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It's not rare to see such titles as "When no one can understand you" in newspapers or magizines indicating that there's only one or two people who can speak a specific language in the world. Faced with the situation that more and more languages are in danger of being extinct, what attitudes should the governments have depend on which significance of languages is more worthy for the states whose languages are endangered.

An extinct language refers to a language which no longer has any speakers,
and the reasons why the mass choose to abandon their own languages are various. First of all,the languages that find themselves in the strongest position have all the resources of a national state behind them ;that facetious remark "A language is a dialect with an army and navy" comes uncomfortably close to being true. In most of the cases, languages were overwhelmed by a dominant one. Then, it is the education form generation to generation that determines a language's living state, for what you teach to a child will stay with adults and that's the future. For example, In years past, Americans, Canadians and Australians took native children away from their families to be raised at boarding schools where English rules. In all the Celtic fringes of the British Isles there are bitter memories of children being punished for speaking the wrong language. Even the modern technologies have made contributions to the languages' extinction. Since the television, for instance, develops so rapidly that it has a deep influence on people, especially its abilities to spread information, thus leading to the fact that languages from those strong states could be soon and widely spread to every corner of the world. All above have indeed risen the crisis of many languages nowadays.


Facing the fact, it's naturally for us to take the significance of these endangered or extinct languages seriously. Actually, a language has two functions as the tool for human to communicate and the carrier for nations to pass on their spirit and culture as well as the national identities. It is obvoiously that the former one is the most practicial goal which meets the people's immediate needs in life and production while the latter is a kind of human spiritual wealth for every language is a library of knowledge through its hundreds, even thousands, of years in formation. No matter serve as the knowledge or the natinoal identitis, human spirit can be improved in trying to understand these precious languages

Considering both of the main significances of languages stated above, the governments should balance either importance to make the choice in deciding whether act to protec the dead languages, for the quantities of manpower and materials spent on such actions in education, official affairs, and propaganda are enormous. If the state is strong and rich enough to assure its people prosperous life, the local government certainly should take actions to do so, which not noly can enrich people's spiritual life, but strengthen the national consciousness. In the Republic of Ireland, Gaelic has become a symbol of national identity, and is strongly promoted by the government as the country's second language. Instruction in it is required in all schools. And owing partly to a certain geographical isolation and a strong group identity, over many centuries of close contact with English,
the Welsh have managed to maintain their language. But how about the poor countries, like many in Africa, who haven't solve the basic problems of famine and common diseas threating local people greatly? The governments had better emphasis on developing their production
Moreover, using common languages can, to some extend, help them progress by making connections with more other countries.



By and large, it is not a simple issue for the governments to make choice. Admiteddly, these dead languages are of quite importance in human progress, but for the governments, they have to take responsibilities for leading their people to the best way.
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这格式。。。。俺无语

LX的筒子们辛苦~偶自习去了。。。。T-T万恶的末考啊。。。。。。。。

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发表于 2009-5-28 16:41:38 |只看该作者
hiahia。。
我看看我今天能不能活着来给你改。。
No more words. No more comments.

我想离开。这个浮华的世界。

行走在崩溃的边缘············

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It's not rare to see such titles as "When no one can understand you" in newspapers or magizines indicating that there's only one or two people who can speak a specific language in the world. Faced with the situation that more and more languages are in danger of being extinct, what attitudes should the governments have depend(deponds) on which significance of languages is more worthy for the states whose languages are endangered.

An extinct language refers to a language which no longer has any speakers,
and the reasons why the mass choose to abandon their own languages are various. First of all, the languages that find themselves in the strongest position have all the resources of a national state behind them ; that facetious remark "A language is a dialect with an army and navy" comes uncomfortably close to being true. In most of the cases, languages were overwhelmed by a dominant one. Then, it is the education form generation to generation that determines a language's living state, for what you teach to a child will stay with adults and that's the future. For example, In years past, Americans, Canadians and Australians took native children away from their families to be raised at boarding schools where English rules. In all the Celtic fringes of the British Isles there are bitter memories of children being punished for speaking the wrong language.(觉得这个例子没有讲清楚 Even (觉得不是递进关系)the modern technologies have made contributions to the languages' extinction. Since the television, for instance, develops so rapidly that it has a deep influence on people, especially its abilities to spread information, thus leading to the fact that languages from those strong states could be soon and widely spread to every corner of the world. All above have indeed risen the crisis of many languages nowadays.(觉得传播信息使强势语言加速弱势语言灭亡还是挖深,没有谈及为什么会这样)
Facing the fact, it's naturally for us to take the significance of these endangered or extinct languages seriously. Actually, a language has two functions as the tool for human to communicate and the carrier for nations to pass on their spirit and culture as well as the national identities. It is obvoiously(obvious) that the former one is the most practicial goal which meets the people's immediate needs in life and production while the latter is a kind of human spiritual wealth, for every language is a library of knowledge through its hundreds, even thousands, of years in formation. No matter (whether it )serve(serves) as the knowledge or the natinoal identitis, human spirit can be improved in trying to understand these precious languages

Considering both of the main significances of languages stated above, the governments should balance either importance to make the choice in deciding whether act to protect the dead languages, for the quantities of manpower and materials spent on such actions in education, official affairs, and propaganda are enormous. If the state is strong and rich enough to assure its people prosperous life, the local government certainly should take actions to do so, which not noly can enrich people's spiritual life, but strengthen the national consciousness. In the Republic of Ireland, Gaelic has become a symbol of national identity, and is strongly promoted by the government as the country's second language. Instruction in it is required in all schools. And owing partly to a certain geographical isolation and a strong group identity, over many centuries of close contact with English,
the Welsh have managed to maintain their language
.(不知道写这句话有什么用,觉得有点多余) But how about the poor countries, like many in Africa, who haven't solve the basic problems of famine and common diseases threating local people greatly? The governments had better emphasis on developing their production。 Moreover, using common languages can, to some extend, help them progress by making connections with more other countries.


By and large, it is not a simple issue for the governments to make choice. Admiteddly, these dead languages are of quite importance in human progress, but for the governments, they have to take responsibilities for leading their people to the best way.

米饭的文章很流畅,例子丰富,逻辑没有问题。但是我觉得米饭的问题是例子说得有点让人不太明白,恩,而且例子写完后,加一个对观点的概括会不会好些?(纯个人意见,我这样写惯了)。还有,如果例子涉及无关文章主题的部分可以省掉,虽然写出来会更尊重事实,但这样会给主旨造成一定的误读或者有点点偏。
(不过,不排除我例子没看懂的原因)

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1、那个depend额。。attitude是不可数名词,米饭个白啊,嗯,改得太好了,mark之
2、那个“多余”的例子确实,本来是想再证明一下我前面的观点的,删了也罢

谢谢winning~辛苦~^^

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本帖最后由 tracywlz 于 2009-5-29 23:55 编辑

乍一看开头以为是A175..看来我真的脑子昏了~
It's not rare to see such titles as "When no one can understand you" in newspapers or magizines indicating that there's only one or two people who(感觉有点拗口) can speak a specific language in the world. Faced(facing) with the situation that more and more languages are in danger of being extinct(in danger 和Being extinct写一个就可以了吧。我觉得, what attitudes should the governments depend on which significance of languages is more worthy for the states whose languages are endangered.(从句可真长)(开头真的很不错)
An extinct language refers to a language which no longer has any speakers, and the reasons why the mass choose to abandon their own languages are various. First of all,the languages that find themselves in the strongest position have all the resources of a national state behind them ;that facetious remark "A language is a dialect with an army and navy" comes uncomfortably close to being true. In most of the cases, languages were overwhelmed by a dominant one. Then, it is the education(加 system) form generation to generation that determines a language's living state, for what you teach to a child will stay with adults and that's the future.(?) For example, In years past, Americans, Canadians and Australians took native children away from their families to be raised at boarding schools where English rules. In all the Celtic fringes of the British Isles there are bitter memories of children(可去) being punished for speaking the wrong(local) language. Even the modern technologies have made contributions to the languages' extinction. Since the television, for instance, develops so rapidly that it has a deep influence on people, especially its abilities to spread information, thus leading to the fact that languages from those strong states could be soon and widely spread to every corner of the world. All above have indeed risen the crisis of many languages (加上extinction)nowadays.
Facing the fact, it's naturally for us to take the significance of these endangered or extinct languages seriously. Actually, a language has two functions as the tool for human to communicate and the carrier for nations to pass on their spirit and culture as well as the national identities. It is obvoiously that the former one is the most practicial goal which meets the people's immediate needs in life and production while the latter is a kind of human spiritual wealth for every language is a library of knowledge through its hundreds, even thousands, of years in formation. No matter serve as the knowledge or the natinoal identitis, human spirit can be improved in trying to understand these precious languages
Considering both of the main significances of languages stated above, the governments should balance either importance to make the choice in deciding whether act to protec the dead languages, for the quantities of manpower and materials spent on such actions in education, official affairs, and propaganda are enormous. If the state is strong and rich enough to assure its people prosperous life, the local government certainly should take actions to do so, which not noly can enrich people's spiritual life, but strengthen the national consciousness. In the Republic of Ireland, Gaelic has become a symbol of national identity, and is strongly promoted by the government as the country's second language. Instruction in it is required in all schools. And owing partly to a certain geographical isolation and a strong group identity, over many centuries of close contact with English,
the Welsh have managed to maintain their language. But how about the poor countries, like many in Africa, who haven't solve the basic problems of famine and common diseas threating local people greatly? The governments had better emphasis on developing their production
Moreover, using common languages can, to some extend, help them progress by making connections with more other countries.
By and large,(请教此词) it is not a simple issue for the governments to make choice. Admiteddly, these dead languages are of quite importance in human progress, but for the governments, they have to take responsibilities for leading their people to the best way.(感觉这个诚然有些不清楚)


米饭的文章总是很长很强大。我要是可以写出这么长的就好了~~
那些无法击垮我的东西,只会使我更加强大.

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