【kaleidoscope】第四次作业issue70 by vina1114

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In any profession-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.


Can revitalization through new leadership be regarded as the best way to success for any enterprise? In my view the speaker unfairly generalizes. Actually, in some areas, changing the leader can help them to be more successful. However, in different situations, the change of the leadership may have negative effect.

We need the new leadership to make the enterprise revitalize in some special profession, for example in politics. There is no flawless people individual in this world. The fame, interest and wealth can confuse a wise leader and cause him or her to do something illegal. The long term leadership make the leaders more easy to abuse their power .and the most corruption are have a close relationship with the long term leadership by one person. To be a leader is very hard and long term work will make a person lose the passions and creativities. So leaders have to face a problem that their recourse has been exhausted. At that time, we will starve for a new leader to guide us to make further progress. In America, the term of a president is 4 years, which can represent that the term for a democratic country is a must and has a great effect on the development of the country. So in some professions, they need different kinds of people to be the leader to infuse the new blood to the enterprises.

However, in some other special professions, if we take the same measure, we will fail to see the successfulness we have expected, such as education and exploration. As a president of a school, regardless of primary school, middle school and even college, the faculty needs an experienced president who knows the every details of the school .can you promise a new person will be same to the old president who has been in the position for four years? For teachers and students, they may have strong emotion to the old president who has companied them in the past four years. They are used to the leadership of the old president and the new actions of the new leadership may disturb their work and also is bad for their procedures of the teaching. In a word, fixed leadership for a school is better. It is the same to the exploration, the requirement of an exploration leader is very restrict, including good health, the abundant specialty knowledge, the ability to deal with different hazards and incidents quickly and get well along with the all group member and so on. Then a green hand that does not have the experience can not enough calm and take right actions to deal with the danger. And se he or her stay with the group just a short time, so they can not everybody well. It is hard for us to believe him or her that he or her can grantee the safety of the group member during the exploration.

To sum up, the leader stepping down after a limited time is a good way to stimulate the development of the enterprise in some degree. But it is not absolute and if we must think twice that if we need the new leadership according to the situation.

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Can revitalization through new leadership be regarded as the best way to success for any enterprise? In my view the speaker unfairly generalizes. Actually, in some areas, changing the leader can help them to be more successful. However, in different situations, the change of the leadership may have negative effect.(观点说的很清楚，但是最好具体一点)

We need the new leadership to make the enterprise revitalize in some special profession, for example in politics. There is no flawless people(删去) individual in this world. The(the +adj.指人，删去) fame, interest and wealth can confuse(一般是指问题/情况使人迷惑) a wise leader and cause him or her to do something illegal. The(删去) long term leadership make the leaders more easy(easier) to abuse their power .and(And) the(删去) most corruptions are(删去) have a close relationship with the long term leadership by one person(of a single person). (这里可以考虑加个连词，用来引出下一层意思In addition?)To be a leader is very hard and long term work will make a person lose the passions and creativities. So leaders have to face a problem that their recourse has been exhausted.(额……这句没看懂)
At that time,(In this situation/case) we will starve for a new leader to guide us to make further progress. In America, the term of a president is 4 years, which can represent that the term for a democratic country is a must and has a great effect on the development of the country.(这里举例的话最好多说几个国家，不然后面的so有点唐突的感觉~) So in some professions, they need different kinds of people to be the leader to infuse
the(LZ很喜欢用the哦，但是一般不特指的话是不用的~)
new blood to the enterprises.(第一层的论述还可以在压缩，后面举例再展开一点)

However, in some other special professions, if we take the same measure, we will fail to see the successfulness(success) we have expected, such as education and exploration. As a president of a school, regardless of primary school, middle school and even college, the faculty needs an experienced president who knows the(删去) every details of the school .can(Can) you promise a new person will be same(表意不准，为什么一定要一样的呢？) to the old president who has been in the position for four years? For teachers and students, they may have strong emotion to the old president who has companied them in the past four years.(额……这个例子……情感很难说哦，可能他也被仇视啊~) They are used to the leadership of the old president and the new actions of the new leadership may disturb their work and also is(be) bad for their procedures of the teaching. In a word, fixed leadership for a school is better. It is the same to the exploration,(where) the requirement of an exploration leader is very restrict, including good health, the abundant specialty
(and) knowledge, the ability to deal with different hazards and incidents quickly and get well along with the all group member and so on. Then a green hand that does not have the experience can not enough calm and take right actions to deal with the danger. And se(?) he or her stay with the group just a short time, so they can not (?) everybody well. It is hard for us to believe (in) him or her that(unless) he or her can grantee the safety of the group member during the exploration.

To sum up, the leader stepping down after a limited time is a good way to stimulate the development of the enterprise in some degree. But it is not absolute and if(?) we must think twice that if we need the new leadership according to the situation.

文章思路很清晰，但是说理还可以压缩，多加点例子进去吧，另外，文中的大面词(good, bad……)最好少出现一点，恩~加油哈

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