PassonChen【同主题写作之ISSUE 119】

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TOPIC: ISSUE119 - "When research priorities are being set for science, education, or any other area, the most important question to consider is: How many people's lives will be improved if the results are successful?"



It is undeniable that researches in various fields have greatly accelerated the improvement of people's lives, as we can see from the history since the Industrial Revolution, when all kinds of techniques were employed to increase production and sales. However, it is far from reasonable to say that the priority of all kinds of researches is to enhance people's lives.
(从工业革命以来，各个领域的研究成果大大促进了生产销售，但因此说一切研究最先都应考虑其能在多大程度上提高人们的生活质量却有失偏颇）

The measure of man's living standards is how much they are spiritually rather than materially satisfied. There are people in poverty who find unfailing happiness and people in wealth who are afflicted by all kinds of troubles. As different people have different life ideals, most researches can do but little, except that they are able to promote material abundance. Compared with people a century ago, people today are enjoying the conveniences of all kinds of goods, equipments and services, which are the result of researches in all kinds of realms such as science, technology, education, economy and so on. As long as people can not form a happy mind, such an abundance will not suffice for their happy life. Some may argue that psychologists, with their discoveries, give advice to people for their mental health, but most people do not need them because not so many of them are mentally ill.
（生活的标准是精神上的满足而非物质上的满足，而这些研究大多除了提供物质满足外，根本不能提供精神满足）

Research, whatever the subject, for the sake of significance, should be dedicated to the pursuit of truth, which treats the nature of man and the world. Ever since the time of ancient Greece, philosophers have been thinking about truth. It is from philosophy that science generated, and because of scientific methods that all researches are possible. I barely see any original intents that are for the betterment of people’s lives when Aristotle did his classifications, when Newton thought over the fall of an apple, when Einstein imagined what would happen if man travelled at light speed. They had no other purposes than pursuing the truth, but as a result, people’s lives are most greatly improved, whether directly or indirectly, by their discoveries.
（无论什么主题的研究，要想具有重大意义，必须用于追求真理）
There are of course practical researches that are intended to improve efficiency in producing, managing, educating and so on, but as any research is a two-edged weapon, which can be equally used to do both good and bad, there’s no precedence of its positive side. Such a situation is likely to happen that during a war, while soldiers are being injured or killed by the inventions which man boasts of, surgeons are treating them with techniques which are the fruit of researches in their own field. In modern times, researchers maybe should pay more attention to the possible destruction rather than the benefits of their researches, given that it’s more difficult to build than to destroy.

（对于实际的研究，则应考虑其负面影响：建设总比破坏来得难）

Admittedly, it is one of the most important applications of researches to improve people's lives, but taking the application for the essence is inconvincible. The progress of people’s lives depends not so much on such researches as on sticking to their own appropriate way of life. What’s more? If we take a closer look at what prevents people from living in peace and without depression, we can find that it is the high pace and fierce competition that are subsequent to the headway in researching.
（承认提高生活质量是研究的重要应用之一，但这不是研究的本质。人的生活质量的提高，更多的依赖于选择一种适于们们自己的生活。更进一步指出：现代社会的高节奏和激剧的竞争也由这些研究成果所致）

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顺便改改我的。谢谢~~
TOPIC: ISSUE119 - "When research priorities are being set for science, education, or any other area, the most important question to consider is: How many people's lives will be improved if the results are successful?"

It is undeniable that researches in various fields have greatly accelerated the improvement of people's lives, as we can see from the history since the Industrial Revolution, when all kinds of techniques were employed to increase production and sales. However, it is far from reasonable to say that the priority of all kinds of researches is to enhance people's lives.
(从工业革命以来，各个领域的研究成果大大促进了生产销售，但因此说一切研究最先都应考虑其能在多大程度上提高人们的生活质量却有失偏颇）

The measure of man's living standards is how much they are spiritually rather than materially satisfied. There are people in poverty who find unfailing happiness and people in wealth who are afflicted by all kinds of troubles.
（例子很好啊）As different people have different life ideals, most researches can do but little, except that they are able to promote material abundance. Compared with people a century ago, people today are enjoying the conveniences of all kinds of goods, equipments and services, which are the result of researches in all kinds of realms such as science, technology, education, economy and so on. As long as people can not form a happy mind, such an abundance will not suffice for their happy life. Some may argue that psychologists, with their discoveries, give advice to people for their mental health, but most people do not need them because not so many of them are mentally ill.
（生活的标准是精神上的满足而非物质上的满足，而这些研究大多除了提供物质满足外，根本不能提供精神满足）【虽然我不支持你的观点，但是我开始清零自己以前的思想，重读你的文章~~】

Research, whatever the subject, for the sake of significance, should be dedicated to the pursuit of truth, which treats the nature of man and the world. Ever since the time of ancient Greece, philosophers have been thinking about truth. It is from philosophy that science generated, and because of scientific methods that all researches are possible. I barely see any original intents that are for the betterment of people’s lives when Aristotle did his classifications, when Newton thought over the fall of an apple, when Einstein imagined what would happen if man travelled at light speed. They had no other purposes than pursuing the truth, but as a result, people’s lives are most greatly improved, whether directly or indirectly, by their discoveries.（无论什么主题的研究，要想具有重大意义，必须用于追求真理）（说理建议增多一点，因为你的观点很独特，所以应该用更严密的理由来说服大家）

There are of course practical researches that are intended to improve efficiency in producing, managing, educating and so on, but as any research is a two-edged weapon, which can be equally used to do both good and bad, there’s no precedence of its positive side. Such a situation is likely to happen that during a war, while soldiers are being injured or killed by the inventions which man boasts of, surgeons are treating them with techniques which are the fruit of researches in their own field. In modern times, researchers maybe should pay more attention to the possible destruction rather than the benefits of their researches, given that it’s more difficult to build than to destroy.

（对于实际的研究，则应考虑其负面影响：建设总比破坏来得难）这段应该加强研究应该关注真理会比较好点吧，不要再发散了～

Admittedly, it is one of the most important applications of researches to improve people's lives, but taking the application for the essence is inconvincible. The progress of people’s lives depends not so much on such researches as on sticking to their own appropriate way of life. What’s more? If we take a closer look at what prevents people from living in peace and without depression, we can find that it is the high pace and fierce competition that are subsequent to the headway in researching.
（承认提高生活质量是研究的重要应用之一，但这不是研究的本质。人的生活质量的提高，更多的依赖于选择一种适于们们自己的生活。更进一步指出：现代社会的高节奏和激剧的竞争也由这些研究成果所致）了，欢迎大家指正～～
因为你开头就说“但因此说一切研究最先都应考虑其能在多大程度上提高人们的生活质量却有失偏颇”，你所指的生活质量的提高大多数是精神上的提高，而研究只能提高物质上的，所以你觉得研究的本质应该是追求真理。但是结尾段却写到了研究带来的后果，好像偏了点题～～而且观点的陈述不够，词汇和句法非常好，看得出功底很好～我很欣赏你看事物独特的角度，有自己的风格，有时间我们ＢＳ下哈～继续努力～

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TOPIC: ISSUE119 - "When research priorities are being set for science, education, or any other area, the most important question to consider is: How many people's lives will be improved if the results are successful?"

It is undeniable that researches in various fields have greatly accelerated the improvement of people's lives, as we can see from the history since the Industrial Revolution, when all kinds of techniques were employed to increase production and sales. However, it is far from reasonable to say that the priority of all kinds of researches is to enhance people's lives.开头段简洁明了，观点提出也很快，蛮好～

The measure of man's living standards is how much they are spiritually rather than materially satisfied. （学习ing~）There are people in poverty who find unfailing happiness and people in wealth who are afflicted by all kinds of troubles. As different people have different life ideals, most researches can do but little, except that they are able to promote material abundance. （不同意P的这个观点，考古学研究，历史研究，甚至哲学的研究，不都是带给人们mentally satisfaction~即便是发明创造，也在改造物质世界的同时给了人们极大的成就感和满足感啊。。。）Compared with people a century ago, people today are enjoying the conveniences of all kinds of goods, equipments and services, which are the result of researches in all kinds of realms such as science, technology, education, economy and so on. As long as people can not form a happy mind, such an abundance will not suffice for their happy life. Some may argue that psychologists, with their discoveries, give advice to people for their mental health, but most people do not need them because not so many of them are mentally ill.（偶觉得P很主观的说。）如果P坚持要这样写下去，可能要找一些例子好好支撑一下你的观点，至少目前不能说服我。

Research, whatever the subject, for the sake of significance, should be dedicated to the pursuit of truth, which treats the nature of man and the world. Ever since the time of ancient Greece, philosophers have been thinking about truth. It is from philosophy that science generated, and because of scientific methods that all researches are possible. I barely see any original intents that are for the betterment of people’s lives when Aristotle did his classifications, when Newton thought over the fall of an apple, when Einstein imagined what would happen if man travelled at light speed. They had no other purposes than pursuing the truth, but as a result, people’s lives are most greatly improved, whether directly or indirectly, by their discoveries.（呃。。。觉得从这里开始越跑越远了。。。）

There are of course practical researches that are intended to improve efficiency in producing, managing, educating and so on, but as any research is a two-edged weapon, which can be equally used to do both good and bad, there’s no precedence of its positive side. Such a situation is likely to happen that during a war, while soldiers are being injured or killed by the inventions which man boasts of, surgeons are treating them with techniques which are the fruit of researches in their own field. In modern times, researchers maybe should pay more attention to the possible destruction rather than the benefits of their researches, given that it’s more difficult to build than to destroy.（呃，感觉P这里还没有写完哇，结束得很突然得说，关于你的这个观点，有适合的例子么？）

Admittedly, it is one of the most important applications of researches to improve people's lives, but taking the application for the essence is inconvincible. The progress of people’s lives depends not so much on such researches as on sticking to their own appropriate way of life. What’s more? If we take a closer look at what prevents people from living in peace and without depression, we can find that it is the high pace and fierce competition that are subsequent to the headway in researching.

呃。。。那个，Passon哇，我太弱小了，我觉着你的语言没有啥问题了，在我看来已经很强大了，只有膜拜的份。只是这个观点貌似很偏激哇。这个，你的观点是：research不应该把提高人们的生活水平作为其内在？偶觉着跟题目没有啥联系呢。。。唉。。。我以为题目重点在于讨论科学研究的目的，故priority和how may应该是两个关键词，在LZ的文中完全没有体现呢。题目说，面对各种各样的研究，我们应该让谁获得priority呢？出题者认为应该是以到底有多少人的生活得到了提高作为衡量标准。你当然可以说，不，这个人们的生活水平孰高孰低这个评判方法太物质了，这个点都不符合科学研究的真谛，但是注意昂，priority的问题，你至少该给出你的衡量标准么。。。再说，人们的生活水平提高也并非就是物质上的提高，你可以把这个lives定义成物质精神的双提高。。。总得说来，我觉得有点跑题，另外分论点的论证不甚强，不足以说服我。
不好意思哈，如果说错的话多包涵～我只是是小菜鸟。。。

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明天改你的。

PassonChenUID: 2614331

明在改你的。批得好啊。这篇文章真的很失败，我自己也是这么认为的。
我准备在他佃改一下这篇文章。

PassonChenUID: 2614331

决定借鉴你的先说理，把理说透，再例证的模式。把文章重写。 4# tracywlz

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你的文采真的很不错。我同学瞟了下说这人功底有蛮强啊。。你得学学。。于是我再次来请教～～呵呵

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Itis undeniable that researches in various fields have greatlyaccelerated the improvement of people's lives, as we can see from thehistory since the Industrial Revolution, when all kinds of techniqueswere employed to increase production and sales. However, it is far fromreasonable to say that the priority of all kinds of researches is toenhance people's lives.
(从工业革命以来，各个领域的研究成果大大促进了生产销售，但因此说一切研究最先都应考虑其能在多大程度上提高人们的生活质量却有失偏颇）

The measure of man's living standards is how much they are spirituallyrather than materially satisfied. There are people in poverty who findunfailing happiness and people in wealth who are afflicted by all kindsof troubles. As different people have different life ideals, mostresearches can do but little, except that they are able to promotematerial abundance. Compared with people a century ago, people todayare enjoying the conveniences of all kinds of goods, equipments andservices, which are the result of researches in all kinds of realmssuch as science, technology, education, economy and so on. As long aspeople can not form a happy mind, such an abundance will not sufficefor their happy life. Some may argue that psychologists, with theirdiscoveries, give advice to people for their mental health, but mostpeople do not need them because not so many of them are mentally ill.
（生活的标准是精神上的满足而非物质上的满足，而这些研究大多除了提供物质满足外，根本不能提供精神满足）
感觉这个标准有点主观，我觉得应该两者都包括。

Research, whatever the subject, for the sake of significance, should bededicated to the pursuit of truth, which treats the nature of man andthe world. Ever since the time of ancient Greece, philosophers havebeen thinking about truth. It is from philosophy that sciencegenerated, and because of scientific methods that all researches arepossible. I barely see any original intents that are for the bettermentof people’s lives when Aristotle did his classifications, when Newtonthought over the fall of an apple, when Einstein imagined what wouldhappen if man travelled at light speed. They had no other purposes thanpursuing the truth, but as a result, people’s lives are most greatlyimproved, whether directly or indirectly, by their discoveries.
（无论什么主题的研究，要想具有重大意义，必须用于追求真理）
There are of course practical researches that are intended to improveefficiency in producing, managing, educating and so on, but as anyresearch is a two-edged weapon, which can be equally used to do bothgood and bad, there’s no precedence of its positive side. Such asituation is likely to happen that during a war, while soldiers arebeing injured or killed by the inventions which man boasts of, surgeonsare treating them with techniques which are the fruit of researches intheir own field. In modern times, researchers maybe should pay moreattention to the possible destruction rather than the benefits of theirresearches, given that it’s more difficult to build than to destroy.

（对于实际的研究，则应考虑其负面影响：建设总比破坏来得难）

Admittedly, it is one of the most important applications of researchesto improve people's lives, but taking the application for the essenceis inconvincible. The progress of people’s lives depends not so much onsuch researches as on sticking to their own appropriate way of life.What’s more? If we take a closer look at what prevents people fromliving in peace and without depression, we can find that it is the highpace and fierce competition that are subsequent to the headway inresearching.
（承认提高生活质量是研究的重要应用之一，但这不是研究的本质。人的生活质量的提高，更多的依赖于选择一种适于们们自己的生活。更进一步指出：现代社会的高节奏和激剧的竞争也由这些研究成果所致）

觉得作者观点有点偏激，我说下前几位没说的地方吧，实际研究的好处不一定比坏处多，我觉得不对，毕竟人类社会向前发展就是因为不断的研究，如果好处没有坏处多应该就不会进步了。还有那个前面的whether directly or indirectly我觉得太绝对了，好处肯定是有的，如果不知道重力什么的话，或者爱因斯坦的光电效应，现在很多发明都不会出现，在这里我觉得你说directly还可以，说indirectly就有点绝对了。以上纯属个人观点。另外文采真好啊，长句都感觉很自然，就不划好句了。我觉得吧，不能全写长句，长短句相结合貌似会更好一些。