issue136，有拍必回

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TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
WORDS: 555
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009-7-22 9:48:22

I agree with the speaker, to some extent, that there are more and more choice for us. It is science development and changed attitude that give us more space for choosing. However, there are still something that we can not change, not to mention to choose. And sometimes, it seems few choices for us because of our subjective reasons.

Admittedly, with the rapid development of science and technology, ones can choose more on basis of what they like.
For example, assuming a boy always wants to be a girl, because of his appearance and voice like girls very much, he can see a doctor who can help him realize the dream of becoming a girl. That is attributed to the science which provide ones much advanced technology to make ones' dreams come true. Besides, the internet breaks traditional style of communicating, shopping, and entertainment, which gives ones a imaginary world that makes ones' life more convenient. It is not necessary for ones to go out for shopping that is really consuming much energy. To the opposite, as long as ones see some shopping webs, make sure what to buy, and then wait at home for the delivery. To sum up, science really provides ones a lot of opportunities to choose, which make life more colorful and happy.

In addition, new attitudes towards life and something else at present, also give ones more rights to choose what they like. New attitudes are opposite or even against traditional ones, and may be not accepted by the elderly, but they are popular among young people. A case in point is marriage, that means the time the couple can live together. But now, new couples may live together even before marriage, which causes many women are pregnant before becoming a wife. That is common phenomena in the modern world, but not accepted by parents or the elderly. After they are married, they are not prone to have babies that are considered burdens of life, which is also worried by the elderly. And even new couples bring up a pet instead of babies, which is called DINK family, and seems popular in new couples. In short, with the changing of attitudes, ones have new opinions of their life and future, which is a symbol and features of a period.

However, in some factors, ones can not choose, which naturally exist and will be in company with ones for life. For instance, parents ones have, the time ones are born, and so on, which is out of control and can not choose. In contrast, sometimes, there are enough chances for choosing, but ones would not like the current choice, because that they want a better one. As a result, some ones always say there is little choice for them and what they do is only waiting. In other words, as long as ones have a proper standard of themselves, there are still many choices for them.
Ones should accept what they can not change, try their best to improve, catch every opportunity and finally realize success in life.

Above all, even though there are still something that ones can not choose, with the development of science and attitudes, we believe that there will be more and more things that we can choose, and our new ideas can be accepted by others.

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I agree with the speaker, to some extent, that there are more and more choice（choices） for us. It is science development and changed attitude that give us more space for choosing.（强调句，我都不知道该怎么用了，哎） However, there are still something that we can not change, not to mention to choose. And sometimes, it seems few choices for us because of our subjective reasons.
（you agree with the speaker & you have 3 points that is:1.nowadays there are more choices.   2.something truly unchangable.   3.subjective reasons.我猜下面应该分三点具体说这三个方面吧。继续看）
Admittedly, with the rapid development of science and technology, ones （直接用we）can choose more on basis of（感觉不需要） what they like.（这个事独立的一段么？？- -@我猜这个是第二段开头，嘻嘻）
For example, assuming a boy always wants to be（become or turn into） a girl, because of his appearance and voice like girls very much, he can see a doctor who can help him realize the dream of becoming a girl.（这个例子有些邪恶，不过很好） That is attributed to the science which provide ones much advanced technology（choices or chances） to make ones' dreams come true. Besides, the internet(Internet) breaks traditional style of communicating, shopping, and entertainment, which gives ones a(an) imaginary world that makes ones' life more convenient. It is not necessary for ones to go out for shopping that is really consuming much energy(saving much energy and time??). To the opposite, as long as ones see（see看见） some shopping webs, make sure what to buy, and then wait at home for the delivery. To sum up, science really provides ones a lot of opportunities to choose, which make life more colorful and happy.（you use the Internet as example to support your view that science development offer us more choices today. That exactly suit for your 1st point.  Great job,if you use words properly that will be perfect.）

In addition, new attitudes towards life and something else at present, also give ones more rights to choose what they like. New attitudes are opposite or even against(opposite=?against) traditional ones, and may be not accepted by the elderly, but they are popular among young people. A case in point is marriage, that means the time the couple can live together. But now, new couples may live together even before marriage, which causes many women are pregnant before becoming a wife. That is common phenomena in the modern world, but not accepted by parents or the elderly. After they are married, they are not prone to have babies that are considered burdens of life, which is also worried by the elderly. And even new couples bring up a pet instead of babies, which is called DINK family, and seems popular in new couples. In short, with the changing of attitudes, ones have new opinions of their life and future, which is a symbol and features of a period.（Another amazing but excellent example,which support the point, we have  more choices for our life style and life attifudes.that is different from what you said in paragraph 2.　It really is a dissimilar aspect to support your point.Very nice.）

However, in some factors（under some circumstances）, ones can not choose, which naturally exist and will be in company with ones for life. For instance, parents ones have（do you want to say how many parents alive with you ?）, the time ones are born, and so on, which is out of control and can not choose. In contrast, sometimes, there are enough chances for choosing, but ones would not like the current choice, because that they want a better one. As a result, some ones always say there is little choice（choice可数？） for them and what they do is only waiting. In other words, as long as ones have a proper standard（what？understanding?） of themselves, there are still many choices for them.(开始转折了，但是马上就又说选择多，只是简单的说了下有时候不能选择，但是举了例子，个人观点这段有点乱，可能是时间紧的原因吧..)
Ones should accept what they can not change, try their best to improve, catch every opportunity and finally realize success in life(perhaps “realize the dreaming life” is better ahha ). (nice summary and meanful sentence!good)

Above all, even though there are still something that ones can not choose, with the development of science and attitudes, we believe that there will be more and more things that we can choose, and our new ideas can be accepted by others.(说说我的个人观点哈，么生气哦*　*  看到最后，感觉你的行文思路是按照最后这段的顺序和结构来写的，先写了很多选择，从科技带来的，到我们的观念改变带来的选择，然后让步说还有不能改变的少数情况，再转过来说那只是a tiny piece，选择还是足够多的，最后总结。其实结构还是很清晰的，优点是你列举了很多实例，缺点是语法和用词不太注意，读起来不太通顺。

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