issue13 argument173

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I13"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

Do the country need to take some action for the purpose of preventing some lesser-known language from extinguishing? The speaker claim so, for thees kind of languages less known but of some values. I agree with the speaker, while undo action of the prevention might be a kind of waste no matter money or manual forces.
Some people may argue that it is a kind of waste resources to protect the lesser-known language. They claims that the outcome of the language is for the communication with each other, and this is the basic usage of a language. When the earth become a earth village because of the contemporiral technology such as telephone, internet, airplane, and so forth. The communication-science, economic, and even political-among nations is more and more frequency, the uniforming of the language is crutical for every one, even machine of translation has been invented. It is totally different when two persons with different languages communicate from the two persons with the same language. With the global communication more and more frequency, more and more language will come to the arank of less-known language, so it will impossible and needless to protect this kind of language. And the prevention of the less-knowen language will cost some money, some human forces and other resources which should be used for some other more meaningful programs such as the environmental problems, some science researches and so forth. They may consider that protecting the diminishing animals is of more meaning than this action. For after all, the animals diminishing is of great value which we should cherish, such as the important roles in the ecnomical balance, and some gene of great importances and so forth.
The reason that we should protect the language which is diminishing is that they are of great value which can not be replaced by other popular language. Every nations and peoples have their own great and prominent history, which is not only considered as the treasure of their own but also the whole world as well. And we know that the language as a tool of communication, recording and so forth from ancient to nowadays went unchanged. The language is different from time to time, even only kind of language is changed with the time. Many languages might diminish or even extinct with the time. And when the language is lost as fewer and fewer people speak, and finally disappear from the word, the culture recorded in this language will disappear at the same time. For example, it is ironical that when some archealogist unearth some record with great money, amnual force only to finding that the language of the record is unfamilar with any one alive in the world. Besides archeologist, it is also necessary for historiests to investigate the historical events, such as what is the earlist time of the huamn experience the earthqueak, the first time the human being know the treatment of some disease, and the first time of some epidemics occur in the world. No one can live for thousands of years, and no one can remember the exact things haspeened in a time but the record. With the disappear of some language, the recording of these important event extinguished with it. Every want to record something which is cruticial for the time, but it will of no meaning when the recording can not understan by the latter generation.
In sum, the lesser-spoken language is of some value which deserve the resources, at least to some extent. The great historical culture and civilization should be known and learned by us. The global communication is also a trend in the future, and it might be that more and more languages will become less and less. Considering that the great historical civilization, we should try our best to protect the less-known language just for thanking our predaters which creat the bright history as the latter generation.
A173The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."

In this argument, the arguer claims that we should restrain on instead of emphasis on displaying stories on international news. To support the conclusion, the arguer claim that the poorest-selling magazine issues are covered by the international news for three years, and the competing magazine decrease the contention of the international news. The arguer also claim that the cost of maintaing foreign bureaus to report on the international news is increasing. the argument seems sound and convinible at the first glance, while a close scrutiny of the argument reveals some vritical flaws which render it unpersuasive.
The arguer assumes a causual relationship between the decreasing of the sale and the contention of the magazine covers. Besed on the mere fact that the poorest-selling magazine issues are those featured international news on their front cover, the arguer unfairly claim that it is the international news that cause the low level of the sale. While the arguer overlooks some other facors which is also cruticial for the sale of the magazine, such as the the price of the magazine, the quality of the magazine, the spreading of the magazine and so forth. As we all known, the contention of a book is just a factors we considered contribute to our decision. If a book with broad contention and deep analysis sold with a high price and can not buy easily, it is highly possibly that we will not buy the book either. It is highly possible that the magazine with great international news is too expensive or can not be carried to the approprate places for some reasons such as traffic or so.
The arguer also present the increasing cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report the news as a strong proof to support the conclusion. it seem that the international news deserves to be restrained upon which the arguer lies emphasis. While the arguer fails to provide complete information for a fair compararition. Lacking of the information about the cost of other part of the section, the arguer can not convince me that the international news should decrease. It is possible that the cost of other part of the magazine is increase for some reasons such as the salary of the worker increase or ecnomic inflation or the prolong of the work time and so forth. Before ruling out these factors, suspetion will still cast the credibility of the argument.
The arguer also advise decrease the percentage of the international news for our competer decrease the percentage of it, while provide no information about our opponers. If the sales of the competiter decrease more drasticlly, this will prove the news of the international is of good use in turn. lacking evidence to support the assumption that the decreasing of the international news result to the increaseing sales, the arguer fails to persuade me to believe the conclusion.
In sum, the argument is logically unconvincing, a further consideration with rational and reasonable analysis and evaluation is needed for a further conclusion. more detailed sureveys and important issues should be taken.

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issue  116,205,197,6,49,227,63,10,147,241
issue116
I agree with the speaker
Education can benefit from the global networks. From network, global univercity, and for educationcal communication, it is more convenience than ever before.
Politics also benefit from the global networks. The communication among nations come true, and many problems solved more easily for the help of other nations.
The development of the network can also contribute to the increasing level of art. The artist can communicate with each other easily, can search and enjoy the products of some writer, painter, singer and so forth more easily.
The science can also get profit from the global network, the cummunication among scientist, doing research, we can search the research result more easily, and can find the lattest result
issue205
I agree with the speaker.
the information we get is much more than before, we can not be expertise even in one field.
Every field of the science, anthropology are changing all the time, we have to receive the new information to keep the same step with the society.
We also should demystify the truth and false of the new information, we can not receive all the information .
issue197
I agree with the speaker.
Undersome circumstances, the well-being of one country is based on the well- being of other countries. Like in the war time, one countries will protect the safe of the neighboring countries.
Under some circumstances, the development of the country shuld sacrifice the other countries.
We should take every advantages to develop our countries, no matter the condition of the other cuntries.
issue6
I do not agree with the speaker.
It is true that the trend of the youth can represent the contemporary culture, to some extent, after all they are more easily to accept new information.
The trend of mid-year also compose the contemporary culture, for they are the elite of the society.
We should evaluate every aspect of the culture, they all compse the contemporary culture.
issue49
I do not agree with the speaker.
It is true that we can better understand the point the writer, artist lies emphasis on, for their purpose is to have the point known by others ignoring other things.
While to better understand the society, the maginative works is less better than literaly works, for they record the event literally without changing.
We should evaluate the significant from other factors other than what are the type of the work.
issue227
I do not agree with the speaker.
It is true that some important result of the acadamic field are found by independent thinker., while this condition is rare.
Mostly, it is these experts who know much about the field based on the theories already established that found the important result.
We should consider the theories established by the predaters to investigate, and respect the result of the experiment rather than the experience.
issue63
I do not agree with the speaker.
By compararing with the two distictly different culture, we can understand one culture better, for we can know many tiny aspect which should been ignored by us.
Without knowing other culture, we can also analyse one culture well such as our own culture.
By observeing carefully, we can understand one culturre well, and by comparing with other culture, we can understand better.
issue10
I do not agree with the sapeaker
even though the major cites preserve the traditional culture well, it should not been considered to be a reason to receive the finicial support.
The down town, country can also preserve the traditional culture well, for they are effected by the global organization less.
The major cites should receive the finicial support for other reasons.
issue147
I do not agree with the speaker
Under some circumstances tradition and modernization are conflict.
Well, it is possible that the tradition is also morden.
We should have the two compatible to our best, when they are conflict, we should consider which is more important.
issue241
I agree with the speaker partly.
It is true that the theories of one should be judged by the later generation, for many theories considered wrong in their time proved right later.
One might also judged by their contemporaries for they knoe more detail about them, which promied the objective of the judgement.
We should combine them totally, when we want to judge of the person, we should collect more detail about the person, and about the theories advocates of the person, we should leave them to the later generation.

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a 80,82,83,92,93,104,115,116,121,122,126,130,138,139,148,170,183,196,197,231提纲
argument80
The arguer assumes a causual relationship where only a correlation was indicated. based on the mere fact that the water with C5 to the place and the incidence of the allergic and rashes increase, the arguer unfaily assumes that the former cause the latter.
The arguer lies too much emphasis on the cost of the purified the water with C5 while fails to provide the cost of dringking fountain.
The arguer fails to provide other slternatives to solve the problems.
argument82
There is an overwheming healthy disadvantages of wood upon which the arguer lies emphasis, while the compararition is incomplete and selective, the arguer fails to provide the problems which the charcoal cause.
The arguer compare the price and the heat produce between the charcoal and wood, while fails to provide the exact number respective.
The arguer assume the wood is primary used for the fuel while fails to provide evidence to support the assumption, it is highly [ossible that most wood is used for
Furniture, and so forth.
argument83
we do not know the exact information about the survey, who does the research, who are the respondents, how does they analyze the report and so forth.
Tha arguer assume that the profit undecline means that the profit will increase without any evidence support the cruticial assumption.
The arguer lies too much emphasis on the kind of the industry while ignore many other factors which also cruticial for the profit of an industry.
argument92
We do not know how the survey conducted, obviously if the survey is based on self report, the result will be foreseeble.
The conclude is based on the report of the working parents, while the arguer assumes that these parents can represent the whole parents as a whole. the arguer fails to provide the percentage of the working parents in the whole parents.
The arguer assumes a causual relationship between the absences and the productivity, while fails to provide the evidence to support the conclusion.
argument93
It seem an overwheming advantages of A upon which the arguer lies emphasis on,while the compararition is incomplete and selective. the arguer fails to provide the exact information of the two buildings.
The arguer lies the conclusion primary on the comparition, while the comparation is selective. the arguer fails to provide respective information for a fair comparition. The arguer might overlooke the inherent different between the two buildings and the two companies.
The example the arguer take is ten years ago, we have no evidence that the two companies keep still like ten years ago.
argument104
The arguer lies the conclusion primary on the compararition upon which the arguer lies emphasis on, while the comparition is incomplete and selective. the arguer fails to provide respective information of the two devices.
The arguer lies too much emphasis on the advantages of the new devices and claims that all the hospital should use this devices while ignor many other factors which also should be considered.
argument115
We do not know exact information about the survey, such as the respondents’ job, how does the survey coonducted, and so forth.
The arguer assumes that the price is the only factor which decide the atitude of the clothes, while ignoring many other factors which halso affect the sale.
The arguer also indicate that the S city’s clothing industry will at risk from the esult of the survey. The arguer fails to provide information that the nationwide survey is approprite for the local as well.
argument116
The arguer relies the conclusion primary on the comparition, while the arguer fails to take theinherent different between the two cities.
The arguer assumes a causual relationship between the policy and the profit where a correlation was indicated, the arguer fails to consider other factors which also cause the increasing of the profit.
It seem an overwheming advantages of the high-low policy upon which tha arguer lies emphasis, while the arguer fails to provide the information of the everyday low price for a fair comparition.
argument121
the arguer assume that the more time they retreat, the better of the effect, while no evidence support the cruticial assumption.
The arguer claim that the new employee benefit more from the program, while provide no evidence that the experienced employee benefit less than the new ones.
The arguer also contribute the increasing of the effenciency to the program, while no evidence support the causual relationship.
argument122
The arguer fails to consider other ways to reduce the cost of electricity. That either build a plant or continue the program, the arguer preclude other alternatives.
The arguer assumes a causual relatiosnhsip between increasing of cost of the electricity and the defiency of the reinburse. While no evidence suport the assumption.
The arguer claim that building a plant will cost more while provideing no statistic information to support the conclusion.
argument126
the conclusion relies primary on the study, while the arguer fails to provide the exact informaion abut the study which convince us, such as how the study do, the health condition of the two groups, and so forth.
The arguer ignor that the survey does not take that different kind people have different habit, in other word, the arguer fails to take the age, job, sex and so forth into consideration.
The arguer assumes that the sleeping time is the major reason that cause the health condition, while ignor other factors also affect the health.
argument130
The arguer assums a causual relationship between the homeowners will repair or improve their house and the increasing sales of existing house, while no evidence suport the assumption.
The arguer also assums that they would have enough money to buy the new house, in other word, the arguer assums that costums buy the existing house not because they do not have enough money., while it is highly possible that just because they do not have money to buy new house.
The arguer also assume these bought existing house are the same ones who like to improve themselves, while no evidence support the conclusion.
argument138
the arguer relies the conclusion primary on the result of the survey while provide no evidence that these repondents are the representive of the whole students.
The conduction of the survey is unapproprite to receive the real attitude of the students, for some students who would like to take the bus but not like to pledge.
The arguer also fails to provide other information to support the conclusion, like whether there many students take the bus which is more convinced than the survey.
argument139
It seems an overwheming advantages of home teaching upon which the arguer lies emphasis on, while the arguer fails to provide respective sective information for a fair comparition, for the score system is totally different.
The arguer also emphasis too much on the advantages while fails to provide the disadvantages of home teaching with the school teaching
The arguer also assume that the O univercity can represent the general condition of the whole nation, while provide no evidence to support the assumption.
arguement148
The arguer present the nationwide survey as a strong proof to support the conclusion, while no evidence to support the cruticial assumption.
Thearguer aslo consider the attitude of one of their policy as the attiitude of the mayor, while no evidence support the assumption.
The arguer also queto the result of the survey that many people oppose thepolicy to support the conclusion, while the survey is incomplete to be informative. The arguer assume the respondents can represent the whole people.
argument170
The arguer assumes that the constums are willing to pay as much as G, while no evidence to support the conclusion, it is highly possilble costums still like G rather than C, even though they know there is no bacterie in the oyster.
The arguer assume a causual relationship between the bacteria and the decreasing of the oyster sale, where only a correlation was indicated.
The arguer also indicate that the price will still high after the process devised, while ignoring many factors which also contribute to the changing of the price.
argument183
The arguer lies the conclusion primary on the result of the studey, while the survey is incomplete to be informative, for the arguer fails to provide the exact number of the jobs needed and the jobs unneeded, the kind of the companies, and so forth.
The arguer also predict that the program will have laid-off less painful than it once was, while fails to provide what is the program like, what does the programs do, and so forth.
argument196
the arguer assumes a causual relationship between the negative images of businessman and the negative roles of businessman on the television where only a correlation was indicated.
The arguer also present the result of the survey as a strong proof to support the conclusion, while fails to provide evidence that the respondents are the representive of the whole producters.
argument197
The arguer assumes that the respondents of the survey can answer the question which has unclarified for 150 years, while no evidence support the assumption.
The arguer also assums the respondents are the representatives of the whole students faculty and so forth.
The arguer also pay too much attention on the project, while ignor many factors which affect the possibility of the programs like the finicial support, the way to connect with the graduate students, and so forth.
argument231
The arguer lies too much emphasis on the art while ignores many aspect we should considered to evaluate the school board.
The conclusion relies on the comparition of the drama director former and now, while fails to provide respective sectific information for the fair comparition, we have no idea about the director now.
The arguer also contribute the number of student take part in the dram club to the school board.
The arguer assumes the drama club can represent the art as a whole, while providing no evidence to support the conclusion.

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A173The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."

In this argument, the arguer claims that we should restrain on instead of emphasis on displaying stories on international news. To support the conclusion, the arguer claim that the poorest-selling magazine issues are covered by the international news for three years, and the competing magazine decrease the contention of the international news. The arguer also claim that the cost of maintaing foreign bureaus to report on the international news is increasing. the argument seems sound and convinible at the first glance, while a close scrutiny of the argument reveals some vritical flaws which render it unpersuasive.（句与句之间衔接的不太流畅）


The arguer assumes a causual relationship between the decreasing of the sale and the contention of the magazine covers. Based on the mere fact that the poorest-selling magazine issues are those featured international news on their front cover, the arguer unfairly claim that it is the international news that cause the low level of the sale. While the arguer overlooks some other factors which is also crutial for the sale of the magazine, such as the the price of the magazine, the quality of the magazine, the spreading of the magazine and so forth. As we all known, the contention of a book is just a factors we considered contribute to our decision. If a book with broad contention and deep analysis sold with a high price and can not buy easily, it is highly possibly that we will not buy the book either. It is highly possible that the magazine with great international news is too expensive or can not be carried to the appropriate places for some reasons such as traffic or so.（错字太多，建议自己现在word上改一下，）
The arguer also presents the increasing cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report the news as a strong proof to support the conclusion. it seem that the international news deserves to be restrained upon which the arguer lies emphasis. While the arguer fails to provide complete information for a fair compararition. Lacking of the information about the cost of other part of the section, the arguer can not convince me that the international news should decrease. It is possible that the cost of other part of the magazine is increase for some reasons such as the salary of the worker increase or ecnomic inflation or the prolong of the work time and so forth. Before ruling out these factors, suspetion will still cast the credibility of the argument.
The arguer also advise decrease the percentage of the international news for our competer decrease the percentage of it, while provide no information about our opponers. If the sales of the competiter decrease more drasticlly, this will prove the news of the international is of good use in turn. lacking evidence to support the assumption that the decreasing of the international news result to the increaseing sales, the arguer fails to persuade me to believe the conclusion.（觉得句子有的生硬）
In sum, the argument is logically unconvincing, a further consideration with rational and reasonable analysis and evaluation is needed for a further conclusion. more detailed sureveys and important issues should be taken.


哥们我建议你的作文让人家给你改的时候 先把错字这些低级错误自己纠正
还要注意句子的衔接 生硬造长句 还不如 写句式多变的短语

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I13"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

Does the country need to take some action for the purpose of preventing some lesser-known language from extinguishing? The speaker claim so, for this kind of languages less known but of some values. I agree with the speaker, while undo action of the prevention might be a kind of waste no matter money or manual forces.
Some people may argue that it is a kind of waste resources to protect the lesser-known language. They claim that the outcome of the language is for the communication with each other, and this is the basic usage of a language. When the earth become an earth village because of the contemporarily technology such as telephone, internet, airplane, and so forth.(没有主句) The communication-science, economic, and even political-among nations is more and more frequency, the uniforming of the language is critical for everyone, even machine of translation has been invented. It is totally different when two persons with different languages communicate from the two persons with the same language. With the global communication more and more frequency, more and more language will come to a rank of less-known language, so it will impossible and needless to protect this kind of language. And the prevention of the less-known language will cost some money, some human forces and other resources which should be used for some other more meaningful programs such as the environmental problems, some science researches and so forth. They may consider that protecting the diminishing animals is of more meaning than this action. For after all, the animals diminishing are of great value which we should cherish, such as the important roles in the economical balance, and some gene of great importance and so forth.（没必要说的这么仔细）

The reason that we should protect the language which is diminishing is that they are of great value which can not be replaced by other popular language. Every nations and peoples have their own great and prominent history, which is not only considered as the treasure of their own but also the whole world as well. And we know that the language as a tool of communication, recording and so forth from ancient to nowadays went unchanged. The language is different from time to time, even only kind of language is changed with the time. Many languages might diminish or even extinct with the time. And when the language is lost as fewer and fewer people speak, and finally disappear from the word, the culture recorded in this language will disappear at the same time. For example, it is ironical that when some archeologist unearth some record with great money, annual force only to finding that the language of the record is unfamiliar with any one alive in the world. Besides archeologist, it is also necessary for histories to investigate the historical events, such as what is the earliest time of the human experience the earthquake, the first time the human being know the treatment of some disease, and the first time of some epidemics occur in the world. No one can live for thousands of years, and no one can remember the exact things happened in a time but the record. With the disappearment of some language, the recording of these important events extinguished with it. Every want to record something which is critical for the time, but it will of no meaning when the recording can not understand by the latter generation.
In sum, the lesser-spoken language is of some values which deserve the resources, at least to some extent. The great historical culture and civilization should be known and learned by us. The global communication is also a trend in the future, and it might be that more and more languages will become less and less. Considering that the great historical civilization, we should try our best to protect the less-known language just for thanking our predates which create the bright history as the latter generation.
写的很朴实，论证还是不错的，就是建议先改改小错误，这样大家看起来不会很
呃
囧~ 好辛苦的说~
前后有点刻意对比，但感觉论证都还好，举例也很多，就是感觉少了很多过度的句子，文章流动的很生硬，太少自己语言来牵引文章，感觉还是不错的，可能要多加强自己表达方面的能力（这点我更差^^）

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A173The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."
In this argument, the arguer claims that we should restrain on instead of emphasis on displaying stories on international news. To support the conclusion, the arguer claim that the poorest-selling magazine issues are covered by the international news for three years, and the competing magazine decrease the contention of the international news. The arguer also claims that the cost of maintain foreign bureaus to report on the international news is increasing. The argument seems sound and convincible at the first glance, while a close scrutiny of the argument reveals some vertical flaws which render it unpersuasive.（写的不错，好多词不认识^^）
The arguer assumes a casual relationship between the decreasing of the sale and the contention of the magazine covers. Based on the mere fact that the poorest-selling magazine issues are those featured international news on their front cover, the arguer unfairly claim that it is the international news that cause the low level of the sale. While the arguer overlooks some other facors which is also cruticial for the sale of the magazine, such as the the price of the magazine, the quality of the magazine, the spreading of the magazine and so forth.（语法有问题，不过是个有力的观点） As we all known, the contention of a book is just a factors we considered contribute to our decision. If a book with broad contention and deep analysis sold with a high price and can not buy easily, it is highly possibly that we will not buy the book either. It is highly possible that the magazine with great international news is too expensive or can not be carried to the appropriate places for some reasons such as traffic or so.（最后的分析跟主题关系不大吧~）
The arguer also present the increasing cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report the news as a strong proof to support the conclusion. it seem that the international news deserves to be restrained upon which the arguer lies emphasis. While the arguer fails to provide complete information for a fair compararition. Lacking of the information about the cost of other part of the section, the arguer can not convince me that the international news should decrease. It is possible that the cost of other part of the magazine is increase for some reasons such as the salary of the worker increase or ecnomic inflation or the prolong of the work time and so forth. Before ruling out these factors, suspetion will still cast the credibility of the argument.（分析增长在哪里，说明增长与销售量无关）
The arguer also advise decrease the percentage of the international news for our competer decrease the percentage of it, while provide no information about our opponers. If the sales of the competiter decrease more drasticlly, this will prove the news of the international is of good use in turn. lacking evidence to support the assumption that the decreasing of the international news result to the increaseing sales, the arguer fails to persuade me to believe the conclusion.（这段没看懂，论证也过于简单，其实这句话的问题很多^^）
In sum, the argument is logically unconvincing, a further consideration with rational and reasonable analysis and evaluation is needed for a further conclusion. more detailed sureveys and important issues should be taken.

写的挺好的，就是感觉能说的理由还有很多，文章有效反驳的地方有点少，所以感觉论证性不足，然后就是老问题，可以用word写，错误太多看的好累啊^^