Argument242 =so what=小组第三次作业 by ZhouPYF

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我发现我这次argument 字数比issue 多……

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."

Outline:

1First the reason why the cheating number dropped from 24 to 14during the past five years is not necessarily caused by the honor code

2Even we granted that it is because of the honor code, we can not guarantee it will work in the other universities or institutes

3The survey is not reliable, did not mention the background of the repliers

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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 6/8/2009 12:24:20 PM

The arguer claims that in order to stop the rising of the numbers of cheating students among colleges and universities, the honor codes like Goveton's should be adopted. To bolster his conclusion, he points out that, the cases of cheating has been decreased since Goveton implied the honor codes in the past five years and the author also cites a survey in respect to prove that most of the students will not cheat with an honor code in place. Although the conclusion seems reasonable at first thought, a series of unreliable assumptions and several logical flaws may undermine this argument.

To begin with, we are not sure that it is because of the implementation of honor code that caused the reduction of the cheating cases in the past five years in Groveton. Lots of other reasons may cause this reduction, maybe the evaluation system has been improved and the students has been working harder, for example, a new kind of assessing methods, which is more focused on the daily performance of the students not just the paper test, has been implemented, consequently, there will be no need for the students to cheat, the numbers of cheating case will surely decrease. So unless more detail information are provided, we can not believe the implementation of honor code is the only reason.


Moreover, even we concede that it is because of the honor code that cause the decrease of cheating cases, the author can
not guarantee that the same thing will happen again in the other institutes or universities. The author did not provide any evidence that Groventon and other universities are comparable. I fact differences among these places may clearly outweigh the similarities. For example, may be the students are more likely to accept the honor code while students in the other universities are not. Thus the author can not rely on this false analogy to bolster his recommendation.

Finally, the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative, neither does the author provide the information of how many students replied the survey and whether they can represent all the other students, nor does the author offer any information about the repliers’ back round, for example are they the students who are less likely to cheat? Or they are just freshmen in the college, who will just respond with the expected answers and the seniors’ opinions can not be obtained. Therefore until these questions are answered, it is impossible to assess the validity and the reliability of the survey.

In sum, the conclusion lack the reliability because the author did not provide the detail information of why the cheating cases has been declined, and the analysis cited by the author do not lead strong support to what the author maintains, to bolster his idea, the author also should provide more evidence concerning the survey, to show whether the respondents can represent all the other students.

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The arguer claims that in order to stop the rising of the numbers of cheating students among colleges and universities, the honor codes like Goveton's should be adopted. To bolster his conclusion, he points out that, the cases of cheating has been decreased since Goveton implied the honor codes in the past five years and the author also cites a survey in respect to prove that most of the students will not cheat with an honor code in place. Although the conclusion seems reasonable at first thought, a series of unreliable assumptions and several logical flaws may undermine this argument.

To begin with, we are not sure that it is because of the implementation of honor code that caused the reduction of the cheating cases in the past five years in Groveton. Lots of other reasons may cause this reduction, maybe the evaluation system has been improved and the students has been working harder, for example, a new kind of assessing methods, which is more focused on the daily performance of the students not just the paper test, has been implemented, consequently, there will be no need for the students to cheat, the numbers of cheating case will surely decrease. So unless more detail information are provided, we can not believe the implementation of honor code is the only reason.


Moreover, even we concede that it is because of the honor code that cause the decrease of cheating cases, the author can not guarantee that the same thing will happen again in the other institutes or universities. The author did not provide any evidence that Groventon and other universities are comparable. I fact differences among these places may clearly outweigh the similarities. For example, may be the students are more likely to accept the honor code (in G) while students in the other universities are not. Thus the author can not rely on this false analogy to bolster his recommendation.

Finally, the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative, neither does the author provide the information of how many students replied the survey and whether they can represent all the other students, nor does the author offer any information about the repliers’ back round, for example are they the students who are less likely to cheat? Or they are just freshmen in the college, who will just respond with the expected answers and the seniors’ opinions can not be obtained. Therefore until these questions are answered, it is impossible to assess the validity and the reliability of the survey.

In sum, the conclusion lack the reliability because the author did not provide the detail information of why the cheating cases has been declined, and the analysis cited by the author do not lead strong support to what the author maintains, to bolster his idea, the author also should provide more evidence concerning the survey, to show whether the respondents can represent all the other students.
  很不错的文章，佩服。逻辑严谨，语言流畅。没有找到什么错误。赞！ 你准备了多久呀？？

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The arguer claims that in order to stop the rising of the numbers of cheating students among colleges and universities, the honor codes like Goveton's should be adopted. To bolster his conclusion, he points out that, the cases of cheating has been decreased since Goveton implied the honor codes in the past five years and the author also cites a survey in respect to（这个是介词吧
是关于的意思）
prove that most of the students will not cheat with an honor code in place. Although the conclusion seems reasonable at first thought, a series of unreliable assumptions and several logical flaws may undermine this argument.（这句我觉得不错）
To begin with, we are not sure that it is because of the implementation of honor code that caused the reduction of the cheating cases in the past five years in Groveton.(1) Lots of other reasons may cause this reduction, maybe the evaluation system has been improved and the students has been working harder, for example, a new kind of assessing methods, which is more focused on the daily performance of the students not just the paper test, has been implemented, consequently, there will be no need for the students to cheat, the numbers of cheating case will surely decrease.(这句标点是不是应该变一变，) So unless more detail information are provided, we can not believe the implementation of honor code is the only reason.修1.改：we are not sure whether it is because of the implementation of honor code that the reduction of the cheating cases in the past five years in Groveton has produced

Moreover, even we concede that it is because of the honor code that cause the decrease of cheating cases(这句话语法上有毛病), the author cannot guarantee that the same thing will happen again in the other institutes or universities. The author did not provide any evidence that Groventon and other universities are comparable. I fact differences among these places may clearly outweigh the similarities. For example, may be the students are more likely to accept the honor code while students in the other universities are not. Thus the author can not rely on this false analogy to bolster his recommendation.

这段时态是不是应该一至
我也有这个疑问，我觉得这里的时态好混乱呀
Finally, the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative。neither does the author provide the information of how many students replied the survey and whether they can represent all the other students, nor does the author offer any information about the repliers’ back round, for example are they the students who are less likely to cheat? Or they are just freshmen in the college, who will just respond with the expected answers and the seniors’ opinions can not be obtained. Therefore until these questions are answered, it is impossible to assess the validity and the reliability of the survey.
In sum, the conclusion lack the reliability because the author did not provide the detail information of why the cheating cases has been declined, and the analysis cited by the author do not lead strong support to what the author maintains, to bolster his idea, the author also should provide more evidence concerning the survey, to show whether the respondents can represent all the other students.

PS:这篇文章意思表达清楚了，语法，时态上有些混乱，逻辑上衔接紧密

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The arguer claims that in order to stop the rising of the numbers of cheating students among colleges and universities, the honor codes like Goveton's (Groveton’s，下同) should be adopted. To bolster (好) his conclusion, he points out that, the cases of cheating has been decreased since Goveton implied (apply?) the honor codes in the past five years and the author also cites a survey in respect to (in respect to是什么意思啊？) prove that most of the students will not cheat with an honor code in place. Although the conclusion seems reasonable at first thought, a series of unreliable assumptions and several logical flaws may undermine this argument.

To begin with, we are not sure that it is because of the implementation of honor code (codes) that caused the reduction of the cheating cases in the past five years in Groveton. Lots of other reasons may cause this reduction, maybe the evaluation system has been improved and the students has been working harder, for example, a new kind of assessing methods, which is more focused on the daily performance of the students not just the paper test, has been implemented, (这句到这里是不是该句点。否则好像太长，谓语太多了) consequently, there will be no need for the students to cheat, and the numbers of cheating case will surely decrease. So unless more detail information are (is) provided, we can not believe the implementation of honor codes is the only reason.

Moreover, even we concede that it is because of the honor code that cause the decrease of cheating cases, the author can not guarantee that the same thing will happen again in the other institutes or universities. The author did not provide any evidence that Groveton and other universities are comparable. I (In) fact differences among these places may clearly outweigh the similarities. For example, may be the students are more likely to accept the honor code (加in Groveton更明确些) while students in the other universities are not. Thus the author can not rely on this false analogy to bolster his recommendation.


Finally, the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative, neither does the author provide the information of how many students replied the survey and whether they can represent all the other students, nor does the author offer any information about the repliers’ back round (background), for example are they the students who are less likely to cheat? Or they are just freshmen in the college, who will just respond with the expected answers and the seniors’ opinions can not be obtained. Therefore until these questions are answered, it is impossible to assess the validity and the reliability of the survey.
In sum, the conclusion lack the reliability because the author did not provide the detail information of why the cheating cases has been declined, and the analysis cited by the author do not lead strong support to what the author maintains, (好) to bolster his idea, the author also should provide more evidence concerning the survey, to show whether the respondents can represent all the other students.

开头段的归纳性很强，是我一直向往的开头；
逐段批驳，从荣誉准则不是唯一原因——到推广至其他院校未必有效——到质疑调查问卷的可信度，非常清晰。
而且作者在这么短的时间内完成，好强啊。
很喜欢作者用到的一些词，都是我还不会用在作文中的，例如: implement, bolster, lead a strong support to a conclusion, outweigh, undermine。收获很大，呵呵，谢谢