TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组桑梓的 第十七次作业

桑梓UID: 2613051

No one can deny the fact that nowadays the world is becoming more and more complicated that nobody can survive in this globe without cooperation. The ability to cooperate with others well is of great significance today. It is my understanding that people will pay more attention to the importance of cooperation as time goes by. I am wholeheartedly agree with the statement that the ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past.

Hundreds of years ago, it was feasible to live on your own. One could grow his own food in the field, weave his own clothes or even build his own house. Those days, people did not have much to do, it is OK for them to work on their own to survive.

But now everything is different. The society today is much more different from before.Taking a look at the things surrounding you, is there anything that is made by yourself? We buy the furniture made by the carpenters, the clothes made by the tailors, the books printed in the factories, nothing is made by ourselves, even the so-called DIY articles are not totally made by ourselves, we buy the half-prepared items and then just put them together. It is clear that without cooperation we can not live. Today's world is a world based on cooperation, we do our own specific work and others do something else. Though the work we done does not gurantee a survival but because of the work done by others, we can lead a happy life. Everybody is focusing on his own work and doing something that he is good at. The efficiency is so good that we are producing the most amount of goods the world has ever seen.

Moreover, cooperation means communication. By communicating with others, we can know others' thoughts; we can learn from others' experience; we can get a better understanding of ourselves and the world. By cooperation, a work can be completed easily, certain mistakes can be avoided. That is to say cooperation not only provides lots of items we need to survive but also helps us to improve our life and ourselves.

In a word, cooperation is really important these days. We should be ready to cooperate in order to create a better world.

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

No one can deny the fact that nowadays the world is becoming more and more complicated that nobody can survive in this globe（world） without cooperation. The ability to cooperate with others well is of great significance today. It is my understanding that people will pay more attention to the importance of cooperation as time goes by. I am wholeheartedly agree with the statement that the ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past(楼主首段的背景阐释和观点引出每次都觉得很精当）.6 {) R2 b0 s! j3 \8 @( o6 {

Hundreds of years ago, it was feasible to live on (on or by?)your own. One could grow his own food in the field, weave his own clothes or even build his own house. Those days, people did not have much to do, it is OK for them to work on their own to survive. ) z/ D, c4 m/ m$ i

But now everything is different. The society today is much more different from before(before? the past 好一点）.Taking a look at the things surrounding you, is there anything that is made by yourself? We buy the furniture made by the carpenters, the clothes made by the tailors, the books printed in the factories, nothing is made by ourselves, even the so-called DIY articles are not totally made by ourselves, we buy the half-prepared items and then just put them together. It is clear that without cooperation we can not live. Today's world is a world based on cooperation, we do our own specific work and others do something else. Though the work we done does not gurantee a survival but because of the work done by others, we can lead a happy life. （这块的意思明白了，但表达的好像略显啰嗦，我也没想出更好的表达，再想想吧）Everybody is focusing on his own work and doing something that he is good at. The efficiency is so good that we are producing the most amount of goods the world has ever seen.7 W! D/ `$ U5 ]! R
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Moreover, cooperation means communication. By communicating with others, we can know others' thoughts; we can learn from others' experience; we can get a better understanding of ourselves and the world. By cooperation, a work can be completed easily, certain mistakes can be avoided. （how? 这块加一句论证更好吧）That is to say cooperation not only provides lots of items we need to survive but also helps us to improve our life and ourselves.

In a word, cooperation is really important these days. We should be ready to cooperate in order to create a better world.(据一个美国人说，如果一个文章结尾只是简单的重述了一下你的观点，而且结尾只有一句，使文章在版面上上看开头重脚轻的话，可以不要结尾。不一定要走这个形式)

hjhj1110UID: 2553667

No one can deny the fact that nowadays the world is becoming more and more complicated that nobody can survive in this globe without cooperation. The ability to cooperate with others well（well放到cooperate后面好一点） is of great significance today. It is my understanding that people will pay more attention to the importance of cooperation as time goes by. I am wholeheartedly agree with the statement that the ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past.
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1 s) {5 n* z# qHundreds of years ago, it was feasible to live on your own. One could grow his own food in the field, weave his own clothes or even build his own house. Those days, people did not have much to do, it is OK for them to work on their own to survive.
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But now everything is different. The society today is much more different from before.Taking a look at the things surrounding you, is there anything that is made by yourself? We buy the furniture made by the carpenters, the clothes made by the tailors, the books printed in the factories（by the printers）, nothing is made by ourselves, even the so-called DIY articles are not totally made by ourselves, we buy the half-prepared items and then just put them together. It is clear that without cooperation we can not live. Today's world is a world based on cooperation, we do our own specific work and others do something else. Though the work we done does not gurantee(?) a survival but because of the work done by others, we can lead a happy life. Everybody is focusing on his own work and doing something that he is good at. The efficiency is so good that we are producing the most amount of goods the world has ever seen.4 L3 q' y" u8 n9 B0 q$ b8 }( X' P* o( p
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Moreover, cooperation means communication. By communicating with others, we can know others' thoughts; we can learn from others' experience; we can get a better understanding of ourselves and the world. By cooperation, a work can be completed easily, certain mistakes can be avoided. That is to say cooperation not only provides lots of items we need to survive but also helps us to improve our life (lives) and ourselves. ; q3 z7 V9 Z7 Z- d7 p9 v
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In a word, cooperation is really important these days. We should be ready to cooperate in order to create a better world.


上面都把错误改得差不多了，我给点建议，用词可以再多样化一点，然后就是要举点具体的例子