to examine the value of great works of art first following which we talk about their "lasting value" to society. Admittedly, art stems from life and finally returns to it. Each piece of great work is finished with congregations of  the author's life experience and is expressed in way that can give individuals different feelings about it. People can get varied senses of pleasure or inspiring power or even retrospection of their own lives from the works and only in this way is the value of the works completely realized.（最后点题说的太晦涩了 意思到最后一部分才说出来 直接说the value of art is just to bring ……. 强调lasting value. ）

Why is the value of the works still last and what makes them not being forgotten by society?  The answer remains in enduring public appreciation of them. Unlike popular entertainment which only gives tempory relax and monotonous feeling to people,(加一个定语 有价值的) art is condensed with reflections of the society which is experience by their author and it is expressed to give people infinite feelings about  the world. People in different periods may get different angles to judge it while people with different background may get various imagination from it. It is the works' inborn beauty that attract people to appreciate them and to absorb certain nutritions from them on and on. Take the Beethoven's symphony for example, the lasting value of the music lies in people's non-stop feeling of its beauty which can endow people of different days pleasure.（这段论述举例都没问题 但是总感觉与上下文联系不紧密 而且有些跑题 继续看）

Then what are the roles of the artist and the critic in the fulfillment of the works' value? Can their value last without the artist? Or what is case without the critic?（不管有没有跑题 但这些问句所引导的中心句都不是直面主题------ 谁提供给社会lasting value） Apparently we have to reply that the works of great art will not come into the world without the artist, let alone the lasting value of them; instead, such works can still benefit the society without the critic as long as they are created with the beauty by the artist which can satisfy people's aesthetic tastes, because people themselves all have the ability to interpret the works, though in various ways(太过绝对 如果真是如此 以下举例就要全面 说明原因 而非简爱一个例子 而且还是你自己喜欢的------你喜欢的前提当然是你明白 但要是不喜欢的怎么办？). Take Jane Eyre--the favorate novel of mine--for example, I can get the wonderful depiction of love from it which is accroding to my own comprehension, and people of the past or of the future can also get their own understanding of it, which inevitablely will give them pleasure without the critic's interpretion. The process of the works benefiting their readers is actually the process the artist passing their insight to the readers, during which the critic is just aiding the artist to better the readers' perceiving.
看到这里才觉得不说跑题但落点还是不够明显 先说什么是value 再说为什么一些艺术更够last 再说critic 与artist之间的联系 但是题目所给的中心是critics 与artist 谁是那个key person 一定要有重点

In sum, I am at large approval of the speaker's assertion that during the long river of history, it is the artist who keep producing spiritual food to provide the society things of lasting value which can be directly absorbed by the public, and the critic is merely the aiding facility.

语言上都没问题 就是结构与论述 再写写就好了

hunter101020UID: 2591908

144 it is the artist rather than critic,” who gives society something of lasting value.’
“a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels films music paintings .etc/.
According to this issue ,it seems to be reasonable that artists who make tremendous efforts in creation gives us lasting value .But closely scrutiny of this issue ,I think the function of critics which are also very vital in our social lives can not be ignored or covered.

1 Obviously , artists bring our society lots of lasting values .With the dull routine pace of everyday lives ,it seems to be more and more difficult for common people to notice the deep feeling from their heart and potential beauty of everything surrounded. However , artists, with their  profound insight and outstanding creation, can always capture the touching moment , scene or story and combined with their own artistic ability to show off to the public .In that ,publics can get a chance to shared the beautiful moment with their artists and earn an inspiration to find beauty of their everyday lives. Such as the famous piece <Blue  Danude waltz > written by Johan Strauss ,even if you have never been to there ,just listen to this music ,you can be brought into the state of that wonderful river. And the famous painting <Mono Lisa smile>, It always contains a mysterious and fascinating appealing to the world .Moreover some art works mean to show the dark side of society in order to realize people the pains ,negative parts of world .These kind of works not only inspire the deep feeling of people’s mental state but also influence their daily lives. Such as Mark Twin’s works  which full of ironic and humor are trying to rouse the people’s attention of the arbitrary and dark side of society.
2 At the same time, we can not ignore the critical function of critics. Critics are quite logical and objective in evaluating the value of artistic works .From one side ,artist’s mind and idea are often beyond their temporary and are  not understood by common people .It needs the critics to use their major knowledge to explain or show the potential meaning of works .From another aspect ,because of their genius and talents ,artist are often working alone in their field and are not understood by others. Sometimes critics use their specific ability in evaluation of art to communicate with artist and provide them feedbacks to improve the quality of their works. Another fact in that  famous artist’s works are often drawn enormous popularity without any scrutiny .In that time critics plays a role not only offer artists inspiration but help them figure out their insufficient points .Such as Frank Ghery ,a famous architect of Neo modernism. Because of his fame and weird techniques of design .His work are always put to be the direction of van guard design. But a objective critics of architecture in A+U magazine often write critics of Ghery’s building to point out the negative point and unreasonable parts. These suggestion rose great attention of Ghery. Apparently Ghery adopted the author’s opinion and make changed in further works.   
3Thus ,we should realize that from different perspective the lasting value contains different meaning. If we define the lasting value as arising good will of social life and admiring beauty and deep feeling of human self ,definitely ,artists play a crucial role .But ,If we define lasting value as filtering out the worth while things and provide social members with a objective perspective of skepticism and a proper way to admire good things ,critics obviously bring us more lasting value . From that we can see that either artists or critics are indispensable to our society.
In sum artists provide society lasting value for its tremendous function in arising people’s good will of common life and bring them beauty ;and critics are also indispensable and leave us lasting value from another perspective .We should not ignore either side of their efforts.

这篇文章我感觉展开的不大好 抑或是我的角度选的不好 大家猛拍

ningning86UID: 2518206

我改了134#， 而137#我的作文貌似还没有人修改，不要漏了哈。

hunter101020UID: 2591908

144# ningning86
来了！
17. There are two types of laws:just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws.
Does every individual has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust ones? I find this allegation to be specious. It wrongly suggests that laws can be devided into two types: just and unjust. In contrast, there are not such evaluation standerds for the laws.
To begin with, there are no such standerds to objectedly measure whether laws are just and unjust. Whether a law is just is mesured by （differrent）people, and people are not objective(人不是客观的与法律是不是客观的中间少逻辑虽然从你的文章看人决定法律但是否可以见自己的主观性加之于法律不一定可以说由于个体不同价值观角度不同对于同一法律不一定有统一认知). Some may think the law which is good for them are just, while the law against their goods are unjust. An example in case is that if we pass a law for increaing welfare for retired old people, the retired ones will be diligent, while companys may think it is unjust.Expect benefits, culture and ethics will also impact the people`s judgement, such as the law for artificial abortion, while someone think it is good for the unprepared mother , some others think it kills the life. And in some countrys, it allows one man married with two or three different women, which is accroding to the customs and cuture of their own, although others may think it it unequal for women. （举例很好前面论证时就对应地说由于经济道德文化风俗个人价值观的不同法律的公正与否对不同人来说是不一样的）
In addition,（我一般把in addtion放在倒数第二段看作是补的开头） for the very function of law is to bring stability and order to the group of peple （that the laws are enforced upon不要）, the law should be obeyed equally among the population,（unless 应该是no matter 吧。。不确定） it is just or unjust. If the soldier did not obey the disciplies in war, you can imagine what a mass the armed forces would be. Just like this case（不能随便类比不是同一情况命令与法律怎么能等同呢）, if somebody obey laws and somebody do not, our society would be a mass without any order. Laws must be compulsory, without it laws can not have its funciton, and our society can not survive.
However, besides compulsory, laws should also be adaptable and flexible in certain situations, places and times. （论述一下为什么假设论证什么的）Take United States as an example, they have different laws in different states. Although the written rules of law must be fixed and seldom changed, the people that enforce the laws, as well as those who judge those who break the laws, have responsibily to see whether justive is done. Moreover, things rarely remian the same over an extended period of time, that is to say, what is true in ten years ago maybe faulse today, take the human cloning for example, it is unbelievalbe five years ago, yet it is accepted by some countrys conditionally now.角度上没什么问题但每段主题句表达上不直白 有的因果论述缺乏逻辑举例一定要典型
In sum, the speaker fails to recognize that theare are no such objective standerds for indiivduals to judge whether laws are just or unjust and laws should be complusory which allows nobody disobey it though personally you think it is unequal. In the final analysis, we should obey rules whether you think the laws are right or wrong.

ningning86UID: 2518206

143# hunter101020

144 it is the artist rather than critic,” who gives society something of lasting value.’
“a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels films music paintings .etc/.

According to this issue ,it seems to be reasonable that artists who make tremendous efforts in creation gives us lasting value .But closely scrutiny of this issue ,I think the function of critics which are also very vital in our social lives can not be ignored or covered up(cover up 才是掩盖的意思).

1 Obviously , artists bring our society lots of lasting values .With the dull routine pace of everyday lives ,it seems to be more and more difficult for common people to notice the deep feeling from their heart and potential beauty of everything surrounded. However , artists, with their  profound insight and outstanding creation, can always capture the touching moment , scene or story and combined with their own artistic ability to show off to the public .In that ,publics can get a chance to shared the beautiful moment with their artists and earn an inspiration to find beauty of their everyday lives. Such as the famous piece Blue  Danude waltz（英文中没有《》，书名应该首字母大写，用斜体或者下滑线，不过咱考试时候没有斜体和下滑线功能，干脆大写得了。） written by Johan Strauss ,even if you have never been to there ,just listen to this music ,you can be brought into the state of that wonderful river. And the famous painting Mono Lisa smile, It always contains a mysterious and fascinating appealing to the world .Moreover some art works mean to show the dark side of society in order to realize people the pains ,negative parts of world .These kind of works not only inspire the deep feeling of people’s mental state but also influence their daily lives. Such as Mark Twin’s（马克吐温Make Tuwen） works  which full of ironic and humor are trying to rouse the people’s attention of the arbitrary and dark side of society.
2 At the same time, we can not ignore the critical function of critics. Critics are quite logical and objective in evaluating the value of artistic works .From one side ,artist’s mind and idea are often beyond their temporary and are  not understood by common people .It needs the critics to use their major knowledge to explain or show the potential meaning of works .From another aspect ,because of their genius and talents ,artist are often working alone in their field and are not understood by others. Sometimes critics use their specific ability in evaluation of art to communicate with artist and provide them feedbacks to improve the quality of their works. Another fact in that  famous artist’s works are often drawn enormous popularity without any scrutiny .In that time critics plays a role not only offer artists inspiration but help them figure out their insufficient points .Such as Frank Ghery ,a famous architect of Neo modernism. Because of his fame and weird techniques of design（怪异的？unique design吧。） .His work are always put to be the direction of van guard design. But a objective critics of architecture in A+U magazine(这是什么杂志？) often write critics of Ghery’s building to point out the negative point（去掉point） and unreasonable parts. These suggestion rose great attention of Ghery. Apparently Ghery adopted the author’s opinion and make changed in further works.   
3Thus ,we should realize that from different perspective the lasting value contains different meaning. If we define the lasting value as arising good will of social life and admiring beauty and deep feeling of human self ,definitely ,artists play a crucial role .But ,If we define lasting value as filtering out the worth while things and provide social members with a objective perspective of skepticism and a proper way to admire good things ,critics obviously bring us more lasting value . From that we can see that either artists or critics are indispensable to our society.

In sum artists provide society lasting value for its tremendous function in arising people’s good will of common life and bring them beauty ;and critics are also indispensable and leave us lasting value from another perspective .We should not ignore either side of their efforts.

跟我列的提纲类似，我觉得角度没有什么问题，我第三点不是按定义区分，而是说二者相辅相成，没有好的作品，评论家就没有存在价值了；没有好的评论家，好的作品会被埋没。
你举例充分，分析的也很细致。

ningning86UID: 2518206

my composition

41.Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.

提纲
1.让步：有作用
2．Disadvantige: 伪科学迷惑人, 对个人、社会均不利
3．发展真正的科学去替代伪科学。

Do nonmainstream areas of inqury play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs? Although I agree that the nonmainstream areas such as astrology has some positive effect to the development of science and society, the statement fails to account for the significant negative impact that these nonmainstream areas had on the modern world.

I agree with the statement insofar as some nonmainstream things do help the improvement of the science. In acient time, people has so little knowledge to explain the nature, they has created the alchemy to make some medicine that can keep an individual live forever. Although it is just an imagination and good wishes of ancient people, alchemy do give birth to the modern Chemistry. Such is the case that astrology is the origenation of Astronomy. These nonmainstream theories are mainly original explanations of the nature, which exhibitate the skeptisicim spirits of human being , and give birth to the mordern science. From this perspective, the nonmainstream areas has some benefit effects on science and human society.

However, if we still believe in the nonmainstream pseudoscience now,  it will has palpable and profound harmful results for both individuals and our society. At the personal level, it destories people`s hope and positive attitutes towards live. Take the fortune-telling for an example, it make one can not think about his situation objectively and cause they make fause decisions. When fortune-teller says you will be success when you are old, then young people believed in fortune-teller may waste time and make no efforts. At the social level, the belivel of myths drawoff people from chasing truth. If the government are not mastered by church, maybe Galile, the one who first say the earch is not the center and the earth is a ball, would not have been killed by sanbenito and we would have known that the trueth earlier.

These nonmainstream areas has no ways to test whether their theories are true or false and never has any attempts to do experiments to demonstrate their assumption, so  why people still believe in them? That is because there are still dramatical questions we can not explianed by modern sciense, so people try to guess the reasons from their experience or imagination, and sometimes they get the right assumptions. In fact, guess or imagination are the origination of science, but any theory can only be accepted as science after it is researched by experiments and supported by facts. So we should find the right thougth inside the nonmainstream areas and study it by mordern scientific methods, to make these naive guess for the nature become more logical and objective, to find the truth behind the phenomenon.

In sum, although the nonmainstream areas, such as astronomy, indeed has some benefit influences on mordern science and society, believe in it is harmful for both the individual and the society. What we should do is try to find the truth behind these original thoughts.

hunter101020UID: 2591908

146# ningning86
但是无觉得这么写不够到位 有些肤浅
我是就其他题目相比而言 有啥好想法没？

ningning86UID: 2518206

to hunter同学
实际上，偶就两个思路。
1。正反补，如136#帮你改的那篇以及这片
2。并列，分领域。

shelley111UID: 2622054

这是hunter的马甲

120 so much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living the present .

Does history lend little guidance to our daily lives under such a rapid social trends ?According to this issue ,it seems to be reasonable to agree this assertion. However, from a deeper perspective ,I concede that history has still lots of utility in guiding our lives and society.

1 Admittedly, with the increasing pace of social trends, there are more and more new complex situations which never happen before. The social development depending on technology improvement has not only changed our living condition, but also influence our moral and ethics standards. The new inventions such as nuclear energy has indeed brought us lots of benefit, at the same time, however ,as the enormous power it contains ,nuclear weapon is threatening human being in a case which history cannot provide any reference to us. From mental aspect, Some inventions also brought us with moral and ethics problems .The research of colon techniques is aim to cultivate new organs to cure patients. But ,as an insane scientist claimed his intention of adopting it on humans body ,fundamental ethics are challenged .Our faith and traditional moral standards has never met so tough problem in history .In that case ,we cannot turn to history for help .

2However,we still should not ignore the great importance of study history. As history is the road map of human’s thoughts and activities, looking back to the past can help us find out the process and key points of social development .And it is indeed an effective way for people to gain inspiration. (such as sun zi bing fa .which is written as an instruction of battle stragedy. But in modern time it is also adopted in business field and considered as bible of business man ). Moreover, those painful lessons recorded in history can also prove to be an effective warning to prevent social people from retracing the same fault. After the tragic disaster of twice world in last century ,every countries has realize the importance of peace and harmony ,although there are still some districts in a state of chaos , the mainstream of whole world is peaceful and benefiting for each other; the self locked and corrupt government of Qing dynasty has clearly realized Chinese government in nowadays the importance of cooperation and communication between nations. Apparently the goodwill of cooperation with other countries in various fields has evidently brought Chinese government lots of benefits.

3 Although ,as what we mentioned above , some of the new and complex problems happened in modern society are what we never met before, in nature, they just as every single steps of history, are still identical with the historical regularity. Closely scrutiny of history can offer us a broad view to recognize those new situations and conduce us in finding a right way to solution. For a striking example ,we need look no further than economy crisis in the present days. As the crisis broke out , American government immediately announce various economic plans in aim to foster the development of economy ,for their experience of Depression which has told government that at some critical juncture government should take action rather than let market free as usual .

In addition, learning history does not mean closely take steps of history without any changes. Although as what we mention above , history can lend inspiration to us , we should adjust our action adaptively and adopt a proper way to face our daily lives according to the new situation.In education field ,for example ,it is indeed the case that the knowledge  inculcated into students are accumulated by our ancestor during a long time, but according to the improvement of techniques we should add something close to modern time in order to make students take pace of social trends.

In sum, in some new and complex cases, history cannot provide us guidance directly; but if we find ways from a historical perspective and realize the potential relationship between nowadays and past time ,history can play a role as catalyst in boost our inspiration. At the time, we should also realize overemphasize the function of history and ignore the necessary changes adaptive to modern time will prove to be detrimental to our society.

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这是hunter的马甲 120 so much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living the present . Does history lend little guidance to our daily lives under such a rapid social trends ?According to this issue ,it seems to be reasonable to agree this assertion. However, from a deeper perspective ,I concede that history has still lots of utility in guiding our lives and society. 1 Admittedly, with the increasing pace of social trends, there are more and more new complex situations which never happen before. The social development depending on technology improvement has not only changed our living condition, but also influence(d,我觉得前面的has也去掉会通顺点) our moral and ethics standards (ethics是伦理学改为ethic). The new inventions such as nuclear energy has indeed brought us lots of benefit, at the same time, however ,as (with) the enormous power it contains ,nuclear weapon is threatening human being in a case which history cannot provide any reference(s) to us. From mental aspect, Some inventions also brought us with moral and ethics problems . (这里加个连接词吧，For example,)The research of colon techniques is(去掉is 后面改为aims) aim to cultivate new organs to cure patients (把“本来”的意思体现出来，加个in the first place). But(However...) ,as an insane scientist claimed his intention of adopting it on humans(去掉s吧) body ,fundamental ethics are challenged .Our faith and traditional moral standards has(have) never met so tough problem(s) in history .In that case (这种表达不完整意义的短句还是并到前面去比较好吧，比如", in which case"),we cannot turn to history for help . 2However,we still (可直接写成：Still, we) should not ignore the great importance of study(studying) history. As history is the road map of human’s thoughts and activities, looking back to the past (衔接有问题，可改成 As the road map of human's thoughts and activities, history) can help us find out the process and key points of social development .And it is indeed an effective way for people to gain inspiration. (括号的语气感觉特别弱，如果要用作释义，用破折号比括号强吧) (such as sun zi bing fa .which is written as an instruction of battle stragedy. But (but这样用不对也不好，连同前面句号改成while) in modern time(s) it is also adopted in (applied to) business field and considered as bible of business man ). Moreover, those painful lessons recorded in history can(用prove的话就不要用can啦) also prove to be an effective warning to prevent social people from retracing the same fault. After the tragic disaster of twice world (囧，World War II 吧) in last century ,every countries(country) has realize(d) the importance of peace and harmony ,although there are still some districts in a state of chaos(太怪了。。。although some districts are still in a state of chaos) , the mainstream of whole world is peaceful and benefiting for each other (这样用不对，直接peace and harmony，而且这个长句有典型语病，一个although起了两个作用，如果一定要说世界主题是和平这句就从前面although那里断开，独立为新句。); the self locked and corrupt(corrupted or rotten) government of Qing dynasty has clearly realized(realize 哪有这样用的啊，reminded吧) Chinese government in nowadays the importance of (international) cooperation and communication between nations. Apparently (这句如果不是对该段的总结，就并到前面去，加个and： , and apparently) the goodwill of cooperation with other countries in various fields has evidently brought Chinese government lots of benefits. 3 Although (这个词用得真不好啊，改为Even if),as what we mentioned above , some of the new and complex problems happened in modern society are what (改为problems) we never met before, in nature, they just as every single steps of history, are still identical with the historical regularity (这句话太囧了，第一眼还没看懂，改为：still, as every single step of history, they are in nature identical with the history law(比regularity好点吧)). Closely(Close) scrutiny of history can offer us a broad view to recognize those new situations and conduce(非及物动词，后面全部改为conduce to a right solution) us in finding a right way to(去掉) solution. For a striking example ,we need look no further than economy crisis in the present days. As the crisis broke out , American government immediately announce various economic plans in aim(order) to foster the development of economy ,for(for后面接句子啊，改为with) their experience of Depression which has told government that at some critical juncture government should take action rather than let market free as usual(囧，let改为keep) . In addition, learning history does not mean closely take(take identical) steps of history without any changes. Although as what we mention above , history can lend inspiration to us , we should adjust our action adaptively and adopt a proper way(重复且表达得不好，去掉) to face difficulties in our daily lives according to(brought by) the new situation.In education field ,for example ,it is indeed the case that the knowledge  inculcated into students are accumulated by our ancestor(s) during a (period of) long time, but according to the improvement of techniques we should add something close to modern time in order to make students take pace of social trends (整句改为but accordingly something new of the advance technology and of modern times should be added to make students take pace of social trends.). In sum, in some new and complex cases, history cannot provide us guidance(guide us) directly; but if we find ways from(turn to) a historical perspective and (try to) realize the potential relationship between nowadays and past time (present and past),history can play a role as (the) catalyst in boost(ing) our inspiration. At the (same) time, we should also realize(be ware that) overemphasize(ing) the function of history and ignore(ing) the necessary changes adaptive(in adapting) to(去掉) modern time(s) will prove to be detrimental to our society. 框架好，思路好，论证充足，但最后一段最后一句这个补充是不是应该稍微解释一下？用个简单的for+原因也好，直接突兀地指出来，还用prove to be觉得还不如不写。 语言上就很不能称赞了，可能是限了时把，语法错误太多了，而且很多个句子都不达意，句子很混乱，用词也欠考虑，作者可以在语言上再琢磨琢磨，我改的可能也不达意。。。呵呵