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Issue130 How children are socialized today determined the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.

(我的神啊,这是我ISSUE写到现在最长最自由的一篇,虽然没有很高深的词汇。。。但是,我突然发现,这样写ISSUE是最开心的~~~

This issue is about the heated topic which is discussed in our daily lives: How to raise children? Although, I really agree something contained on the words of the author, but I think the very kindhearted man or woman (maybe a parent) one-sidedly considers the issue. So, I will give my thoughts about the issue below.

Children are always regarded as the hope of the national future and are aggressively focused on by the expecting people who think the children even determine the direction of social development. When I was a child, my teacher and my parents always said:” You should do this and must not do that, or you will be lose you position of the class.” or said something like that “you are the sunlight of the morning”. And I felt scared and more tense the time I heard these words from them, since at that time I thought if I cannot do the work as well as they asked me to do, I would be the criminal who deserve the punishment of the history. After all, the children should have to shoulder some psychological burden when they was young and the children have to involve themselves in the socialized affairs to show there poor self-independence to the adults.

Different child has different characteristics. We cannot force those who do not so daring to show themselves to the world immediately. It is commendable for those adults who always encourage the children to express their feelings and communicate with their peers. However, “how children are socialized today” cannot be the standard to measure the promising power of the children. There are great number of scientists who were not the shinning and social children when they were young but actually made gorgeous contributions to the society such as Newton who was normal and silent when he was very young. The level of children’s socializing determines nothing but the varied characteristics of them. The destiny of society relies not only on the behavior of the children, but also the actions that the adults take. And it is the ignorance of the adults who only think about the tomorrow of the society but neglect the importance of today.

As adults today, I appeal that we should not do the same things as what our fathers did. We should be more generous to choose the appreciate ways of raising the children. The author is afraid that we are not capable to raise the children well, but I think that the capability of raising children is not natural born, we just do what we can do and follow the experience of our parents. Most important is that we should cultivate them as a person who have the mercy on the world, and leave alone the ancient idea that cultivating them as a person who would make merits for themselves and call that merits the accomplishment of the society.(时间到了) We should take the five factors into consideration: the children’s ability of study, the children’s capacity of development, the children’s endurance and so forth. However, all these factor should be subordinate to the ability of catching the pure happiness, because of the social tendency that the living human beings overemphasize the individual goal and make themselves tired as the animals which are preying on the innocent and weak.

When we were young, we anticipated a person who can respect us and let us grow up naturally and happily, however, this was always not the case. For that reason, we should give the children space to make them cultivate themselves and socialize themselves freely.
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This issue is about the heated topic which is discussed in our daily lives: How to raise children? Although, I really agree something contained on the words of the author, but I think the very kindhearted man or woman (maybe a parent) one-sidedly considers the issue. So, I will give my thoughts about the issue below.

Children are always regarded as the hope of the national future and are aggressively focused on by the expecting people who think the children even determine the direction of social development. When I was a child, my teacher and my parents always said:” You should do this and must not do that, or you will be lose you position of the class.” or said something like that “you are the sunlight of the morning”. And I felt scared and more tense the time I heard these words from them, since at that time I thought if I cannot do the work as well as they asked me to do(expected), I would be the criminal who deserve the punishment of the history. After all, the children should have to shoulder some psychological burden when they was young and the children have to involve themselves in the socialized affairs to show there poor self-independence to the adults.(从自身谈现状是成人给孩子的压力太大)

Different child has different characteristics. We cannot force those who do not so daring to show themselves to the world immediately. It is commendable for those adults who always encourage the children to express their feelings and communicate with their peers. However, “how children are socialized today” cannot be the standard to measure the promising power of the children. There are great number of scientists who were not the shinning and social children when they were young but actually made gorgeous contributions to the society such as Newton who was normal and silent when he was very young. The level of children’s socializing determines nothing but the varied characteristics of them. The destiny of society relies not only on the behavior of the children, but also the actions that the adults take. And it is the ignorance of the adults who only think about the tomorrow of the society but neglect the importance of today.(但未来并不完全由孩子的社会化决定,太过注重孩子的教育反而忽视了成人能为社会做什么)

As adults today, I appeal that we should not do the same things as what our fathers did. We should be more generous to choose the appreciate ways of raising the children. The author is afraid that we are not capable to raise the children well, but I think that the capability of raising children is not natural born, we just do what we can do and follow the experience of our parents. Most important is that we should cultivate them as a person who have the mercy on the world, and leave alone the ancient idea that cultivating them as a person who would make merits for themselves and call that merits the accomplishment of the society.(时间到了) We should take the five factors into consideration: the children’s ability of study, the children’s capacity of development, the children’s endurance and so forth. However, all these factor should be subordinate to the ability of catching the pure happiness, because of the social tendency that the living human beings overemphasize the individual goal and make themselves tired as the animals which are preying on the innocent and weak.(提出个人的教育观点)

When we were young, we anticipated a person who can respect us and let us grow up naturally and happily, however, this was always not the case. For that reason, we should give the children space to make them cultivate themselves and socialize themselves freely.(呼吁更友好的教育方式)

一点都不模式,LZ写得爽,我看得也很爽啊!!哈哈,是个不小的新尝试!~~

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