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发表于 2009-4-20 23:06:08 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ARGUMENT7 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.

"In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved."
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TIME: 00:26:20
DATE: 2009-4-20 21:14:24

Just ground on the series of examples list by the author concerning the air pollution in the Clearview and the increasing number of the factories, the author accordingly comes to the conclusion that the current authority are not protecting the environment. Therefore, in order to solve the existing environmental problems, the author suggests that the residents of the Clearview should elect the Ann instead of Frank. In my opinion, though the argument seems to be well-presented, there are also some flaws in the reasoning lines of the argument.

On one hand, the author unfairly comes to the conclusion according on the series of examples, since many other possibilities have not been ruling out. It is possible that the increasing factories mainly manufacture the green products, which amounts to no pollution. Or perhaps the factories have reformed their producing process so that their releasing waste has reached the requirement. Moreover, even if the air pollution becomes serious, the author cannot easily deny the environmental works of the authority, probable the current authority has addressed all other pollutions, such as the water pollution, the solid pollution, the light pollution. Thus we cannot deny the work of the current government just due to the existing air pollution.

On the other hand, the author cannot suggest the Ann is more suitable to the mayor position, just attributed to the vague information about the positions of the two candidates. It is possible the Ann has not the talent in dealing with environmental problems, though she belongs to the GEC. And even if she is very good at addressing the environmental issues, she also may be not appropriate to the position of the mayor. Because there are many other abilities needed to guarantee a good leadership, such as the fidelity, self-confidence, socialization and the like. Furthermore, we also cannot ignore the capability of the Frank, although he is one member of the current town council. It is very likely Frank is always persisting the environmental-friendly policy, although not be accepted.

In summary, considering the unfair evaluation about the environmental work of the current authority and the vague information about the two candidates, the author should provide more information and evidence to substantiate his or her argument and make up for the flaws in the reasoning lines.

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