TOEFL集结号暑期作文第4次作业by MVT

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TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.(08.2.23)
SYLLABUS:
1. 承认技术给人们生活带来简便；
2. 信息复杂难选，耗费大量时间；
3. 航班选择、复杂的安检使旅行更复杂；
4. 网络广告、信息安全使生活更复杂；
5. 结论：虽然有便利的优点，实际上是形成了更加复杂的生活。

As the progression of social economy and technology, people now enjoy a obvious convenience almost in every walk of life. Students could study courses at home through online programme with a personal computer. To and back between New York and Washington just costs you two hours by air. Hungry? Just dial a snack phone number, or click your mouse on the homepage of a restaurant and pay through the net-bank. Thanks to these convenience and benefits brought from modern high-tech, it seems that our daily lives become simpler than before. Is that true?

Even though the quick and convenient merits produced mostly by the internet, it also causes a lot of problems to make our lives more complicated. Now I cannot live without my computer. To choose my college courses, I have to register on our college net system and fill in several pages of blank. Then a huge number of courses is being exposed in front of me with a letter catalog from A to Z. In order to find a suitable course for me, sometimes I need to go through the whole courses instruction included in all of the letters. My eyes tired and my mindset confused. Eventually campus life becomes complicated.

The shuttle, of course save our times but also bring us troubles. Firstly, we need to spend much time declining the overdue propaganda from airline companies and seeking for a suitable one. Then the numerous restrictions on passengers may put us into an edge of insanity, such as belonging restriction, time schedule, over-check on custom, anti-terrorism prevention, and so on and so forth. Lastly, the flight might be canceled because of storm or cyclone, which leads to trouble on our business and trips. From this point, our lives are filled with complications.

Finally, the broad use of net service actually puzzles people's lives. Check out your mail-box, and there may be dozens of spam everyday. Furthermore, the payment from net will suffer from hackers' invasion. We probably lose our private information and even our funds. We have to remember lots of passwords for our bankcards, mailboxes, BBS and so on.

To conclude, I concede that our modern technology provide us some convenience and make our lives simpler to some extent. Yet, to filter out information for the useful stuff, to meet a huge numbers of requirements just for safety and convenience, and to set several passwords against thieves, in turn complicated lives are formed and our brains are more used to apply to these.

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TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.(08.2.23)
SYLLABUS:
1. 承认技术给人们生活带来简便；* E  D0 o  v; u+ [7 |  H8 E# `' r
2. 信息复杂难选，耗费大量时间；9 T& v9 H2 Z3 m( t8 f- O
3. 航班选择、复杂的安检使旅行更复杂；! r" S4 R# N+ Q9 `. }
4. 网络广告、信息安全使生活更复杂；
5. 结论：虽然有便利的优点，实际上是形成了更加复杂的生活。: @8 V; R( Q7 R8 l, B9 [
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As the progression of social economy and technology, people now enjoy a obvious convenience almost in every walk of life. Students could study courses at home through online programme with a personal computer. To and back between New York and Washington just costs you two hours by air. Hungry? Just dial a snack phone number, or click your mouse on the homepage of a restaurant and pay through the net-bank. Thanks to these convenience and benefits brought from modern high-tech, it seems that our daily lives become simpler than before. Is that true?郁抑先扬，那几个例子很好

Even though the quick and convenient merits produced mostly by the internet, it also causes a lot of problems to make our lives more complicated. Now I cannot live without my computer. To choose my college courses, I have to register on our college net system and fill in several pages of blank. Then a huge number of courses is being exposed in front of me with a letter catalog from A to Z. In order to find a suitable course for me, sometimes I need to go through the whole courses instruction included in all of the letters. My eyes tired and my mindset confused. Eventually campus life becomes complicated.这段总觉得虎头蛇尾

The shuttle, of course save our times but also bring us troubles. Firstly, we need to spend much time declining the overdue propaganda from airline companies and seeking for a suitable one. Then the numerous restrictions on passengers may put us into an edge of insanity, such as belonging restriction, time schedule, over-check on custom, anti-terrorism prevention, and so on and so forth. Lastly, the flight might be canceled because of storm or cyclone, which leads to trouble on our business and trips. From this point, our lives are filled with complications.

Finally, the broad use of net service actually puzzles people's lives. Check out your mail-box, and there may be dozens of spam everyday. Furthermore, the payment from net will suffer from hackers' invasion. We probably lose our private information and even our funds. We have to remember lots of passwords for our bankcards, mailboxes, BBS and so on.

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To conclude, I concede that our modern technology provide us some convenience and make our lives simpler to some extent. Yet, to filter out information for the useful stuff, to meet a huge numbers of requirements just for safety and convenience, and to set several passwords against thieves, in turn complicated lives are formed and our brains are more used to apply to these.

感觉大师的这篇习作比较新颖，因为开头没有明确表明态度，而是用一个反问句结束，下边是生活中的3个例子，论证的都很好，让我确实感受到了麻烦，为了比较客观的评判该范文，我引用ETS的评分标准来吧
effectively addresses the topic and task 做到了
is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details 做到了，但是总觉得每个例子后边都缺少些评论或者总结。
displays unity,progression, and coherence做到了
displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors.做的很好
所以在我看来，本文写得很好，就是感觉每个例子虽然很形象，但是总觉得有些虎头蛇尾，再加点论证或许更好，楼主你知道我水平有限，如有不到还请多多指教，加油！

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不错，加油~

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回复： 3# 出来吧葡萄

这篇文章没有限时，想把它写透一点，呵呵，一不小心就写长了！