【辉太郎杀G大队】7/11作业 by Aliciasun

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Augument 25

The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.

"Two years ago, the town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."

提纲：
1，开头
2，经济增长的来源
3，地区的差异性
4，时间的差异性
5，结尾

This memo is well presented, but not thoroughly well reasoned. By investigating the region of Ocean View, the town with a tax revenues increasing in the past two years, the mayor of Hopewell claimed that Hopewell should also build a golf course and resort hotel as what Ocean View did two years ago. Plausible at the first glance, I cannot be finally convinced after further analysis and here provides several fallacies in this reasoning.

To begin with, the first fallacy rests as the ‘false-cause’ logic. It is hastily concluded as that, after the ‘golf course and resort hotel was built’, therefore, because of this event that ‘golf course and resort hotel was built’, new businesses and Ocean View’s tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. No evidence has proved that the new business burgeoning has direct causal relationship with the golf course. It is possible that this city is at the seaside, just as described in its name, thus the tourism has increased. In addition, the reason for the revenues rising is also possible to have nothing to do with the golf course and resort hotel, which might comes from the increasing local residents, the tax policy changing, or industry areas which always benefit a lot to the economy. Therefore, the flaw in this part of reasoning is an obvious issue in this memo.

Moreover, supposing the effects of the projects were as positive as the memo claims, the argument still has another fallacy which is called “All things are equal”. Obviously, it is committed when it assumes that the way which works in the area Ocean View, will definitely works in the area Hopewell. Perhaps, golf is much more popular in the residents living Ocean View rather than in Hopewell, and the tennis will be interested more in the latter region. If so, there will be no markets even the golf course in Hopewell is built up.

Finally, the above fallacy also exists in the time factor of this case. Two years ago, the golf courses was popular doesn’t mean it is still popular at present, no mention that the resort and golf course building consumes time as well. When the golf courses and resort hotels in Hopewell are ready, this sport activity is entirely to be out-of-date that nobody would like to join.

In sum, the mayor of Hopewell arrives a bad conclusion that building a golf course and resort hotel will benefit the economy. To bolster the decision, he must provides better evidences on the regional/time analogies and the relationship between the revenue increasing and the golf courses. (431 words)


Issue 11
"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
所有的国家应共同建立一所全球性大学，用来培养学生们解决世界的最顽固的社会问题。

提纲：
1，
部分赞成
2，
不可否认。学生具备热情，时间和创新点
3，
但是学生缺乏实践性，是否能够真的解决社会问题值得怀疑
4，真正要建立一个这样的学校的话，学校的职能是什么，真正实施起来的难度是什么，值得考虑。
5，
总结


In this era of social and technology change leading to increasing life complexity and surviving challenges, education, as a important part of the society, has been brought out and expected to provide solutions for those most persistent problems. Undoubtedly it is a constructive assertion to turn to the university students for propositions, to some extent I agree with the speaker of this issue, however, several relative perspectives need to be cautiously considered as well.


I concede that university students can contribute ideas of resolutions for persistent social problems and motivate human cultivation, which fresh thoughts and enthusiasm specifically from young people. After all, with the strong desire for exploring the outside world, students always stand at a positive angle trying to effect the reform or progress, simply put, to make things work. Furthermore, based on the entire university environment, especially with the way the speaker described as to establish a global university, young people from different background including various countries, cultures, and races, can completely form a brainstorm convention resulting diversities of innovations. And also, many examples illustrated that universities are capable to provide meaningful leap in researching the contemporary topics. The first computer which had then changed the world was made in University of Pennsylvania; a myriad scientist who won Nobel Prize came from Princeton University; the architecture department of Delft University, which locates in Amsterdam, has provided not only the Netherlands but also the whole world a number of van ward and creative architecture masters. It is these universities' feat that has solved many social problems, changed the world dramatically and supported it by their graduates or undergraduates.


Nevertheless, universities have their own limitations that confine the research directions of social problems. Overall practical and mature considerations are the weak points of school students towards some social problems. This is inevitable with the given environment. How can we expect university students to eliminate the poverty, to stop the war, or to provide sufficient accommodations for the refugees around the world every day? And how can they make accurate analysis to strike a balance between the money investment on future research on aerospace development and global hunger issues? Persistent social problems, difficult as they are, call for rational and a view of macroscopic, which can only be obtained based on accumulated experience and objective estimation, are sometimes too tough for students to consider. As a matter of this facet, global university for solving the persistent social problems will be suspected to be meaningful or not, when being questioned what they can in such a predicament.


On the other side, there are many problems about the feasibility to establish a global university, as emphasized by the speaker. Firstly, globalize is itself a social problem in this case. Imagine, what can we expect the respective answers from U.S students and Iraq ones about the wars between the two countries? Next, even with the same standpoint, as a union entity, who to manage this school and who to financially support it is easy to cause another confliction in the sense of countries competition. At last, the availability of the global university is questionable, with the basic question that if this school is mainly to educate students, or to solve the social problems.


In a final analysis, although universities play a important role in providing solutions to persistent social problems, suggestion to build a global university, specially designed in this utility, needs to be thoroughly considered before actions. It will probably be more easier for the universities of the world to achieve a common sense towards intensive research in social problems, rather than setting up a new entity.(605 words)

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Augument 25

This memo is well presented, but not thoroughly well reasoned.(赞) By investigating the region of Ocean View, the town with a tax revenues increasing in the past two years, the mayor of Hopewell claimed that Hopewell should also build a golf course and resort hotel as what Ocean View did two years ago. Plausible at the first glance, I cannot be finally convinced after further analysis and here provides several fallacies in this reasoning.

To begin with, the first fallacy rests as the ‘false-cause’ logic. It is hastily concluded as that, after the ‘golf course and resort hotel was built’, therefore, because of this event that ‘golf course and resort hotel was built’, new businesses and Ocean View’s tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. No evidence has proved that the new business burgeoning has direct causal relationship with the golf course. It is possible that this city is at the seaside, just as described in its name, thus the tourism has increased. In addition, the reason for the revenues rising is also possible to have nothing to do with the golf course and resort hotel, which might comes from the increasing local residents, the tax policy changing, or industry areas which always benefit a lot to the economy. Therefore, the flaw in this part of reasoning is an obvious issue in this memo.

Moreover, supposing the effects of the projects were as positive as the memo claims, the argument still has another fallacy which is called “All things are equal”. Obviously, it is committed when it assumes that the way which works in the area Ocean View, will definitely works in the area Hopewell. Perhaps, golf is much more popular in the residents living Ocean View rather than in Hopewell, and the tennis will be interested more in the latter region. If so, there will be no markets even the golf course in Hopewell is built up.

Finally, the above fallacy also exists in the time factor of this case. Two years ago, the golf courses was popular doesn’t mean it is still popular at present, no mention that the resort and golf course building consumes time as well. When the golf courses and resort hotels in Hopewell are ready, this sport activity is entirely to be out-of-date that nobody would like to join.

In sum, the mayor of Hopewell arrives（at？不及物） a bad conclusion that building a golf course and resort hotel will benefit the economy. To bolster the decision, he must provides（provide） better evidences on the regional/time analogies and the relationship between the revenue increasing and the golf courses. (431 words)
评语：Argument很不错哦，感觉作者能把逻辑错误点写的很抽象很专业，学习。这个，水平有限，实在看不出此文有什么问题。
Issue 11
"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
所有的国家应共同建立一所全球性大学，用来培养学生们解决世界的最顽固的社会问题。

as they are, call for rational and a view of macroscopic, which can only be obtained based on accumulated experience and objective estimation, are sometimes too tough for students to consider. As a matter of this facet, global university for solIn this era of social and technology change leading to increasing life complexity and surviving challenges, education, as a important part of the society, has been brought out and expected to provide solutions for those most persistent problems. Undoubtedly it is a constructive assertion to turn to the university students for propositions（感觉这里有点把题目引导偏了）, to some extent I agree with the speaker of this issue, however, several relative perspectives need to be cautiously considered as well.


I concede that university students can contribute ideas of resolutions for persistent social problems and motivate human cultivation（civilization?）, which（with？） fresh thoughts and enthusiasm specifically from young people. After all, with the strong desire for exploring the outside world, students always stand at a positive angle(正角？) trying to effect the reform or progress, simply put, to make things work. Furthermore, based on the entire university environment, especially with the way the speaker described as to establish a global university, young people from different background including various countries, cultures, and races, can completely form a brainstorm convention resulting diversities of innovations. And also, many examples illustrated that universities are capable to provide meaningful leap in researching the contemporary topics. The first computer which had then changed the world was made in University of Pennsylvania; a myriad scientist who won Nobel Prize came from Princeton University; the architecture department of Delft University, which locates in Amsterdam, has provided not only the Netherlands but also the whole world a number of van ward and creative architecture masters. It is these universities' feat that has solved many social problems, changed the world dramatically and supported it by their graduates or undergraduates.（有些例子感觉不是很贴切。）


Nevertheless, universities have their own limitations that confine the research directions of social problems. Overall practical and mature considerations are the weak points of school students towards some social problems. This is inevitable with the given environment. How can we expect university students to eliminate the poverty, to stop the war, or to provide sufficient accommodations for the refugees around the world every day? And how can they make accurate analysis to strike a balance between the money investment on future research on aerospace development and global hunger issues? Persistent social problems, difficult ving the persistent social problems will be suspected to be meaningful or not, when being questioned what they can in such a predicament.（感觉作者的这段论证过于局限在大学生或是在校大学生的能力，而忽略了大学的科研能力，忽略了那些有能力做出判断的人一般也是大学出来的。论证应该强化全球大学的特点。）

On the other side, there are many problems about the feasibility to establish a global university, as emphasized by the speaker. Firstly, globalize is itself a social problem in this case. Imagine, what can we expect the respective answers from U.S students and Iraq ones about the wars between the two countries? Next, even with the same standpoint, as a union entity, who to manage this school and who to financially support it is easy to cause another confliction in the sense of countries competition. At last, the availability of the global university is questionable, with the basic question that if this school is mainly to educate students, or to solve the social problems.


In a final analysis, although universities play a（an）important role in providing solutions to persistent social problems, suggestion to build a global university, specially designed in this utility, needs to be thoroughly considered before actions. It will probably be more easier for the universities of the world to achieve a common sense towards intensive research in social problems, rather than setting up a new entity.(605 words)
评语：感觉作者在语言功底上还是很强的。但也要注意围绕题目的核心论题，不关乎论点，但有一个支持论点的问题。拙见拙见，共勉哈！