ISSUE119.30.7【die in flames长线突破组作业】task by 米饭袜子

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

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119"When research priorities are being set for science, education, or any other area, the most important question to consider is: How many people's lives will be improved if the results are successful?"


As the astonishing development of the world from all sides, all kinds of research priorities are set to impulse . But do we really have to consider the issue that “how many people’s lives will be improved if the results are successful” before setting a research? I don’t suppose so.

Actually, plenty of research priorities or new attemps aim to improve people’s lives. For instance, the invention of the Internet, numerous test for a new sort of medicine and even some policies made by the local government; in other words, the original idea of inventing the computer and the Internet comes from reducing the workload of the human’s labor activities to the effect that it could save more time to do other things, so do the medical testing and governmental policies, either of which is in order to improve people’s health or make people’s lifetime more convenient, carefree and comfortable.

According to the facts above, we indeed confirm that some would consider the possibilities of improving people’s life when coming to a research as the most important question, yet it may become, to some extend, an obstacle on the way to improve our human beings in word and deed.

What about continuity of a experiment if the researcher found that it can’t improve people’s life or have little to do with that? I don’t think he or she have stomach to give up, moreover, they may even haven’t yet think of such question, just aiming at finding out the inner truth of something they are interested in. However, many great achievements come into being in such research as well as the advantages or utilities in people’s life followed. And we can just take examples from our daily life. Nowadays, our life is really improved mostly thanks to the inventions of mobile phones, microwave ovens, satellite and the like, all of whose abilities to work well depend on the electromagnetic wave, but it is Hertz lived more than a hundred years ago who throw light on this subject through persistant research. Then, did he take the improvement of people’s lives today into account as the most important factor at that time? Obviously not, all he want to prove is that the entity of the electromagnetic wave.Thus we’re reasonable to ask that won’t or shouldn’t we persist for the result of a research without emphasizing on the use in improving people’s lives? Not really.

Furthermore, it is unnecessary to treat the issue as the most important question, for whether it will improve people’s life don’t rely on the research priority itself but the ways of application. Take development of the nucleus: as we all know, if we use it for a new source of energy under a secure situation ,it will no doubt improve people’s lives through making more electricity without burning fossil fuels causing increase in greenhouse-gas emissions at the same time while if we use it for nuclear weapons, how can it improve people’s lives? It’s better for us to pray the prevention of a tragedy instead. Assuming that the researchers has considered the possible disater nucleus would bring to people and end up the research, the improvement can’t be realized as well.

To put the nut in a shell, as I stated above, we do consider the influence on people’s life most or even as the final intention when set research priorities in many areas but it can’t be absolute as a result of the initial motives of human exploration which is indeed the driving force for promoting human development.

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

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30"The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time."


Technological advancement makes a great contribution to development of human beings and far more in the future, but there’s a problem here: what should be the primary goal of technological advancement? I don’t suppose it should be to increase people’s efficiency.

As the issue states above, it thinks that if we treat increasing people’s efficiency as the primary goal,everyone could have more leisure time. This evidence can’t be convincing as I have two views to point out. Firstly, increased efficiency still can’t guarantee “more leisure time”, for human desires can never be to an end,that is, when they have more time as a result of efficiency, chances that they wouldn’t like to make it leisure time are great. For instance, more productions are wanted, higher positions are persued, thus may leading less leisure time on the contrary for those so-called higher goals and competitive pressures. Secondly, efficiency can’t benenfit “everyone” obviously, as entrepreneurs find it possible to get the same out put with far less workers, so the remaining ones have to take the workload at the same level or even more compared with before.

Not only the reasons given by the issue are unable to prove its opinion, but I can prove that we shouldn’t consider increasing people’s efficiency as the primary goal of technological advancement from other aspects

What about the fundamental purpose of technological advancement? Traced back to the primitive society, take huaman’s starting using instrument to hunt for a example, at the very beginning, they just use stones and wood(?) throwing at the preys until they find that stones could be polished to a very sharp and also wood could be cut into sticks. Such process as a kind of techonological advancement prevent our ancesters from hungery, in other words, the fundamental purpose of such action is to satify people’s needs, including food, safety, recreation, and the like. Of course, effiency is among them, however, when it becomes the primary one,it seems impossible to satify people’s needs fully so that it will deviate from the original intention.

Furthermore, as we make achivements in technological advancement, we should also pay attention to the fact that all we have done are expected to reach harmony with nature and human society aiming at giving full paly to the role of technological advancement. Neverthless, when the primary goal is set as improving efficiency, I can hardly see harmony in many cases. For example, efficiency improvement in cars’ techonological advancement means speed. But how can we ensure people’s safety by making such efficient advancment? Another, as the essential position taken by efficiency, all or the most we should be concerned with when ameliorate the fishing boats or tools is in the shortest possible time to catch the most fish, if this is the case, I’m afraid that human would no longer see the fish years later.

In conclusion, the primary goal of technological advancement shouldn’t be to increase people’s efficiency when considering the negative impact of efficiency as well as what is the progress really for

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

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7、"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."


Such means as video cameras and written records by which huamn’s contemporary life can be completely memorized for passing down from generation to generation are at the same importance level. Both as forms of documentation, I can’t be in favour of taking eihter of them more impartant.

Before I’m going on, we should define our terms of human’s contemporary life. From my point of view, huamn’s life can be classified into two main parts, say, physical and mental, and videos and writings each have their own advantages when coming to the two aspects.

On one hand, it is the vedio camera that provides not only an accurate and convincing but also a timely record of human’s contemparary physical life, for we can be more intuitively informed with a variety of situations through vedios rather than written records, When a terrible natural disaster, for instance, happened all at once, with serious damages left behind, the most efficent and actual way of presenting all the scenes is via a vedio camera. Maybe you have read something about earthquakes, tornado, volcanic eruptions and the like in articles or books before, but how can you really imagine the shocking pictures of the rolling land, the roaring storm and the horrific magma spewing out if you haven’t saw it by your own eyes? At this time, videos take the point with its abilities of restoring the real vision through both seeing and hearing, while written records seem to be in the shade.

However, on the other hand, the video camera would fail when it comes to the mental life of human beings, and naturally, writing records take the place. Such activities may include delicate feelings in our hearts, advanced and creative opinions in our minds, even the considerations in all subjects as well.All above can’t be seen in entity unless turn them into charaters, namely written records,according to which we can just touch the writers’ inner emotions as well as excellent thoughts without constaints of time and space. Furthermore, future generations can produce more based on it, take the films nowadays, many of them are adapted from famous novels or history books.

In fact,videos and written records must be combined to reach full sometimes. For example, when we watch a historical documentary which stem from real image data at that time, perhaps we just aren’t able to understand what has happende well if there’s not any explanation and commentary. The most typical one is war documentary, in which we merely see endless explosion of bomb or gunfight, Only by voice-over can we understand the details of the war including the time, the place, the cause and so on. Such aside, to some extend, is another form of written records, expressed in voice.

According to what I have stated above, the video camera and written records should be taken as both important forms of documentation in different fields I suppose, and in some cases they have to unite in order to record huaman’s footprints perfectly.

seiranzcc1UID: 2514067

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红色--疑问
蓝色--我的想法
紫色--很好
绿色--建议
As the astonishing development of the world from all sides, all kinds of research priorities are set to impulse . But do we really have to consider the issue that “how many people’s lives will be improved if the results are successful” before setting a research? I don’t suppose so.

Actually, plenty of research priorities or new attemps aim to improve people’s lives. For instance, the invention of the Internet, numerous test for a new sort of medicine and even some policies made by the local government; in other words, the original idea of inventing the computer and the Internet comes from reducing the workload of the human’s labor activities to the effect that it could save more time to do other things, so do the medical testing and governmental policies, either of which is in order to improve people’s health or make people’s lifetime more convenient, carefree and comfortable. （是不是我爱做牛角尖？我觉得提高效率就是improve people's lives 的一种体现啊）

According to the facts above, we indeed confirm that some would consider the possibilities of improving people’s life when coming to a research as the most important question, yet it may become, to some extend, an obstacle on the way to improve our human beings in word and deed.

What about continuity of a experiment if the researcher found that it can’t improve people’s life or have little to do with that? I don’t think he or she has stomach to give up, moreover, they may even haven’t yet think of such question, just aiming at finding out the inner truth of something they are interested in. However, many great achievements come into being in such research as well as the advantages or utilities in people’s life followed. And we can just take examples from our daily life. Nowadays, our life is really improved mostly thanks to （无他，这个thanks to 我一直搞不清楚他在句子里究竟做什么成分使，米饭跟我说一下吧）the inventions of mobile phones, microwave ovens, satellite and the like, all of whose abilities to work well depend on the electromagnetic wave, but it is Hertz liveing more than a hundred years ago who threw light on this subject through persistant research. Then, did he take the improvement of people’s lives today into account as the most important factor at that time? Obviously not, all he want to prove is that the entity of the electromagnetic wave.Thus we’re reasonable to ask that won’t or shouldn’t we persist for the result of a research without emphasizing on the use in improving people’s lives? Not really.
嗯，research本身有不可预见的地方，我也用了这个点

Furthermore, it is unnecessary to treat the issue as the most important question, for whether it will improve people’s life doesn't rely on the research priority itself but the ways of application.（这个好，我觉得这个点看起来有很彻底的感觉） Take development of the nucleus: as we all know, if we use it for a new source of energy under a secure situation ,it will no doubt improve people’s lives through making more electricity without burning fossil fuels causing increase in greenhouse-gas emissions at the same time while if we use it for nuclear weapons, how can it improve people’s lives? It’s better for us to pray the prevention of a tragedy instead. Assuming that the researchers has considered the possible disater nucleus would bring to people and end up the research, the improvement can’t be realized as well.
仔细想来题目的确没有说“应用”的问题，所以虽然本质都是研究结果难以预测，但是具体到“是否应用到生活当中”还是很可取。
这里我纠结一个问题，作者既然都说了“以是否提高人们的生活来决定优先权”是不是包含了“已经应用”这一层意思？比如“应用研究”这个东西，应该是研究，但他研究出来就是为了应用的，不然什么意义也没有。研究和应用在很多方面是一体化的。。。（也许这就是题目里面纠结之所在）

To put the nut in a shell, as I stated above, we do consider the influence on people’s life most or even as the final intention when set research priorities in many areas but it can’t be absolute as a result of the initial motives of human exploration which is indeed the driving force for promoting human development.

ddcmj519UID: 176326

语法有问题
很不错
内容待商榷
我对文章的总体感觉

As the astonishing development of the world from all sides, all kinds of research priorities are set to impulse . But do we really have to consider the issue that “how many people’s lives will be improved if the results are successful” before setting a research? I don’t suppose so.其实我个人还是很反对题目的直接引用，改写下会好些~

Actually, plenty of research priorities or new attemps aim to improve people’s lives. For instance, the development (invention看着怪怪的)of the Internet, numerous tests for a new sort of medicine and even some policies made by the local government; in other words, the original idea of inventing the computer and the Internet comes from reducing the workload of the human’s labor activities to the effect that it could save more time to do other things, so do the medical testing and governmental policies, either of which is in order to improve people’s health or make people’s lifetime more convenient, carefree and comfortable. 两句话一段- -
我要换血了。。
【 wonderful development of the Internet knitting the world with information, numerous tests for new medicine saving many from death, plocies established by governments balancing the whole society in harmony. all are done in one spirit, to salve the human from burdened and repeatened work, and thus improve their life with convenience and comfort.】


According to the facts above, we indeed confirm that 这句感觉嫩奇怪。。此外，上下衔接性不好。 some would consider the possibilities of improving people’s life when coming to a research as the most important question, yet it may become, to some extend, an obstacle on the way to improve our human beings in word and deed.

What about continuity of an experiment if the researcher found that it can’t improve people’s life or have little to do with that? I don’t think he or she have stomach 有着表达么？不确定。。to give up,断句 moreover, they may even haven’t yet think of such question, just aiming at finding out the inner truth of something they are interested in. However, many great achievements come into being in such 我以为会跟着个that。。 research as well as the advantages or utilities in people’s life followed. And we can just take examples from our daily life. Nowadays, our life is really improved mostly thanks to感觉有点不对，不会改。。 the inventions of mobile phones, microwave ovens, satellites and the like, all of whose abilities to work well depend on the electromagnetic wave,断句 but it is Hertz lived more than a hundred years ago who throw light on this subject through persistant research. Then, did he take the improvement of people’s lives today into account as the most important factor at that time? Obviously not, all he want to prove is that the entity of the electromagnetic wave.Thus we’re reasonable to ask that won’t or shouldn’t we persist for the result of a research without emphasizing on the use in improving people’s lives? Not really. 意思很好，理论与实际应用的时间差。但是，诶。。长句。。太可怕了。。读的累死。。长句很容易造成指代不清。所以适当精简。长短结合为上。全是长的看着不舒服。。

Furthermore, it is unnecessary to treat the issue as the most important question, 断句for whether it will improve people’s life don’t rely on the research priority itself but the ways of application. Take development of the nucleus:这句子有问题？ as we all know, if we use it for a new source of energy under a secure situation ,it will no doubt improve people’s lives through making more electricity without burning fossil fuels but causing increase in greenhouse-gas emissions at the same time删了   断句   while if we use it for nuclear weapons, how can it improve people’s lives? It’s better for us to pray the prevention of a tragedy instead. Assuming that the researchers has considered the possible disater nucleus would bring to people and end up the research, the improvement can’t be realized as well.

To put the nut in a shell, as I stated above, we do consider the influence on people’s life most or even as the final intention when set research priorities in many areas but it can’t be absolute as a result of the initial motives of human exploration which is indeed the driving force for promoting human development.

思路不错，围绕着目的的时间，及科学本质展开讨论，很好。但是这个语言，额，长句太多。。看到最后某有点负面情绪了。。所以后面改的不是很认真- -语言，语言。内容要detail但是文字要concise。

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

in order to improve people’s health or make people’s lifetime more convenient, carefree and comfortable. （是不是我爱做牛角尖？我觉得提高效率就是improve people's lives 的一种体现啊）

额。。。。。这里我没有刻意强调什么，就是在叙述三者各自improve people's life的表现，不知JJ哪里不懂？

mostly thanks to （无他，这个thanks to 我一直搞不清楚他在句子里究竟做什么成分使，米饭跟我说一下吧）

thanks to =because of=due to=owing to

这里我纠结一个问题，作者既然都说了“以是否提高人们的生活来决定优先权”是不是包含了“已经应用”这一层意思？比如“应用研究”这个东西，应该是研究，但他研究出来就是为了应用的，不然什么意义也没有。研究和应用在很多方面是一体化的。。。（也许这就是题目里面纠结之所在）

这个。。。JJ说的米错，但这里我们讨论的是一个如何应用的问题而不是应不应用的问题

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

to 北草：

（其实这段米饭你的观点是许多研究的目地在于improve people's lives，是不是与第一段有点矛盾啊，）

这里确实有点别扭，我的本意是先部分同意再否定

辛苦~^^

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

to cmj

两句话一段- -
我要换血了。。
【 wonderful development of the Internet knitting the world with information, numerous tests for new medicine saving many from death, plocies established by governments balancing the whole society in harmony. all are done in one spirit, to salve the human from burdened and repeatened work, and thus improve their life with convenience and comfort.】

膜拜！！！

have stomach 有着表达么？不确定。。

嗯，有的，米饭学过~

thanks to感觉有点不对，不会改。。

昂？这个用错了难道？

Take development of the nucleus:这句子有问题？

米~这个还是我从eco上学到得，是take.....for example的省略~

但是这个语言，额，长句太多。。看到最后某有点负面情绪了。。所以后面改的不是很认真- -语言，语言。内容要detail但是文字要concise。

谷灭。。。。。。。。。。。
JJ辛苦额~^^

ddcmj519UID: 176326

9# 米饭袜子

[quote]have stomach 有着表达么？不确定。。

嗯，有的，米饭学过~
[/quote]

我印象中只有have appetite。。
学习了~

tracywlzUID: 2522388

"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
Such means as video cameras and written records by which huamn’s contemporary life can be completely memorized for passing down from generation to generation are at the same importance level. Both as forms of documentation, I can’t be in favour of taking eihter of them more impartant.
Before I’m going on, we should define our terms of human’s contemporary life. From my point of view, huamn’s life can be classified into two main parts, say（可去）, physical and mental, and videos and writings each have their own advantages when coming to the two aspects.
可以合一段~
On one hand, it is the vedio camera that provides not only an accurate and convincing but also a timely record of human’s contemparary physical life, for we can be more intuitively informed with a variety of situations through vedios rather than written records, When a terrible natural disaster, for instance, happened all at once, with serious damages left behind, the most efficent and actual way of presenting all the scenes is via（这不是动词啊，这句话有很浓厚的中国风~） a vedio camera. Maybe you have read something about earthquakes, tornado, volcanic eruptions and the like in articles or books before, but how can you really imagine the shocking pictures of the rolling land, the roaring storm and the horrific magma spewing out if you haven’t saw it by your own eyes?（问句很精彩） At this time, videos take the point with its abilities of restoring the real vision through both seeing and hearing, while written records seem to be in the shade（很好很强大）.
However, on the other hand, the video camera would fail when it comes to the mental life of human beings, and naturally, writing records take the place. Such activities may include delicate feelings in our hearts, advanced and creative opinions in our minds, even the considerations in all subjects as well. All above can’t be seen in entity unless turn them into charaters, namely written records,according to which we can just touch the writers’ inner emotions as well as excellent thoughts without constaints of time and space. Furthermore, future generations can produce more based on it, take the films nowadays, many of them are adapted from famous novels or history books.（我觉得可以说得更详细点，例子很好很好。）

In fact,videos and written records must be combined to reach full（没看懂~） sometimes. For example, when we watch a historical documentary which stem from real image data at that time, perhaps we just aren’t able to understand what has happende well if there’s not any explanation and commentary. The most typical one is war documentary, in which we merely see endless explosion of bomb or gunfight, Only by voice-over can we understand the details of the war including the time, the place, the cause and so on. Such aside, to some extend, is another form of written records, expressed in voice.
According to what I have stated above, the video camera and written records should be taken as both important forms of documentation in different fields I suppose, and in some cases they have to unite in order to record huaman’s footprints perfectly.

建议先到word中查看，有些单词拼错了~总体感觉像TOEFL作文，我个人觉得，说理的太少了，结构还不错，建议多多看范文。思路感觉很好，例子也举得很强大，功底不错，继续加油~

PassonChenUID: 2614331

30 30"The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time." 很好：红色； 修改或欠佳：蓝色； 标注：绿色。 先翻译一下题目，看一下我理解是否有误： 技术进步的首要目标是：提高效率，以使每个人都有更多的闲暇时间。 提高效率是手段，增加闲暇才是目的。 论述效率，不谈闲暇，是否也跑题了呢？ Technological advancement  makes a great contribution to development of human beings and far more in the future, but there’s a problem here: what should be the primary goal of technological advancement? I don’t suppose it should be to increase people’s efficiency.(这不是ISSUE中的目标吧？它的目标是提高人们的闲暇） As the issue states above, it thinks that （这个可以省略） we treat increasing people’s efficiency as the primary goal,everyone could have more leisure time. This evidence can’t be convincing as I have two views to point out. Firstly, increased efficiency still can’t guarantee “more leisure time”, for human desires can never be to an end,that is, when they have more time as a result of efficiency, chances that they wouldn’t like to make it leisure time are great.（你先说他们有了更多的时间，又说他们没有了空闲时间，前后有点矛盾） For instance, more productions are wanted, higher positions are pursued, thus may leading(MAY 多余） less leisure time on the contrary for those so-called higher goals and competitive pressures. Secondly, efficiency can’t benenfit “everyone” obviously, as entrepreneurs find it possible to get the same out put with far less workers, so the remaining ones have to take the workload at the same level or even more compared with before.（这是什么逻辑？请解释一下，我没搞懂） Not only the reasons given by the issue are unable to prove its opinion, but I can prove that we shouldn’t consider increasing people’s efficiency as the primary goal of technological advancement from other aspects （是否跑题？） What about the fundamental purpose of technological advancement? Traced back to the primitive society, take huaman’s starting using instrument to hunt as an example：At the very beginning, they just use stones and wood sticks throwing(木头可能不会扔哦）at the preys until they find that stones could be polished to a very sharp and also wood could be cut into sticks. Such process as a kind of techonological advancement prevent our ancesters from hunger. In other words, the fundamental purpose of such action is to satify people’s needs, including food, safety, recreation, and the like. Of course, effiency is among them, however, when it becomes the primary one,it seems impossible to satify people’s needs fully so that it will deviate from the original intention. Furthermore, as we make achivements in technological advancement, we should also pay attention to the fact that all we have done are expected to reach harmony with(between) nature and human society aiming at giving full paly to the role of technological advancement. Neverthless, when the primary goal is set as improving efficiency, I can hardly see harmony in many cases. For example, efficiency improvement in cars’ techonological advancement means speed. But how can we ensure people’s safety by making such efficient advancment? Another, as the essential position taken by efficiency, all or the most we should be concerned with when ameliorate the fishing boats or tools is in the shortest possible time to catch the most fish, if this is the case, I’m afraid that human would no longer see the fish years later. (没有说理，只有例子；看到的是表面而已。） In conclusion, the primary goal of technological advancement shouldn’t be to increase people’s efficiency when considering the negative impact of efficiency as well as what is the progress really for （你的文章读起来确实很流畅，一方面语言处理不错，另一方面没什么新的思想也是一个原因） 我觉得你也有点跑题，可能比我还跑得厉害。 作者最大的特点就是：不说理，一提出一个观点，就来一个FOR EXAMPLE。这样能说服人吗？ ISSUE是立论还是批判呢？你好像是在写ARGU。没有提出自己的系统观点，并加以系统论证。

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

with serious damages left behind, the most efficent and actual way of presenting all the scenes is via（这不是动词啊，这句话有很浓厚的中国风~）

这个。。。。有错误？？

米饭袜子UID: 2532172

In fact,videos and written records must be combined to reach full（没看懂~）

就是让二者结合以达到最佳效果

tracywlzUID: 2522388

is via? 是什么？ｖｉａ是介词吧～　reach　ｆｕｌｌ是什么？