triter nine

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（其实从开头可以看出你的条理）

那样有问题吗？

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4# wk4a

TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
WORDS: 360          TIME: 00:50:00          DATE: 2009-8-8 20:39:50

1、科技在发展，人们的生活，工作方式也不一样了。记录历史的手段也随之多样化了。不过，
2、记录的东西有限，很多场景是没来的及拍下来的。也过于狭窄，只有当时的影像记录
3、但是doc有说明，概括化，简便。
4、都只是手段，不是对立的。结合起来。

As the rapid development of nowadays society, people's way of living and working has changed profoundly. Means to record history also become various with it.（Are u sure the usage?） From carving to writing, from oral stories to paper words(great jobs!), we have enjoyed huge progress. For now, the application of video camera has brought a new evolution, which would inevitably improve the way people keep contemporary life for our descendants.

Compared with written documentations, the video cameras provide more direct and more credible images and sounds. Historians are often unfriendly considered "story teller" for they sometimes reconstructing different histories with the help of only limited sources. Without doubt, most historians are doing their best to reveal what has happened before. But only expanding questionable words written on books and stones, slips and mistakes can be hardly eliminated. However, video cameras, which can accurately and impartially keep almost every major events as reporters want, people then do not have to worried about history being tampered. Also, highly spread internet serves as an effective news channel through which people all over the world can be aware of latest news and store them into hard discs. All this convenience is unimaginable for people hundred years ago. Video camera, as a trustworthy and convenient tool, enables people to keep every crucial minute to last forever. (你把VM的好处说得很不错哦)

What is more significant is that video cameras enable everyone to become a history catcher, due to the portability of the high-tech equipment, instead of the strict writing skill and clear memory for a paper-based document. Most cell phones today are also inserted millions of pixels camera, able to perform picture and video modes. When sudden scenes like a little comet striking（哈哈哈~把A拿来用） through the earth’s atmospheric layer, people who are just outdoors may quickly take out their cell phones or camera to record the marvelous minute. Astrophysicist can also analyze video images taken from various angles by many people instead of patiently judging people's oral descriptions on what they saw about the comet. If we live at an age of one thousand years ago, people’s confusing explanations could even lead to another fairy tale rather than scientific phenomenon. With the help of video cameras, we can embrace the most fresh history and farewell with the one filled with fantasy and illusions.

Actually, holding a video camera and handing a pen are never contraries. Both as forms for recording have their own merits and drawbacks. What is needed to be carefully considered is how to combine them effectively. Video cameras, which accurately and conveniently record the first-hand data, can be colored and enriched by historian remarks and explanations as a form of subtitle to help contain abstract social values and moral standards.（感觉这句写得很好，但是还是翻一下吧。） Without videos, people can only read silent and colorless words and imagine the pictures and sounds. Without written materials, people would be also confused by unexplained videos and absorb lopsided views. But when the both are effectively combined, real history is alive in front of its viewers.（我也有类似的论断，但是没你说得生动~）

In sum, during the progress of our society, we may develop beneficial inventions and theories to help achieve traditional goals with more efficiency and convenience, at the same possessing old but familiar and safe means. By receiving all the merits from each of them, we can make our process more rapidly.

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（其实从开头可以看出你的条理）

那样有问题吗？
wk4a 发表于 2009-8-9 16:36

绝对没问题~会觉得下面就很有条理来写~
willy-nilly是G的阅读老师讲阅读时顺便说的~让我们震死rater~

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专利制度就是将利益的燃料添加到天才之火上。
我刚才看到了这句话，你可以改下你的那句：put fuel to.
后面加上什么什么的fire吧。
以前就觉得这个fuel很突兀，但是我也不知道怎么改
wk4a 发表于 2009-8-9 16:27

嗯~谢谢~
不过我忘记是看雅思8分范文一个英国人写的还是当时看economist学到的~add fuel to~
这句话“专利制度就是将利益的燃料添加到天才之火上”原话怎么说的~

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TOPIC: ISSUE184 - "It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data."
WORDS: 458 (526)
TIME: 00:50:00
DATE: 2009-8-9 9:39:57

It is an era when objectivity is treasured; it is an era when fairness is pursued（没凑够三个呢）. Evidence or data becomes indispensable in people's daily life, but too much emphasizing on data, sometimes, could also produce undesirable effects.

Admittedly, most scientific researches cannot survive without data. It is well known that a proper scientific research follows several steps: researchers first ask some questions based on certain phenomenon they have observed, and then raise some hypotheses. To testify their hypotheses, they need to do some experiments or some surveys in order to find some supporting evidence before they finally theorize the phenomenon; whereas, scientific researchers do not end in this theory. Many times, the scientist himself or latter ones would find some contradicting evidence which would serve to overthrow the established theory. In the process of establishing and overthrowing, science is therefore moving forwards with imperishable motivation. Observing these scientific researches, we discover that data or evidence inevitably is the crux during the whole process. Without data, most scientific researches could only stay on hypotheses stage.
前面这一段后面一段要有力多了。后面一段也可以说说不需要data的科技或者生活的大一点的理论。

Nevertheless, there are some exceptions even in the scientific fields. As we know, many axioms based on people's experience have no data to bolster themselves. From our very childhood, we were told that between two points, the line segment is the shortest way（good point）. Nobody showed us how to prove it through strict testimony with accurate data. People just acknowledge the axioms. However, these acceptations cannot be regarded as without critical thinking. Actually, it is brilliant for people to summarize their experience and make these axioms which are the foundations of many scientific researches.

Additionally, only concentrating on data could bring curses to some activities in our ordinary lives. Take doctors' diagnoses for instance. Once a dying person is sent into the hospital, it is ridiculous for doctors to send this patient to various testing-rooms to get detailed examinations like X-ray and wait for the examined data. If so, the patient would probably pass away during his/her way to the examine-rooms. What should doctors do is to immediately make the decision about why the patient is suffering and what first-aid measures are to be taken based on their long-term experience.是不是有点牵强？这个和理论关系不大吧？ Were appropriate treatments taken, the patient is very likely to survive. Take a glance at another example. It is well known that marketing is changing all the time. Managers in corporations should form an acute insight into the markets. Besides that, brevity, unique perspective and quick response are also what they should be equipped. There are not always enough data for a company to collect in particular the competitors hide the crucial data. But the company should still make its strategies. We have witnessed many times that a chief executive officer made an ungrounded but successful decision which made the company survive and even saved the company in perils. Google, for instance, is known for its unique and original strategies which make it prosperous for so long.
这两个例子我总觉得和theory需要data的必然性关系不大，都是生活中依靠经验和直觉等判断的过程当然不需要数据，要是写严肃的科技可能会好点。可能是我有点钻。

Taking into account what has been discussed above it is right to emphasize convincing data or evidence under many circumstances, but sometimes over exaggerating the significance of data could lead to be bogged in marsh or tragedies.


我觉得我们写到现在也就这样了，没有时间遣词造句的话文章都没什么可读性。或许现在应该攻克限时关，然后再在次基础上进步了。

wk4aUID: 2616910

嗯~谢谢~
不过我忘记是看雅思8分范文一个英国人写的还是当时看economist学到的~add fuel to~
这句话“专利制度就是将利益的燃料添加到天才之火上”原话怎么说的~
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-8-9 16:41

The Patent System Added The Fuel Of Interest To The Fire Of Genius-Lincoln

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6# wk4a

TOPIC: ISSUE184 - "It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data."
WORDS: 279          TIME: 01:00:00          DATE: 2009-8-8 16:44:53

1.很多的前沿论文都只有大量的实验数据和实验和实验方法，但是很少有结论，因为谨慎。这种态度值得学习，但是并不是通用的，很多时候我们不需要或者没有数据来归纳，但是仍然有办法做结论。
2诚然，没有数据或者数据很少的时候的理论化是盲目和致命的。
3有些领域不需要数据。
4所有的data是为了支撑理论的，理论能自己站稳就行了。谨慎固然好，效率价更高。
5.数据不是必须得，只要理论能被证明足够可靠就行。

Scan piles of scientific papers, numerous experiments means and data can be found, but few conclusions are drawn, let alone generalized theories. It is admirable and worth following that people dealing knowledge with much discretion. However, that is not always necessary, in consideration of efficiency and practicability.

Mostly, it is dangerous to unscrupulously（这个词我看过好几遍，就是用时不记得了！） reach any theory in a circumstance when data is absent. Lack of substantiated evidence can lead to unexpected disasters. That is why in pharmaceutical industry（好例子！） and medical world, for example, a new medicine and its usage have to be tested for a lone time. Since once a kind of pill passes through test, it will be put on shelves available by hundreds of patients; clinical trials can never be more than enough. Purdu Drug Company（这种例子都能找到！）, for example, was prosecuted by 20 patients who have taken its medicine which can cause addiction. Finally, the company got a more than six hundred of millions dollars swingeing fines. Not only medical aspects, aviation industry, civil engineering（这些例子很好，我可以在我文章里扩充起来说，今天思路被限制死了）, environment protection（感觉有点牵强，不过rater不会这么细） and so forth all require data to justify a hypothesis. Data, as the confirmation and evidence before any theory is made, can eliminate potential danger of applying the new theory.

There are some circumstances, however,（学习学习，不直接把however扔前面） require little data for substantiation. Though it favorable to have some evidence to support such theories, but not necessary. Like the famous theory of relativity, though people can neither prove its soundness or absurdity at first, physicists and mathematicians have developed many totally new theories and applications based on it.（我也有类似观点。） Admittedly, it is important to prove the great theory by concrete data; after all, science is based on a cautious attitude. But millions of dollars from tax payers spent on its testimonial is less worthy than spending on practical applications which are proved to be safe and valuable. Even if people were willing and discreet to justify the new theory at that time, subjective conditions do not allow so. Many electrical events can only be waited rather than created for the testimonial.（for example？） In cases above, theories are not necessarily connected with data.

Actually, since all the theories serve to conduct people's working and living, the practical purpose come first. In the aspect of efficiency, as long as the safety of the application of a theory is substantiated, tests for the theory itself can be ignored if time and sources are limited. Throughout history, many theories which were regarded as absolute truth are now obvious fallacies. But their merits, though limited, have served as guidance to help people made progresses one after one. It is the same thing for contemporary society. People can take advantage of relatively grounded theories just like laying courses of bricks. These bricks may be fragile, but without primitive houses as a beginning, we can never achieve skyscrapers afterwards. How can cavemen build great mansions as soon as they step out cave?（这个类比啧啧好。）

Human beings have always been temper daring with discreet（翻译下？）. We assume a theory, and then prove it. When the later process is missing or insufficient, damage may raise. But all above are based on their necessities, after all, we theorize for application.

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

20# wk4a

It is an era when objectivity is treasured; it is an era when fairness is pursued（没凑够三个呢）. Evidence or data becomes indispensable in people's daily life, but too much emphasizing on data, sometimes, could also produce undesirable effects.

Admittedly, most scientific researches cannot survive without data. It is well known that a proper scientific research follows several steps: researchers first ask some questions based on certain phenomenon they have observed, and then raise some hypotheses. To testify their hypotheses, they need to do some experiments or some surveys in order to find some supporting evidence before they finally theorize the phenomenon; whereas, scientific researchers do not end in this theory. Many times, the scientist himself or latter ones would find some contradicting evidence which would serve to overthrow the established theory. In the process of establishing and overthrowing, science is therefore moving forwards with imperishable motivation. Observing these scientific researches, we discover that data or evidence inevitably is the crux during the whole process. Without data, most scientific researches could only stay on hypotheses stage.
前面这一段后面一段要有力多了。后面一段也可以说说不需要data的科技或者生活的大一点的理论。

Nevertheless, there are some exceptions even in the scientific fields. As we know, many axioms based on people's experience have no data to bolster themselves. From our very childhood, we were told that between two points, the line segment is the shortest way（good point）. Nobody showed us how to prove it through strict testimony with accurate data. People just acknowledge the axioms. However, these acceptations cannot be regarded as without critical thinking. Actually, it is brilliant for people to summarize their experience and make these axioms which are the foundations of many scientific researches.

Additionally, only concentrating on data could bring curses to some activities in our ordinary lives. Take doctors' diagnoses for instance. Once a dying person is sent into the hospital, it is ridiculous for doctors to send this patient to various testing-rooms to get detailed examinations like X-ray and wait for the examined data. If so, the patient would probably pass away during his/her way to the examine-rooms. What should doctors do is to immediately make the decision about why the patient is suffering and what first-aid measures are to be taken based on their long-term experience.是不是有点牵强？这个和理论关系不大吧？我觉题目的theorize固然可以理解为理论化，但是什么是theory呢，其实对一系列事实进行的分析就可以是theory：the analysis of a set of facts in their relation to one another 。 Were appropriate treatments taken, the patient is very likely to survive. Take a glance at another example. It is well known that marketing is changing all the time. Managers in corporations should form an acute insight into the markets. Besides that, brevity, unique perspective and quick response are also what they should be equipped. There are not always enough data for a company to collect in particular the competitors hide the crucial data. But the company should still make its strategies. We have witnessed many times that a chief executive officer made an ungrounded but successful decision which made the company survive and even saved the company in perils. Google, for instance, is known for its unique and original strategies which make it prosperous for so long.
这两个例子我总觉得和theory需要data的必然性关系不大，都是生活中依靠经验和直觉等判断的过程当然不需要数据，要是写严肃的科技可能会好点。可能是我有点钻。
我觉你是太钻了，我刚看你那篇也觉得后面思路没有打开。题目根本就没限制要写科技方面。
Taking into account what has been discussed above it is right to emphasize convincing data or evidence under many circumstances, but sometimes over exaggerating the significance of data could lead to be bogged in marsh or tragedies.


我觉得我们写到现在也就这样了，没有时间遣词造句的话文章都没什么可读性。或许现在应该攻克限时关，然后再在次基础上进步了。
限时写出来的那个语言都是干巴巴的，自己看都了无兴趣。

wk4aUID: 2616910

TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
WORDS: 514 (541)         TIME: 00:45:00 (+15min)         DATE: 2009-8-9 15:05:16

It seems to be human nature that once making an innovation, they tend to negate the traditional one which has played a crucial role in their daily lives. They obstinately take that the new would replace the old for granted. Similar fate now goes with the written materials which people believe that such records would gradually lose their position in the documentation as the advent of video camera.
虽然你是欲扬先抑，但是没有中心句我还是担心

Little wonder that video camera has brought us marvelous benefits: almost wherever we are or whenever it is, we can take out our video cameras and record the scene we like to treasure; crimes like bank robbery have also become less and less thanks to the video camera set in the almost every corner of the banks. Furthermore, with video cameras, there is less and less need for space. What is meant by this is that the pictures and videos in the video camera require little room to store unlike the paper-based materials. Some of us may have experienced that when looking for certain picture, we have to look into a whole stack albums with countless pictures. Finally, we find our targets sweating all over; while with video camera, we just turn it on, press certain buttons, and easily find what we need. 我看到这里突然发现我自己审题不准，还以为是记录历史呢。However, too much relying on it, to some extent, can weaken our own ability of memorize things. Many of our children have formed a poorer and poorer handwriting due to an increasing use of computer; certainly we do not want they have a weaker and weaker memory if they use video camera to record everything. Meanwhile, video camera is not panacea and has flaws. Were the memory card broken, or damaged, all of the materials would disappear immediately.

On the contrary, the written records have merits that video camera could not compare. Very often, the written materials could depict the mind of people. Take keeping a diary for instance. One could describe what events he or she experience today, and at the same time, delineating vividly how he or she felt with the events in one's diary. Perhaps some would argue that one could still use the video camera, taking photos of the events and use the sound-recording function to record one's feeling. However, how many of us can honestly say that when being recorded, whether passive or not, we can truly express all our feelings? Clearly, most of us could not manage it. 后面这几句你也不知道对BT美国人适用不

Nevertheless it seems a little folly to discuss which one is more significant to our lives. For both of them have merits and flaws, perhaps people should form a tolerant attitude to the new invention and the traditional one as both could make contributions to our lives and society. Without either one, the world's wheels could hardly run as smoothly as it should do（supposed to）. In this sense, we should take advantages of video cameras and written materials for the sake of the long-term development of our society.

Taking into account what has been discussed above video camera does give human beings a lot, but it can never completely replace the written records. There is no point to argue which one is more dominant. Contrarily, to best exploit both of them can make our lives more colorful.

只能说中规中矩了，没有问题，亮点也不多。限时就是这样了。

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24# wk4a

It seems to be human nature that once making an innovation, they tend to negate the traditional one which has played a crucial role in their daily lives. They obstinately take that the new would replace the old for granted. Similar fate now goes with the written materials which people believe that such records would gradually lose their position in the documentation as the advent of video camera.
虽然你是欲扬先抑，但是没有中心句我还是担心
我觉得那个obstinately可以说明我的立场啊，不过可能藏得太隐藏了，美国人还是直肠子。

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7# lele77521

TOPIC: ARGUMENT14 - The following appeared in a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small business serving a suburban town.

"There is evidence that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables. A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally, the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring."
WORDS: 244          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2009-8-9 9:53:53

In this memo, the owner concluded that the Green Thumb Gardening Center would be profitable by largely increasing the variety of vegetable seeds. To support this argument the author cites these following factors: (1) people are interested in growing their own vegetables. (2) A national survey showed that consumers are dissatisfied with the present fresh vegetables in supermarket. (3) The gardening magazine Great Gardens was the best seller book in the town during last three month. It seems reasonable at first glance, actually, this argument contains many flaws, which render it unpersuasive as it stands. （我倒是在北美范文看到了这样（1）（2）（3），可是个人认为这样写不好。）

In the first place, by relying on the national survey to support its conclusion the argument depends on the assumption that the level of satisfaction with local supermarket vegetables reflects national levels. However, the author provides no evidence to support this assumption. Perhaps people in other cities are satisfied with supermarkets vegetables.（太没力度了，就取了个反。） Without ruling out this possibility, the owner cannot rely on the national survey to conclude that the local residents would be interested in buying vegetable seeds.

In the second place, even assuming that town’s residents really were dissatisfied with the supermarket vegetables, the owner fails to illustrate that those people would grow vegetables instead. Common sense tells us that few people have time to grow vegetables in a rapid life pace society. Maybe they can advise the local supermarkets to enhance their quality of the vegetables. Any wise dealer will not neglect their consumer’s advices. Failing to consider the possible way to solve the problem, the owner cannot ensure that the seed will be bought by local people widely.

In the third place, the author assumes that best seller book-- the gardening magazine indicates that the vegetable seeds would be popular among residents. In fact, there is little relationship between the sales of the magazine and vegetable seeds. Perhaps the content of the magazine has nothing to do with the vegetable seeds, without considering this possibility; the owner could not cite the sales of magazine to illustrate the market of the vegetable seeds Green Thumb Gardening Center.

还有的问题呢？扩大库存种类因此盈利的建议怎么不说？这是很关键的点。


In conclusion, the owner's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To strengthen it the owner must provide more convincing evidence that consumers in this town are really becoming less satisfied with supermarket vegetables, and that as a result they are planning to grow vegetables themselves. I also need more information about the advantages of the vegetable seeds.

看看arguer的主线吧：

国家调查说明人们对超市蔬菜不满------>>|
                                                       |---------->>当地人会对自种蔬菜感兴趣——————>>建议扩大库存种类————>>盈利
当地园艺杂志卖的好------------------>>|

每一个推论都是重点批斗对象，每一个论据可能也有问题，也得批。
但顺序应是先批论据，再批逻辑推论错误。

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22# emily_feifei

6# wk4a TOPIC: ISSUE184 - "It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data." WORDS: 279          TIME: 01:00:00          DATE: 2009-8-8 16:44:53 1.很多的前沿论文都只有大量的实验数据和实验和实验方法，但是很少有结论，因为谨慎。这种态度值得学习，但是并不是通用的，很多时候我们不需要或者没有数据来归纳，但是仍然有办法做结论。 2诚然，没有数据或者数据很少的时候的理论化是盲目和致命的。 3有些领域不需要数据。 4所有的data是为了支撑理论的，理论能自己站稳就行了。谨慎固然好，效率价更高。 5.数据不是必须得，只要理论能被证明足够可靠就行。 Scan piles of scientific papers, numerous experiments means and data can be found, but few conclusions are drawn, let alone generalized theories. It is admirable and worth following that people dealing knowledge with much discretion. However, that is not always necessary, in consideration of efficiency and practicability. Mostly, it is dangerous to unscrupulously（这个词我看过好几遍，就是用时不记得了！） reach any theory in a circumstance when data is absent. Lack of substantiated evidence can lead to unexpected disasters. That is why in pharmaceutical industry（好例子！） and medical world, for example, a new medicine and its usage have to be tested for a lone time. Since once a kind of pill passes through test, it will be put on shelves available by hundreds of patients; clinical trials can never be more than enough. Purdu Drug Company（这种例子都能找到！）, for example, was prosecuted by 20 patients who have taken its medicine which can cause addiction. Finally, the company got a more than six hundred of millions dollars swingeing fines. Not only medical aspects, aviation industry, civil engineering（这些例子很好，我可以在我文章里扩充起来说，今天思路被限制死了）, environment protection（感觉有点牵强，不过rater不会这么细） and so forth all require data to justify a hypothesis. Data, as the confirmation and evidence before any theory is made, can eliminate potential danger of applying the new theory. There are some circumstances, however,（学习学习，不直接把however扔前面） require little data for substantiation. Though it favorable to have some evidence to support such theories, but not necessary. Like the famous theory of relativity, though people can neither prove its soundness or absurdity at first, physicists and mathematicians have developed many totally new theories and applications based on it.（我也有类似观点。） Admittedly, it is important to prove the great theory by concrete data; after all, science is based on a cautious attitude. But millions of dollars from tax payers spent on its testimonial is less worthy than spending on practical applications which are proved to be safe and valuable. Even if people were willing and discreet to justify the new theory at that time, subjective conditions do not allow so. Many electrical events can only be waited rather than created for the testimonial.（for example？）的确 In cases above, theories are not necessarily connected with data. Actually, since all the theories serve to conduct people's working and living, the practical purpose come first. In the aspect of efficiency, as long as the safety of the application of a theory is substantiated, tests for the theory itself can be ignored if time and sources are limited. Throughout history, many theories which were regarded as absolute truth are now obvious fallacies. But their merits, though limited, have served as guidance to help people made progresses one after one. It is the same thing for contemporary society. People can take advantage of relatively grounded theories just like laying courses of bricks. These bricks may be fragile, but without primitive houses as a beginning, we can never achieve skyscrapers afterwards. How can cavemen build great mansions as soon as they step out cave?（这个类比啧啧好。） Human beings have always been temper daring with discreet（翻译下？）. 人类总是又胆大心细。We assume a theory, and then prove it. When the later process is missing or insufficient, damage may raise. But all above are based on their necessities, after all, we theorize for application.

lele77521UID: 2672123

153"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively." [05/24; 06/1]


Students will learn nothing but remember some isolated facts if they accept what they are taught passively. For the reason that the final goal of learning is to apply the knowledge we have learned to solve social problems and realize our personal worth. So in the process of acquiring knowledge we should bring certain skepticism to whatever we study after accepting some basic principles.


The fundamental premise is nearly all the students should accept what they learned at beginning. Because no one is born with to know everything, especially in scientific realm, which need a relative long time to be skilled with those key notions, basic principles and formulas. I believe that most of us have experienced like this similar process: students major in mathematics may do not understand some complicated formulas, and teachers will tells them that they must remember the basic notion and then master it through practice over and over again. This is also true in other subjects such as economics. One must take time to remember some fundamental principles: the behavior of consumers who pursue maximum utility; the behavior of producers who pursue minimum cost. From those examples mentioned above one can easily understand the importance of accept what we are taught before we make breakthrough in these areas.

As for most students, the more questions they ask, the more knowledge they will gain. Students who wants to succeed in their field should skeptic what they study positively. Take Newton, a famous physicist, is the father of classical physics. A main reason he attained the great accomplishment is he has a habit to skeptic what his teacher taught. Perhaps his teacher had told him and his classmates that it is natural laws that apples were fallen when it is ripe in autumn, and only Newton thought why it is fallen on the ground and what the root cause of this phenomenon is. Moreover, the development of the economics is a typical example to illustrate the value of skepticism. Nearly most of the economists' contribution to our world are founded on the premise of skeptic their teachers' or those respected economists' theories. Say held the opinion that Supply creates Demand; but Keynes did not accept his theory blindly, who research the factual phenomenon during the Great Depression in 1929, and eventually created his classic work--General Theory which proposed an effective alternative to tackle the economic crisis. From the two examples we can clearly understand the importance of the skepticism.

On the contrary, what would the world be like if all the students accept whatever their teachers thought?
First, the goal of education will become meaningless. In my opinion the final object of education is to prepare the young to educate themselves throughout their lives, which requires students must form their own way in the process of learning. It will never attain this aim by just remembering whatever they are taught. Second, innovations, discoveries may less than ever before, which impede the progress of the humankinds. Lacking the ability to skeptic the former theories, one can hardly make great accomplishment to the society.

To sum up, I hold the opinion that one should keep a skeptic attitude toward what they learn, but at the same time they should obey the vital premise—accept what you should accept at the first step. Only in this sensible method, can those students have a promising future in their fields.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT14 - The following appeared in a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small business serving a suburban town.

"There is evidence that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables. A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally, the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring."
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In this memo, the owner concluded that the Green Thumb Gardening Center would be profitable by largely increasing the variety of vegetable seeds. To support this argument the author cites these following factors: (1) people are interested in growing their own vegetables. (2) A national survey showed that consumers are dissatisfied with the present fresh vegetables in supermarket. (3) The gardening magazine Great Gardens was the best seller book in the town during last three month. It seems reasonable at first glance, actually, this argument contains many flaws, which render it unpersuasive as it stands.
从来没见过写（1）（2）（3）的，你是从哪里学的？要谨慎啊

In the first place, 不要太死板了by relying on the national survey to support its conclusion the argument depends on the assumption that the level of satisfaction with local supermarket vegetables reflects national levels. However, the author provides no evidence to support this assumption. Perhaps people in other cities are satisfied with supermarkets vegetables.有关系吗？Without ruling out this possibility, the owner cannot rely on the national survey to conclude that the local residents would be interested in buying vegetable seeds.
possibility写的太少了，而且写了一个错的。多想想。

In the second place, even assuming that town’s residents really were dissatisfied with the supermarket vegetables, the owner fails to illustrate that those people would grow vegetables instead. Common sense tells us that few people have time to grow vegetables in a rapid life pace society. Maybe they can advise the local supermarkets to enhance their quality of the vegetables. Any wise dealer will neglect their consumer’s advices. Failing to consider the possible way to solve the problem, the owner cannot ensure that the seed will be bought by local people widely.
这一段不错。

In the third place, the author assumes that best seller book-- the gardening magazine indicates that the vegetable seeds would be popular among residents. In fact, there is little relationship between the sales of the magazine and vegetable seeds.只是有可能 Perhaps the content of the magazine has nothing to do with the vegetable seeds, without considering this possibility; the owner could not cite the sales of magazine to illustrate the market of the vegetable seeds Green Thumb Gardening Center.


In conclusion, the owner's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To strengthen it the owner must provide more convincing evidence that consumers in this town are really becoming less satisfied with supermarket vegetables, and that as a result they are planning to grow vegetables themselves. I also need more information about the advantages of the vegetable seeds.
把提纲列出来，想清楚了，写的就会又快又准。