第六次作业 by daidai

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

Do you agree with the following statement: Nowadays people spend too much time on personal enjoyment –things they like to do—rather than the things they should do

不同意
1.这是一个竞争激烈的社会，只有多花时间在本分的事情上才可以得以生存。
2.大多数人都会为了名利或一些目的而奋斗，只有花时间在那些应该做的事情上，才能达到目的。
3.现在人们娱乐是因为要缓解工作的压力。娱乐的前提是已经花了大量的时间完成了应该的事情。

Last year, the official holidays have changed in China. Many people are not satisfied with adjustment. Faced with this controversy, the vast majority of citizens claim that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment, but citizens who favor people have already taken a lot of time on task, on the other hand, argue that the time they take to play is far more less than they spend to finish things they should do. As I perceive the issue, nowadays people spend much time on things they should do.

First of all, the world is full of competition and challenge. In this economic crisis age, everyone should work hard to support his or her family. If they did not devote their time on task but on comfort, they would be faced with unemployment and then they would have no money spend on pleasure things. So, it is obvious that they can not survive if they spend little time and effort in competition. Actually, human beings always take every second working hard for next second live.

Secondly, most of employees and the president work hard to get their goals. Some of them want to get promotion but others want to get more profit from the products, in any case, they try hard on their purposes. Our students also study hard in a similar way. For instance, many students struggle to get high scores on TOEFL test. They learn English weather in busy term or spare hot vocation. They spend all the time they could spare in study English. No pains, no gains. All high score winners invested significant time and effort to preparing the test.

In addition, after finishing the job or getting the objective, they labors need appropriate entertainment to relax. Personal enjoyment could diminish their pressure from the hard time working and what is more, they labors could work more efficiently and effectively than they working with tired heart. However, they should not spend too much time on enjoyment which would lead to losing themselves. The person who lose himself would rejected by the world. All in all, everyone could have entertaining time but not too much.


Clearly, people who want to survive or have goals in heart should spend a lot of time on the work but not the pleasure. Yet, appropriate entertainment to relax them is also justified.

hustzwjUID: 203387

Do you agree with the following statement: Nowadays people spend too much time on personal enjoyment –things they like to do—rather than the things they should do

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1.这是一个竞争激烈的社会，只有多花时间在本分的事情上才可以得以生存。
2.大多数人都会为了名利或一些目的而奋斗，只有花时间在那些应该做的事情上，才能达到目的。
3.现在人们娱乐是因为要缓解工作的压力。娱乐的前提是已经花了大量的时间完成了应该的事情。

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Last year, the official holidays have （语法）changed in China. Many people are not satisfied with adjustment. Faced（ing） with this controversy, the vast majority of citizens claim that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment, but citizens who favor people have already taken a lot of time on task（working）, on the other hand, argue that the time they take to play is far more less than they spend to finish things they should do. As I perceive the issue, nowadays people spend much time on things they should do。

First of all, the world is full of competition and challenge. In this economic crisis age, everyone should work hard to support his or her family. If they did not devote their time on task but on comfort, they would be faced with unemployment and then they would have no money spend on pleasure things. So, it is obvious that they can not survive if they spend little time and effort in competition. Actually, human beings always take every second working hard for next second live.（其实我觉得你倒不如把最后一句給提前到ts去，毕竟你得ts关系到主题噢，就是人们更多时间是花在工作上而不是玩上）

Secondly, most of employees and the president work hard to get their goals.花时间，在ts里面，我觉得你应该突出这个， Some of them want to get promotion but others want to get more profit from the products, in any case, they try hard on their purposes. Our students also study hard in a similar way. For instance, many students struggle to get high scores on TOEFL test. They learn English weather in busy term or spare hot vocation. They spend all the time they could spare in study English. No pains, no gains. All high score winners invested significant time and effort to preparing the test.

In addition, after finishing the job or getting the objective, they labors need appropriate entertainment to relax. Personal enjoyment could diminish their pressure from the hard time working and what is more, they labors could work more efficiently and effectively than they working with tired heart. However, they should not spend too much time on enjoyment which would lead to losing themselves. The person who lose himself would rejected by the world. All in all, everyone could have entertaining time but not too much这段的转折不错.

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Clearly, people who want to survive or have goals in heart should spend a lot of time on the work but not the pleasure. Yet, appropriate entertainment to relax them is also justified.
总结，你的中文提纲很好，结构很好。。但是我觉得你每段的TS不是很切题，但我不是说你立意不切题，是说你的句子调整一下，就好了。。

zliuKaiserUID: 2522209

Last year, the official holidays have (was) changed in China. Many people are not satisfied with (the) adjustment. Faced(facing) with this controversy, the vast majority of citizens claim that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment, but citizens who favor people have already taken a lot of time on task, on the other hand, argue that the time they take to play is far more less than they spend to finish things they should do. As I perceive the issue, nowadays people spend much time on things they should do.


First of all, the world is full of competition and challenge. In this economic crisis age, everyone should work hard to support his or her family. If they did not devote their time on task but on comfort, they would be faced with unemployment and then they would have no money spend on pleasure things. So, it is obvious that they cannot survive if they spend little time and effort in competition. Actually, human beings always take every second working hard for next second live.


Secondly, most of employees and the president work hard to get (achieve, 换一些词可能更好一些) their goals. Some of them want to get promotion but (这里是不是应该是并列关系, while) others want to get more profit from the products, in any case, they try hard on their purposes. Our students also study hard (换个词,diligently) in a similar way (是不是说因为同样的道理?). For instance, many students struggle to get high scores on TOEFL test. They learn English weather (whether) in busy term or spare hot vocation. They spend all the time they could spare in study (studying) English. No pains, no gains. All high score winners invested significant time and effort to preparing the test.

In addition, after finishing the job or getting the objective, they (their) labors need appropriate entertainment to relax. Personal enjoyment could diminish their pressure from the hard time working and what is more, they labors (they) could work more efficiently and effectively than they working with tired heart. However, they should not spend too much time on enjoyment which would lead to losing themselves. The person who loses himself would (be) rejected by the world. All in all, everyone could have entertaining time but not too much.(lost oneself是什么意思?)


Clearly, people who want to survive or have goals in heart should spend a lot of time on the work but not the pleasure. Yet, appropriate entertainment to relax them is also justified.

总的来说还是很清楚的, 我个人的感觉是由一些词汇单调了, 比如spend time, 可以用make use of time in…, take advantage of time in…, utilize the time…,
另外一点, 有些话解释的不够明白, 我认为需要一些例子来讲清楚.