0910AW 同主题写作第二期 ARGUMENT173 by leopard2009

leopard2009UID: 2596872

ARGUMENT173
The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

'Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers.'
This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals it replete with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted claims in several aspects.

First of all, the publisher should identify what really caused the poorest sales of the magazine issues featured international news story on their front covers over the past three years. The argument claims that the international news story on their front covers was the reason. However, the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many factors that might influence the sales. The reason may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or readers may actually like international stories in general, but the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes, they hence buy other magazines to read international stories. Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.

Furthermore, the action of competing news-magazines has little meaning to the conclusion unless the publisher is clear of the real causes behind the action or the final results after the action. The competing news-magazines decreasing the number of cover stories of international news over the same period may have realized that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. Besides, even if the competing magazines reduced the number of international cover stories for other easonable reasons, the Newsbeat magazine should compare the sales before with the one after to inspect whether this action really boosted the magazine sales. Without considering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/her conclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making a choice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion. It's rational for us, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

leopard2009UID: 2596872

刚刚看了imong大大写的“对pooh的已判分argument的分析报告前篇：开头 Thesis和TS”，出了一身冷汗：原来自己的开头并没有给出Thesis Sentence。自己先改一下开头。
This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can't directly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of the decreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided.

First of all, the publisher should identify what really caused the poorest sales of the magazine issues featured international news story on their front covers over the past three years. The argument claims that the international news story on their front covers was the reason. However, the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many factors that might influence the sales. The reason may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or readers may actually like international stories in general, but the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes, they hence buy other magazines to read international stories. Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.

Furthermore, the action of competing news-magazines has little meaning to the conclusion unless the publisher is clear of the real causes behind the action or the final results after the action. The competing news-magazines decreasing the number of cover stories of international news over the same period may have realized that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. Besides, even if the competing magazines reduced the number of international cover stories for other easonable reasons, the Newsbeat magazine should compare the sales before with the one after to inspect whether this action really boosted the magazine sales. Without considering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/her conclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making a choice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion. It's rational for us, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

jessicaluluUID: 2471730

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can't（cannot，aw中不能出现can't这种缩写~）directly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities are ruled out and additional information is provided.

First of all, the publisher should identify what really caused the poorest sales of the magazine issues featured international news story on their front covers over the past three years. The argument claims that the international news story on their front covers was the reason. However, the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many factors that might influence the sales. The reason may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or readers may actually like international stories in general, but the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes, they hence buy other magazines to read international stories. Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.

Furthermore, the action of competing news-magazines has little meaning to the conclusion unless the publisher is clear of the real causes behind the action or the final results after the action. The competing news-magazines decreasing the number of cover stories of international news over the same period may have realized that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. Besides, even if the competing magazines reduced the number of international cover stories for other easonable reasons, the Newsbeat magazine should compare the sales before with the one after to inspect whether this action really boosted the magazine sales. Without considering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/her conclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making a choice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion. It's rational for us, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

抱歉，今天事情多，只有明天再来看了~迅速扫了一眼，还不错的样子~

seiranzcc1UID: 2514067

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can't directly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of the decreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided.
不多说，开头简洁，直击主题，我认为很好~

First of all, the publisher should identify what really caused the poorest sales of the magazine issues featured international news story on their front covers over the past three years. （个人感觉用should来提漏洞不是太直接，毕竟是找漏洞嘛，先·提问题，再说should会更好些，不知道你怎么想）The argument claims that the international news story on their front covers was the reason. However, the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many factors that might influence the sales. The reason may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or readers may actually like international stories in general, but the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes, they hence buy other magazines to read international stories. （句子结构有点冗长，可能拆一下会比较好）Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.

Furthermore, the action of competing news-magazines has little meaning to the conclusion unless the publisher is clear of the real causes behind the action or the final results after the action. （意思说的有点绕，是说对手减少国际封面的原因不确定还是什么？。。。呃，我没咋懂）The competing news-magazines decreasing the number of cover stories of international news over the same period may have realized that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources in the future. 这个观点赞同~~~If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. Besides, even if the competing magazines reduced the number of international cover stories for other reasonable reasons, the Newsbeat magazine should compare the sales before with the one after to inspect whether this action really boosted the magazine sales. （。。。好像还是不太懂这句。。）Without considering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/her conclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making a choice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion. （指代稍微不明了，这是FB的那个问题吧？还是别的？还是说的清楚一些比较好）It's rational for us, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.
题目上是不是更强调是“FB的花费升高”？虽然这很可能导致使用国际新闻做封面的花费升高，但是至少还是多针对FB花费升高谈一下。。。（要是又是我理解有问题？请告之哈~~~）

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

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感觉作者在说某些论点的时候不是很直接，我觉得还是直接点出问题所在文章会看起来更简洁，更有说服力~~（个人观点，我们可以多交流~~）

leopard2009UID: 2596872

谢谢seiranzcc1的宝贵意见，我也觉得论点说得不直接。所以重新改了一下，麻烦各位看看是否还有问题。谢谢哈。

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publishershould decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain fromdisplaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance,this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. Adeeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can'tdirectly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of thedecreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided.

First of all, the threshold problem with this argument involves the unreliable claim that the international news story on their front covers was the real cause for the decreased sales. However, the truth is that the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many reasonsthat might influence the sales. The other reason may lie in the fact thatreaders don't like the cover design of international issues, since, aswe know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulatereaders to purchase. Or readers may actually like international storiesin general, but they may be reluctant to buy this magazine because the international stories provided by this magazinewere not fitted to their tastes. Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out thesepossibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not wellgrounded.

Furthermore, the argument unfairly assumes the Newsbeat magazine faced the same situation as the competing magazines, so its publisher should follow them to cut down the number of international stories on covers. The competingnews-magazines, however, may sail in the different boats. They may have encountered the problem that they didn't have theenough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber internationalcorrespondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs,to provide high quality international reports at that time, so theydecided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they getenough resources in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has theenough resources to publish high-quality international stories, andthere is still demand for international stories, it may be the time forNewsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number ofinternational cover stories to expand its market share, since thesupply declined. Besides, even if the Newsbeat and its competitors were walking in the same shoes, the arguer fails to confirm us that the competing magazines have already profitted from reducing the international story covers. It is entirely possible that these competitors have made a mistake to decrease the international covers. As a result, withoutconsidering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/herconclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of theimportant elements for the publisher to take account when making achoice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion, because it's rationalfor the publisher, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis ratherthan only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to displayinternational stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than thetotal opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreignbureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run themagazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is biggerthan the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whetherthe trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are otheralternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovativeway to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessarymanagement expenses. Factors such as these could influence thepublisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, hasseveral flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved byruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and byproviding the evidence explaining the real causes of the competingmagazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of thataction. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysisrather than the sole cost analysis.

jessicaluluUID: 2471730

灰常不好意思，你都写了修订版了我才来看。。。

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can't directly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of the decreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided. 觉得开头比较简洁明快，但是软绵绵的，不够吸引人。 First of all, the threshold problem with this argument involves the unreliable claim that the international news story（stories） on their front covers was（were） the real cause for the decreased sales. However, the truth is that the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many reasons that might influence the sales. The other reason may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or（建议换个单词，what is more/furthermore会不会好一点，有点程度上的渐进） readers may actually like international stories in general, but they may be reluctant to buy this magazine because the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes.（感觉这点说的比较含糊，具体一点，不合什么胃口，我感觉说出来列举一下会好一点） Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.  几个他因找得蛮好，表达也很清晰的。除了最后一个，我觉得写具体一点会更好。 Furthermore, the argument unfairly assumes the Newsbeat magazine faced the same situation as the competing magazines, so its publisher should follow them to cut down the number of international stories on covers. The competing news-magazines, however, may sail in the different boats. They may have encountered the problem that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources （重复出现，建议替换）in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources（再次出现...） to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. （这一部分写得很赞！）Besides, even if the Newsbeat and its competitors were walking in the same shoes, the arguer fails to confirm us that the competing magazines have already profitted from reducing the international story covers. It is entirely possible that these competitors have made a mistake to decrease the international covers. As a result, without considering this information, this arguer can't （cannot）substantiate his/her conclusion. 这一段整体都写得不错！ Last but not least, even though the increasing cost（建议添加of foreign bureaus，否则指代不明） is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making achoice, it alone can't（cannot） suffice to support the conclusion, because it's（it is） rational for the publisher, when making a choice,（建议删掉）  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.这段从经济学角度来写蛮好，虽然我不太懂啥子是opportunity cost...也不懂他和total cost间的关系... In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

1、语法很好，语法错误几乎没发现（不过俺是语法小白，不排除有但没看出来）
2、语言的多样性稍有欠缺，高级词汇使用较少，动词、形容词、以及一些出现频率较高词的替换有待加强（同努力）
3、段落内的阐述还是蛮清晰，尤其是对各种他因的表述很赞的，各个攻击点的选取我个人认为没什么问题的
4、如果LZ没用模版，又是开始写就能达到这个程度，我觉得已经很好了哈！
5、注意aw不能使用can't, it's 这种表达，要用非缩写形式哈~

jessicaluluUID: 2471730

呃，咋又发了两遍。。。我郁闷了。。。删一层哈，不好意思。。。寄托最近克我。。。

leopard2009UID: 2596872

Thanks a lot, Jessica and seiranzcc1

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

我就直接在上一个的基础上改了~

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publisher should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance, this analysis seems a kind of(kind of 或sort of 吧） specific and plausible. A deeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can't directly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of the decreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided.

First of all, the threshold problem with this argument involves the unreliable claim that the international news story（stories） on their front covers was（were） the real cause for the decreased sales. However, the truth is that the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many reasons that might（换成may 或can语气增强一些） influence the sales. The other reason（other reasons) may lie in the fact that readers don't like the cover design of international issues, since, as we know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulate readers to purchase. Or（跟前面的并列的话可以用also） readers may actually like international stories in general, but they may be reluctant to buy this magazine because the international stories provided by this magazine were not fitted to their tastes.（感觉这点说的比较含糊，具体一点，不合什么胃口，我感觉说出来列举一下会好一点） Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out these possibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not well grounded.  几个他因找得蛮好，表达也很清晰的。除了最后一个，我觉得写具体一点会更好。

Furthermore, the argument unfairly assumes the Newsbeat magazine faced the same situation as the competing magazines, so its publisher should follow them to cut down the number of international stories on covers. The competing news-magazines, however, may sail in the different boats（很好）. They may have encountered the problem that they didn't have the enough necessary resources（有些啰嗦，the shortage of necessary resources), such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs, to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources （重复出现，建议替换）in the future. If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources（再次出现...） to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. （这一部分写得很赞！）Besides, even if the Newsbeat and its competitors were walking in the same shoes, the arguer fails to confirm us that the competing magazines have already profitted from reducing the international story covers. It is entirely possible that these competitors have made a mistake to decrease the international covers. As a result, without considering this information, this arguer can't （cannot）substantiate his/her conclusion.
(这一段我有个疑问，先说两家公司不一样，在说即使他们一样，竞争者降低国际新闻不一定有良好效果，是不是反过来说好一些，即使竞争者取得了好的效果，两家公司不一样也不能采用）
Last but not least, even though the increasing cost（建议添加of foreign bureaus，否则指代不明） is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making achoice, it alone can't（cannot） suffice to support the conclusion, because it's（it is） rational for the publisher, when making a choice,（建议删掉）  to make the benefit-cost analysis （at the same time)rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run the magazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.这段从经济学角度来写蛮好，虽然我不太懂啥子是opportunity cost...也不懂他和total cost间的关系...,我也不是很懂。。。

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved by ruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and by providing the evidence explaining the real causes of the competing magazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of that action. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysis rather than the sole cost analysis.

注意aw不能使用can't, it's 这种表达，要用非缩写形式哈~

二月蓝UID: 2643877

This argument presents three reasons supporting that the publishershould decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain fromdisplaying such stories on their magazines covers. At first glance,this analysis seems a kind of specific and plausible. Adeeper investigation, however, reveals that these three reasons can'tdirectly lead to the conclusion unless other possiblities of thedecreased sales are ruled out and additional information is provided.

First of all, the threshold problem with this argument involves the unreliable claim that the international news story on their front covers was the real cause for the decreased sales. However, the truth is that the story on a magazine cover is only one of the many reasonsthat might influence the sales. The other reason may lie in the fact thatreaders don't like the cover design of international issues, since, aswe know, attractive magazine covers are more likely to stimulatereaders to purchase. Or readers may actually like international storiesin general, but they may be reluctant to buy this magazine because the international stories provided by this magazinewere not fitted to their tastes. Unless the arguer recognizes and rules out thesepossibilities of the decreasing sales, his/her reason is not wellgrounded.

Furthermore, the argument unfairly assumes the Newsbeat magazine faced the same situation as the competing magazines, so its publisher should follow them to cut down the number of international stories on covers. The competing news-magazines, however, may sail in the different boats. They may have encountered the problem that they didn't have the enough necessary resources, such as the high-caliber international correspondents, or excellent editors focusing on international affairs,to provide high quality international reports at that time, so they decided to concentrate on the domestic news for a while until they get enough resources in the future.我觉得这些的有点冗长 If the Newsbeat's publisher has the enough resources to publish high-quality international stories, and there is still demand for international stories最好可以找些词替换, it may be the time for Newsbeat to increase, instead of decreasing, the number of international cover stories to expand its market share, since the supply declined. Besides, even if the Newsbeat and its competitors were walking in the same shoes, the arguer fails to confirm us that the competing magazines have already profitted from reducing the international story covers. It is entirely possible that these competitors have made a mistake to decrease the international covers. As a result, withoutconsidering this information, this arguer can't substantiate his/herconclusion.

Last but not least, even though the increasing cost is one of the important elements for the publisher to take account when making a choice, it alone can't suffice to support the conclusion, because it's rational for the publisher, when making a choice,  to make the benefit-cost analysis rather than only the cost analysis. If the total benefit to display international stories on the magazine covers is still bigger than the total opportunity cost, even after the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus has increased, the publisher should continue to run themagazine in the same way. Even if the total opportunity cost is bigger than the benefit, the magazine Newsbeat still needs to decide whether the trend of increasing cost will continue, and whether there are other alternatives to cut down the total cost, such as through the innovative way to reorganize the company structure, or by reducing the unnecessary management expenses. Factors such as these could influence the publisher's choice and undermine the arguer's explanations.个人觉得这段写的比较疲软，MEMO从增加了COST推出不应该浪费钱放在INITERNATIONAL NEWS上，应该减少关注度。我们应该讨论的是他的推论过程错了，而不是NEWSBEAT是不是应该增加COST。错在从NEWSBEAT的做法推出我们杂志将来的态度，而NEWSBEAT的做法是现实了
In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, hasseveral flaws as discussed above. The argument could be improved byruling out the other possible reasons of the declined sells, and byproviding the evidence explaining the real causes of the competingmagazines' international story cover cut and the final outcomes of thataction. It could be further improved by doing the benefit-cost analysisrather than the sole cost analysis.
还是那句，句子写的很漂亮的，羡慕

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组长和二月蓝谢谢你们哈。

二月蓝，探讨一下哈。我最后一点错误攻击的是论点：因为成本增加就应该减少国际新闻的封面数。我认为，要做一个理论的决策，不能只考虑成本，很重要还要考虑收益。如果成本增加了，但是还是收益大于成本，不一定就应该减少国际新闻的封面数。或者即使成本大于收益，也不一定要削减国际新闻的封面数，还要考虑，这是不是暂时的情况，是不是有代价更低的削减成本的方法，等等。