5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 yieven的 第3次作业

yievenUID: 2324451

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship. H


The statement, from my point of view, is about how to maintain the friendship. From this aspect, allowing some mistakes of friends is a better way indeed than doing wrong or weird.

The first reason that I agree with the statement is that friendship is on the basis of mutual respect and tolerance. Since we are all human beings rather than supermen or gods, mistakes and emotional cycles are inevitable. Moreover, when people are in a dread mess, they often find it hard to control their emotions and always show a bad temper. At that time, as a friend, you should give a hand to them or give some advices instead of yelling back. Sometimes, what you need to do is "just keep silence". You must understand your friend's situation, for someday the similar one will also occur to you. If you are tolerant with your friend, there is no doubt that he/she will be kind to you next time.

Secondly, maybe your friend will do something against your philosophy or even your principle, say, steal money from others. If he/she steals yours, you'd better behave as if you didn't know but give some cautionary advice or counsel kindly and involuntarily. Never let hatred unveil your eyes. As the saying goes, "It costs more to hate than to love, to tolerate." If possible, you can also try to educate him/her and tell him/her right from wrong. One day, when he/she realizes and confesses his/her fault, he/she will thank you for guiding him/her to the right side.

Last but not least, being indulgent to others is a sign that you are cultivated and mature. It is said that "He who easily pardons, and remits offences has the mind planted above injuries; thus he cannot be shot." For building your public image and perfecting your inner personality, tolerating and forgiving your friend is preferred. Though it may sound selfish, doing this will lead to a more harmonious atmosphere and make things better.

As discussed above, tolerance is essential to friendship. That's why I prefer letting a friend mistake for some times to doing something harmful to our friendship.

llacatUID: 2628715

The statement, from my point of view, is about how to maintain the friendship. From this aspect, allowing some mistakes of friends is a better way indeed than doing wrong or weird.
很喜欢你这种开门见山的开头方式，句型也很不错，值得借鉴学习下~！不过我觉得最好还是补上一两句的背景吧，要不然是不是会有点突兀呢？

The first reason that I agree with the statement is that friendship is on the basis of mutual respect and tolerance. Since we are all human beings rather than supermen or gods, mistakes and emotional cycles are inevitable. Moreover, when people are in a dread mess（这个词组有出处吗？感觉有点怪，有就没问题）, they often find it (is) hard to control their emotions and always show a bad temper. At that time, as a friend, you should give a hand to them or give some advices instead of yelling back. Sometimes, what you need to do is "just keep silence". You must (建议改成should, must有点绝对)understand your friend's situation, for someday the similar one will（may 比较好，理由同上） also occur to you. If you are tolerant with your friend, there is no doubt that he/she will be kind to you next time.
这段的论点很好，例子方面也能很好的证明论点。唯一的小不足就是语气有点太绝对化了，建议改成柔和点的词比较好。

Secondly, maybe your friend will do（does） something against your philosophy or even your principle, say, steal money from others. If he/she steals yours, you'd better behave as if you didn't know but give some cautionary advice or counsel kindly and involuntarily. Never let hatred unveil your eyes.(你想说什么？) As the saying goes, "It costs more to hate than to love, to tolerate." If possible, you can also try to educate him/her and tell him/her right from wrong. One day, when he/she realizes and confesses his/her fault, he/she will thank you for guiding him/her to the right side.
这段论点是什么？没看明白。建议主题句在开头明了的提出之后再举例。而且感觉这段的例子和上文的总论点有点不合。

Last but not least, being indulgent（用词不对，这个词是放纵的意思！） to others is a sign that you are cultivated and mature. It is said that "He who easily pardons, and remits offences has the mind planted above injuries; thus he cannot be shot." For building your public image and perfecting your inner personality, tolerating and forgiving your friend is preferred. Though it may sound selfish（？自私吗？没看明白，有点突兀）, doing this will lead to a more harmonious atmosphere and make things better.
建议这段把后半段的解释再写详细点！感觉有点没说清楚。 .

As discussed above, tolerance is essential to friendship. That's why I prefer letting a friend mistake for some times to doing something harmful to our friendship.

总的来说，这篇文章在词句上面看的出作者下了功夫，有很多可以学习的地方！不足之处在于全文的结构方面，给出的分论点其实前后都是一样的意思（宽容），没有递进和深入的观点。第二点理由实在没看懂作者是想说什么？是想从反面还是从正面论证？还有中间三段的连接词太普遍了，模板痕迹很重！建议作者可以再在结构和论点上多加练习,加上以前积累的词句基础，相信高分指日可待！

annazjyUID: 2630173

The statement, from my point of view, is about how to maintain the friendship. From this aspect, allowing some mistakes of friends is a better way indeed than doing wrong or weird.（不错）
The first reason that I agree with the statement is that friendship is on the basis of mutual respect and tolerance. Since we are all human beings rather than supermen or gods, mistakes and emotional cycles are inevitable. Moreover, when people are in a dread mess, they often find it (is) hard to control their emotions and always show a bad temper. At that time, as a friend, you should give a hand to them or give some advices instead of yelling back. Sometimes, what you need to do is "just keep silence". You must understand your friend's situation, for someday the similar one will also occur to you. If you are tolerant with your friend, there is no doubt that he/she will be kind to you next time. （这段写得好！！）
Secondly, maybe your friend will do（does） something against your philosophy or even your principle, say, steal money from others. If he/she steals yours, you'd better behave as if you didn't know but give some cautionary advice or counsel kindly and involuntarily. Never let hatred unveil your eyes. As the saying goes, "It costs more to hate than to love, to tolerate." If possible, you can also try to educate him/her and tell him/her right from wrong. One day, when he/she realizes and confesses his/her fault, he/she will thank you for guiding him/her to the right side.（在说明一下吧，呵呵）
Last but not least, being indulgent（改个词吧，呵呵） to others is a sign that you are cultivated and mature. It is said that "He who easily pardons, and remits offences has the mind planted above injuries; thus he cannot be shot." For building your public image and perfecting your inner personality, tolerating and forgiving your friend is preferred. Though it may sound selfish, doing this will lead to a more harmonious atmosphere and make things better.
As discussed above, tolerance is essential to friendship. That's why I prefer letting a friend mistake for some times to doing something harmful to our friendship.

写的挺好的，值得学习鉴赏！！