【☆09GRE作文冲刺组☆】03.06作业--xiaoyao36

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TOPIC: ISSUE70 - "In any profession-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."
WORDS: 512 (710)
TIME: 00:55:00
DATE: 2009/3/6 23:42:43

The author assumes that if to achieve success in a certain field, the most promising way is to change the leader after five years. I concede that the regular reappointment of chief positions will benefit the development in the long-run. However, this cannot be applied to all the cases, especially some areas that require stable and extraordinarily intelligent leadership.

From my point of view, revitalization of the leadership will favor the enterprise to a great extent, through not only stimulating the working passion of the leaders but also that of the general members as a whole. From the leader's side, on one hand, if supposed to be in charge for only a certain period, one is likely to work more diligently to achieve the most that he can to prove his personal abilities and realize his personal value at this certain position. He needs to value the time, hence improving efficiency to the possibly great extent. If not, he will lose the precious opportunity to make a difference. From the younger generation's standpoint, this reappointment system will considerably encourage the working morale and motivate them to work for their own bright future at the same time, which favors the improvement of general efficiency. General McArthur once said (and I paraphrased):'A soldier who does not want to be a general is not a good one', which has strongly supported the profound influence of the will to be a leader exerts to the profession. In this sense, the revitalization will improve the efficiency of the whole enterprise, from the authorities to the common members, thus fastening the pace to achieve fulfillment.

More importantly, such regular reelection in the chief positions will guarantees the advancing pace by restraining the potential abuse of one's authority and conquer the limitation of one's own ability, thus making full use of the social resources available for us. Common sense inform us that the greedy nature of human may likely lead to corruption, under the circumstance that there is no control of his absolute power. Without the possibility of being replaced and effective supervision, the leaders are highly possible to put their own interests in the first place and fulfill his own desire instead of the interests of the whole. Hence, great loss of social resources is wasted. Furthermore, one's intelligence is limited to make the right decision all the time by himself. History is replete with such examples. To illustrate this point, we need to look no further than the great leader Chairman Mao in Chinese history. He used to be a gorgeous leader with great personal charm and brilliant intelligence. But as the leadership period extended together with the growing ages, he commit a grave mistake to sign the announcement of the Great Institutional revolution, which advocates the teenagers to drop out of school and get engaged into manufacturing practice and political revise battle. This campaign has held back the social and economic development of China for ten years. From this point, we should avoid such mistakes by reappointing new leaders regularly.

However, some areas require the long stable leadership, which represents the combination of both the rich experience and the wide knowledge, rather than simply new life to that profession. To develop a better understanding of this point, we can just refer to the American Judicial System. The American Chief Justice is appointed for life, whose position is so selected and will not be easily changed during a long period of time. Owing to the case law system in the US, this key position calls for those who are so experienced and well learned as to handle the tough cases which concern the legislation system and even the development of the whole nation. If this position is to be changed after a short period of five years, it is unlikely that these can be another right person equipped with such competence. Thus, some positions cannot be considered so simply.

In general, most of our professions require the freshness of leadership, which will act as a reliable guarantee of the full use of social resources, thus promising the advancing pace towards success. However, we should not simply apply this theory to all the professions, or else it may just block the stable developing pace towards achievements.

newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."
WORDS: 474
TIME: 00:35:00
DATE: 2009/3/6 13:01:10

In this argument, the author draws his conclusion that the Beauville (B) should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements so as to develop economy and reduce the unemployment rate, in that after Dillton (D) has implemented similar policies, there are 2 relocated companies and 300 more people employed. However, after a careful examination of the inferring procedure, the conclusion is not that convincing.

In the first place, the author fails to provide us with sufficient statistics that the economic situation has been developed. It is highly possible that the factories moved to D has not made ends meet hence contribute so little to the improvement of economic situation. Furthermore, the author should consider the side effects that the manufacturing companies may bring together with the potential economic development. Common sense inform us that those manufacturing companies will likely cause serious environmental problems. Thus, the author should not neglect the possibility that the cost for environment restoration may be much higher than the benefits gained from the companies.

Secondly, I would call the author's attempt, to introduce the similar policy in D into the city of B, owing to the inherent differences between the two cities. Perhaps B's transportation system is not that developed as D and is far from the places where contains a lot of rare materials. There is also the possibility that the labor cost and other consuming level is comparatively higher than other cities. If so, granted that the financial inducements are attractive to the company owners, they are not likely to relocate in the city of B.

Additionally, granted that similar policies may stimulate the economic development in D, the author still fails to convince me that the unemployment problem can be solved. The statistics the author offered cannot lay a solid foundation to bolster the assumption that the unemployed citizens in B right cater to the companies' needs. If the unemployed are still pursuing a research position rather than a technician, or they are simply not educated to those fields, the problem cannot be eased as the author expected.

Last but not the least, the author narrowly focuses on the negative way to promote the development of the city. The author should analyses the general characteristics of the B. Perhaps the city of B is a historical city with a lot of precious cultural relics, or famous for its beautiful sceneries. Thus, B may achieve great progress through a series of tourism stimulation policies, thus better solving the problem consequently.

In general, the author poses an opinion that the similar financial inducement strategies as in D can help develop the situation in B. To strengthen the statement, more investigations and further analyses are required. From my point of view, we should express more concern about the characteristics of D and the similarity between the two cities, which will make the statement more persuasive and practical.

ratoUID: 2563435

The author assumes that if to achieve success in a certain field, the most promising way is to change the leader after five years. I concede that the regular reappointment of chief positions will benefit the development in the long-run. However, this cannot be applied to all the cases, especially some areas that require stable and extraordinarily intelligent leadership.

From my point of view, revitalization of the leadership will favor the enterprise to a great extent, through not only stimulating the working passion of the leaders but also that of the general members as a whole.(but also後面是不是有點問題) From the leader's side, on one hand, if supposed to be in charge for only a certain period, one is likely to work more diligently to achieve the most that he can to prove his personal abilities and realize his personal value at this certain position. He needs to value the time, hence improving efficiency to the possibly great extent. If not, he will lose the precious opportunity to make a difference. From the younger generation's standpoint, this reappointment system will considerably encourage the working morale and motivate them to work for their own bright future at the same time, which favors the improvement of general efficiency. General McArthur once said (and I paraphrased):'A soldier who does not want to be a general is not a good one', which has strongly supported the profound influence of the will to be a leader exerts to the profession. In this sense, the revitalization will improve the efficiency of the whole enterprise, from the authorities to the common members, thus fastening the pace to achieve fulfillment.

More importantly, such regular reelection in the chief positions will guarantees the advancing pace by restraining the potential abuse of one's authority and conquer the limitation of one's own ability, thus making full use of the social resources available for us. Common sense inform us that the greedy nature of human may likely lead to corruption, under the circumstance that there is no control of his absolute power. Without the possibility of being replaced and effective supervision, the leaders are highly possible to put their own interests in the first place and fulfill his own desire instead of the interests of the whole. Hence, great loss of social resources is wasted.(loss和waste重複了吧) Furthermore, one's intelligence is limited to make the right decision all the time by himself. History is replete with such examples. To illustrate this point, we need to look no further than the great leader Chairman Mao in Chinese history. He used to be a gorgeous leader with great personal charm and brilliant intelligence. But as the leadership period extended together with the growing ages, he commit a grave mistake to sign the announcement of the Great Institutional revolution, which advocates the teenagers to drop out of school and get engaged into manufacturing practice and political revise battle. This campaign has held back the social and economic development of China for ten years. From this point, we should avoid such mistakes by reappointing new leaders regularly.

However, some areas require the long stable leadership, (個人覺得long蹦得怪怪的)which represents the combination of both the rich experience and the wide knowledge, rather than simply new life to that profession. To develop a better understanding of this point, we can just refer to the American Judicial System. The American Chief Justice is appointed for life, whose position is so selected and will not be easily changed during a long period of time. Owing to the case law system in the US, this key position calls for those who are so experienced and well learned as to handle the tough cases which concern the legislation system and even the development of the whole nation. If this position is to be changed after a short period of five years, it is unlikely that these can be another right person equipped with such competence. Thus, some positions cannot be considered so simply.

In general, most of our professions require the freshness of leadership, which will act as a reliable guarantee of the full use of social resources, thus promising the advancing pace towards success. However, we should not simply apply this theory to all the professions, or else it may just block the stable developing pace towards achievements.


你寫這么多字= =，，512（710）是什麽意思呀
哎呀我真崇拜你,,限時寫出這樣,,我簡直是當範文讀的
你的專業是什麽呀,,練作文多久啦,,幾號考咧

ratoUID: 2563435

In this argument, the author draws his conclusion that the Beauville (B) should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements so as to develop economy and reduce the unemployment rate, in that(這個是怎么回事) after Dillton (D) has implemented similar policies, there are 2 relocated companies and 300 more(個人認為噢,題目沒有提到是more,可能這300人本來就有工作) people employed. However, after a careful examination of the inferring procedure, the conclusion is not that convincing.

In the first place, the author fails to provide us with sufficient statistics that the economic situation has been developed. It is highly possible that the factories moved to D has not made ends meet hence contribute so little to the improvement of economic situation. Furthermore, the author should consider the side effects that the manufacturing companies may bring together with the potential economic development. Common sense inform(s) us that those manufacturing companies will likely cause serious environmental problems. Thus, the author should not neglect the possibility that the cost for environment restoration may be much higher than the benefits gained from the companies.

Secondly, I would call the author's attempt, to introduce the similar policy in D into the city of B, owing to the inherent differences between the two cities.(這句話斷得我看不懂邏輯是什麽) Perhaps B's transportation system is not that developed as D and is far from the places where contains a lot of rare materials. There is also the possibility that the labor cost and other consuming level is comparatively higher than other cities. If so, granted that the financial inducements are attractive to the company owners, they are not likely to relocate in the city of(不要了吧) B.

Additionally, granted(換成accept或者admit什麽的吧,和上一個粘太近了) that similar policies may stimulate the economic development in D, the author still fails to convince me that the unemployment problem can be solved. The statistics the author offered cannot lay a solid foundation to bolster the assumption that the unemployed citizens in B right cater to the companies' needs. If the unemployed are still pursuing a research position rather than a technician, or they are simply not educated to those fields, the problem cannot be eased as the author expected.

Last but not the(正確的組合是沒有the的吧) least, the author narrowly focuses on the negative(看完了這段也沒懂爲什麽是negative啊?) way to promote the development of the city. The author should analyses(美式英文是analyze) the general characteristics of the B. Perhaps the city of B is a historical city with a lot of precious cultural relics, or famous for its beautiful sceneries. Thus, B may achieve great progress through a series of tourism stimulation policies, thus better solving the problem consequently.

In general, the author poses an opinion that the similar financial inducement strategies as in D can help develop the situation in B. To strengthen the statement, more investigations and further analyses(analyzes) are required. From my point of view, we should express more concern about the characteristics of D(你應該想說B吧?根據你的倒數第二段) and the similarity between the two cities, which will make the statement more persuasive and practical.

ratoUID: 2563435

對不起我知道那個in that是什麽了，，都是我才疏學淺

xiaoyao36UID: 2392780

4# rato
嗯，对的对的，应该是I would call the author's attempt, to introduce the similar policy in D into the city of B,into question， owing to the inherent differences between the two cities。
in that的意思是因为啦
嗯，然后我是学生物的，这个应该是我写的第三篇作文吧。开始的时候写了500多有段没写完，后来补上去的所以是现在的样子。我这个看上去好而已啦，之前都是先写好提纲的，所以写的时候就顺手了些。但是考试的时候就惨啦，要现组织思路就不知道怎么样了。我这个月20号在韩国考。你怎么样啦？加油加油啦！！！

xiaoyao36UID: 2392780

4# rato
谢谢你啊！帮我改作文改得这么认真~~

ratoUID: 2563435

不客氣哈

我的超級大敵就是容易走神，，然後時間不夠又很慌

:dizzy:特討厭這作文