【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组风辰的眼泪第二十次作业】

风辰的眼泪UID: 2618183

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know events happening around the world, though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.（04/29/07）


Have you think about that if you totally don’t care about current affairs around the world, how much knowledge and information will you miss, and how much enjoyable and topics will you lose? Have you think about another thing that if you are merely concentrated on the matters in front of you, how can you catch with the pace of modern world, and how can you entirely molt into the advanced life style? Apparently, it is absolutely important to know events happening around the world.


Initially, caring about current affairs helps people obtain more knowledge and information. As an information platform, national affairs provide people the latest information happening around the world which makes people’s lives more enjoyable and refreshing. People also learn something new through the affairs such as new technology, national cultures, eminent resorts, and politics. People gain some news only by caring about current affairs. Giving a serious example here that almost all the people were focus on the Richter 8 Rank Seism of Wenchuan in China in 2008 which is the gigantic disaster that have happened in the world. Through comprehending this national affair, people all around the world understand the strength and consociation of China when we are in a giant morass and the real affection of humanity. As a consequence, caring about events happening around the world make people know something that people may never know in their lives.

An addition factor deserves some words here is that knowing events happening around the world provides more topics and themes for people to enhance communication. Certainly, there are numerous topics between the familiar friends that they will never feel embarrassed whey they are in company with each other. However, when people associate with some new friends and there are not any topics to discuss, they will easily involve in an abashed situation. In this circumstance, if they are all individuals who are fascinated by events happening around the world, they can simply put the focus on these affairs which help people to get out of the dilemma on the one hand, and demonstrate their knowledge to the other people on the other hand. Don’t you think that sounds perfect?

Of course the advantages of knowing affairs are not limited to these two, I just pick these two facets as the examples. In conclusion, knowing events profoundly does benefit to people’s lives and attempt to promote people’s lives. Thus, people who desire to have a chance to achieve should care about the events happening around the world, even if they sometimes unlikely to affect people’s daily life exteriorly.

happylrUID: 2618525

1# 风辰的眼泪
Have you think（thought） about that if you totally don’t care about current affairs around the world, how much knowledge and information will you miss, and how much enjoyable(词性不对) and topics will you lose? Have you think（thought）about another thing that if you are merely concentrated on the matters in front of you, how can you catch with the pace of（keep pace with）modern world, and how can you entirely molt into(melt into，融入) the advanced life style? Apparently, it is absolutely important to know events happening around the world.（形式主语）


Initially, caring about current affairs helps people obtain more knowledge and information（主语开头句）. As an information platform, national affairs provide people the latest information happening around the world which makes people’s lives more enjoyable and refreshing（状语开头句）. People also learn something new through the affairs such as new technology, national cultures, eminent resorts, and politics（主语开头句）.. People gain some news only by caring about current affairs（主语开头句）. Giving a serious example here that almost all the people were focus （focused）on the Richter 8 Rank Seism of Wenchuan in China in 2008 which is the gigantic disaster that have（has）
happened in the world（主语开头句）. Through comprehending this national affair, people all around the world understand the strength and consociation of China when we are in a giant morass and the real affection of humanity（方式状语开头句）. As a consequence, caring about events happening around the world make people know something that people may never know in their lives.

An addition(additional) factor deserves some words here is that knowing events happening around the world provides more topics and themes for people to enhance communication（主语开头句）. Certainly, there are numerous topics between the familiar friends that they will never feel embarrassed whey they are in company with each other（主语开头句）. However, when people associate with some new friends and there are not any topics to discuss, they will easily involve in an abashed situation（状语开头句）. In this circumstance, if they are all individuals who are fascinated by events happening around the world, they can simply put the focus on these affairs which help people to get out of the dilemma on the one hand, and demonstrate their knowledge to the other people on the other hand（条件状语开头句）. Don’t you think that sounds perfect?

Of course the advantages of knowing affairs are not limited to these two, I just pick these two facets as the examples. In conclusion, knowing events profoundly does benefit to people’s lives and attempt to promote people’s lives. Thus, people who desire to have a chance to achieve(?achievement) should care about the events happening around the world, even if they sometimes unlikely to
affect people’s daily life exteriorly.

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写的不错，楼主主要发展了两个分观点，扩大知识和促进交流，每个论点论述的比较充分，例证恰当（事实和假想事例），论述比较连贯。
看到有的人还拍句式，这个我不是很了解，只是标注了句子类型，可能句式还要多样些吧。个人感觉句子已经很复杂了，加强下句式应该会更好哈。