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The speaker emphasizes the vital role video camera plays in documentation, while totally deny the significance of written records. It is true that the video camera holds its strong merit, such as accuracy and factuality, at some cases. However, written records, in my view, are still own their irreplaceable status in two respects.

On one hand, written language is a bridge connects the ancient and modern society for it appeared thousands years before the video camera. Learning and researching the written records of a nation is one of the most efficient ways to understand the history and culture of the nation. Witten language, as a essential part of national culture, is an important carrier of the national culture, but also a culture phenomenon. When historians study the culture of a nation with a long history, they usually need the assistant of the written records, which contains contain a nation's way of thinking, sense of worth and culture customs. For supporting examples one need look no further than the Code of Hammourabi of Ancient Babylon and the Analects of Confucius of China, which are crucial in researching the culture and history of these two nations. Quote a Russian saying: A nation without written language like a person without cloths.改为 is like
呃，这一段讲了written records 在历史记录方面的重要性，
但个人认为，这里没有能够体现出其相对于video camera 的优势。Written records对于记录历史固然重要，
但是那些历史用written记录的前提是原来没有video camera. 在这两者同时存在的时候结论还会是written 更好吗？而且20世纪的历史有相当一部分都是用图像记录的了。我觉得你这里应该写一些如果用video 记录历史，有什么不足之处。还有就是观点和下一段有些重复。

On the other hand, written records can express abstract concepts such as philosophy, psychology and ideology. For instance, The Sorrows of Young Werther, a novel written by Goethe, depicts the mental activity of the young Werther in proceed of his first love throughout the whole novel. As we all know, Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche, one of the most remarkable philosophers, greatly impact on the development of philosophy in the future period. In his books, he provides provided a wide range of criticism and discussion in the aspects of religions, morality, modern culture, philosophy and science. It is hard to imagine how he uses(感觉这里用could use要好一些) the video camera to express his thinking to society and humanity. Take bible which is totally recorded in words for example. This central religious text of Judaism and Christianity guide the followers to be kind and sincere by its written language.
这一段的例子很不错～

However, compared with written records, video camera is more intuitionistic, real, comprehensive and dynamic. Indeed, whenever the motivate pictures are important to an event, video camera's advantage is more obviously. A written report can not transmit the horrible sense and sorrow mood of 9.11 attacks or an earthquake like a shortcut of video do. A written report can not replay the excellent musical or a exiting party like a shortcut of video do. And due to the realness and the objectivity of the video camera, documentation of video camera is more adapt to appear as an（evidence不可数）evidence for（加a） lawcourt . For example, the police can hard decide if a vehicle broke the traffic rule or not without the aid of video camera.
嗯，这个例子很不错~

In sum, video camera and written record are both essential ways of documentation. In different condition, different way of documentation will be chosen. When it come(comes) to some cases, these two ways fabric together to note one single event forthey can reinforce and illustrate each other.
最后一句观点很不错，但是这个观点有些空洞了，你并没有在上文中提及怎么个结合运用可以更好的记录。 建议给出例子


逻辑清晰， 语言比较流畅，注意一下一些细节上的地方。加油～！

PS 蓝色是写得好的地方。 绿色是建议， 红色是修改的地方

chenqiyanUID: 2195033

我觉得楼主几个例子用得很精彩，佩服佩服！

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3# chenqiyan

写提纲的时候查了n久资料啊～～

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2# pingko

经你这么一说～自己也觉得第二段有点问题～～

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话说楼主查资料的途径是什么阿??  我都是直接google..  感觉google出来的东西没很泛阿....

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6# qtangtangs

我是自己先想～大概哪些人或事可以用来支持论点～然后再用Google细查一下～觉得维基百科的资料很不错

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呵呵 原来是这样阿..  像这篇我直接就google  vedio camera 了  哈哈.. 果然是个人问题