第一次作业 ISSUE 13 【A DREAM】 by 吴虑

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处女作，用时三个多小时，开始写的时候无话可写，看了看范文，大概了解一下。字数感觉有点少，而且有点恶心...
不过第一次吗~努力！

题目：
Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.


There is no denying that where there is a different language, there is an unique culture. If we want to acquaint a civilization, we should learn the language which is its mother language. In addition, we also can study the history about a region from the language. However, more and more sociologist notice that many of the world’s lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. It means a culture disappears, if a language is lost.

The factor of a lesser-known language being lost is various. The people, who live in a region where has a few people, must communicate with other region’s people, so they must learn another language which is spoken widely. Because of globalization, an increasing number of youngsters, whose language is the lesser-known language, decide to speak a world widely language, such as English, so as to a decreasing number of people learn and speak the lesser-known language. In addition, some nations were invaded by other countries a lot of years ago, this may result in that these nations’ mother language were lost.

Now, the situation is not that bad, the government must take some measures to prevent such languages from being extinct. Where a language is on the brink of extinction, the primary task of the government there is to offer sufficient financial support and manpower to make record and study of the losing language as soon as possible. For example, the special department can be established to notice and study the losing language. Encouraging youngsters to speak their mother language which is lesser-known language and taking some jobs which need using the losing language is serviceable. Furthermore, the governments can encourage the teachers to use their mother language in teaching.

Any government which is bland to this point may pay a heavy price. Individuals also have the obligations to protect the lesser-known language from being lost.




写的相当垃圾，字数太少是最恶心的...而且n多单词都是现查的...


大家就大刀阔斧的狂批吧！！！

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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.


There is no denying that where there is a different language, there is an unique culture. If we want to acquaint a civilization, we should learn the language which is its original language. In addition, we also can study the history about a region from the language. However, more and more sociologists notice that many of the world’s lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. It means that if a language will be lost, its distinct culture disappears.(多用些被动语态，比较客观公正，表达思想还是很清楚的，但是多积累一些句型)

It is obviously that a lesser-known language is being lost. The people, who live in a region where has a few people, should communicate with other region(该词用的过于频繁)s’ people, so they must learn another language which is spoken widely. Because of globalization, an increasing number of youngsters, whose language is the lesser-known language, decide to speak a world widely language, such as English, so as to a decreasing number of people learn and speak the lesser-known language. Moreover, some nations were invaded by other countries a lot of years ago, this may result in that these nations’ mother language were lost.(把文章写长点，可以多举几个例子，用证据证明自己的观点)

Now, the situation is not that bad, the government must take some measures to prevent such languages from being extinct. Where a language is on the brink of extinction, the primary task of the government there is to offer sufficient financial support and manpower to make record and study of the losing language as soon as possible. （句型不错，与第一段的句型是一样的，要换个比较好哦）For example, the special department can be established to notice and study the losing language. Encouraging youngsters to speak their mother language which is lesser-known language and taking some jobs which need using the losing language is serviceable.（一般英语遵循头轻较重的原则，主语谓语稍微可以短点） Furthermore, the governments can encourage the teachers to use their mother language in teaching.

Any government which is bland to this point may pay a heavy price. Individuals also have the obligations to protect the lesser-known language from being lost.


写得短了点，慢慢来，我觉得单词量加大点，句型平常积累一下，一些连接词更能体现你的逻辑性，一般建议用一下大正小负或者是小负大正或者是平衡观点的原则（对应一些题目），主要是字数一下就提上去了，而且两方面论述清楚了，得高分不难。

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刚刚在WORD文档里改的，一些用红色的标注忘了在这里面用了，再发一贴
There is no denying that where there is a different language, there is an unique culture. If we want to acquaint a civilization, we should learn the language which is its original language. In addition, we also can study the history about a region from the language. However, more and more sociologists notice that many of the world’s lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. It means that if a language will be lost, its distinct culture disappears.(多用些被动语态，比较客观公正，表达思想还是很清楚的，但是多积累一些句型)

It is obviously that a lesser-known language is being lost. The people, who live in a region where has a few people, should communicate with other region(该词用的过于频繁)s’ people, so they must learn another language which is spoken widely. Because of globalization, an increasing number of youngsters, whose language is the lesser-known language, decide to speak a world widely language, such as English, so as to a decreasing number of people learn and speak the lesser-known language. Moreover, some nations were invaded by other countries a lot of years ago, this may result in that these nations’ mother language were lost.(把文章写长点，可以多举几个例子，用证据证明自己的观点)

Now, the situation is not that bad, the government should（客观）take some measures to prevent such languages from being extinct. Where a language is on the brink of extinction, the primary task of the government there is to offer sufficient financial support and manpower to make record and study of the losing language as soon as possible. （句型不错，与第一段的句型是一样的，要换个比较好哦）For example, the special department can be established to notice and study the losing language. Encouraging youngsters to speak their mother language which is lesser-known language and taking some jobs which need using the losing language is serviceable.（一般英语遵循头轻较重的原则，主语谓语稍微可以短点） Furthermore, the governments can encourage the teachers to use their mother language in teaching.

Any government which is bland to this point may pay a heavy price. Individuals also have the obligations to protect the lesser-known language from being lost.结尾奖自己的观点总结一下就会写长的

cherry_916UID: 2621641

刚刚在WORD文档里改的，一些用红色的标注忘了在这里面用了，再发一贴
There is no denying that where there is a different language, there is an unique culture. If we want to acquaint a civilization, we should learn the language which is its original language. In addition, we also can study the history about a region from the language. However, more and more sociologists notice that many of the world’s lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. It means that if a language will be lost, its distinct culture disappears.(多用些被动语态，比较客观公正，表达思想还是很清楚的，但是多积累一些句型)

It is obviously that a lesser-known language is being lost. The people, who live in a region where has a few people, should communicate with other region(该词用的过于频繁)s’ people, so they must learn another language which is spoken widely. Because of globalization, an increasing number of youngsters, whose language is the lesser-known language, decide to speak a world widely language, such as English, so as to a decreasing number of people learn and speak the lesser-known language. Moreover, some nations were invaded by other countries a lot of years ago, this may result in that these nations’ mother language were lost.(把文章写长点，可以多举几个例子，用证据证明自己的观点)

Now, the situation is not that bad, the government should（客观）take some measures to prevent such languages from being extinct. Where a language is on the brink of extinction, the primary task of the government there is to offer sufficient financial support and manpower to make record and study of the losing language as soon as possible. （句型不错，与第一段的句型是一样的，要换个比较好哦）For example, the special department can be established to notice and study the losing language. Encouraging youngsters to speak their mother language which is lesser-known language and taking some jobs which need using the losing language is serviceable.（一般英语遵循头轻较重的原则，主语谓语稍微可以短点） Furthermore, the governments can encourage the teachers to use their mother language in teaching.

Any government which is bland to this point may pay a heavy price. Individuals also have the obligations to protect the lesser-known language from being lost.结尾奖自己的观点总结一下就会写长的