A18 请帮我改改啊～～～

kay8815UID: 2668603

这篇算是我的第一篇作品，貌似模板用的太多了。。。。请大家有空的话帮我改改吧，重点是看看我攻击的顺序行不行。多谢了

In this argument the author comes to the conclusion that on the purpose of improving highway safety in PC, speed limit should be restored to the original 55 miles per hour. In addition, the author also cites that to lower accident rate , PC should adopt BC’s method. To support the conclusion, the author applies much evidence in the argument. However, close scrutiny of this argument reveals that it is unconvincing in several aspects.

First and foremost, the author’s reasoning linking the project of lowering speed limit and the slight decrease of accident rate seems reasonable on the surface, but there is no information available to justify any causal relationship between them. It is highly possible that other factors might also bring about the same results. For insurance, perhaps the weather condition was harsh during the period when the project was put into practice which led to the increase number of accidents. Or perhaps the project was implemented just for a relatively short period of time, PC residents are not used to the change yet. This assumption is justified by the author’s mentioning that ”Most drivers are exceeding the new speed limit”. Maybe after a time long enough , the accident rate will be brought down sharply.

In addition, the author unfairly assumes that by improving the road condition PC will achieve the same result as BC dose by overlooking a host of other possibility which might bring about a different result for PC. It is entirely possible that BC has more sharp turns where accidents are more likely to happen. Given to that matter, road improvement project might be beneficial to BC rather than to PC. Or perhaps there are more inexperienced drivers in PC which may lead to more accidents.
（It is possible that there are more younger, inexperienced, or more elderly, unsafe drivers in Forestville than there are in PC. Without accounting for these and other alternative explanations, the author cannot bolster the recommendation that PC should adopt BC’s method.

Finally, Even assuming that taking BC’s experience may do some extent help to solve the problems, there is still another problem with the argument that the author unfairly assumes that it is the only means of achieving the desired result. The author overlooks other possible means of bringing down the accident rate such as tightering enforcement of traffic regulations and reining force the traffic security education.

In sum, the author fails to justify her recommendation on the basis of the scant evidence cited in the argument. I would suspend my judgment about the credibility of this argument until the author can provide more information about the following aspecs: Firstly, the decrease of the speed limit is the only cause of slightly reduce in accident rate. Secondly, the geography and weather condition are quite similar in BC and PC. Thirdly, PC’s project is the most suitable one for PC rather than other means.

GTCUID: 2672150

如果重点是要看顺序的话。。额。。建议给提纲。。。