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TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."

Whether is it（it is） our responsibility to obey just laws and disobey unjust laws? That's really a question. However, in my point of view, it is our responsibility to obey the(去掉) laws, no matter whether it is just or unjust.（开头更深刻一点更好哦，这样感觉没说什么）

To begin with, what is the（去掉，后同） law? Common sense tells us that the laws are drafted by the government, in order to give all of（去掉） its citizens a series of behaviour standards, and in order to make our society progressing in a more steady and harmornious way. As an old saying goes, nothing can be accomplished without norms or standards. Truly, without the laws, people would probably do anything, which can be harmful to the other's safety or even the development of the whole society, as their will. So is the importance of the laws. In other words, the laws to be distributed is exactly to be obeyed.（看不懂这句`）

Surely, nothing in the world is absolutely justice, let alone the laws（我喜欢）. It is true that there exists（exist） two types of laws: just and unjust. But that fact does not indicate that it is our responsibility to disobey the unjust laws. Perhaps, the unjust laws do harm to us in some degree. But it is inevitable! As the society is developing, the government is developing, so are the laws （are） developing. The responsibility of us is to obey the laws and to promote the laws, but not directly disobey such laws that（which） are unjust in our minds. In short, unjust（unfair是不是更好？） is always with us. Never can we get rid of it（倒装，好）.

If we resist the unjust laws, we actually disobey the system of laws, we actually disobey the standards that are approved by the government or most of the citizens in the current time. Maybe those laws are wrong. But the judgement of the laws is always in our own minds. Since different people have different minds, it is likely that one thinks the law just and other think it unjust due to their respective backgrounds. For example, it can be implied from some laws that when a bicycle crashes a car, in most time, the owner of the car should be blamed more. Maybe the car-owners think it unjust since they don't think it always caused by the failure in controling of the car. （这个例子不知道恰不恰当啊，但总体这一段不错）

From another angle（aspects？）[/color],（even） if it is all right for us to disobey the laws, the rules of the laws would be damaged, thus the original goal of the laws, to restrict the behaviour of citizens, becomes in vain. When the unjust laws can be disobeyed, some criminals could probably do something bad by playing the 'law game', where they illegally take use of the loopholes of the laws in the name of the unjust laws(我喜欢).Therefore, the principle that we must obey the laws can not be changed.

In conclusion, the laws, which is drafted in order to be obeyed as a standard, should be never disobeyed even if some of them are considered unjust to us.


开头结尾简短，很好，大体思路清晰，最强的是这么短时间打了这么多字，你是怎么练得吖，写得这么快，请教一下~
但是开头最好是观点更清晰深刻，还有你那个法律是什么的段似乎对全文观点论述的作用不太明显。还有for another angle 那段是不是观点有点点冲复吖