0910AW 同主题写作第十期 Issue48 by Rufusgw

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这篇ISSUE我写得非常没有感觉，中间磕磕绊绊。本来想以邓小平和改革开放举例子，后来发现那样的话字数将多得夸张，故作了较大调整。最后大致成这个样子（前后花的时间已经不止45分钟了）。求拍，谢谢！
PS：可能有些童鞋不太了解我在文章第三段末尾提到的人物，这里大概说一下：The siblings Scholl， 舒和兄妹（也有译绍尔兄妹的），是纳粹第三帝国时期的著名反纳粹组织白玫瑰的成员（不知道是否有童鞋读过《永远的白玫瑰》？里面讲的就是他们）。至于Stauffenberg，如果看过阿汤哥主演的《Valkyrie》（常译作行动目标希特勒、刺杀希特勒）就应该比较熟悉了。
    Unlike traditional method in history study focusing on famous few figures, the speaker claim it be the mass but anonymous others who attributed to the significant events and thus pushed the wheel of the world forward. But I don’t think such viewpoints is of sufficient persuasion, for both the famous few and groups of anonymous others are the indispensable roles in the process of history. Without the exceptional charisma or outstanding leading capacity of famous few, the voice, resolution and strength of unknown others could hardly drove society forward; On the other hand, the well-known leading characters of history would not have a single opportunity to put their outstanding capability into use at a right time and right place without groups of others who uphold or oppose them.
    It is suitable to conclude that the famous few had achieved great fame and imprinted their character on recordation for their selections which influenced their time and the time after impressively, and destined them as the highlight figure for a period of time. Especially during the era of turbulence or even confliction and war, the famous few played their role often as military conductors, political leaders or other characters with their intentions and actions determined the destiny of a state or even world. It is well-accepted that the 3rd Reich would barely became that devastating without Adolf Hitler, an ambitious politician and merciless war criminal with remarkable intellect and demoniac personality. The zealotry of Nazism did burgeon in Germany basing on complex contemporary international condition, yet it was Hitler who turned such zealotry into a horrible regime, thus engraved on the pages of modern history. Now the chaos and catastrophe of genocide and massacre has long gone, but offspring of survivors will never forget that disastrous and sorrowful era due to world war II, the 3rd Reich, and its sovereign, Adolf Hitler.
     The famous few earned good fame or flagrance for all their choice ordaining society and forming history we learned today, but they are far from the reliable unique clue to get a complete and sensible concept of history. History, with a certain prominent figures as its symbol, would reveal more amazing truth concealed only if we are willing to discover and research behaviors of unknown mass others thus evaluate history completely and rationally. Such reaction from groups of coeval people towards their leaders as famous few is the key for nowaday historians to figure out why it was like that and why it would develop and process in that way. Just as Hitler’s presence is a key of 3rd Reich’s ever existence, but if we later generations never attempt to figure out the different thoughts and various actions of other citizens in Reich, what we achieve would certainly be partial and incomplete illusion since without the resurgence and well accepted of Nazism by thousands of Germans, Hitler himself would likely be an unsupported leader without no inferiors to command and may have his time ephemerally but soon go to oblivion.   Besides, If it was not for the searching of historical materials about some less famous characters like The Siblings Scholl and Stauffenberg (at least less well known to people other than Germans)who opposed Hitler’s tyranny and sacrificed their life for that, historians would probably conclude an unfair evaluation in historical research about Germany, The 3rd Reich,and its citizens among those crazy years, hence distort the truth of history.
      Generally speaking, the speaker does not make enough sense for he partially contribute the wheel of world, more accurately, the wheel of history, only to the majority who were mostly unknown to the descendants. In fact, the famous few highlight people and forgotten many mundane peers had respectively affected the society before us, thus by revealing historical materials of the both groups will pay in our research and study about history.

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1# Rufusgw    Unlike traditional method in history study focusing on famous few figures, the speaker claim it be(这是个什么用法？好像没见过) the mass but anonymous others who attributed to the significant events and thus pushed the wheel of the world forward. But I don’t think such viewpoints is of sufficient persuasion, for both the famous few and groups of anonymous others are the indispensable roles in the process of history. Without the exceptional charisma or outstanding leading capacity of famous few, the voice, resolution and strength of unknown others could hardly drove society forward; On the other hand, the well-known leading characters of history would not have a single opportunity to put their outstanding capability into use at a right time and right place without groups of others who uphold or oppose them. （开头好像长了些，我觉得可以把从这句扩展一下单独写一段。）
    It is suitable to conclude that the famous few had achieved great fame and imprinted their character on recordation for their selections which influenced their time and the time after impressively, and destined them as the highlight figure for a period of time. Especially during the era of turbulence or even confliction and war, the famous few played their role often as military conductors, political leaders or other characters with their intentions and actions determined the destiny of a state or even world. It is well-accepted that the 3rd Reich would barely became that devastating without Adolf Hitler, an ambitious politician and merciless war criminal with remarkable intellect and demoniac personality. The zealotry of Nazism did burgeon in Germany basing on complex contemporary international condition, yet it was Hitler who turned such zealotry into a horrible regime, thus engraved on the pages of modern history. Now the chaos and catastrophe of genocide and massacre has long gone, but offspring of survivors will never forget that disastrous and sorrowful era due to world war II, the 3rd Reich, and its sovereign, Adolf Hitler. （这句话不是很符合本段主题，而且感觉很Chinglish）
     The famous few earned good fame or flagrance for all their choice ordaining society and forming history we learned today, but they are far from the reliable unique clue to get a complete and sensible concept of history. History, with a certain prominent figures as its symbol, would reveal more amazing truth concealed only if we are willing to discover and research behaviors of unknown mass others thus evaluate history completely and rationally. Such reaction from groups of coeval people towards their leaders as famous few is the key for nowaday historians to figure out why it was like that（可以换个更地道点的说法） and why it would develop and process in that way. Just as Hitler’s presence is a key （factor）of 3rd Reich’s ever existence, but if we later generations never attempt to figure out the different thoughts and various actions of other citizens in Reich, what we achieve would certainly be partial and incomplete illusion since (that) without the resurgence and well accepted of Nazism by thousands of Germans, Hitler himself would likely be an unsupported leader without no inferiors to command and may have his time ephemerally but soon go to oblivion.   Besides, If it was not for the searching of historical materials about some less famous characters likeThe Siblings Scholl and Stauffenberg (at least less well known to people other than Germans) （为什么不用作插入语呢）who opposed Hitler’s tyranny and sacrificed their life for that, historians would probably conclude an unfair evaluation in historical research about Germany, The 3rd Reich,and its citizens among those crazy years, hence distort the truth of history.
      Generally speaking, the speaker does not make enough sense for he partially contribute the wheel of world, more accurately, the wheel of history, only to the majority who were mostly unknown to the descendants. In fact, the famous few highlight people and forgotten many mundane peers had respectively affected the society before us, thus by（删掉）revealing historical materials of the both groups will pay in our research and study about history.


总体来说逻辑不错，但是好像有不少语法错误，可能写快了吧

RufusgwUID: 2501942

谢谢楼上两位，我当时写的时候的确非常没有感觉，编出来就成了这个样子。一起加油！