TOEFL暑假集结号作文第五次作业 by hustzwj

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agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.
(08.3.2)

同意

1.
导游是经过培训的，他们了解的知识远比我们多，所以有他们给我们作导游，是使得旅游更有意义

2. 旅游中会出现各种各样的问题，行程安排 ，突发事件，对于这些事件，导游了解的比我们多，他可以很好的解决

最后，有导游会使旅游变得更加smooth，所以旅游最好的方式是有导游跟团

As the fast and convenient transportation and exploration of the places of interest, it becomes a trend for people to travel in various beautiful places in their own country and even abroad. While some people prefer to travel alone and consider it more flexible and relaxed to go by themselves, others think it can bring more convenience if traveling in group with a tour guide. In my opinion, I definitely prefer to have a guide to go together and thus have more fun and save many problems due to their presence.

To begin with, because the tour guide has much more knowledge about the famous places than us, with their explanations for the places of interest we can get better acknowledge of the sights and it will be a more interesting and unforgettable traveling as a result. For one thing, the tour guides all have received high education and training in the tourism and history, especially some of them are graduates of these majors. When tourists are visiting a place and appreciating the sights or traditional architectures, if there is a tour guide who explains more details about the history of the constructions, it will be much more meaningful and memorial. For example, I went to the Forbidden City in Beijing last year, I was so deeply impressed by the old buildings in front. And at that moment, the guide told me what these rooms are used, some for the emperors' living, and some for office, and he even talked some funny anecdotes as well. I felt quite exited and still remember some of the stories now. Thus, it will certainly bring the trip more fun with a tour guide.

In addition, during a trip it is inevitably to have some difficulties or unpleasant things happening, a tour guide can help us with solving these problems and make a dedicate schedule for the traveling. First of all, if we want to have a journey for several days, to make a plan is very necessary. Many times it always costs plentiful time to plan for the tour. You have to search much information on the Internet, such as the transportation expenses, and the routs planning, and so on. However, the guides are very good at doing these jobs and they can offer us the best and economic schedule which saves us a lot of time and energy. Furthermore, if someone of us has troubles or problems, like healthy problems, the tour guide can immediately give a appropriate response for the emergency. Therefore, it is the best choice to travel in group led by a guide.

In conclusion, it is the best way to travel in a group with a guide. Because the guide can add more information for us learning about the famous places, we can get acknowledge of these places in more details and thus it can be a very memorial trip in turn. Moreover, with the help of tour guide, tourists can save much more time in planning and have the immediate problems solved properly. Thus, to have a guide lead the traveling can make the trip more interesting and everything goes smoothly.

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agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide." w! f3 O& H5 ~& x% p
(08.3.2)
同意
导游是经过培训的，他们了解的知识远比我们多，所以有他们给我们作导游，是使得旅游更有意义
旅游中会出现各种各样的问题，行程安排 ，突发事件，对于这些事件，导游了解的比我们多，他可以很好的解决
最后，有导游会使旅游变得更加smooth，所以旅游最好的方式是有导游跟团
批改说明：
1. 红色: 不太合适的地方；
2. 蓝色: 值得学习的地方；
3. 淡紫: (my comment).

As the fast and convenient transportation and exploration(这两个词并列来修饰后面的景点有点怪怪的) of the places of interest, it becomes a trend for people to travel in various beautiful places in their own country and even abroad. While some people prefer to travel alone and consider it more flexible and relaxed to go by themselves, others think it can bring more convenience if traveling in group with a tour guide. In my opinion, I definitely prefer to have a guide to go together and thus have more fun and save many problems due to their presence.(首段正反各说一句，引出自己明确的观点，很简练！)

To begin with, because the tour guide has much more knowledge about the famous places than us, with their explanations for the places of interest we can get better acknowledge of the sights and it will be a more interesting and unforgettable traveling as a result. For one thing, the tour guides all have received high education and training in the tourism and history(这个好像不符合中国国情，相反，滥竽充数者更多。当然作者也没有限定在中国。), especially some of them are graduates of these majors. When tourists are visiting a place and appreciating the sights or traditional architectures, if there is a tour guide who explains more details about the history of the constructions, it will be much more meaningful and memorial. For example, I went to the Forbidden City in Beijing last year(现身说法，好例子！), I was so deeply impressed by the old buildings in front. And at that moment, the guide told me what these rooms are used, some for the emperors' living, and some for office, and he even talked some funny anecdotes as well(学习啦，我的就缺少这样具体的陈述). I felt quite exited and still remember some of the stories now. Thus, it will certainly bring the trip more fun with a tour guide.(本段观点：tour guide can bring tourists interesting and unforgettable feeling.例子贴切，展开有序)

In addition, during a trip it is inevitably to have some difficulties or unpleasant things happening, a tour guide can help us with solving these problems and make a dedicate(delicate) schedule for the traveling. First of all, if we want to have a journey for several days, to make a plan is very necessary. Many times it always costs plentiful time to plan for the tour. You have to search much information on the Internet, such as the transportation expenses, and the routs planning, and so on. However, the guides are very good at doing these jobs and they can offer us the best and economic schedule which saves us a lot of time and energy. Furthermore, if someone of us has troubles or problems, like healthy problems, the tour guide can immediately give a appropriate response for the emergency. Therefore, it is the best choice to travel in group led by a guide.(本段观点：can help tourists to solve common and emergent problems.)

In conclusion, it is the best way to travel in a group with a guide. Because the guide can add more information for us learning about the famous places, we can get acknowledge of(这个怎么理解？) these places in more details and thus it can be a very memorial trip in turn. Moreover, with the help of tour guide, tourists can save much more time in planning and have the immediate problems solved properly. Thus, to have a guide lead the traveling can make the trip more interesting and everything goes smoothly.(结论：总结上文2个优点，得出与首段一致的结论)
COMMENT:
1. 文章观点明确、结构合理、思路清新、论证比较贴切，是一篇很好的文章。
2. 没看出什么大问题。加油！

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As the fast and convenient transportation and exploration （前面搭配的有问题）of the places of interest, it becomes a trend for people to travel in various beautiful places in their own country and even abroad. While some people prefer to travel alone and consider it more flexible and relaxed to go by themselves, others think it can bring more convenience if traveling in group with a tour guide. In my opinion, I definitely prefer to have a guide to go together and thus have more fun and save many problems due to their presence.
To begin with, because the tour guide has much more knowledge about the famous places than us, with their explanations for the places of interest we can get better acknowledge of the sights and it will be a more interesting and unforgettable traveling as a result. For one thing, the tour guides all have received high education and training in the tourism and history, especially some of them are graduates of these majors. When tourists are visiting a place and appreciating the sights or traditional architectures, if there is a tour guide who explains more details about the history of the constructions, it will be much more meaningful and memorial（memorable难忘的）. For example, I went to the Forbidden City in Beijing last year, I was so deeply impressed by the old buildings in front. And at that moment, the guide told me what these rooms are used, some for the emperors' living, and some for office, and he even talked（tell感觉好些，talk一般是相互的） some funny anecdotes as well. I felt quite exited（excited） and still remember some of the stories now. Thus, it will certainly bring the trip more fun with a tour guide.
In addition, during a trip it is inevitably to have some difficulties or unpleasant things happening, a tour guide can help us with solving these problems and make a dedicate (delicate) schedule for the traveling. First of all, if we want to have a journey for several days, to make a plan is very necessary. Many times（是想表达很多时候吗？？试试in most cases等） it always costs plentiful time to plan for the tour. You have to search much information on the Internet, such as the transportation expenses, and the routs（routes） planning, and so on. However, the guides are very good at doing these jobs and they can offer us the best and economic（economical经济的） schedule which saves us a lot of time and energy. Furthermore, if someone of us has troubles or problems, like healthy problems（health problems好些吧）, the tour guide can immediately give a appropriate response for the emergency. Therefore, it is the best choice to travel in group led by a guide.
In conclusion, it is the best way to travel in a group with a guide. Because the guide can add more information for us learning about the famous places, we can get acknowledge of these places in more details and thus it can be a very memorial trip in turn. Moreover, with the help of tour guide, tourists can save much more time in planning and have the immediate problems solved properly. Thus, to have a guide lead the traveling can make the trip more interesting and everything goes smoothly.

楼主有些词用的太多了，列如bring， do sth，等。建议多背短语。
总体来说是篇好作文，如果是限时之内的作品更是难得。