【☆09GRE作文冲刺组】圣斗士3月6日作文Argument237

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题目：ARGUMENT237 - The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."
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日期：2009-3-6 11:24:23

In this memo from a local Beauville newspaper, the arguer first cites a successfully developing example of the city of Dilliton. Based on this evidence, the speaker recommends that the Beauville should stimulate economic development by providing tax incentives and other financial inducement that encourage private companies to relocate there. However, this argument has several flaws which make it unconvincing as it stands.

To begin with, this argument bases on the assumption that this policy of reducing corporate tax rate and offering relocation grants and favorable rates has successfully improved the economic of Dillton. Yet, the merely fact that two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton in 18 months and about 300 people are employed say nothing about the achievement of Dilliton. Perhaps during these 18 months, some other companies have been left away; or perhaps most of the employees are part-time jobs and much more people still lack a decent job in Dillton. Also, without comparison with other cities, we cannot justifiably assess this argument. Maybe in the nearby cities, within 18 months, much more than two companies have been moved in.

Even though the new companies and employment improve the economic situation in Dillton, there is no evidence proving that it is the mere policy of reducing tax rate and offering relocation grants that attracted those companies coming. The arguer fails to rule out the possibility that some other factors rather than the policy contributing to this success, such as the sufficient labor pool, wonderful environment, advanced transportation system, or the relatively lower raw material prices. Without considering other possible alternative explanation, the arguer cannot convince us that the policy is the major factor that attracting manufacturing companies.

Granted that the policy really successes in Dillton, the arguer also commits a fallacy of fail analogy in claiming that the Beauville can also stimulate the economic development and hence reduce unemployment simply by coping the policy from Dillton. The speaker overlooks the different backgrounds in the two cities. For example, perhaps the average technique level of unemployment in Beauville is much lower than Dillton; or perhaps the Beavuville's location and traffic situation are much inferior to Dillton; or perhaps the tax rate in Beauville is already low even much lower than Dillton but still no companies intending to move in. In short, without analyzing the actually reasons why Beauville's economic is bad, the author cannot justify the conclusion that the new policy will bring the same result to Beauville.

To sum up, to bolster this argument, the author must provide sufficient evidence proving that the success of Billton is due to the new policy, and the new companies indeed improve the economic in that city. To better assess this argument, I also need to know more information of Beavuville and find out the difference between the two cities.

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很不错啦！几乎没什么语言上的错误……逻辑也是层层推进的……不错不错！
perhaps部分的可能假设论证比较丰富……
我认为还有个逻辑错误就是“the fast way” 他没有进行说明……为什么是最快的！当然这不是比较严重的缺陷！
还有……每段开头是否加上逻辑连接词更好呢？！