第三篇ISSUE Dancing in the Dark 小组

勋勋UID: 2646576

2.Issue 144"It is the artist,
not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, et
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论点1：虽然一些大师的杰作很珍贵，但是我认为，是评论家而不是艺术家，给予社会LASTING VALUE。因为批评家有把艺术解释给大众的品味，和传播艺术的勇气以上两点是艺术家不具有的。然后解释一下评论家的含义。
观点2：评论家的品味是LASTING VALUE 的主因。解释一下LASTING VALUE
例子1：孔子的例子。例子2：毛泽东的例子。小结
观点3：评论家的勇气是LASTING VALUE的另一个主因。例子一：布鲁诺。例子二：爱丁顿的例子。总结下勇气与LASTING VALUE的关系。
补充：艺术家的作品对大众了解评论家的观点起不小的作用。

Albeit for the masterpiece of famous artists, is certainly a very valuable, I assert that it is critic not artist , who can provide the society with lasting value.Because critics have the taste explaining the art to the public and the gallantry spreading the art, which artists have not. The critics I indicated are only those who have specialized training, have acquired basic knowledge and the cultivation of arts appreciation; not those who are close to the artists and mutual use of each other.

The taste of the critics is the main cause of lasting value. Lasting value which I mean refers to a longer period concept causes many people of society to understand the value of it to a certain impact. For instance, Confucius the famous critic of Chinese society has the humaneness and righteousness taste, according to his taste, one book records his Confucian taste called <The Analects of Confucius>, explaining Philosophy of doing things to his descends for thousands of years. Another example, as we all know, are committed to the revolutionary life which shapes his taste of revolution, of Chairman Mao who through his unique critique about < A Dream about Mansions > brings a concept of Saving China thus Comment on <A Dream of Red Mansions> campaign carried out in the country. Therefore without the taste of critics, public may little have the opportunity to be familiar with artistic work, through a concept brought by critic’s unique taste, which lasting value lies in.

The gallantry of the critics is another main cause of lasting value. History tells us that great impact on community’s concept  brings by the gallantry of critics. If Giordano Bruno feared the torture of Religion and miss transmitting the concept of truth to the public, Ignorance of humanity will continue for many years. Still the gallantry of Supporters of the theory of relativity, the famous British Professor Eddington, transmitting the concept about solar eclipse working on the theory of relativity, giving the society a strong shock. For gallantry is needed to express a concept in which lasting value may dwell in.

In addition, artistic work do a lot of contributions to publics to understand critic’s concept.

皓迷88UID: 2650717

In addition, artistic work do a lot of contributions to publics to understand critic’s concept.

Camellia1aUID: 2646115

先留个爪印~   拿被窝里改去啦~
明天给你贴上来

Albeit for the masterpiece of famous artists, is certainly a very valuable(这句感觉有点问题.. 缺宾语), I assert that it is critic not artist , who can provide the society with lasting value.Because critics have the taste explaining the art to the public and the gallantry spreading the art, which artists have not(don't have). The critics I indicated are only those who have (这得加个动词吧,received) specialized training, have acquired basic knowledge and the cultivation of arts appreciation; not those who are close to the artists and mutual use of each other.
The taste of the critics is the main cause of lasting value. Lasting value which I mean refers to a longer period concept causes many people of society to understand the value of it to a certain impact. For instance, Confucius(孔老先生是批评家??) the famous critic of Chinese society has the humaneness and righteousness taste, according to his taste, one book records his Confucian taste called <The Analects of Confucius>, explaining Philosophy of doing things to his descends for thousands of years. Another example, as we all know, are committed to the revolutionary life which shapes his taste of revolution, of Chairman Mao(记得听谁说过,尽量不要用Chairman Mao做例子,这个我只是提醒一下,具体好不好不敢乱说...) who through his unique critique about < A Dream about Mansions > brings a concept of Saving China thus Comment on <A Dream of Red Mansions> campaign carried out in the country. Therefore without the taste of critics, public may little have the opportunity(may have little opportunity) to be familiar with artistic work, through a concept brought by critic’s unique taste, which lasting value lies in.(这句拖得太长了,建议加个句号变成两句)
The gallantry of the critics is another main cause of lasting value. History tells us that great impact on community’s concept  brings by the gallantry of critics. If Giordano Bruno feared the torture of Religion and miss transmitting the concept of truth to the public, Ignorance of humanity will continue for many years. Still the gallantry of Supporters of the theory of relativity, the famous British Professor Eddington, transmitting the concept about solar eclipse working on the theory of relativity(这句说的是日食对相对论的作用?如果是的话这个例子和批评家与艺术家有什么关系呢.), giving the society a strong shock. For gallantry is needed to express a concept in which lasting value may dwell in.
In addition, artistic work do a lot of contributions to publics to understand critic’s concept.
这个...貌似还没完吧O(∩_∩)O~
好的地方我就不啰嗦了~ 呵呵 感觉你有的句子不太通顺,而且经常是几个句子都用逗号连接,和我以前犯的错误一样.
里面的例子我感觉有点牵强,建议再斟酌一下,  个人意见,要是有不对的地方多多包涵呀...

。jillUID: 2647101

.。字数好像有点少哦···

Ryan_liuruiUID: 2643963

2.Issue 144"It is the artist,
not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, et
\\
论点1：虽然一些大师的杰作很珍贵，但是我认为，是评论家而不是艺术家，给予社会LASTING VALUE。因为批评家有把艺术解释给大众的品味，和传播艺术的勇气以上两点是艺术家不具有的。然后解释一下评论家的含义。
观点2：评论家的品味是LASTING VALUE 的主因。解释一下LASTING VALUE
例子1：孔子的例子。例子2：毛泽东的例子。小结
观点3：评论家的勇气是LASTING VALUE的另一个主因。例子一：布鲁诺。例子二：爱丁顿的例子。总结下勇气与LASTING VALUE的关系。
补充：艺术家的作品对大众了解评论家的观点起不小的作用。

Albeit for the masterpiece of famous artists, is certainly a very valuable, I assert that it is critic not artist , who can provide the society with lasting value.Because critics have the taste explaining the art to the public and the gallantry spreading the art, which artists have not（don’t have）. The critics I indicated are only those who have specialized training, have acquired basic knowledge and the cultivation of arts appreciation; not those who are close to the artists and mutual use of each other.

The taste of the critics is the main cause of lasting value. Lasting value which I mean refers to a longer period concept causes many people of society to understand the value of it to a certain impact. For instance, Confucius the famous critic of Chinese society has the humaneness and righteousness taste, according to his taste, one book records his Confucian taste called <The Analects of Confucius>, explaining Philosophy of doing things to his descends for thousands of years. Another example, as we all know, are committed to the revolutionary life which shapes his taste of revolution, of Chairman Mao who through his unique critique about < A Dream about Mansions > brings a concept of Saving China thus Comment on <A Dream of Red Mansions> campaign carried out in the country. Therefore without the taste of critics, public may little have the opportunity to be familiar with artistic work, through a concept brought by critic’s unique taste, which lasting value lies in.

The gallantry of the critics is another main cause of lasting value. History tells us that great impact on community’s concept  brings by the gallantry of critics. If Giordano Bruno feared the torture of Religion and miss transmitting the concept of truth to the public, Ignorance of humanity will continue for many years. Still the gallantry of Supporters of the theory of relativity, the famous British Professor Eddington, transmitting the concept about solar eclipse working on the theory of relativity, giving the society a strong shock. For gallantry is needed to express a concept in which lasting value may dwell in.

In addition, artistic work do a lot of contributions to publics to understand critic’s concept.
   你的观点与众不同啊。证明的挺好的，例子充分，没什么大错误。
143 提纲没写。

lisa0702UID: 2646704

改得不好的地方多多包涵呀~

lisa0702UID: 2646704

勇气那个地方我还有点疑问，前面是因为评论家的学识所以会产生lasting value, 而勇气却是，要产生lasting value需要有勇气，并不是因为有勇气，所以会产生lasting value. 是不是这个道理啊，我自己也有点绕进去了，呵呵

勋勋UID: 2646576

3# Camellia1a
先留个爪印~   拿被窝里改去啦~
明天给你贴上来

Albeit for the masterpiece of famous artists, is certainly a very valuable(这句感觉有点问题.. 缺宾语, I assert that it is critic not artist , who can provide the society with lasting value.Because critics have the taste explaining the art to the public and the gallantry spreading the art, which artists have not(don't have). The critics I indicated are only those who have (这得加个动词吧,received) 1specialized training, have acquired basic knowledge and the cultivation of arts appreciation; not those who are close to the artists and mutual use of each other.
The taste of the critics is the main cause of lasting value. Lasting value which I mean refers to a longer period concept causes many people of society to understand the value of it to a certain impact. For instance, Confucius(孔老先生是批评家??) 2the famous critic of Chinese society has the humaneness and righteousness taste, according to his taste, one book records his Confucian taste called <The Analects of Confucius>, explaining Philosophy of doing things to his descends for thousands of years. Another example, as we all know, are committed to the revolutionary life which shapes his taste of revolution, of Chairman Mao(记得听谁说过,尽量不要用Chairman Mao做例子,这个我只是提醒一下,具体好不好不敢乱说...) who through his unique critique about < A Dream about Mansions > brings a concept of Saving China thus Comment on <A Dream of Red Mansions> campaign carried out in the country. Therefore without the taste of critics, public may little have the opportunity(may have little opportunity) 3to be familiar with artistic work, through a concept brought by critic’s unique taste, which lasting value lies in.(这句拖得太长了,建议加个句号变成两句)
The gallantry of the critics is another main cause of lasting value. History tells us that great impact on community’s concept  brings by the gallantry of critics. If Giordano Bruno feared the torture of Religion and miss transmitting the concept of truth to the public, Ignorance of humanity will continue for many years. Still the gallantry of Supporters of the theory of relativity, the famous British Professor Eddington, transmitting the concept about solar eclipse working on the theory of relativity(这句说的是日食对相对论的作用?如果是的话这个例子和批评家与艺术家有什么关系呢.),4 giving the society a strong shock. For gallantry is needed to express a concept in which lasting value may dwell in.
In addition, artistic work do a lot of contributions to publics to understand critic’s concept.
这个...貌似还没完吧O(∩_∩)O~
好的地方我就不啰嗦了~ 呵呵 感觉你有的句子不太通顺,而且经常是几个句子都用逗号连接,和我以前犯的错误一样.
里面的例子我感觉有点牵强,建议再斟酌一下,  个人意见,要是有不对的地方多多包涵呀...
小结：你评的太好了，很多很小的错误都被你看出来了。
对于1：恩，这的确的加received.
对于2：我从维基百科上查到得，地址:http://zh.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E8%A9%95%E8%AB%96%E5%AE%B6
对于3：赞
对于4：因为是那个人（评论家）的勇气，他传播了一个关于日食作用于相对论的概念，使相对论火了。前面说了这种长时间深入人心的概念是LASTING VALUE。不难得出最初有勇气推出LASTING VALUE的。

勋勋UID: 2646576

4# 。jill
恩，因为我不知道后面该怎么个写法。

勋勋UID: 2646576

5# Ryan_liurui
:dizzy: 开始写143吧

勋勋UID: 2646576

6# lisa0702
1：你改的好精细啊，我在写这篇ISSUE中最伤我脑筋的地方就是这两处了。
2：TASTE，我想指品味吧，不知道这个词准不准。
3：有些名词我从字典上或者GOOGLE上直接下的，所以字体不是大一样。
4：例子，我还是很缺少的，有一些我都是上网才得到启发的。比如本来我证明毛泽东评红楼梦的那段，本来是想找鲁迅这些人的，觉得没什么感觉。后来看到有毛泽东的评论，又听到过自己老师以前讲起来毛泽东的那段事情才放上去的。小想法：我觉得要清楚自己想证明什么然后在科学家，文学家这些范围里搜搜。。。一起奋斗吧

勋勋UID: 2646576

7# lisa0702
:loveliness: 应该都行的啦，只要能说的让RATER接受