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题目：Discuss the advangtages and disadvantages of studying abroad

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Currently,as the influence of global financial crisis,more and more people find it hard to get a decent job.Studying aborad becomes a popular choise for people who worry about it.There are serious doubt about wehteher it is worth to pay great amount money and time to study abroad.This essay will look at the positive and negative of this probem..

First,the disadvantages, part of these students studing abroad are children who just graduated from high school or even elementary schoolthat they are too young to look after themselves.Too many examples are there that young abroad students who copied the bad models to commit crimes and then be sent back home.There are also disadvantages for alduts.They went abroad when they graduated from university or after a period of work,their classmates or colleagues got work experience which are more fit r the market of their own country when they were abroad.They wast both time and money on it.

Although we have saw disadvangtages I think study abroad is still a good idea.Fist,for young people who study abroad,they gain more advantage of language.As we all know,Yoth are better at imitating.The earlier they join in the native language situation the better and easier they get the language, especially spoken language.Besides that,early independence is good for children in communication and social ability. For adults there are also variety of advantages ,the most important is that they get the opportunities to expand their expertise which they can not do in their home country.Also great spoken language ability makes them more competitive.Trip and study to other country can be eye-opening.

As suggested above ,though there is potential dangerouses for children studying abroad, there is great benefits to the growth of them.And aldults also will gain a lot for studing abroad,if they do work hard ,the money and time they pay would be worth.

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