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题目：
Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

The speaker asserts that as fewer and fewer people speak the world’s lesser-known languages, they are being lost and the government of countries in which these languages are spoken should take actions to prevent them from being extinct. I agree insofar as a nation’s indigenous languages
should not be forgotten, however, I think that there are many reasons lead the lesser-known languages to extinct situation, besides fewer people use them. And all of the world should take part in the action to protect them.

UNESCO has reported that half of the 6,7000 languages spoken today are in danger of disappearing before the century ends. And in these 6,7000 languages , only four percent of them are spoken by ninety-seven percent people in the world, while the other ninety-six percent languages are used by only three percent population. Thus, protecting the endangered languages is quite a hard work, but is very important.

The reasons that made the lesser-known languages in to dangers are many. Not only the surface as the speaker point out that fewer and fewer use them, but also the depth reasons such as the more and more communications between different groups, the mainstream culture’s forcing, the economic, religious and education under the globalization. An anthropologist said that in the contemporary society, the loss of lesser-known languages is a tendency, which can’t be converted. So should we continue to do our best to prevent the endangered languages from being disappear? The answer is affirmative as the losing of the various languages would bring
amount of bad results, such as the loss of quantities of arts that are expressed through the indigenous language, the loss of unique cultural, historical, and ecological knowledge, the loss of their original ethnic and cultural identify and so on.

For the reasons and consequences above, we should conserve the endangered languages via all of the aspects. First of all, conserving the endangered languages is the duty all of world, not only for the countries in which use these languages .It needs every country pays its attention and participates in. Secondly, government is the leading role in this action. Government could take useful and powerful measures, for instance, giving the financial assistance, carrying out the bilingual teaching and so forth. Thirdly, many cultural organizations should generalize the knowledge about the endangered languages and call on the commonalty to join in action. At last, the group who speak the lesser-known languages should attach importance to their own languages protection.

In the sum, lots of languages are facing the dangers to be extinct and the reason for that is mainly the effect of globalization and it’s so important that all of the world should play a role in the action of preventing them from being extinct. It will be valuable to our human’s various culture, creativities and future progress.


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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

The speaker asserts that as fewer and fewer people speak the world’s lesser-known languages, they are being lost (这一句和as对应不上吧)and the government of countries in which these languages are spoken should take actions to prevent them from being extinct. I agree insofar as a nation’s indigenous languages should not be forgotten, however, I think that there are many reasons lead（leading） the lesser-known languages to extinct situation, besides (the one that)fewer people use them. And all of the world should take part in the action to protect them.(我想这篇文章着重在于为什么要保护这些语言灭绝，而不是分析它灭绝的原因)

UNESCO has reported that half of the 6,7000 languages spoken today are in danger of disappearing before the century ends. And in these 6,7000 languages , only four percent of them are spoken by ninety-seven percent people in the world, while the other ninety-six percent languages are used by only three percent population. Thus, protecting the endangered languages is quite a hard work, but is very important.（本段的第一句说了语言正在灭绝，然后得出结论我们要去保护它，显得是套用了循环论证，你可以接下来说，语言的灭绝带来了文明和历史的衰败和消亡，并使科技失去了承载的载体，使文化失去了多样性等等不安全的因素，于是我们应该去防止它的灭绝）

The reasons that made the lesser-known languages in to dangers are many. Not only the surface（表面原因？） as the speaker point out that fewer and fewer use them, but also the depth reasons such as the more and more communications between different groups, the mainstream culture’s forcing, the economic, religious and education under the globalization. An anthropologist said that in the contemporary society, the loss of lesser-known languages is a tendency, which can’t be converted. （上半截说消失的原因，下半截说我们应该保护它，好像没有什么逻辑吧）So should we continue to do our best to prevent the endangered languages from being disappear? The answer is affirmative as the losing of the various languages would bring
amount of bad results, such as the loss of quantities of arts that are expressed through the indigenous language, the loss of unique cultural, historical, and ecological knowledge, the loss of their original ethnic and cultural identify and so on.

For the reasons and consequences above, we should conserve the endangered languages via all of the aspects. First of all, conserving the endangered languages is the duty all of world, not only for the countries in which use these languages .It needs every country pays its attention and participates in. Secondly, government is the leading role in this action. Government could take useful and powerful measures, for instance, giving the financial assistance, carrying out the bilingual teaching and so forth. Thirdly, many cultural organizations should generalize the knowledge about the endangered languages and call on the commonalty to join in action. At last, the group who speak the lesser-known languages should attach importance to their own languages protection.

In the sum, lots of languages are facing the dangers to be extinct and the reason for that is mainly the effect of globalization and it’s so important that all of the world should play a role in the action of preventing them from being extinct. It will be valuable to our human’s various culture, creativities and future progress.

我觉得写文章语言是很重要，但是想GRE这样的考试恐怕逻辑和强有力的论证更能加分哦！
加油！

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发现作者对小词的掌握很丰富，学习啦，呵呵o(∩_∩)o…


The speaker asserts that as fewer and fewer people speak the world’s lesser-known languages, they are being lost and the government of countries in which these languages are spoken should take actions to prevent them from being extinct.（冗长且句式结构单调，建议改写）
I agree insofar as(用得好)
a nation’s indigenous languages should not be forgotten, however, I think that there are many reasons lead the lesser-known languages to extinct situation, besides fewer people use them. And all of the world should take part in the action to protect them.
UNESCO has reported that half of the 6,7000 languages spoken today are in danger of disappearing before the century ends. And in these 6,7000 languages , only four percent of them are spoken by ninety-seven percent people in the world, while the other ninety-six percent languages are used by only three percent population. Thus, protecting the endangered languages is quite a hard work, but is very important.
The reasons that made the lesser-known languages in to dangers are many.（句式有头重脚轻之感：Various reasons contribute to the lesser-know languages in to dangers） Not only the surface (用superficial更好 ) as the speaker point out that fewer and fewer use them, but also the depth reasons such as the more and more communications between different groups, the mainstream culture’s forcing, the economic, religious and education under the globalization. An anthropologist said that in the contemporary society, the loss of lesser-known languages is a tendency, which can’t be converted. So should we continue to do our best to prevent the endangered languages from being disappear? The answer is affirmative as the losing of the various languages would bring amount of bad results, such as the loss of quantities of arts that are expressed through the indigenous language, the loss of unique cultural, historical, and ecological knowledge, the loss of their original ethnic and cultural identify and so on.
(论述不错)
For the reasons and consequences above, we should conserve the endangered languages via（用得好） all of the aspects. First of all, conserving the endangered languages is the duty all of world, not only for the countries in which use these languages .It needs every country pays its attention and participates in. Secondly, government is the leading role in this action. Government could take useful and powerful measures, for instance, giving the financial assistance, carrying out the bilingual teaching and so forth. Thirdly, many cultural organizations should generalize the knowledge about the endangered languages and call on the commonalty to join in action. At last, the group who speak the lesser-known languages should attach importance to （用得好）their own languages protection.
In the sum, lots of languages are facing the dangers to be extinct and the reason for that is mainly the effect of globalization and it’s so important that all of the world should play a role in the action of preventing them from being extinct. It will be valuable to our human’s various culture, creativities and future progress.（重申主旨）