TOEFL集结号暑期作文第8次作业by nkgl

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Agree or disagree, technology cause children show lesscreative than they were in past.
不同意该观点
不是科技造成的而是教育体制
科技对创新有帮助
科技提供新的方法

Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

With the remarkable development of technology, not only adults, but also children are leading a more and more hi-tech life style. So advanced is technology that we can almost do whatever we want by turning to it. At the same time, there is a social phenomenon nowadays, which also arouses wide public concern, that our children seem to lose power in the competition with us in the same period in terms of creativity. Some people automatically link these two things together. They claim that advanced technology causes children show less creative than they were in past. As far as I am concerned, there is no such a strong tie between them. Moreover, advanced technology even exerts a positive influence on children, when it comes to the development of their creativity.

In the first place, it is the way that children abuse new technology without curiosity rather than technology itself that prevents children from showing more creative. The current education system leads children to accept the knowledge given by teachers passively. Consequently, it gets children in to the habit of learning or using technology without thinking and exploring. It is conceivable that, in the long run, this teacher-centered system will cause children's creativity draining away. Apparently, it is our education system that is to be blamed for this worrying phenomenon.

Secondly, technology enables children to realize their creativity much more technically feasible. A few decades ago, whatever children have in their mind, they can neither share with peers in the other side of the world, nor put it into reality. Things are quite different these days. Today, when children create something, it is possible for them to materialize it in the cyberspace and communicate with others in the rest of the world. And there are even some special websites designed for this purpose. It is conceivable that, by communicating with peers who have the similar idea, children can improve their creative thoughts.

Also, the development of science and technology brings children, as well as adults, new methods to analyze old problems. For instance, the game theory originated from mathematics is applied in economics; the new statistical methods are applied in nearly all kinds of modern science ranging from anthropology to astrophysics and so on. Children benefiting from these scientific and technological breakthroughs can look at the world in a fresh, new perspective which enhances their creative capability.

From the reasons listed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that technology does not lead to children showing less creative. On the other hand, it even helps children to be more creative. Thus, we should not worry about advanced technology affects our children in a negative way; instead, we should keep improving it.



最后一点理由感觉写的有点偏题。。。实在想不出了 大家给点意见

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Agree or disagree, technology cause children show lesscreative than they were in past.
不同意该观点
不是科技造成的而是教育体制
科技对创新有帮助
科技提供新的方法

With the remarkable development of technology, not only adults, but also children are leading a more and more hi-tech life style. So advanced is technology that we can almost do whatever we want by turning to it(建议删，较中式). At the same time, there is a social phenomenon nowadays, which also arouses wide public concern（感觉语序变变会更地道）, that our children seem to lose power in the competition with us 此处感觉应该由who引导从句in the same period in terms of creativity. Some people automatically link these two things together.感觉不错的过渡，学习了 They claim that advanced technology causes children show less creative than they were in past. As far as I am concerned, there is no such a strong tie between them. Moreover, advanced technology even exerts a positive influence on children, when（感觉应该用and） it comes to the development of their creativity.表明观点，反对题目

In the first place, it is the way that children abuse new technology without curiosity rather than technology itself that prevents children from showing more creative. The current education system leads children to accept the knowledge given by teachers passively. Consequently, it gets children in to the habit of learning or using technology without thinking and exploring. It is conceivable that, in the long run, this teacher-centered system will cause children's creativity draining away. Apparently, it is our education system that is to be blamed for this worrying phenomenon（儿童在没有好奇心的情况下滥用科技而不是科技阻碍了儿童显得有创造力），引出是教育的问题。保留看法（教育制度作了科技的替罪羊），感觉不太好，但又似乎有点说的过去（其实还是科技的问题，没有科技，教育制度也成不了气候）

Secondly,可以加个（It is表强调） technology enables children to realize their creativity much more technically feasible. A few decades ago, whatever children have in their mind, they can neither share with peers in the other side of the world（猛一看还是为你在写恐怖小说，刚看了10个恐怖小故事，再一看英文版的都吓出汗了，是想表达in other countries的意思吧）, nor put it into reality. Things are quite different these days. Today, when children create something, it is possible for them to materialize it in the cyberspace and communicate with others in the rest of the world. And there are even some special websites designed for this purpose. It is conceivable that, by communicating with peers who have the similar idea, children can improve their creative thoughts.其实想表达的是科技促进创造的意思？

Also, the development of science and technology brings children, as well as adults, new methods to analyze old problems. For instance, the game theory originated from mathematics is applied in economics; the new statistical methods are applied in nearly all kinds of modern science ranging from anthropology to astrophysics and so on. Children benefiting from these scientific and technological breakthroughs can look at the world in a fresh, new perspective which enhances their creative capability.科技让人们有新方法解决老问题，感觉例子不好，那顶多是一些新理论，但不是科技。还不如说以前祖冲之自己在家弄个很不精确的圆周率，现在计算机让这个圆周率精确到小数点后N位了。

From the reasons listed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that technology does not lead to children showing less creative. On the other hand, it even helps children to be more creative. Thus, we should not worry about advanced technology affects our children in a negative way; instead, we should keep improving it.

第二次学习小n同学的文章了，这回就比较注意格式了，表扬下；
感觉语法还是很强的，而且词汇也很丰富，就是表达略显中式，建议多看地道的美文；
观点方面除了第一个我觉得有争议意外，另外两个还好，就是论据在写的充分点更好，
新东方有一套理论就是正面观点2条详述+1段让步，虽然被说模板，但有时还是可以借鉴下的，貌似也挺严谨。
都是些个人看法，楼主加油！

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With the remarkable development of technology, not only adults, but also children are leading a more and more hi-tech life style. So advanced is technology that we can almost do whatever we want by turning to it. At the same time, there is a social phenomenon nowadays, which also arouses wide public concern, that our children seem to lose power in the competition with us （好绕的句子！！！）. Some people automatically link these two things together. They claim that advanced technology causes children show less creative than they were in past. As far as I am concerned, there is no such a strong tie between them. Moreover, advanced technology even exerts a positive influence on children, when it comes to the development of their creativity.笔者实力超强啊，第一段词汇丰富， 未见什么错误，个别添加的词略显中式，）



In the first place, it is the way that children abuse new technology without curiosity rather than technology itself that prevents children from showing more creative. The current education system leads children to accept the knowledge given by teachers passively. Consequently, it gets children in to the habit of learning or using technology without thinking and exploring. It is conceivable that, in the long run, this teacher-centered system will cause children's creativity draining away. Apparently, it is our education system that is to be blamed for this worrying phenomenon

Secondly, technology enables children to realize their creativity much more technically feasible. A few decades ago, whatever children have in their mind, they can neither share with peers in the other side of the world, nor put it into reality. Things are quite different these days. Today, when children create something, it is possible for them to materialize it in the cyberspace and communicate with others in the rest of the world. And there are even some special websites designed for this purpose. It is conceivable that, by communicating with peers who have the similar idea, children can improve their creative thoughts.

Also, the development of science and technology brings children, as well as adults, new methods to analyze old problems. For instance, the game theory originated from mathematics is applied in economics; the new statistical methods are applied in nearly all kinds of modern science ranging from anthropology to astrophysics and so on. Children benefiting from these scientific and technological breakthroughs can look at the world in a fresh, new perspective which enhances their creative capability.

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From the reasons listed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that technology does not lead to children showing less creative. On the other hand, it even helps children to be more creative. Thus, we should not worry about advanced technology affects our children in a negative way; instead, we should keep improving it.
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