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Agree or disagree, technology causes children show less creative than they were in the past

It cannot be denied that technology causes children show less creativity than they did in the past. As time goes on, this phenomenon is more and more widespread.
Most obviously is the problem of the computer. If children are forbidden using computers in their spare time, they almost don’t know what else they can do. Computers take up around 90% of their minds. However, children can think up all kinds of games to kill the time in the past. Or they would just keep reading books and coming across all kinds of questions, trying their best to find out the answers. At last, they may come up with really new ideas, and then create new inventions.
Technology steals children’s right to use their minds.
With washing machines, it’s a waste of time for children to think how they can help their mothers wash clothes easily. With TV sets, children just need to sit in front of the TV, and they can have fun. By using Google, the young hardly need their minds. They can get what they want from the Internet.
In the past, without telephone, mobile phone, how can two good friends and neighbors talk with each other after both going back to their own houses? They made a child-made phone. By using two plastic milk bottles and one string, they have more time to chat. It’s simple, but helpful.
We can draw a conclusion from these facts that technology do help improve our lives. At the other hand, it causes children show less creativity than they did in the past.

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It cannot be denied that the technology causes children show less creativity than they did in the past. As time goes on, this phenomenon is more and more widespread.
Most obviously （我觉得改成thing which is most obviously好一些？）is the problem of the computer. If （加some因为不是所有的）children are forbidden using computers in their spare time, they almost don’t 不能用缩写know what else they can do. Computers take up around 90% of their minds. However, children can think up all kinds of games to kill the time in the past. Or they would just keep reading books and coming across all kinds of questions, trying their best to find out the answers. At last, they may come up with really new ideas, and then create new inventions.4 M6 R+ t3 A- G  L7 Y
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With washing machines, it’s a waste of time for children to think how they can help their mothers wash clothes easily. With TV sets, children just need to sit in front of the TV, and they can have fun. By using Google, the young hardly need their minds. They can get what they want from the Internet.
In the past, without telephone, mobile phone, how can two good friends and neighbors talk with each other after both going back to their own houses? They made a child-made phone. By using two plastic milk bottles and one string, they have more time to chat. It’s simple, but helpful.我觉得这个例子没有意义。。好像是说technology好的？We can draw a conclusion from these facts that technology do help improve our lives. At the other hand, it causes children show less creativity than they did in the past.
我觉得有点跑题了，根本不用说technology improves our lives。呵呵，总的来说还是不错的。可以跟我qq探讨啊。。。