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TOPIC: ARGUMENT67 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a newspaper serving the villages of Castorville and Polluxton.

"Both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes. To save money and improve service, the two villages recently merged their once separate garbage collection departments into a single department located in Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its service. Last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users than during the previous year. It follows that we should now further economize and improve service, as we did with garbage collection, by closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to serve both villages."

Castorville和Polluxton两个村镇都经历了地产税纳税居民数量的下降。
为节省开支并提高服务质量，两个村镇最近合并了它们一度独立的垃圾收集部门，成立了座落于Castorville的单一部门，新部门所上报的关于其服务的投诉很少。去年Polluxton的图书馆使用者比前一年减少20％。这表明我们现在应该象我们在垃圾收集方面所作的一样进一步经济化和提高服务，通过关闭Polluxton的图书馆和使用Castorville的图书馆来为两个村镇提供服务。



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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2009-7-12 19:26:09

The author concludes it is wisely to close the library in Castorville to serve both villages, like the merger of the garbage collection. To substantiate the conclusion, the author cites the merger of the garbage collection is a convinced sample. On basis of this evidence, the author claims the complaints about its service are few reported. However, the argument is illogically flawed, in four respects.
The threshold problem involves that, the author fails to consider the cost after the merger of the garbage collection in two villages. The common sense informs me the merger means less jobs and more unemployment. Any government ignores this issue may have to pay a heavy price. Without accounting for and ruling out this possibility, the author cannot infer the merger of libraries is feasible.
The second problem involves that, the author unfairly equates the decreasing of the number of the readers in library with the merger of the two libraries. There may be other explanations about the decreasing of the readers, since I am not informed the basic amount of the readers at beginning: what if the reader rate is considerable high in the past, if so, the 20% decreasing is aberrant and insignificant.
Another problem involves that, the author overlooks the further impact after merging the two libraries. Perhaps the readers are less likely to go to library than the past, because it is inconvenient for them to borrow books form their villages to another, considering the transportation and their time and energy. Lacking of this possible reason, I am not convinced to accept this issue.
Finally, even I were to concede the foregoing evidence turns out to support the assumption, the author also fails to take into account whether the library and garbage collection are comparable. He or she recommends the garbage collection carries out same conclusion as library, but the analysis between them might be unsubstantiated. The author fails to illustrate that garbage collection and library are similar enough at every aspect and are indeed comparable. Thus, before library decides to copy the garbage collection, the author should take the differences into account and make careful study on the comparability of the two subjects.
In sum, the argument is not well supported unless the author provides me with more compelling evidence. To better assess the argument, the author must ensure me the actual cost after the merge of the garbage collection, therefore, I can evaluate the merge of library correctly. I would need to know the statistical on the library is reliable and integrity. I would also need to know the tenable reasons for the garbage collection and the library are comparable.

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[i=s] 本帖最后由 danielgao 于 2009-7-13 23:45 编辑 [/i]

The author concludesit is wisely to close the library in Castorville to serve both villages, likethe merger of the garbage collection. To substantiate the conclusion, theauthor cites the merger of the garbage collection is a convinced sample(感觉这里有点怪怪的，是不是应该改成as a convinced example?). On basis of this evidence, the author claims thecomplaints about its service are few reported. However,the argument is illogically flawed, in four respects.(不错的用于分类进行反驳的模板句)
The threshold problem involves that, the author fails to consider the costafter the merger of the garbage collection in two villages. The common senseinforms me the merger means less jobs and more unemployment.(个人认为这里举例的会导致更多人失业和cost没有太强的联系。 Cost的例子举搬运导致的花销和书籍的损害还有被放弃的P图书馆的空置和维护费用会不会稍微好一点？)Any government ignores this issue may have to pay a heavy price. Withoutaccounting for and ruling out this possibility, the author cannot infer themerger of libraries is feasible.
The second problem involvesthat, the author unfairly equates the decreasing of the number of the readersin library with the merger of the two libraries. (觉得这里的equates用得有点牵强)There may be other explanationsabout the decreasing of the readers, since I am not informed the basic amountof the readers at beginning: what if the reader rate is considerable high inthe past, if so, the 20% decreasing is aberrant and insignificant.
Another problem involves that(每一段都用problem involes that给人重复的感觉，可以试着换一下表达，例如Another problem with this argument is ….), the author overlooks the further impact aftermerging the two libraries. Perhaps the readers are less likely to go to librarythan the past, because it is inconvenient for them to borrow books form theirvillages to another, considering the transportation and their time and energy.Lacking of this possible reason（这句是不是有点chinglish?）, I am not convinced to accept this issue.
Finally, even I wereto concede the foregoing evidence turncollection s out to support the assumption, theauthor also fails to take into account whether the library and garbagecollection are comparable. Heor she recommends the garbage collection carries out same conclusion aslibrary, but the analysis between them might be unsubstantiated. The authorfails to illustrate that garbage and library are similar enough atevery aspect and are indeed comparable. Thus, before library decides to copythe garbage collection, the author should take the differences into account（同一段出现了两次take into account, 不妨考虑换成其他） and make careful study on the comparability of thetwo subjects.
In sum, the argument is notwell supported unless the author provides me with more compelling evidence. Tobetter assess the argument, the author must ensure me the actual cost after themerge of the garbage collection, therefore, I can evaluate the merge of librarycorrectly. I would need to know the statistical on the library is reliable andintegrity. I would also need to know the tenable reasons for the garbagecollection and the library are comparable

danielgaoUID: 2604134

2# danielgao

不知为何发上来颜色就没有了。。颜色版请看附件里面的

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用高级回复吧，回复栏右上角“发表话题”左边

不过我还是搞不定字体大小不等问题。。。