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jackie1983UID: 2484456

[fly]Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past[/fly].


Do technology cause children show less creative than before? Some people may say yes to this question, however, they neglect the complexity of the question above. In my opinion, technology is a double-edge sward and when it is used properly, it can make children more creative.


Admittedly, technology has some negative effects if it is used improperly. Firstly, children may become too dependent on technology and be lazy to think on their own. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, a lot of work can be done by technology which may make children rely on technology. For instance, with the invent of calculator, children may calculate by simply pressing a few buttons on the calculator, and as time goes by, these children may forget the basic principles of calculating, and of course, this is not good for the children. Secondly, all kinds of game machines have been created, which may attract children and children may waste lots of precious time playing games. As we know, this is also bad for the creation of our children. Thus, we can see that technology can cause some bad effects if used improperly.

However, if technology can be used properly by our children, it can improve the creativity of them. First, technology can save time for our children to study because children can find the information they want more quickly with the help of technology. Let's take the computer as an example, with a computer, children can get lots of information by entering the key word in a website such as "google", and click the "search" button. Second, with the development of technology, children can get lots of experiences which will help to improve their interests and their creativity. For instance, with the development of telescope, nowadays, children can see the universe through the telescope, and such an amazing experience will undeniably help to improve the interests and creativity of our children. In a word, technology can bring about lots of progress which may improve the creativity of our children.

In conclusion, if technology is used properly, it can improve the children's creativity.

lucifaUID: 2590585

Do technology cause children show less creative than before? Some people may say yes to this question, however, they neglect the complexity of the question above. In my opinion, technology is a double-edge sward and when it is used properly, it can make children more creative.(同时指出你所支持的两个方面好点，虽然有些double-edge但是后面只写一个方面，总觉得你是支持技术能够提高小孩的creative)
Admittedly, technology has some negative effects if it is used improperly. Firstly, children may become too dependent on technology and be lazy to think on their own. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, a lot of work can be done by technology which may make children rely on technology. For instance, with the invent of calculator, children may calculate by simply pressing a few buttons on the calculator, and as time goes by, these children may forget the basic principles of calculating, and of course, this is not good for the children(换成in that case, children likely to lose their creative instinct会不会好点？). Secondly, all kinds of game machines have been created, which may attract children and children may waste lots of precious time on playing games.（waste time on doing sth。好像是搭配漏了on） As we know, this is also bad for the creation of our children. Thus, we can see that technology can cause some bad effects if used improperly.
However, if technology can be used properly by our children, it can improve the creativity of them. First, technology can save time for our children to study because children can find the information they want more quickly with the help of technology. Let's take the computer as an example, with a computer, children can get lots of information by entering the key word in a website such as "Google专用名词大写", and click the "search" button. Second, with the development of technology, children can get lots of experiences which will help to improve their interests and their creativity. For instance, with the development of telescope, nowadays, children can see the universe through the telescope, and such an amazing experience will undeniably help to improve the interests and creativity of our children. In a word, technology can bring about lots of progress which may improve the creativity of our children.
In conclusion, if technology is used properly, it can improve the children's creativity.
最后结尾貌似有点偏题吧？你想表达的意思应该是technology可能会给儿童带来creative也可能降低creative。而不要应该是正确的使用技术能够增强儿童的创造力。而且结尾段可以多写点。
一般不建议写折中的文章，容易写得左右不是人。。。（如果你这篇不是折中的文章，那你的开头和第二段的表达方式就要改一下。）352个字，不过开头和结尾可以再多写一点的

jackie1983UID: 2484456

谢谢你的建议！
关于waste我查过了， waste time doing sth是可以的
参考 http://forum.wordreference.com/showthread.php?t=175252
    http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/69312313.html?si=1
  或者你可以在google输个 waste  time，下面会有上百万的提示语是waste time doing sth
欢迎交流指正！

jackie1983UID: 2484456

这是改后的，呵呵
Do technology cause children show less creative than before? Some people may say yes to this question, however, they neglect the complexity of the question above. In my opinion, technology is a double-edge sward which if used improperly, it can make children less creative, but if properly used, it can improve children's creativity.


On the one hand, technology has some negative effects if it is used improperly. Firstly, children may become too dependent on technology and be lazy to think on their own. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, a lot of work can be done by technology which may make children rely on technology. For instance, with the invent of calculator, children may calculate by simply pressing a few buttons on the calculator, and as time goes by, these children may forget the basic principles of calculating, and of course, this is not good for the children. Secondly, all kinds of game machines have been created, which may attract children and children may waste lots of precious time playing games. As we know, this is also bad for the creation of our children. Thus, we can see that technology can cause some bad effects if used improperly.

On the other hand, if technology can be used properly by our children, it can improve the creativity of them. First, technology can save time for our children to study because children can find the information they want more quickly with the help of technology. Let's take the computer as an example, with a computer, children can get lots of information by entering the key word in a website such as "Google", and click the "search" button. Second, with the development of technology, children can get lots of experiences which will help to improve their interests and their creativity. For instance, with the development of telescope, nowadays, children can see the universe through the telescope, and such an amazing experience will undeniably help to improve the interests and creativity of our children. In a word, technology can bring about lots of progress which may improve the creativity of our children.

In conclusion, if technology is used improperly, it can do harm to  the children's creativity but if it is used properly, it can improve children's creation.