TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 by holding 第21次作业

holdingUID: 2285054

Is it better to spend money on something that lasts long time, such as an expensive piece of jewelry, or spend on something that provides a short-term pleasure, such as a vacation?(05/18/07)
427 words
19：48-20：30
With the development of the society, the individual living level is improved as the technology renovation. Besides the requirement of survive, people have much more money to do other things such as entertainment and luxury. In my opinion, whether we should spend money or not should be judged by their influence on our life, but not according to the time of the thing last.

First of all, money should be spent on the things which could benefit our health. In this case, money is spent on the things that lasts long time. There is an old saying: any treasure is "zero" in our life, which will be nothing without health as the "one" before them. The competition among people equals to competition of healthy body. With more pressure of life, people are required to have an excellent energetic body to face the competition in society to achieve their objection of life. It is possible that you care money more, but with the age grows, we could care about health much more.

What is more, money should be spent on the aspect of smooth our mood. Nowadays, mental disease is attacking much more people than ever before because of a large amount of living pressure. In this life style, people always live with a depressive temper, which could not only do harm to our health but also destroy our work and study efficiency. Therefore, it is necessary to spend some money to relax our body and mood. In this situation, money has to spend on something provides a short-term pleasure. But we should notice that this so-called "short-term" pleasure, such as vacation, could bring us deep breathe, benefit our body and improve our work effect in a great extent. Hence, money should be spent if the thing is good to our mood.

Last but not least, money should not be spent on the things just benefit our appearance, such as luxury jewelry and expensive clothes. A good outlook is not coming from money but comes with a strong sense of assuredness. People who think they are not perfect at appearance always have inferiority. The money extra spent on jewelry, clothes, make-up and et al is not worthwhile. Compared to these luxury, a healthy body and a amiable temper could make people more charming.

To sum up, money should spend on the things which fundamentally benefit our life rather than that just have short influence on our life. And to determine the necessity of payment, we should take long term influence into consideration instead of short gorgeous appearance.

gundammoleUID: 2300958

1# holding
With the development of the society, the individual living level is improved as the technology(technological)
renovation. Besides the requirement of survive, people have much more money to do other things such as entertainment and luxury(感觉这里用do other things for entertainment and luxury比较合适). In my opinion, whether we should spend money or not should be judged by their influence on our life, but not according to the time of the thing last(lasts)./ D+ P. F- M& A" c* ~8 |

First of all, money should be spent on the things which could benefit our health. In this case, money is spent(is worth to spend) on the things that lasts long time. There is an old saying: any treasure is "zero" in our life, which will be nothing without health as the "one" before them. The competition among people equals to competition of healthy body. With more pressure of life, people are required to have an excellent energetic body to face the competition in society to achieve their objection (achieve objection? 这里应该是achieve success吧) of life. It is possible that you care money more (这句话结构不完整,最好改为care money more than anything), but with the age grows, we could care about health much more (这里也是和上面一样的问题,可以换个说法,比方说 the importance of health can not be exaggerated).

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What is(What’s) more, money should be spent on the aspect of smooth (smoothing)
our mood. Nowadays, mental disease is attacking much more people than ever before because of a large amount of living pressure. In this life style, people always live with a depressive temper, which could not (这里应该没有not吧) only do harm to our health but also destroy our work and study efficiency. Therefore, it is necessary to spend some (some不能用来形容不可数名词) money to relax our body and mood. In this situation, money has to spend on something provides a short-term pleasure. But we should notice that this so-called "short-term" pleasure, such as vacation, could bring us deep breathe, benefit our body and improve our work effect in a great extent. Hence, money should be spent if the thing is good to our mood.
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Last but not least, money should not be spent on the things just benefit our appearance, such as luxury jewelry and expensive clothes. A good outlook is not coming from money but comes with a strong sense of assuredness. People who think they are not perfect at appearance always have inferiority. The money extra spent on jewelry, clothes, make-up and et al(这里是什么意思?) is not worthwhile. Compared to these luxury(luxury goods), a healthy body and a amiable temper could make people more charming.6 |1 v& p6 e+ W$ Y2 O1 X$ q7 Q

To sum up, money should spend on the things which fundamentally benefit our life rather than that just have short influence on our life. And to determine the necessity of payment, we should take long term influence into consideration instead of short gorgeous appearance.
很欣赏LZ的解题思路, 观点围绕健康来讲,没有拘泥于long-term benefit或short-term pleasure中,展开的论点也写的不错,学习学习

laqfanfanUID: 2618864

Is it better to spend money on something that lasts long time, such as an expensive piece of jewelry, or spend on something that provides a short-term pleasure, such as a vacation?(05/18/07)
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With the development of the society, the individual living level is improved as the technology(technological) renovation. Besides the requirement of survive(这个单词多用于从困境中存活,用subsistence应该更好), people have much more money to do other things such as(改为for) entertainment and luxury. In my opinion, whether we should spend money or not should be judged by their influence on our life, but not according to the time of the thing last(s)./ g# |+ G& @' c
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First of all, money should be spent (一般不用于被动)on the things which could benefit our health. In this case, money is spent on the things that lasts long time. There is an old saying: any treasure is "zero" in our life, which will be nothing without health as the "one" before them. The competition among people equals to competition of healthy body. With more pressure of life, people are required to have an excellent energetic body to face the competition in society to achieve their objection(?) of life. It is possible that you care money more, but with the age grows, we could care about health much more.8 ]8 y- |, z0 ~" X4 C; Y: v0 d

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Last but not least, money should not be spent on the things just benefit our appearance, such as luxury jewelry and expensive clothes. A good outlook is not coming from money but comes with a strong sense of assuredness. People who think they are not perfect at appearance always have inferiority. The money extra spent on jewelry, clothes, make-up and et al is not worthwhile. Compared to these luxury, a healthy body and a amiable temper could make people more charming.
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To sum up, money should spend on the things which fundamentally benefit our life rather than that just have short influence(?) on our life. And to determine the necessity of payment, we should take long term influence into consideration instead of short gorgeous appearance

观点很新颖..
共同进步..