0910G[Splendid Sun]终极冲刺 BY CMGS

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突然发现这几篇A的写作时间都不在常人活动的时间……
apolo 发表于 2009-7-22 23:51

  他本来就是非~~常人~~

  还有CC好好加油~~trenchant起~~

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题目：ARGUMENT7 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.

"In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved."
字数：501          用时：00:28:26          日期：2009/7/25 0:16:49

In this argument, the author claims that the residents of Clearview should choose the Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, as the next mayor if they want the environmental problems of Clearview would be solved. To support this conclusion, the author provides that last year, the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and more patients reported with respiratory illnesses. It seems that those evidence could support the author's claim, however, after careful examination, it reveals little credible and convincing.

First of all, the author fails to assume that those environmental problems would be solved if the residents select Ann Green as their mayor. Whereas, the author didn't provide any information shows that if Ann Green became the Clearview's mayor, she would lead to solve those problems. The author assert that Ann Green would solve the environmental problems just depend on she is a member of the Good Earth Coalition reveals little strength to let I convinced.

Moreover, the author fails to establish the relationship between the more factories and the increased air pollution levels. There are many factors would cause the air pollution levels increasing, for example the more cars or building a new thermal power station. The author didn't provide any evidences that the air pollution was casued just by the more factories. In this sight, assert that more factories bring heavy air pollution is groundless and unfounded.

In addition, even if the air pollution levels have increased, however, the author fails to assume that it is the reason why the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illness. Perhaps from last year, the residents of Clearview have been increased, so that the patients with respiratory illness have also increased. And as we known, smoking would also cause the respiratory illness, maybe last year, more and more residents began to smoke and make themselves with respiratory illnesses.

And, although those problem was becoming more and more serious during the past year, it is hardly to say that the Frank Braun caused this case. The author didn't provide any information about what the Frank Braun did in the last year, so that we couldn't hastily conclude that all of those problems are the Frank Braun's fault. So that the author's claim would become incredibly.

Finally, even if elect Ann Green would do better than Frank Braun in environmental problems, we couldn't assert that the new mayor is the best way to solve those problems. There are many methods could solved those problems, in this case, it is highly doubt that the author's claim is necessary.

To sum up, the claim lack credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the author recommends. To strength the claim, the author should provide that some evidences that more factories cause the air pollutions and lead more resident ill. Also the author should proof that all of those problems were caused by Frank Braun.

swekimnUID: 2649781

我刚刚看了~~很娴熟了~~只是攻击的集中点不够突出~~会不会~~不太好~~并且你第一、二点，可以拓展一下的~~第三点可以归到第二点去说的~~第四点太牵强了~~最后一点不应该这样说的~~除了Ann Green ~~其他的旋转呢~~~这样会不会好点~~~还有最后一段，特别是第二句~~真的很累赘~

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题目：ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
字数：609          用时：00:42:48          日期：2009/7/25 15:57:37

With the technology and science rapidly developing, our civilization has changed and became more and more different and complex from the past. When we research the difference between now and the past, we find out that not only we should facing a new, complex and changeable world nowadays but also we have been changed by this world. Admittedly, study of history would let us to know that the essential of human beings have not been changed yet, however, there are more and more benefits which are gained by us from study of history, that is why we should study history.

First of all, as far as I concerned, althought people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. We know that our civilization have been promoted by the development of technology and science, during the change, human beings also have been changed. Nowadays, someone called the life style of human beings as the e-Style, we communicate with others by the ICQ, we buy everything we want throught the eBay, we pay back the credit card back via the PayPal, also we could play a huge number of online games like the Warcraft of the World to make ourselves happy. All of this, just need us to access the Internet and cost us a little fee. In this sight, we could find out the whole life style was changed by the Information Technology. As the contrast, before the World War II, if someone need to communicate with others they should write a letter or use telegram, also shopping need cost much time and so on. In short, depending on the technology, our civilization and ourselves have been different than before.

But, in my opinion, the essential of human being would haven't  been changed by the development of technology and science. Like our ethics and customs, which is spread thousand years, is hardly to change. Those essential of our human beings determine and guide our behaviors and appearance. For example, nowadays, the women in the Middle East still be forbidden to show their face in public like the past. It is hardly to say that the society or civilization in the Middle East is far behind the contemporary world. They also have a democracy and scientific government and advanced technology. In this mattle, why the women still have those forbidance? When we study history, we would find out that those forbidance was established long long ago, women in thousands years before as same as the contemporary women, hiding face, wearing black. In short, their mental world or spiritual principal still as the same. In short, although technology developing rapidly, some essential of human beings would never or hardly to change.

Moreover, study history would not only let us to know the development of our civilization and human beings but also benefit us more. As we know, if we study of history we would know how to solve some problems which is occured in the history and how to avoid those problems take place again. Also study history would guide us or give us more experience to solve similar problems. Thus I concerned that, the chief benefit of the study of history is to let human beings to recognize themselves and use those experience to guide the development of civilization.

To sum up, it is truly that we have been changed hugely, but our essence would hardly to be changed, it would still influence and control our behavior. Also, study of history would benefits us more, we should learn it carefully and use those experience to make us improvement in efficiency way.

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题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：561          用时：00:39:59          日期：2009/7/25 18:05:08

When we study history, we would find that our history often places too much emphasis on individuals. Are those significant events and trends in history were only made by the famous few? Admittedly, those famous individuals were important in our history, they led human beings, made those significant events and trends, even their ideals may be influencing our world nowadays, however, groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten also are a very important, even more than those famous individualls, to our history and civilizations.

First of all, as far as I concered, those famous individuals are very important in our history. Why people place too much emphasis on those famous person? Why those historical events and trends had been happen? I think that those famous person played a very important role in our history so that when people study history, they would remember those famous individuals clearly and easily. For example, when we study of the Ameracian Civil War firstly, who would be remembered at first? Of course, Abraham Lincoln. Why would most of us remember him? Because he lead the North army to win this war and liberate the Black man. In this sight, we would find out that the events or trends in history couldn't without some famous individuals. Through those famous individuals, we would be near to the history and the truth.

Whereas, in my opinion, groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten also play a important role in history, even overweight than the famous individuals. In history, it is highly possible that the significant events and trends could be occured only by the famous individuals, without groups of people who are still unknown by public, I believe that those events or trends wouldn't happen.  For example, when we study the World War II, we always remember Stalin, Churchill and Roosevelt, which are be called as The Big Three, however, without almost 20 million people of the Soviet Union and almost 10 million people of the Allied Army fight with the Nazi and dead in the Europe, victory might not stand with us. Moreover,  as I mentioned before, Abraham Lincoln is very important in the Ameracian Civil War, however, without the North Army try their best to fight with the South Army and liberate the black man, the USA history might be changed. In short, we couldn't forget the groups of fogotten people's contributions of the history.

Thus, I think that when we study history we should place emphasis on both the famouse individuals and groups of forgotten people. We could study who lead those events and trends from study of those famous individuals, also we could learn how those events and trends process depending on study of the groups of forgotten person. Like when we study the history of computer, we would know that Alan Truing, Von Neuman and so on opened the door of the Information World, and we also could recognize that without many programmers, computer theorist our world and civilization wouldn't become so conveniently and colofully.

To sum up, both the famous individuals and the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten are play the same important role in history. When we study history, we should place same emphasis on them both. In this way we could know the essential and truth of those historical events and trends.

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While, with our society and civilization become more and more different and complex from the past, we have to face much more problems we never suffer before. Therefore, human beings begin study history and want to gain experience and then use those experience to guide them to improve the civilization and deal with those problems. However, there is always a debate on whether the study of history has value or not if it were not relevant to our daily lives. As far as I concerned, history could teach human beings more, the value of study history is very important for all area in our civilization.

First of all, why shall we study history? What benefits could be gained from the study of history? In my opinion, human beings study and research history because we want to predict future and hope for better life. We can gain much more experience from study of history, like how to keep a stable economy global system, how to communicate with others in efficiency way, how to avoid some natural disaster and so on. The study of history also could help us to deal with social problems like crime. For example, the Ameracian Civil War which was happen in the 1860s, and tells us how to deal with the relationship between the whites and blacks.

Furthermore, the Chernobyl disaster, which was a nuclear reactor accident at the Chernobyl Nuclear Power Plant in Ukraine, then part of the Soviet Union, could teach us how to avoid this disaster happen again like design a system to protect the core of nuclear reactor. Thus, human beings need to study history, we need those experience to imporve our civilization. Secondly, we study history because we want to improve our lives and civilization. No matter what history we study, our ultimate purpose is to use those experience in our daily lives. Like predict the future, make some tools to let us lived conveniently like through the telecom history, people learn how to make our communication become more and more easily, through the history of typhoon, people find out the way to prevent their property being lost when the typhoon make landfall.For example, as I mentioned before, the Chernobyl Disaster killed and influenced a huge of people in many years through the radiation. After that disaster, humans become search a safety way to use nulear power, like the Westhouse company create a low-radiation and modularized nuclear power module, it would serve humans in a effect and safe way.

Admittedly, we could be benefited from those history which is relevant to our daily lives, however, study history which is not about our lives could also benefit us more. Some historical events could tell us how to justify the evil and the good, how to improve global environment status, how to deal with the world's most persistent social problems. For example, the Wrold War II, which brings us death, ruin, injury and so on,could teach us how to understand others in communicating. And the important is, we could be learned that peace does not easily come by, and all countries in the world should take the road of peaceful development. Thus, study history would improve our society and ourselves.

To sum up, we should study in a overall and complete way, use these experience to promote our society and civilization, also predict the future, in this sight, human beings will have a better life in the future.

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题目：ARGUMENT35 - The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.

"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
字数：448          用时：00:27:55          日期：2009/7/27 23:40:16

In this argument, the author claims that with a new use for salicylats, the number of the Mentia residents who were suffered from headaches would continue decrease. To support this conclusion, the author provides that salicylats are similar with aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Then, he cites results from a twenty-year study which shows that the average number of headaches reported by participants declined because the commercial using as basis to support his conclusion. It seems that those evidence could support the conclusion strongly and cogently, however, after carefully examination, I think this conclusion is groundless and unconvincing.

First of all, the author provides that the salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, whereas, it doesn't provides that salicylates would treat headaches as same as aspirin. As we know, the same chemical family would indicate different functions, perhaps salicylates have dissimilar functions as aspirin because the molecular structure of salicylates is different from the aspirin. In this sight, without any detail information about salicylates' structure and aspirin's structure, the author assumes that salicylates would treat headaches as aspirin is less credible and cogent.

Secondly, the author asserts that in the twenty-year study , the number of participants report headaches have been decreased just because the food-processing companies have been adding salicylates to foods is unwarrant. There are also many alternatives could lead to this results. Maybe with the technology developing in this twenty-year, people have more leisure time to relax and it decreased their headaches frequency. It is highly possible that the human's health conditions have been improved in twenty years so that the number of report headaches decreased. And perhaps some of people have headaches but they didn't report. All I mentions above makes this conclusion become unfounded and incredibility.

Thirdly, even if salicylates have a funtion to treat people's headache, and food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for food, however, it couldn't support that the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia. As far as I am concerned, the author didn't provide that how many Mentia residents will use this flavor additives in their daily life, perhaps they hate use this kind flavor additives, in this sight, people wouldn't gain any benefits from flavor additives with salicylates, so that the number of headaches will not decline.

To sum up, the claim lack credibility because the evidences cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the author claims. To strength the claim, the author should provide more details about salicylates' function and also show that how many Mentia residents would accept the flavor additives with salicylates in their daily life.

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ARGUMENT35 - The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.

"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
字数：448          用时：00:27:55          日期：2009/7/27 23:40:16

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In this argument, the author claims that with a new use for salicylats, the number of the Mentia residents who were suffered from headaches would continue decrease. To support this conclusion, the author provides that salicylats are similar with aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Then, he cites results from a twenty-year study which shows that the average number of headaches reported by participants because the commercial using as basis to support his conclusion. It seems that those evidence【看这个小弱智错误，也是我经常注意不到的，两种改法：this evidence     or     those evidences】 could support the conclusion strongly and cogently, however, 【cogenty. However, (Two distinct sentences have to be divided by a full stop)】after carefully examination, I think this conclusion is groundless and unconvincing.
(看首先颜色的字都是复述开头的，记得---找到了---https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=134092    里面说如果复述开头不如没有开头还是很有道理的。 从前我的开头也是这个样子的  现在 只有一句作文里的结论 据说这个还有点多余 不过减不下去了... 建议你也不要这样写了。 最后又一句有点模板化倾向了吧...)
First of all, the author provides that the salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, whereas, it doesn't provides【provide】 that salicylates would treat headaches as same as aspirin. As we know, the same chemical family would indicate different functions, perhaps salicylates have dissimilar functions as aspirin because the molecular structure of salicylates is different from the aspirin. In this sight【其实我感觉sight 也对 不过看site 是不是更好呢（我不太确定哦） -----although this word is not a misspelling, it does not concur with the context. example: mother know there [their] children    or     He pondered weather [whether] to get a less expensive bicycle.】, without any detail information about salicylates' structure and aspirin's structure, the author assumes that salicylates would treat headaches as aspirin is less credible and cogent.
【哇 这段咱俩写的一样哦 我在这里怕我表达的不够准确 举了一个小例子：石墨和金刚石都是由碳构成的却有着不同的特点和用途...】{想再讨论个问题那个朋友在这里给我提的意见是：You should also make it clear what evidence the author would need to make his argument more credible.  大部分咱们都会把这个放在最后一段写 如果放在每段写会不会不好啊}
Secondly, the author asserts that in the twenty-year study , the number of participants report【reported   or    reports】 headaches have been decreased just because the food-processing companies have been adding salicylates to foods is unwarrant【ed】. There are also many alternatives could lead to this results【this result       these results】. Maybe with the technology developing in this【these】 twenty-year, people have more leisure time to relax【，】 and it decreased their headaches【X s】 frequency. It is highly possible that the human's health conditions have been improved in twenty years so that the number of report headaches decreased. And perhaps some of 【the?是不是该加啊】 people have headaches but they didn't report. All I mentions【mention   or    mentioned】 above makes this conclusion become unfounded and incredibility.
【这里提一个小建议哦 最好把你这里提到的每一个可能性 都尽量详细化 也许考试时候没有那么多时间 那就争取把一个说的尽量详细 或者两个】【我的文章这里还提到了 不一定是水杨酸脂起了作用 也许是食品中的其它物质可以降低头痛... ...】
Thirdly, even if salicylates have a funtion【function】 to treat people's headache, and food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for food, however,【food. However  理由同上】 it couldn't support that the number of headaches suffered 【这里或者其他位置是不是少了个“降低”啊， 读起来有点别扭捏】by the average citizen of Mentia. As far as I am concerned, the author didn't provide that how many Mentia residents will use this flavor additives【this flavor additive      or      these flavor additives】 in their daily life, perhaps they hate use this kind flavor additives, in this sight【多积累点 同义词代替下】, people wouldn't gain any benefits from flavor additives with salicylates, so that the number of headaches will not decline.
【还是感觉这个你的论据不足， 内容有点单薄哦， 应该再说些可能性 而且围绕这些可能性展开】
To sum up, the claim lack credibility because the evidences cited in the analysis does not【（如果我分析的对的话）看看because 后面的主语是什么 是evidences么？ 后面does是跟的它吧  这个又不一致了 前面改单数吧 】 lend strong support to what the author claims. To strength the claim, the author should provide more details about salicylates' function and also show that how many Mentia residents would accept the flavor additives with salicylates in their daily life.


小毛病：
1.主谓一致
2.this的复数是these 也应该归到主谓一致吧

如果有给改错的地方别介意哦 而且要告诉我一下 我也改正 哈哈 现在话说 明天我就在考场了
我的这篇攻击思路和你的差不多哦



前提 水杨酸酯 阿司匹林是同一类化合物

证据：食品添加水杨酸做防腐剂----头痛发病数量下降
      
结论：水杨酸添加作为香料 头痛数量会持续稳步下降

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题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：626          用时：00:42:45          日期：2009/7/28 23:37:45

When we study history, we would find that our history often places too much emphasis on individuals. Are those significant events and trends in history were only made by the famous few? From my perspective, those famous individuals were important in our history; they led human beings, made those events and trends, even their ideas are still influenceing our current world. However, groups of people whose indentities have long been forgotten also are very important, even more than those famous individuals, to our histoury and civilizations.

First of all, the reason why historian palces such more emphasis on individuals is that we can overall understand and know the significant events and trends in history through what were they had done, what they had thought. As we know, in history, those famous persons play a very important role in every events and trends. They had been represented by the public. If they couldn't represent to the public, who would support them and impel the development of the history? When we study history, we often couldn't understand and know any detail information about those significant events and trends, so that the best way to us to research the history is to study the famous few in those events or trends. For example, we couldn't know the details of the American Civil War like a plan made by a general, but we could know how the war process through the Lincoln's activities. In short, through those famous few, we could be near to the history and the truth.

Moreover, it is surly that the famous few play a very very significant role in our history and civilization. Some significant events and trends would never happen without some famous individuals' leading. Also, without the famous few, people might not hold together and fight for their goals. So that the famous few paly as a leader in our history, and impel those events or trends happen directly. For example, if the North of the USA didn't have Abraham Lincoln, the American Civil War might not be happen, and the South would divide from the United States. Furthermore, if Adolf Hitler were not win the election in the 1930s, the World War II might not be happen. Beside, if the USA and the Soviet Union didn't begin their cold war after the World War II, the Germany might not split to two part. All of those I mentioned above tell us that the famous few were guiding those events and trends, so that we places more emphasis on them naturally.

Whereas, in my opinion, groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten also very important to our history, even sometimes, their influence did more overweight than the famous individuals. In our history, the contribution of these groups of people is also act as a critical role even more improtant than the famous few. We could easily find out that many events or trends, which are significant in history, were caused by the groups of people. In those events or trends, the famous few just play as a leader or a guider. The results was depending on what the groups of people did and how they did. Like the World War II, we know that the Allied Forces and Red Army was won the Central Powers at last, but this victory was not because the Big Three's leading, it was depending on those soliders whose identities have been forgotten. Thus, when we study history, we couldn't ignore the contribution of the forgotten people.

In sum up, both the famous few and the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten contributed to the most significant events and trends in history. When we study history, we could place emphasis on them both.

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题目：ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
字数：602          用时：00:43:20          日期：2009/7/29 21:03:35

The arts, which is made by artists, have always bring something of lasting value to our society. Admittedly, humans could not ignore that these lasting value couldn't be given to the society without the artist's work. In another hand, we also might not understand the value of those arts without the critics who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc. From my perspective, I partly agree with the point that it is the artist, not the critic who gives society something of lasting value. I think, both artist and critic gives those lasting value to the society.

First of all, we must recognize that it is the aritst create these colorful art to our world. As far as I am concerned, we must thank to the artist, because they influence our life, bring us art like novels, films, music and so on which is reveal the hidden opinion of the society, and the important is, they give more something of lasting value to us. I can't image that if there were no artist in our world, what would be happen. Indeed, we may have advanced technology and rich material life, bue it is highly possible that humans would feel vacuum in their spirit life. Besides, the art made by artists could cheer us to achieve our goal. And, somethimes, we could also find out that the art could reveal the hidden idea in our society or the truth of the history. For example, the Mona Lisa which is made by Vinci give the aesthetic feeling to the human beings; the films, like Transformers, Batman, etc would let us remember what comic we had been read in our childhood. the music, like long long way to go and so on would encourage us to reach our lover or goals. Thus, the artist is very important to our society.

Secondly, I have to say that not everyone could acknowledege the lasting value which has been brought by the arts to our society, so that the critic expose the lasting value and let human beings to feel it. If we study history about the art, we would find that the art were often beyond the current society. In this matter, people couldn't feel and enjoy even understand those arts frequently. But in my opinion, the value of art always exist, as the saying goes, all is not gold that glitters, but gold will glitter forever, it just need us to dig it out. Thus the critic act as the digger who has dig the value of the art. Like Van Gogh, one of the best artist painter in the world, if without any critic commented his drawing, he might not known by us. And more, when we watch movie, we always ignore the hidden value of its story, it is the critic that show us the value and let us recognize those films deeply. Thus, we also could not ignore the function of the critic.

Whereas, the critic somethings would misled us to feel or recognize the art. The critic couldn't be absolutely objectively, when they comment some arts, they would mix their attitude in their commentary. That is the reason why different critic would give us different commentary of a same art. I think as a normal people, we have to accept those commentary in a prudential way.  So that we could find out the lasting value of the art.

To sum up, thank to the artist and the critic, because of them, our would become more colorful nowadays, our society have those something of lasting value. We couldn't ignore the contribution of them either.


题目：ARGUMENT113 - The following was published by a consumer protection agency.

"Three years ago, So-Low launched a nationwide ad campaign, focusing heavily on sunny regions and distributing free sunglasses there. But although So-Low sunglasses cost less than higher-priced brands, they block a smaller proportion of the Sun's rays, including the type of rays known to damage the eyes even when the person wearing the sunglasses feels no discomfort. A recent study suggests that So-Low sunglasses can actually increase the risk of damage to people's eyes by creating a false sense of security. The study shows a sharp increase in the incidence of vision problems in the sunny regions over the past three years. These findings suggest that anyone concerned about eye damage from the Sun should avoid So-Low brand and instead either pay for higher-priced brands or wear no sunglasses at all."
字数：490          用时：00:27:54          日期：2009/7/29 21:03:35

Grounding on a recent study suggets that So-Low sunglasses can actually increase the risk of damage to people's eyes by creating a false sense of security and a sharp increase increase in the incidence of vision problems in the sunny regions onver the past three years, the author suggest that anyone concerned about eye damage from the Sun sould avid So-Low brand and instead either pay for higher-priced brands or wear no sunglasses at all. It seems like those evidences could support the suggestion strongly and cogently, however, after careful examination, I have to say it reveals little credible and convincing.

First of all, we need to know detailed information about the vision problems emerged these years to evaluate if they are related to sunglasses. The author provides that So-Low launched a nationwide ad cmpaign focusing heavily on sunny regions and distributing free sunglasses there three years ago to claim that the vision problems emerged these years are related to sunglasses. However, there are many more alternatives would lead to the same results. Like the environment, as the author says, those problems were increase in the palce which is the sunny regions, it is highly possible that the sunshine duration were increased in these years and cause the increase in the people eyes' problems. So that this evidence could support the conclusion groundless and unfounded.

Secondly, even those problems are related to sunglasses, we cannot make the hasty inference that it is So-Low that caused them. Admittedly, So-Low distributed free sunglasses in those place since three years ago, whereas, the author didn't provide that how many people have accept these free glasses and how many people use it. Also, perhaps people accept these free glasses and use it, but when they find the glasses make them feel bad, they will buy a new sunglasses of another brand even include this higher-priced brands. In this matter, without any detail information about the number of So-Low sunglasses which were used in these years. We couldn't assume that it is So-Low sunglasses cause the problems.

Thirdly, the author fails to consider that higher-priced brands might also cause cause some problems. As far as I concerned, people have many choices to protect their eyes from the Sun, they didn't have to choose the higher-priced brands or wear no sunglasses.  And also, the author didn't provide any information about the higher-priced brands, we don't know whether the quality of their sunglasses is good or bad. Maybe even the sunglasses of higher-priced brand would also cause the same problems like the So-Low. Thus, this evidence is not credible and it can't convince me.

To sum up, the conclusion lack credibility because those evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the author claims. To support the suggestion, the author should provides more information to proof that it is the sunglasses of So-Low lead these problems and the higher-priced brand sunglasses could not.

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题目：ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
字数：544          用时：00:43:17          日期：2009/7/31 1:33:55

Nowadays, people place more interest on the arts which shows the feeling and attitudes of artists. As far as I am concerned, the true art is the product of the artist's authentic passion, a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulse, and a creation of the artist's own spirit. Whereas, someone claim that the hidden ideas and impulses of our society could be revealed by the arts. From my perspective, in one hand, it is true that the arts could reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of our society, on the other hand, the arts could reveal nothing sometimes.

At the first, we must know what the art is and what the essential of the art is. Art is created by artists, including his or her feeling, ideas, point and etc, and bring those to us. When we watching films, listening to music, reading novels, we could feel the feeling of the author, know his or her ideas and others. And the essential of art is that spread not only the ideas and impulses of a society but also the creator’s ideas and impulses. For example, when we see the film "Wall-E", at first we would be moved through the story, and then, we would understand the power to support the Wall-E to help the Eva is love, next, I think that we would study more from this movie like humans should protect the environment of our world, or humans' relationship should be founded through sincerity, friendship and equality. Those are the director want to tell us.

In this sight, I agree partly that it is true that the hidden ideas and impulses could be revealed through the art.  Arts embody human's aesthetical criterion and their pursuit of certain value. And when the artists create the arts, they would be influenced by the society more or less. That is the why the art which were created in the Middle Age would reveal how dark the society was. Sometimes, the artist want his or her artistic works with depth, they also would make their work contain the ideas and impulses from the society. Like the music which is called "Numb" by Linkin Park, reveals the teenagers' ideas and impulses and the problem of our society. Also we could find out many movies or novels reveal the social ideas, impulses, problems and so on.

However, I think that sometimes, the art reveal nothing. Not every artist makes their work of art reveal the ideas and impulses intentionally. They just want to practice or create something. Like no one could find out any hidden ideas or impulses from the egg which was painted by the Vinci. Also we could know or learn something from the pop music. Especially, the movie, which is product by the Hollywood, often just because the film company want to make profits. Like "Transformers", just manufacture the movie through the comic and make much more money. How could we say this film revealed hidden ideas and impulses of a society?

Thus, not only the arts could reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society, but also just let us have a fun. Every matter has its uniqueness, there is no more ridiculous than to treat matters in an undiscriminating manner.


题目：ARGUMENT109 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Maple City newspaper.

"Twenty years ago Pine City established strict laws designed to limit the number of new buildings that could be constructed in the city. Since that time the average housing prices in Pine City have increased considerably. Chestnut City, which is about the same size as Pine City, has over the past twenty years experienced an increase in average housing prices similar to Pine City, but Chestnut City never established any laws that limit new building construction. So it is clear that laws limiting new construction have no effect on average housing prices. So if Maple City were to establish strict laws that limit new building construction, these laws will have no effect on average housing prices."
字数：492          用时：00:29:05          日期：2009/7/31 1:33:55

According to this argument, the author provides that Pine City which was established strict laws to limit the number of new buildings and make the average housing prices have increased, as the contrast, the Chestnut City which is similar with the Pine City, didn't establish any laws that limit the new building, the average prices also have increased, to support that if Maple City were to establish strict laws that limit new building construction, these laws will have no effect on average hosing prices. It seems that those evidence could support the conclusion strongly and cogently, however, after carefully examination, I find that it reveals little credible and convincing.

First of all, as far as I am concerned, the author fails to assume that the Pine City is absolutely similar with the Chestnut City. Through this assumption, the author claims that the strict laws would no effect on the average price of the houses. However, I think the Pine City is not similar with the Chestnut City in every aspect. There are some different things between the Pine and the Chestnut more or less. That is the why the average prices of housing would be increased whether the strict laws were established or not. For example, during twenty years, the Chestnut City developing rapidly and hugely, in other sight, the Pine City developing slowly even not develops. In this sight, it is surely that the average prices of houses in the Chestnut City would increase as the Pine City without the strict laws. Thus, we could not assert that the strict laws have no effect.

Secondly, in my opinion, I think the author fails to consider the different aspects among the Pine City, Chestnut City and the Maple City. Even if the average prices of houses have been increased during this twenty years in Chestnut City without strict laws, however, because many dissimilarity between the Chestnut City and the Maple City, we couldn't assert that if Maple City were to establish strict laws like the Pine City, it would have no effect on this price. Perhaps those strict laws would have effect as the plant in Maple is less than the Chestnut City. All I mentioned above make the conclusion groundless and unfounded.

Thirdly, from my perspective, I have to say that the author forget consider the results of the Chestnut City would reappear in Maple City in the future. Even if the Maple City were to establish those strict laws like the Pine City and have no effect on average prices of houses like the Chestnut City now, however, because we couldn't predict the whether the price would increased or not in the future, we couldn't assert that those laws would have no effect. Perhaps after some years, the price has increased depending on the strict laws.

To sum up, this conclusion couldn't convince me, to strength the conclusion, the author should place more information about the Pine City and the Chestnut City.

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题目：ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
字数：602          用时：00:43:20          日期：2009/7/29 21:03:35

The arts, which is made by artists, have always bring something of lasting value to our society. Admittedly, humans could not ignore that these lasting value couldn't be given to the society without the artist's work. In another hand, we also might not understand the value of those arts without the critics who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc. From my perspective, I partly agree with the point that it is the artist, not the critic who gives society something of lasting value. （没必要照抄原句，略微改写一下吧，既然是partly agree，干脆只列同意的部分也好)I think, both artist and critic gives those lasting value to the society.

First of all, we must recognize that it is the aritst create these colorful art to our world. As far as I am concerned, we must thank to the artist, because they influence our life, bring us art like novels, films, music and so on which is reveal the hidden opinion of the society, and the important is, they give more something of lasting value to us. I can't image that if there were no artist in our world, what would be happen. Indeed, we may have advanced technology and rich material life, bue it is highly possible that humans would feel vacuum in their spirit life. Besides, the art made by artists could cheer us to achieve our goal. And, somethimes, we could also find out that the art could reveal the hidden idea in our society or the truth of the history. For example, the Mona Lisa which is made by Vinci give the aesthetic feeling to the human beings; the films, like Transformers, Batman, etc would let us remember what comic we had been read in our childhood. the music, like long long way to go and so on would encourage us to reach our lover or goals. Thus, the artist is very important to our society.（我认为这一段的论点有着主观性的模糊，头一句的colorful art和最后的important，都没有具体的和题目中的lasting value挂上钩，会不会略微改动一下头尾的用词能更加切题呢？）

Secondly, I have to say that not everyone could acknowledege the lasting value which has been brought by the arts to our society, so that the critic expose the lasting value and let human beings to feel it. If we study history about the art, we would find that the art were （这个were的单复数和时态是否正确？）often beyond the current society. In this matter, people couldn't feel and enjoy even understand（三者的连接不大对头？） those arts frequently. But in my opinion, the value of art always exist, as the saying goes, all is not gold that glitters, but gold will glitter forever, it just need us to dig it out. Thus the critic act as the digger who has dig the value of the art. Like Van Gogh, one of the best artist painter in the world, if without any critic commented his drawing, he might not known by us. And more, when we watch movie, we always ignore the hidden value of its story, it is the critic that show（单复数问题） us the value and let us recognize those films deeply. Thus, we also could not ignore the function of the critic.（总体没有大问题）

Whereas, the critic somethings would misled us to feel or recognize the art. The critic couldn't be absolutely objectively, when they comment some arts, they would mix their attitude in their commentary. That is the reason why different critic would give us different commentary of a same art. I think as a normal people, we have to accept those commentary in a prudential way.  So that we could find out the lasting value of the art.（这段是否要表明评论家的局限性，把论点升华到需要我们谨慎对待评论才能从中寻找到艺术的永恒价值？若是这样，可能在第一句明说较好）

To sum up, thank to the artist and the critic, because of them, our would become more colorful nowadays, our society have those something of lasting value. We couldn't ignore the contribution of them either.


限时作文能这样感觉很足够了> < 我自己到现在还没限时成功……

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题目：ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
字数：541          用时：00:44:09          日期：2009/8/2 1:02:19

With the development of our society, our work become more and more effectively. Nowadays, someone says that an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, especially as a public official. In my opinion, the ethical and moral is very important to leader who want to be effective, whereas, there are many other abilities which is also significant to an effective leader.

Fist of all,  what is an effective leader? As far as I am concerned, an effective leader should make the plan or road map execute in a efficient way. Like deal with the relationship with the different department, assign right work to correct person, also need adjust the work time and make employees feels happy. As an effective leader, he or she should know how to use his or her power, when he or she can use this power, in this sight, we could find out that most time, the ethical and moral standards would influence their choice to use power at the end. Thus, it seems to me that an effective leader should maintain not only high ethical and moral standards, but also communicating, executive and other skills.

In those skills I mentioned above, I think the ethical and moral is the most important abilities to the effective leader. As we know that, when we choose a leader, we would give a power to him or her, if he or she did maintain little ethical and moral standards, we couldn't image what will be happen. Especially, if a public official have a absolute power and without a basic ethical and moral standards, he or she would make our society suffered in war or other catastrophe. For example, in the 1903s, the German choosed the Hitler as their premier and gave him a absolue power to govern the Germany, but just as today we know, Hitler didn't have basic ethical and moral standards, he want to extinguish the Jew and govern the whole Europe even the Asian. He led and started the World War II, killed million people, made more than hundred million people suffered. From my perspective, I regard that  a leader must maintain a least basic ethical and moral standards.

Moreover, as an old saying goes, every man has his faults, no one is perfect, the leader also would make mistakes. We couldn't throught their mistakes to rate whether they were an effective leader or not. We should rate a leader in a exhaustive way, like evaluating their achievement and so on. For example, Steven Jobs, the CEO of Apple Inc, is a paranoia. In the early 1980s, he lead the Apple Inc create the first graphic user interface operation system in the world, but depending his illiberal, the operation system didn't open its interface to developer, and make the Windows, which was created by Bill Gates, Microsoft Inc, won the personal computer desktop market. But nowadays, with the Ipod and new Mac computer designed by the Jobs, the Apple Inc become more and more valued, Jobs also is famous for his effecitve.

Therefore, we could find that the ethical and moral standards is very important to an effective leader, and the leader also would make mistakes, we should rate them in a exhaustive way.

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题目：ARGUMENT16 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper from a citizen of the state of Impecunia.

"Two years ago our neighboring state, Lucria, began a state lottery to supplement tax revenues for education and public health. Today, Lucria spends more per pupil than we do, and Lucria's public health program treats far more people than our state's program does. If we were to establish a state lottery like the one in Lucria, the profits could be used to improve our educational system and public health program. The new lottery would doubtless be successful, because a survey conducted in our capital city concludes that citizens of Impecunia already spend an average of $50 per person per year on gambling."
字数：513          用时：00:29:08          日期：2009/8/2 1:33:48

In this argument, the author claims that the state of Impecunia should began a state lottery like their neighboring state Lucria, and through the the state lottery, the education and public health would be improved. To support this conclusion, the author cites that after Lucria began a state lottery two years later, Lucria spends more per pupil than the Impecunia. And the author cites results from a survey conducted in Impecunia capital city which shows that the citizens of Impecunia already spend an average of $50 per person per year on gambling as basis to support the conclusion. It seems that those evidence could support the conclusion strongly, but after careful examination, I have to say it reveals little credible and convincing.

First of all, I think that the author fails establish the relationship among the Lucria spends more per pupil, the Lucria's public health program treats more people and the Lucria began a state lottery. As far as I am concerned, there are many other alternatives cause the same results. It is possible that the Lucria was developing fastly and rapidly in these years, so that the government have enough tax revenues for education and public health. In this case, the revenues of state lottery is not the uppermost factor to the results. So that we couldn't assert that the results were casued by the state lottery.

Moreover, even if the Lucria improve its education and public health by the revenues which is supplied through the state lottery, however, the author fails to consider the different between the Lucria and the Impecunia. In other words, the success of state lottery in Lucira would not happen in the Impecunia. Perhaps the government of Impecunia spend more money and begin a state lottery but little residents buy it, it will decrease the government budget and influence the education and public health. So that without consider the difference, we couldn't hastily conclude that a state lottey would bring benefits to the Impecunia.

Futhermore, the author cites a survey to support the conclusion, in my opinion, the survey would support the conclusion in a groundless way. First, the survey just conducted in Impecunia capital city, so that the results didn't representative to the whole citizens of the Impecunia. Perhaps just the citizens of Impecunia capital can afford to spend an average of $50 on gambling. Second, even if the residents of whole state were able to spend on gambling, whereas, gambling is not equal to lottery, we couldn't recognize that gambling as the lottery. People would spend an average of $50 per year on gambling also wasn't equal people would spend this money on lottery. So that this evidence support the conclusion little credible.

To sum up, the author didn't consider other alternatives would cause the success of the Lucria, and also didn't consider the different between the Lucria and Impecunia. To strength the conclusion, the author should provide detailed imformation about the tax revenues of Lucria through the state lottery. And also proof that the residents of the Impecunia would spend money on state lottery.